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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使其构成一篇完整

的短文。

Itwasjustbefore网|Octobe；17.PamBalessteppedontothe

snow-coveredJewellTrail（小路）.Sheplannedasix-hourclimbinghike

throughNewHampshireDsMountWashingtonStatePark.Shehadpackedfor

almosteveryaccident,includingclothes,heatpacks,abottleofhot

chocolate...（装备，伏笔）Andsheintendedtowalkalone.Apieceofpaperon

thedashboardofhercardetailedhertrip:startupJewellTrailandreturntoher

carbeforesomeforecastedbadweatherarrives.Pamalwaysleftherhiking

plansinhercar.ShewasavolunteeronthePemigewassetValleySearchand

RescueTeam.（说明身份，伏笔）

At10:30am,theweatherwasshowingitsteeth.（天气,伏笔）Pamaddedeven

moreclothestoprotectherselffromthecoldwindsandfog.（力口衣）Thenshe

noticedsomething:asinglesetoffootprintsinthesnowaheadofher.（一个人

的脚印，伏笔）SheDdbeenfollowingfainttracksalldayandhadnDtgiventhem

muchthought,becausesomanypeopleclimbedJewellTrail.Butthese,she

realised,hadbeenmadebyapairoftrainers.

|By］回|am|9Pamwasgettingcold,despitemovingfast.Sheputonanextra

top.（再次力口衣）GoodthingIpackedheavy,shethought.Shedecidedto

abandonherplan.Returningtohercarwasarequirement.Stronggustsofwind

attackedherbackandleftsideandtheonlythingkeepingheronGulfsideTrail

wasthetracksinthesnow.（天气，伏笔）Asshefoughtthewindandheavy

sleet,hereyessearchingforsometypeofshelter,thetracksmadeahard

left-handturnoffthetrail.

Allofasudden,shefeltalarmed.Shewassurethehikercouldlosehiswayand

washeadingstraighttowardthechallengingtrailsoftheGreatGulf.Pam

followedthetrackscarefully.Sheroundedacornerandsawa

mansittingmotionlessbesideastone.HestaredinthedirectionofGreatGulf.

She|approached|him.Hisheadwasbare.Helookedsoakingwet.Thickfrost

coveredhisjacket.Ashiseyestrackedherslowly,hebarelyturnedhishead.（故

事高潮，远足者出事）

注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。

Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.

Theyhadtogetoutofthere.

Exampleanalysis

TipsforContinuingWritingAfterReading11:"EmotionalandScenery

Integration"toEnhancetheEmotionsofCharactersinScenery

"Allsceniclanguageisemotionallanguage,"andappropriatedescriptionof

environmentaldetailscanachievetheeffectof"blendingemotionsandscenes/1

highlightingtheemotionsofcharactersandeffectivelypromotingthe

developmentofthestoryplotExpressingjoyandjoy:Itcandescribewarm

sunshine,blueskyandwhiteclouds,orgentlebreeze,orusecomprehensive

scenessuchasspringmorningsunshine,bloomingflowersinthebreeze,etc.,to

enhancethejoyfulemotionsofthecharacters;②Expressingsadnessand

oppression:candescribedarkclouds,stormyweather,oremptyandlonely

scenestohighlightthecharacter'soppression;(3)Expressingimpatienceand

helplessness:Describinghotweatherorstunningscenerythatfailstocapture

thecharacter'sattention,contrastingwiththecharacter'sinneranxietyand

anxiety;(4)Showfearandtension:Renderthestorm,darknessorusestatic

contrast,andusethestaticoftheenvironmenttocontrastthetensionandfearof

thecharacters.

Topiclink

Thethemefeaturesofrescuingpeoplefromdifficultieswillinvolve:①

steppingforwardtohelpothersintimesofcrisis,suchasusinglearnedfirstaid

knowledgeorskillstosuccessfullysavepeoplefromlife-threateningsituations;

②Asuddenfirebrokeoutinthebuilding,andthepolice/publicsacrificed

themselvestosavelives;(3)Someoneunfortunatelydrowned,andthe

crowd/passersbygatheredtheircouragetojumpintothewatertorescuethem.

Thefirststepofthethree-stepmethod:describingthefamilyenvironmentor

atmosphere+emotionssuchasdissatisfaction,worry,orexclusion;Step2:

Conflictprocess+actionsandemotions;Step3:Conflictresolution,parent-child

communication+joy/relief+harmoniousrelationship(+sublimation).

Thefirststepistograspthemainideaandtwolinesoftheoriginaltext

Afterarrangingeverything,PamBales,avolunteerofthesearchandrescue

team,wenthikingalone.Duetothebadweather,shegaveupthehikeand

foundafrostbittenpersononherwayback.

Theplotlineoftheoriginaltextisasfollows:mountaineeringandhiking-

gettingcoldandwearingclothes,discoveringfootprintsofhikersalone-

gettingcolderandgivinguphiking一discoveringfrostbiteofhikers;

Emotionalline:thoughtfulfwellorganized-determined-alarmed.

Narrativeintention:HowPamBalessafelyescapedwithafrostbittenman.

Step2:Determinethedirectionofcontinuationbasedontheinformationfrom

thefirsttwosentences

Firstsentenceoftwoparagraphs

Frame1:Basedonthekeyinformation"turnedintorescuingtheman"atthe

beginningoftheparagraph,itcanbeinferredthattheparagraphcandescribe

theconditionofaman'sfrostbite,howtorescuehim,andtheresultsofthe

rescue;2Theendingsentencecancreateastoryconflict,suchasamanbeing

unabletowalkduetofrostbite.

Twoboxesandtwoheads

Positiveenergy①Accordingtothefirstsentenceoftheparagraph,"Theyhad

togetoutofthere",itcanbedescribedhowtotakethemanwhowasfrozenout

andsafelyescapethedanger.Thisparagraphcancreateanotherconflict,such

asiftheweatherbecomesworse;②Thelastsentencecanexpressaman's

gratitude.

Thethirdstepistoadddetailsthatarehighlyharmoniousandreasonableinthe

originalcontinuation

Thedevelopmentofthetwoemotionallinesinthehighlyharmonious

continuationsectionshouldbeconsistentwiththetwoemotionallinesinthe

originaltext,inordertomakethetwoemotionsmutuallypleasing.Theplotline

is:theman'scondition-rescue-rescueresult一badweather一

difficultreturn一safeescape;Theemotionallinecanbesharp-decisive

一worded一struggling—relieved—gradient.

Adddetailedactiondetails:Thefirstparagraphinvolveshowtorescueandcan

describetherescueactionindetail;Environmentaldetails:Therearemany

descriptionsoftheenvironmentintheoriginaltext,andinthecontinuation

section,descriptionsofadverseweathercanbeaddedtocreateconflicts

betweenpeopleandtheenvironment,whichisalsoinlinewiththeoriginaltext.

Step4:Perfectlycoherentexpressionalongthecharacteristicsoftheoriginal

language

Theoriginaltextutilizedalargenumberofsimplesentences,nonfiniteverbs,

coordinatesentences,andtimeadverbialclauses.Thecontinuationsection

shouldcontinuetousethisfeaturetodescribetheactionsandenvironmentof

PamBales.

参考答案：

Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.Shefoundhewassuffering

fromfrostbiteonhisfeet.Hecouldhardlymoveanythingexcepthis

eyes.Withouthesitation,shecleanedthefrostfromhisjacketandquickly

warmedhisheadwithhiswarmclothes.Shepulledouttheheatpacksshehad

preparedforherselfbeforeshelefttowarmtheman'sstifflegsandpouredhim

somehotchocolate.Slowly,themanwasabletomoveslightlybuthewastoo

weaktospeak.Hewassobadlyhurtthathecouldn'twalk.

Theyhadtogetoutofthere.Thewindwashowling.ltwasgettingcolderand

colder,andiftheydidn'tgetoutofthere,theywouldsoondie.Shecarriedthe

manonherbackandwalkedslowlyalongthepath,notdaringtorest,notdaring

tostay,forwalkingalsobroughtwarmth.Withalotofeffort,Pamfinallyreached

hercarandsavedtheman'slife.Shewasexhaustedanditwasallworthit.The

manwasevenmoregrateful.

默写版：

Hersearchingnowturnedintorescuingtheman.

她发现他脚上冻伤了.Hecouldhardlymoveanythingexcepthi