读后续写微技能二讲义-高考英语作文复习专项

读后续写微技能（二）Howtomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid？

Tip1:

Addvividverbs（语料库:句子优化表达）

Tip2:

Addactionchains(动作链:让动作有过程)Tip3:

Addactionrange（动作面:身体动作细节描写)

Tip1：Addvividverbs(精致措辞—具体替代笼统)“说”：whisper/murmur低语，stutter结巴，declare宣布，promise保证，propose/suggest建议，cryout/shout/scream/yell/exclaim/howl大声叫喊，roar咆哮，sigh叹息，add补充说“看”：catchaglanceof瞥一眼/stareat/gazeat

凝视/glareat

怒视/glueone’seyesto盯着;sbcan’ttakeone’seyesoff无法将视线移开castameaningful/suspiciouslookatsb意味深长地/怀疑地看着blink眨眼looksbintheeye直视“走”：walk/stroll散步,tiptoe/creep蹑手蹑脚地走，slip,stealinto溜走，march齐步走stride/prance阔步走pace踱步limp蹒跚“抓”：seize/grasp/grab/clutch/takeholdof/catchholdof/holdonto“跑”：rush/dash/race猛冲,急速移动；fleeaway逃跑“跳”spring/jumptoone’sfeet一跃而起,跳起；risetoone’sfeet站起来“哭”：weep,sob(啜泣)

“吃”：bite(咬)chew（咀嚼)swallow(吞下)

wolfdown(狼吞虎咽）

例句：1、She

slipped

outofbedand

tiptoed

tothewindow.2、Hejumpedoffthebusand

dashedforward

thenearesthospital.3、Iusedtogetupat6o’clockinthemorning,takea3minuteshower,

wolfdown4、somebreadand

hittheroad

toschool.5、They

strolled

alongtheriverbank,enjoyingtheeveningsun.6、Anoldtramp（流浪汉）limped

alongthestreet,lookingformoneyorcigaretteends.Tip2：Addactionchains（分解—合并_—美化）类型1：主语+谓语A,BandC.动作链一般以三连动为主，多个动作一气呵成，紧凑而有节奏感，使得描写非常生动。[注意]动作链的三个或者以上的动作，必须在时态上保持一致，常常采用A,BandC的格式。我参加颁奖仪式的上台动作:面带微笑—走上舞台—骄傲地挺起胸膛Iworeasmileonmyface,strodeontothestageandpuffedoutmychestwithpride.获奖后老师对我的赞扬的动作：朝我眨眼睛—竖起了大拇指—绽放笑容Iwasgreetedbymyteacher'ssmilingeyes.“Welldone!”heblinkedatme,gavemeathumbsupandbroadenedaradiant（灿烂的）smile.[注意]也可以加上介词词组或者副词对动作进行美化：with+情感名词的搭配：withdelight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride/caution/care/patience/certaintywith+身体部位：

withhisbrighteyes/itssharpteeth/hershakyhand/herpalelips…in+名词：

insurprise/amazement/shock/sorrow伤心inahigh/low/sweet/loud/soft/weakvoice用..的嗓音inatoneofsurprise/curiosity/impatience/regret/mand

用...的语气副词

suddenly/immediately/instantly/rapidly/firmly/slowly/angrily/happily/excitedlyWithagiantsmileonherface,shedashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredherdaughterintoherarmstightly.Hepulledmyfacetowardshim

withpatience,wipedmytears,andpattedmyhead

gently.Puttingonmycoat

hurriedly,Igrabbedmyschoolbagandrushedtotheschool

likeanarrow.类型2：非谓语doing（表示主动，与谓语动词同时或几乎同时发生）,主语+谓语and谓语.他鼓起勇气，然后用一块湿毛巾去捂住自己的嘴和鼻，冲进着火的房间。Hegatheredhiscourageandthenusedawettoweltocoverhismouthandnose,dashingintotheburningroom.Gatheringthecourage,hethenusedawettoweltocoverhismouthandnose,dashingintotheburningroom.类型3：非谓语done(作为状语表示被动/心理/状态）,主语+

谓语

+

无灵主语句沉浸于快乐中，我的老师向我挥手并表达他对我的真诚祝贺，一股幸福的感觉立刻向我袭来。Immersedintheenjoyment,hewavedatmeandexpressedhissincerecongratulationsonme,awaveofhappinessimmediatelysweptoverme.类型4：非谓语Havingdone（先于主句谓语动作发生）,主语+谓语A.听从了老师的指导之后，我才开始用有趣的方式去与热情的观众互动。Havingfollowedhisteacher’sinstructions,Ibegantointeractwiththeenthusiasticaudienceinafunnyway.

Tip3：Addactionrange(动作表情声音心理语言环境多角度摄像)把动作和面部表情，声音,心理，语言,环境等结合，形成动作面。从整体→局部，从肢体→面部→语言/心理描写，从多个角度描绘一个场景。Type1：Done，句子主干，doing受到老师的话鼓励，Tom举起手,低声说:”我决定参加.”Encouragedbytheteacher'swords,Tomraisedherhand,whispering/murmuring,“Idecidetoparticipateinit.”被吓得要死，麦克面色苍白，像一片树叶一样浑身颤抖。Frightenedtodeath,Macturnedaswhiteasasheet,tremblingalloverlikealeaf.Type2：Doing,句子主干，doing站在草地上，他们拉着手，抬头看着天空，感受着来自内心的那份宝贵的宁静。Standingonthegrass,theyheldhandstogetherandlookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeacefromwithin.内心充满愤怒，他用他那恐怖的大眼睛瞪着我，吼道：“你是个傻子”Burningwithanger,heglaredatmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”Type3：With复合结构或独立主格结构，句子主干,（doing)手里拿着花,Mindy站在大海旁边,微笑着低头看着自己的花,想象着未来充满前景的生活.Withabunchofflowersinherhands,Mindystoodbesidetheseaandlookeddownattheflowerswithasmile,imaginingherpromisinglifeinthefuture.我的脸气红了，跑上跑下，想要毁掉路上的任何东西。

Myfaceredwithanger,Iracedupanddown，wantingtodestroyeverythingthatcameinmyway.Practice:1.Ifeltverynervous.当站在讲台上时我很紧张，喉咙发紧，心跳加速，感觉自己如坐针毡。(sitonpinsandneedles)Whenstandingontheplatform,afloodoftensionwelledupinme,mythroattightenedandmyheartbeatsoviolentlythatIfeltlikesittingonpinsandneedles.2.Fatherfortedhermildly,“It'sOkay!I‘llhelpyou.”爸爸蹲下来，拍着她的背部，并轻声向她承诺,“没关系，我会帮你的”。Fatherkneltdown,pattedheronthebackandpromisedherinamildvoice,“It'sOkay!I‘llhelpyou”3.Mikesaid,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI'veeverseen.”直视我的眼睛，Mike轻抚我的头发，小声说道：“你是我见过的最美的女孩”

Lookingstraightintomyeyes,Mikestrokemyhair,whispering,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI'veeverseen.”4.Jane一看到Tom,便跑过去抱住他，泪水沿