浙江Z20名校联盟高三第二次联考读后续写父子隔阂解除讲义-高三英语二轮复习

题目JeffandIhadmanyconversationsduringtheyear,butIwillalwaysrememberthetimehetoldmeabouthisfamily.Hisfather,asuccessfulphysician,wascoldandstrictinJeff’swords.HisfatherhadevenpavedthewayforJefftoattendthesamecollegefromwhichhehadgraduated.Jeffwastwentysevenandasuccessfulbusinessplanneratapanywithoutadegree.Hispassionwasskiing.Whenhegraduatedfromhighschool,hedecidedtodeclinehisfather'sofferand,instead,toworkwithaskipatrol(滑雪巡逻队).Withpaininhiseyes,Jefftoldmehestillrememberedthedaywhenhetoldhisfatherhewasgoingtogiveupcollegeandtakeajobataskiresort.HearingJeff’sdecision,hisfatherlookedoffintothedistance.ThencamethewordsthatstillechoedinJeff’smind:“Youlazykid.Nosonofmineisgoingtoworkwithaskipatrolanddoesnotattendcollege.Ishouldhaveknownyou’dneveramounttoanything!”Thetwohadnotspokensincethatconversation.Later,hewasbackintheareanearwherehegrewupandhecertainlydidnotwanthisfathertoknowhewasattendingcollege.Hewasdoingthisforhimself,notforhisfather.Hesaiditoverandoveragain.Jeff’ssisterhadalwaysremainedsupportiveofJeff’sdecisions.Shestayedincontactwiththeirfather,butJeffhadmadeherpromisethatshewouldnotshareanyinformationabouthislifewithhim.Thedaywhenthegraduationceremonycame,Iwalkedaroundtalkingtopeoplebeforeitstarted.Inoticedamanwithaconfusedexpression.“Excuseme,”hesaidashepolitelyapproachedme.“Whatishappeningheretoday?”“It’sgraduationday,”Ireplied,smiling.“Well,that’sodd,”hesaid,“mydaughteraskedmetomeetheratthisaddress.”Hiseyessparkledandhesmiled.“Maybeshepletedherassociate’sdegreeandwantedtosurpriseme!”Ihelpedhimfindaseat.Paragraph1:AsIlefthim,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,myname’sDr.Holstrom.”Paragraph2:Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.伏笔：Jeff'ssisterhadalwaysremainedsupportiveofJeff'sdecisions.Shestayedincontactwiththeirfather,butJeffhadmadeherpromisethatshewouldnotshareanyinformationabouthislifewithhim.妹妹会是父子俩和解的关键人物人物分析：JeffsticktohisenthusiasmWhenhegraduatedfromhighschool,hedecidedtodeclinehisfather'sofferand,instead,toworkwithaskipatrol.beemorematureLater,hewasbackintheareanearwherehegrewupandhecertainlydidnotwanthisfathertoknowhewasattendingcollege.Hewasdoingthisforhimself,notforhisfather.Hesaiditoverandoveragain.语料积累与语言风格：1.HisfatherhadevenpavedthewayforJefftoattendthesamecollegefromwhichhehadgonnagraduated.2.Withpaininhiseyes,Jefftoldmehestillrememberedthedaywhenhetoldhisfatherhewasgoingtogiveupcollegeandtakeajobataskiresort.3.ThencamethewordsthatstillechoedinJeff'smind4.Inoticedamanwithaconfusedexpression.5.“Excuseme,hesaidashepolitelyapproachedme.6.Hiseyessparkledandhesmiled.本文统观之，语言上清新晓畅，有第一人称叙述的亲临亲历之感，没有用词上的晦涩感，但语言不乏传情达意上的微妙性，直接引语与间接引语都有出现。续写中要延续这种连贯的用语风格.续写要回答的问题：第一段：Howtoconnectthetwoscenes?WouldIspeakoutthetruthtotheman?WhatwouldIdo,thinkorfeel?Whatismyreactionwhenhearingthename?第二段：WouldJeffrecognizehisfather?Howwouldhisfatherreacttothescenethathissonwasonstage?WhatwouldJeffdoonstage?主题：ThelovebetweenJeffandhisfatherInnergrowthofJeffandhisfatherMutualunderstandingandcareThemeltingoftheicebetweenJeffandhisfather微场景刻画：方法1:丰富的内心独白Thenameringinginmymind,Ifrozeonthespot.JeffHolstrom!Couldthisbethecold,sternfatherwhodemandedhissonattendcollegeorneverenterhishomeagain?描写妙处JeffHolstrom!短促有力，一言胜过千言。Couldthisbe......?以一种震惊的语调写出内心的惊讶coldandstern则协同呼应了原文第一段父亲的印象。描写某人感到震惊：Hearinghiswords,myjawdroppedindisbelief,myeyeswideninginshock.Mymindwasinawhirlwindofutterastonishment,likeastormragingwithin.Hearingtheunexpectednews,Marywasnumbwithshock,asifrootedtotheground.WhenIwashavingmyoralexam,IgotsotonguetiedthatitwasamiraclethatIcouldutterapletesentence,utterlydumbfounded.方法2:激越的氛围营造Speechesgiven,thedeanbegantoreadthenamesofthegraduates.Witheachgraduatewalkingontothestage,theauditoriumbrokeintowavesofthunderousapplause,whichseemedtobrimoutoftheplace.(personification)表达异构Cheersandchatterfilledtheairlikeacheerfulmelody笑语交错,活泼的气氛如同欢快的乐曲般弥漫空中。方法3:情感赋能画面Suddenly,alonefigurepoppedintohiseyesDr.Holstrom.Ididn'tknowhowtheireyesmet.Icouldfeelafloodofmemoriesmustberushingthroughtheirhearts,bindingfatherandsoninanunspokenembrace.Theroomseemedtoholditsbreath,asiftimeitselfhadpausedtowitnessthereunion.Theyearsapartmeltedawayastheireyesmet,andafragranceoffamilylovepermeatedintheair.亮点即躲本段有哪些地方值得学习?Theuseofpersonificationandthemovinglanguagestyle.方法4:主题升华深刻Intheend,herealizedthatfamilyloveandbondcouldbreakthroughtheicyfortress,allowinglovetoseepbackintoeachother'shearts.Intheirreunion,atapestryoflove,forgiveness,andacceptanceunfolded.weavingabondthattimeanddistancecouldnolongerunravel.反思提升主题升华是多元的，正向的，符合价值观的参考范文：AsIlefthim,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,myname'sDr:Holstrom."Thenameringinginmymind,Ifrozeonthespot.JeffHolstrom!Couldthisbethecold,sternfatherwhodemandedhissonattendcollegeorneverenterhishomeagain?Curiosityanddoubtbubblingup,IturnedaroundtogetaglimpseofDr.Holstrom,attemptingtofindsomefacialresemblances.Beamingandscanning,Dr.Holstromseemedtobelookingforhisdaughter.Speechesgiven,thedeanbegan