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1/33英语书面表示指导

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2011辽宁？4/33Topic:HowtoLengthenYourComposition

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Whenitcomestotheissueof…,themajorityofpeopleseemtogetaccustomedtotheideathat…However,attitudestowards…varyfrompersontoperson.somepeoplefirmlybelievethat…,therearesomefactorscontributingtothisattitudeasfollows,inthefirstplace,…inthesecondplace,...Ontopofthat,…Asamatteroffact,itisnotoftenthecase.Othershaveapreferenceof…,thereareseveralremarkablereasons.Foronething…,foranother…Onmypart,...1.利用模板6/33方法——添加与所给信息相关前因后果及条件，目标等内容例一：这么更方便照料父母。拓展：因为父母越来越年迈。

原因

astheyaregettingolderandolder.

例二：因广告过多，影片放映晚点。拓展：这造成观众不耐烦甚至恼火。后果

whichmadeaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.makingaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.ItwillbemuchmoreconvenienttolookafteryourparentsThereweretoomanyadvertisementsthattheydelayedthetimeofshowingthefilm,2、附加成份作解释说明7/333.加谚语(Proverb)锻炼对学生有好处Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise..Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise.怎么添加谚语？方法——添加与所给信息相关前因后果及条件，目标等内容8/33惯用谚语(Proverb)Striketheironwhileitishot.

趁热打铁。Thinktwicebeforeyoudo.

三思而后行。Practicemakesperfect.

熟能生巧。Abirdinthehandisworththantwointhebush.

一鸟在手胜过双鸟在林。DoastheRomansdo.

入乡随俗。

Doitnow.

机不可失，时不再来。Failureisthemotherofsuccess.

失败是成功之母。Itisnousecryingoverspiltmilk.

覆水难收。Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.一天一个苹果，医生远离我。AllroadsleadtoRome.条条大路通罗马。9/33青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.4.举例说明Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproducts,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.10/33珍惜每一滴水Asmiddleschoolstudents,wealsohaveaparttoplay.Doremember:wearenotsavingwater,wearesavingourownlife.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanmakeadifference.5.结尾提出倡议或号召11/33“短话长说”方法：1.利用模板

2.附加成份作解释说明

3.加谚语4.举例说明

5.结尾提出倡议或号召12/33写作任务:青少年肥胖13/33写作任务

现在，青少年肥胖越来越严重，很让父母担心。请你依据以下提醒写一篇文章参考词汇：肥胖：obesity垃圾食品：junkfood要求：1.字数150左右2.对全部关键点要适当发挥，不要简单翻译。3.开头已给出，不计入总数Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.___________________________

原因缺乏运动饮食结构不合理提议多参加体育锻炼多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品…14/33怎么写15/33审题人称时态体裁关键点写作过程确定内容写什么怎么写怎样更加好怎样连接通读全文、检验、成文16/33审题体裁:记叙文普通现在时第三人称原因2.饮食结构不合理1.多参加体育锻炼缺乏运动提议2.多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品3….时态:人称:关键点:17/33BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andbecausestudentshavesomuchhomeworktodo,theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因1.缺乏运动

BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomework,getlessexercisetheyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因?18/33Manykidshaveanunbalanceddiet.Becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.原因2.饮食结构不合理

Haveanunbalanceddiet原因?举例?Manykidshaveanunbalanceddiet.19/33Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.提议1.多参加体育锻炼

domoreexerciseteensshoulddomoreexercise.目标？20/33Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.

提议2.多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.谚语？21/33提议3.制订合理计划，时间表makeapropertimescheduleLastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedule目标？Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalanceourexerciseandstudies.22/33合成文章

Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Whyareteensgettingfatterandfatter?Inmyopinion,therearetworemarkablereasonsforthisproblem.Firstly,becauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomeworktodo.Theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.Secondly,becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.

Foranother,Ontheotherhand,arousedForonething,Ontheonehand,23/33Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruits,vegetables,lessfastfoodandjunkfood.Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies.24/3325/3326/33Payattentiontoyourhandwriting!Cleanandclear!!27/33书面表示各档次给分范围和要求第五档（21-25分）完全完成了试题要求任务。准确、清楚地表示了短文内容，关键点无遗漏应用了较多语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表示方式所致；具备较强语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间连接成份，使全文结构紧凑完全到达了预期写作目标。第四档（16-20分）完成了试题要求任务。比较准确、清楚地表示了短文内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单语句间连接成份，使全文结构紧凑到达了预期写作目标。28/33

Recentlythephenomenonofteenobesltyhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Today,weconcludethereasonsofyoungers’obesltyandgivethemsomeadvisetowhohasthisproblem.ThefirstreasonIthinkisthatalargenumberofyoungerslackofsporting.Becauseofitistiredthatchildrenfinishthesports.Thentheyeatthreetimesaday,besides.EatingmorewhentheyfeelhungerThisproblemmustbesolved.First,theyshouldjointheactivatesoften.Therefore,whichcankeeptheirweigthblanence.Eatmuchhealthyfood,andleavefromthjunkfood.Ifchildrencandothesetwothings.Ithinkchildrenwillchangemorehealth.Inaword,ifchildrenwanttochangemorehealth,childrenmustlovethemselves.Nowcomeon!AnarticlefromastudentobesityToday,I’dliketoexplainthereasonsofyoungster’sobesityandgivesomeadvicetothosewhohavethisproblemThereasonwhytheyouthhasbecomefatterandfatteristhatalargenumberofthemlacksports,whichstudentsarealwaystiredof.Besides,theyofteneattoomuchwhentheyfeelhungryeveryday.Theproblemmustbesolved.First,theyshouldoftenjoininavarietyofactivities,whichcankeeptheirweightbalanced.Furthermore,eatmuchhealthyfoodandkeepawayfromthejunkfood.Onlywhentheyoungstersdothesethingscantheygethealthier.Inaword,ifchildrenwouldl