2023届重庆市二诊读后续写人与自然和谐相处：小蠕虫 讲义

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Agroupofboysrantosmallpartsofmudtoplay.Ijoinedthem.Oneboyheldupaworm(蠕虫),andwithanextremelystrongpull,hetorethepoorcreatureinhalf.Howcouldanyonebesocruel?Irantothenearestplaygroundsupervisor(主曾人)toreporttheincident.Thesupervisorsighedandwavedmeaway.Somethinghadtobedone.推断出：Howcouldanyonebesocruel?“cruel残忍”是我对别人折腾蠕虫的态度，也是本篇文章很关键的情感词。这里需要反思后文“我报复”theWormRipper就上不残忍了吗？原文协同解读：mud是续写的背景信息。Mudplayisnotonlyawaytomakepreciouschildhoodmemories,it’salsoagreatwayforchildren.Medicalresearchshowsthatitcanalsobegoodforyourchild’sphysicalandemotionalhealth.WhenIreturnedtothemud,Iinspectedthetwohalvesofthewormandwasastonishedtofindthattheywerestillmoving.Iquicklypickedupthewormsandalittleextradirtandputthemintomyjeanspocket.Afewminutesbeforelunch,Itiptoedtothebinthatheldtheclass'slunchboxes,lookingfortheonethatbelongedtotheWormRippertheboywhohadtornthewormcruelly,Fortunatelyforme,Irecognizeditimmediately.IlookedbehindmetobesurenoonesawmebeforeslippingthewormpiecesinsidetheplasticbaggiethatheldhisappleslicesIheldmybreathastheWormRipperpulledtheappleslicesfromhislunchbox.Whenhenoticedtheworm.heletoutasharpcry,whichbroughtthelunchroomsupervisorstohim.推断出：theWormRipper看到虫子时的心情是“惊恐“的，衔接续写第二段：勇敢说服其他男孩不要残杀蠕虫。Ishould'vefelttriumphant(大获全胜的).Instead,myheartpoundedinmychest.IknewwhatIhadtodo.Iwalkeduptolunchsupervisorsandadmitted,“Itwasme!Iputtheworminhislunchbox."推断出：我勇于承认错误，却很紧张。衔接续写第一段校长对我的态度转变。TheWormRipperglaredinmydirection,Onesupervisorrubbedhisbacktocomforthim,whiletheotherorderedmetogototheheadmistress'soffice.TheWorm

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glaredinmydirection.“glare”和上文提到的“heletoutasharpcry”是蠕虫开膛手对我报复事件的态度。也是本篇文章很关键的情感词，可联系到后文续写情绪变化。HeadmistressLehrerwasastrictoldwoman.MybestfriendRickysaidshewouldlookstudentsintheeyemakingthemtellhereverythingbadtheyhadeverdone.Thentheywerepunishedbywritingapologiesuntiltheirhandsfellof.Lexpectedtoatleastreceiveaseverescolding(训斥).推断出：后文校长听我解释，也不那么“strict严格的”和“serious严肃的”。续写可以刻画校长态度的反差。注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。第一段：AfterItoldherthetruth,withakindof'strangesmileonherlips,shewentdownonherknees.第二段：Thenextday,notallowedtogooutforbreak,istaredoutandwatchedaboybythemudpilepickingupaworm.文本分析：1.文章行文思路是什么？本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者I和“一群男孩”在一小块泥地去玩，其中一个小男孩成为了ThewormRipper把一只worm撕成了两半，我跑到最近的操场主管人那里报告了这件事，主管却叹了口气，置之不理，挥手让我走，“我”觉得该事件很残忍，实在没办法，必须做点什么，用自己的方法来报复他，（把虫子放在他的午餐盒里）。结果是，Thewormripper（蠕虫开膛手）受到到了惊吓，我勇敢承认拉我的所作所为，被其他主管人命令去校长办公室。而校长却是一位难对付的女人，我希望至少会受到一次严厉的训斥就算过去。2.

文章有哪些可续写点，以便设置衔接？见文章紫色批注。3.续写思路是什么？第一段：告诉她真相，奇怪的微笑并蹲下来——①校长的语言描写和神态描写，对我的批评。——②我的动作描写，我以为轻而易举离开——③被惩罚下周不能去外面操场耍。第二段：不允许外出休息，我盯着外面，看着一个男孩在泥堆旁捡一只虫子。——①我以为是又要残害虫子，心惊胆战——②是Thewormripper上一次的蠕虫开膛手来劝说——③主人公的个人成长总结文章主题是什么？本文主人公面临道德困境并采取行动，导致后果和解决方案。文本还突出了同情、公正和个人责任的主题。文本的主题是道德行为和道德决策。它探讨了即使是小行动也可以产生影响的观念，以及坚持正确的事情可能很困难，但最终是有益的。Theintentionofthestoryistoeducatepeopletobekindtotheanimals./remindofthelessonthatone'sgoodbehaviorwillmakeadifferencetoothers.参考范文：AfterItoldherthetruth,withakindofstrangesmileonherlips,shewentdownonherknees."WhenIwasyourage,Igotmadatsomeoneforhurtingmyfriend.Theyapologized,andwebecamefriends,too.Iappreciatethatyoutriedtostandupfortheworm,buttrytokeepthecreepy-crawlies(出)outside,okay?"saidLehrer.Inoddedandturnedtoleave,thinkingIhadgottenoffeasily.Istillhadmywritinghand,andI'donlyhadtoadmitonemisdeed.“Wait!"theheadmistresscalled.Iturnedaround,"You'llbestayinginforbreakforthenextweek.Thenextday,notallowedtogooutforbreak,IstaredoutandwatchedaboybythemudpilepickupawormIfearfullythoughtwhatwouldhappentoitsincelcouldn'tbeoutsidetopersuadehimnottohurtit,Hehelditbybothendsandlookedlikehewasabouttopull,Thensomeoneranacrosstheplaygroundtotalktohim.ItwastheWormRipper,Aftertheirconversation,theboygentlyplacedthewormbackinthemud,Ismiled.PerhapsIhadmadeadifferenceafterall.原文语言欣赏：I..withanextremelystrongpull,hetorethepoorcreatureinhalf.2....thesupervisorsighedandwavedmeaway.3......ltiptoedtothebinthatheldtheclass'slunchboxed,lookingfortheonethatbelongedto.4.IheldmybreathastheWormRipperpulledthe..5.Instead,myheartpoundedinmychest.高分语言积累：蠕虫的动作细节描写积累1.Thewormwriggledthroughthedampsoil,leavingbehindatrailofslime.(蠕虫在潮湿的土壤中蠕动，留下一条黏液的痕迹。)2.Thewormstretchedoutitsslenderbodyandbegantoburrowdeeperintotheground.(蠕虫伸展它纤细的身体，开始深入地下挖掘。)3.Thewormreactedtotherainbycomingtothesurfaceofthesoil