读后续写2024-1九省联考-2024届高考英语作文复习专项

读后续写——2024九省联考CONTENTS目录01阅读分析02写作流程故事框架整理故事大纲BackgroundRisingAction+ClimaxFallingActionResolution人物人设问题：矛盾/冲突如何解决故事结局文章结尾原文回顾Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.人物介绍主要冲突：K责备HH有错，后面改正H没错，K道歉故事框架整理故事大纲BackgroundRisingAction+ClimaxFallingActionResolution人物人设问题：矛盾/冲突如何解决故事结局文章结尾人物MayaHildaKatherine人设海豚海洋馆清理工海豚训练师矛盾/冲突在Hilda打扫干净水池之后，Maya衔来了糖纸，Katherine认为Hilda没有认真工作如何解决？？？原文回顾Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.人物介绍Hilda决定追踪Maya一探究竟原文回顾Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn’tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.次日，Hilda下水检查没有发现任何东西同时看到，Katherine也下水检查，不出意外，也没有任何东西Katherine对Hilda的工作不放心，不信任原文回顾Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(过滤)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.Maya游到过滤器之后，把鼻子伸进过滤器后面Hilda疑惑地再次跳入水中，发现了Maya的秘密Maya给Katherine衔来了一把梳子，并等待她的投喂原文回顾“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.Katherine对Maya衔来的梳子感到疑惑Katherine对我手里的东西感到疑惑知道真相的我，爬出水面，手里拿着一把东西原文回顾Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Hilda的解释Katherine的道歉逻辑梳理Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda的解释Maya的秘密手里的东西糖纸和梳子从哪儿来是什么过滤箱之后为什么过滤箱之后会有这些东西？Maya做的为什么这么做？写作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda说1、糖纸和梳子是从过滤箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因为……原因。3、我手里的东西是……。写作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda说1、糖纸和梳子是从过滤箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因为……原因。3、我手里的东西是……。范文一：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank.ItseemsMayaisplayingagameoftreasurehunting.Shehidestheitemsbehindthefilterbox,whichisherowntreasurecave.”写作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda说1、糖纸和梳子是从过滤箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因为……原因。3、我手里的东西是……。范文二：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank,hidingthemnearthefilterboxinthebackofthetank.Thereasonwhyshedoesthisisthatshewantstogettreatsfromyou.”写作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Hilda说1、糖纸和梳子是从过滤箱之后找到的。2、是Maya做的，因为……原因。3、我手里的东西是……。字数不够怎么办？1、先构建动作完成段落主要内容描述2、补充其他描述（外貌、语言、心理、神态、性格、场景、环境）写作框架Para1:“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.范文二：Hildalaidouttheitemsontheground:aplasticspoon,severalcandywrappers,andevenapairofsunglasses.Hildacontinued,“Mayahasbeencollectingthingsfromthetank,hidingthemnearthefilterboxinthebackofthetank.Thereasonwhyshedoesthisisthatshewantstogettreatsfromyou.”性格描写聪明场景描写Maya此刻的动作Mayaisacleverdolphin.Mayaismuchmoreintelligentthanwethought.ShelookedatMaya,whowasnowplayfullyswimminginthepool.写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Katherine道歉故事结局作者写这篇文章的意义何在？文章结尾从故事中升华的道理务实！！！！！不能轻易评判他人对海豚的关心从误会分歧，到加强合作Katherine意识到了什么？不是Hilda的错误写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.1、前文情节概括。2、Katherine认识到自己的错误，并向Hilda道歉。3、文章主旨升华。写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.1、前文情节概括。范文一：ThoseobjectwerenotHilda’smistakesorcarelessness,butthesymbolsofMaya’splayfulnatureandintelligence.写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.KatherineapologizedtoHildasincerely.2、Katherine认识到自己的错误，并向Hilda道歉。重要情节应该有浓墨重彩的描写。🙇道歉是动作也可以是语言。补充神态、心理、原因来表示道歉的真诚。写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Feelingamixofregretandguilt.【心理描写】，“Ioweyouanapology,andIshouldn’tblamedyouearlier”【语言描写】KatherineturnedtoHildaandsaidsincerely【动作描写】,gratefulforherkeenobservationandpatience.2、Katherine认识到自己的错误，并向Hilda道歉。Atthatmoment,thetwoexchangedaknowingsmileandturnedtheirgazetowardsMaya.【对道歉动作的反馈】写作框架Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.Thisincidentremindthemofthesurprisingnatureofthisclevercreatureandthetrustbetweenateam.3、文章主旨升华。Fromthenon,theybegantodiscussmoreeffectivewaystolearnMayasoastoimprovetheirapproa