读后续写之漂流瓶的故事讲义-高三英语一轮复习

读后续写||漂流瓶的故事续写原题2021年4月杭州二模阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。ItwasonSeptember5th,my

birthday,thatweleftCambridgeandmovedaway.Wewenttotheseaside,toourholidayhouse,whichwasnowtobeourpermanenthome.Irememberthedaywascoldandgrey,

withalightrainfallingslowlybutconstantly.My

father

droveinsilence.Noonespokeandallwecouldhearwasthesoundofthetyresonthewetroad.Whenwegottothesmallhousenearthesea,mymotherquietlystartedtounpackthefewthingswehadbroughtwithus.Carol,JulieandIwentdowntothebeach.Wesaidweweregoingtolookforcrabsintherockpoolsbutactually,wejustwantedtogetawayfromourfatherandhiscold

silence.

Weclimbedalongtherocksbythesideofthebeach.JulieandCarolbecameinterestedinsomeshellstheyfoundinoneofthepools.Iwanderedaway,lostinmyprivatethoughts.Itwasmybirthday,butnoonehadsaid“HappyBirthday”tome.Ihadnot

received

anycardsor

presents.Iwalkeddowntotheseashore,wherethewaveswerebreakinglazilyagainstthemuddysand.Suddenly,Isawsomethinggreenstickingoutofthewater.I

looked

atitmorecarefully.Thegreenthingmovedcloserandclosertotheshore,andwhenitwasalmostnearenoughformeto

touch,Irealizedwhatitwas.Itwasa

bottle.Iwentoverandpickeditup,allthetimelookingatit.Itseemedold,andhadnolabelonit.Then

Irealized

therewassomethinginside.

Slowly,Ipulledoutthewetcorkfromthetopofthebottle.Insidewasapieceofpaper.Withgreatcare,Itookoutthefoldedpaperandopenedit.Writtenonitwerethesewords

：“Towhomsoeverfindsthisbottle,Ipromiseyouanew

friend,"注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Istaredatthepaperandthenlookedaround.Paragraph2:AsIopenedmyeyes,Ifoundmyfatherstandingrightbesideme.思路分析上周拿到续写的题目，看完后，是有点懵逼的。心里就在想，又难为学生了。仔细看了第二遍，大概做了构思，就去上课了。提纲列在纸上，拖延症到今天上午才写好整篇。构思步骤如下：一、原文情节梳理1、“我”生日那天，全家搬到海边的小房子；2、搬家路上天气阴冷，父亲心情不好，一路沉默不说话；3、没有人记得“我”的生日，或者给我送生日礼物，“我”非常难过；4、来到海边的家，我和兄弟们为了逃避父亲的冷漠，来到海边抓螃蟹；5、“我”独自在海边溜达，却捡到了一个漂流瓶，里面的纸条上写着“可以给捡到瓶子的人带来新朋友。”二、原文矛盾点/焦点“我”生日当天全家搬家到海边小房子。没有人记得我的生日，和“我”内心的失落难过形成对比。真的没有人记得我的生日么？三、确定文章主题我确定了文章的主题是亲情。四、续写的可能结局生日惊喜，爸妈只是忙于家中琐事，但并没有忘记。家人之间的爱。五、续写情节推断Paragraph1:Istaredatthepaperandthenlookedaround.1.

寻找朋友的急切心情。（期盼、期待）2.

没有找到朋友的失落。（伤心，难过）Paragraph2AsIopenedmyeyes,Ifoundmyfatherstandingrightbesideme.3.父亲过来寻找我们回家（失落）4.爸妈准备的小的生日惊喜，明白漂流瓶里“朋友”就是身边家人。（释怀，温暖）六、续写涉及到的主要情绪

期盼、期待、伤心、失落、开心、释怀此外，这篇文章的原文有一些环境描写，加上作者是在海边，所以根据这个细节，可以添加环境描写。1.Thewindfromtheseawasstillcoldandfrigid,constantlyblowingandwhippingontoourfaces.

海风刺骨寒冷，不断鞭打在我们的脸上。2.Theskyisovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds.

天空乌云密布。3.

Theskywasacurdledgrayburdenedwithlumpsofclouds.

天空是昏暗的灰色，浓云密布。4.

Theskyclearsup.

天放晴了。5.Thesunshonethroughabreakintheclouds.

阳光透过云层的缝隙照下来。写作步骤我一般给学生讲解的作文，都会老老实实把脑子的画面感先用中文描述一遍，还会打出来，对着中文去写英文。学生看着会更清晰。Paragraph1:Istaredatthepaperandthenlookedaround.1.

然而，让我沮丧的是周围除了一望无际的大海，什么人也没有。However,whatmademefeelgloomierwasthattherewasnooneherebuttheboundlesssea.2.沿着海岸往回走，我内心想着，或许还能找到新朋友。Walkingdowntheseashore,Ihadamillionthoughtsrunningthroughmymind,“MaybeIcanfindmynew

friends

inthedistance.”3.走了会儿，我停下脚步，坐在沙滩上。海风阴冷，任由它打在脸上。Havingwalkedforawhile,Icametoastop,sittingonthebeach.Thewindfromtheseawasstillcoldandfrigid,constantlyblowingandwhippingontomyface.4.盯着手里的瓶子，我喃喃自语，“真可笑啊！“Staringatthe

bottle,Imurmuredtomyself,“Ridiculous!”5.我闭上眼睛，任由思绪飘扬，脑海里不断闪现以前过生日时的温馨画面。Iclosedmyeyes,withmythoughtswanderingaway,andmemoriesofpastjoyful

birthday

scenecamefloodingbacktome.6.就在这时，似乎有人在叫我的名字。Justthen,someonewascallingmebymyname.完整作文Paragraph1:

Istaredatthepaperandthenlookedaround.

However,whatmademefeelgloomierwasthattherewasnooneherebuttheboundlesssea.

Walkingdowntheseashore,Ihadamillionthoughtsrunningthroughmymind,“MaybeIcanfindmynew

friends

inthedistance.”Staringatthe

bottle,Imurmuredtomyself,“Ridiculous!”

Iclosedmyeyes,withmythoughtswanderingaway,andmemoriesofpastjoyful

birthday

scenescamefloodingbacktome.Justthen,someonewascallingmebymyname.

Paragraph2

AsIopenedmyeyes,Ifoundmyfatherstandingrightbesideme.Confused

andabitanxious,Iasked,“Dad,whyareyouhere?”My

father

repliedinagentlevoice,“Let’sgobackhome.”Followingmyfather,wecameback.ThemomentIsteppedintothehouse,Iwasgreetedbyabeautifulbirthdaycakeonthetableandthewarmsmileonmymother’sface.Thevoiceof

“Happybirthday”brokethe

silence

andmeanwhil