2024年浙江卷1月读后续写(路痴的自我救赎)讲义-高考英语作文复习专项

2024年浙江卷1月续写(路痴的自我救赎)SelfRedemptionofaPersonwithPoorSenseofDirection

（路痴的自我救赎）阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers’offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfirstPEclass,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather’s,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.”It’sjustthebeginning,“shethought.”I’lleinlastforsure.“SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword”mile.“Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.

续写词数应为150左右;2,

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.情节梳理：Beginning：Eva开始了她的高中生活，在这个新环境中她试图适应。最大的挑战之一是在巨大的学校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物庞大，使她感到迷茫。Buildup：Eva在巨大的学校建筑中迷路的问题逐渐升级，她决定只记住自己上课的地方。此时，体育课上的一个新挑战出现了：教练要求每个人跑一英里。Eva对跑步感到极度恐惧，认为自己无法完成。Climax：跑步的时候，Eva开始感到绝望。然而，她使用了一个心理技巧：不再想象整个一英里的距离，而是专注于逐渐到达的小目标。她的心情由恐惧转变为决心，一圈又一圈地跑下去。Resolution：Eva最终成功地完成了跑步，并意外地获得了教练的表扬。她意识到，她所害怕的距离实际上更多是心理层面的挑战。她决定将这种分解任务的方法应用到学校的探索上，逐步熟悉整个建筑。Ending：Eva通过逐步攻克学校建筑的复杂性，成功地适应了新环境。故事以她的成长和自信的提升结束，她从一开始的迷茫和恐惧变得更加自信和适应。这个故事不仅是关于学习和适应的，还强调了面对挑战时心理策略的重要性。续写思路：第一段续写：“当皮特教练在终点线对她说：‘干得不错’时，伊娃感到吃惊。”——本段续写的关键在于吃惊的创设，所以要充分结合语篇材料，合理利用跑步过程中伊娃的担心，通过强烈的反差与对比描写推动本段的情节，同时结合二段提示，为本段做结——即通过一次害怕的跑步，意外悟出了解决自己“路盲”的方法，即将目标分解这个方法具体写出来。

第二段续写：“伊娃决定用相同的方式应对教学楼”——本段续写的关键在于，方法论的迁移，重点在于把跑步中的成功经验再次移植到对教学楼的适应中，同时为主题升华留足空间，即“勇于思考与总结方法的重要性，而不是一味的逃避或抱怨”。对第五段的解读是续写的关键。

Eva对自己使用了一个mindtrick，不再去想“英里”这个词，而是先专注于到达前方一棵橡树投在跑道上的影子，然后又集中精神跑到拐弯的地方，在那之后，她想看看自己能否跑完第一圈。就这样，一圈，两圈，四圈跑完了。先把橡树作为自己的第一个目标，然后是拐弯处，然后是第一圈终点，实际上就是目标的分解，将一个看似很难实现的大目标拆分成若干切实可行的小目标，一个小目标一个小目标地完成，大目标就在不知不觉中被完成了。语言特点：1.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwas

finding

herwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.（动名词做表语）2.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,

leading

toclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers’offices.（现在分词做状语）3.Having

apoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.（现在分词做状语）4.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.（定语从句）5.However,whilesomeofherclassmates

edged

ahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.”（edgev.徐徐移动，渐渐移动）6.SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheart

pounding

andlegsshaking.（现在分词做宾补）7.Feeling

desperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.

（现在分词做状语）8.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespot

where

thetrackcurved(拐弯).

（定语从句）范文一赏析：

WhenCoachPittsaid"Greatwork"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Itwastotallybeyondherimaginationthatshefinallypletedtherun,andmuchmoreincredibly,wasnotthelasttofinishthemile.

Breathlessandexhausted,sherealizedthatoveringseeminglythetoughestchallengesjustneededasmartstrategylikehermindtrick.Staringatthetoweringteachingbuilding,Eva

seemingly

graspedthetricktoliveinhighschool，

withasmilebloomingacrossherface.

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Thistime,shedidnotfeelaheadachewhenfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Instead,shefocusedmoreonspecialfeaturesanduniquedesignsofdifferentplacesoneachfloor.

Timetickingaway,Evaeventuallygotfamiliarwiththevastmazeinthewayshefinishedtheonemilerun.Onelapatatimedidwork!Sodidoneflooraweek!ltdawnedonherthatgoalsareeasiertoachieveinsmallsteps.

语言特点：1.

Itwastotallybeyondherimaginationthatshefinallypletedtherun,andmuchmoreincredibly,wasnotthelasttofinishthemile.(主语从句)

这完全超出了她的想象，她最终完成了比赛，更令人难以置信的是，她不是最后一个跑完一英里的人。2.Breathlessandexhausted,sherealizedthatoveringseeminglythetoughestchallengesjustneededasmartstrategylikehermindtrick.（形容词做状语动名词做主语）她气喘吁吁，筋疲力尽，她意识到克服看似最艰难的挑战只需要一个聪明的策略，就像她的心术一样。3.Staringatthetoweringteachingbuilding,Evacameupwitha

goodidea,withasmilebloomingacrossherface.（现在分词做状语和宾补）凝视着高耸的教学楼，伊娃想出了一个好主意，她脸上绽开了笑容。4.

Thistime,shedidnotfeelaheadachewhenfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.（现在分词做状语）5.Timetickingaway,Evaeventuallygotfamiliarwiththevastmazeinthewayshefinishedtheonemilerun.（独立主格定语从句）6.ltdawnedonherthatgoalsareeasiertoachieveinsmallsteps.（主语从句）范文二赏析：

WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Knowingthatshehadperformedbetterthanmostclassmates,shewasmorethandelightedbutcouldn’thelpaskingherself,“HowdidImakeit？Thisisabsolutelyunbelievable!”Shebegantorecalltheprocessofherrunning:theoaktree,thecurvespot,thefirstlap...“Oh,Igetit!Theseeminglyunattainablegoalscanbedividedintoseveralpracticalsmallgoals.Witheachsmallgoalfulfilled,theultimategoalwillbenaturallyachieved.”Realizingthis,shefeltherworldlightenlittlebylittle.

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Shestoppedthinkingaboutallthedifferenthallwaysandroomsandmadeascheduleforherself.Thefirstweekshewouldmemorizeteachers'offices,thesecondweeklaboratories,andthelibrary,thecafeteria...Timepassingby，shehadalreadykeptinmindwheremostroomswere.Asenseofachievementgraduallyroseinhermind.Latersheappliedthetricktoherstudyanddidbetterandbetterin