备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材6关爱邻里

热考话题6关爱邻里[2020新高考I]TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy—hisnamewasBernard—hadinterestedherverymuch."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon’tseewhathecando."Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard."Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.""SodoI，"saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem."Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea！Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）."Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit."WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.人物主要人物Mrs.Meredith，herthreechildren（John，Harry，Clara）：从文中的描述"amostkindandthoughtfulwoman""spentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor""bringfoodandmedicinetothem""Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem"可知，Mrs.Meredith一家人善良、乐于助人。续写部分可通过动作、行为等描写延续他们的这一特点。主要人物Bernard：文中对Bernard的描述"Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney"体现了他勤劳、孝顺、懂事，为续写第二段他卖出爆米花，得到足够贴补家用的钱奠定了基调。情节及情感线Mrs.Meredith经常帮助贫困者（她很有同情心）→她告诉孩子们关于一个贫困家庭的情况（孩子们很关心）→孩子们讨论如何帮助Bernard（很想提供帮助）→John想到了一个好办法（孩子们开心、兴奋）主题本文主要讲了Mrs.Meredith鼓励孩子们去帮助Bernard一家的故事，文章最终的主题应该展现邻里之间互助互爱。续写第一段Mrs.Meredith认为John出了个好主意，接下来应讲述孩子们得到Mrs.Meredith的肯定后采取的行动以及Bernard一家对John这个主意的反应。尾句衔接续写第二段提示语：他们帮助Bernard制作好了爆米花。本段侧重通过对人物间对话、动作、表情等的描写推动故事情节的发展。续写第二段Bernard开始了他的新营生，接着应讲述Bernard卖爆米花的情况：如何售卖，在哪里卖，卖给谁，在这个过程中Bernard的感受如何。再根据续写故事"结局圆满"的原则可知，Bernard最终通过卖爆米花挣到了钱，因此本段可侧重描写Bernard的心理感受和变化。结尾部分适当升华主题：Bernard表达感恩，邻里关系和谐。1.TheywenttotellBernardtheplan.①用can’twait代替句中的go，凸显他们激动、急切的心情。Theycouldn’twaittotellBernardtheplan.②为句①补充地点状语，将场景从Meredith家转移到Bernard家。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouseandtoldBernardtheplan.③将句②中告诉Bernard他们的计划，改写为现在分词短语作状语的形式，使语法结构更丰富。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.2.Theyweretouched.①将人物聚焦到情感更易外露的Bernard母亲身上，并用burstintotears凸显感动的程度，营造画面感。Bernard’smotherwastouched，andburstintotears.②用so...that...引导结果状语从句改写句①，使句子内部关系更紧密。Bernard’smotherwassotouchedthatsheburstintotears.③用倒装句式升级句②，使句子更高级。SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears.3.Hispopcornwaspopular.①补充原因状语，说明为什么受欢迎，使文章逻辑更严密。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.②为句①增加结果，凸显受欢迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，sobagsofpopcornweresoldout.③利用句式（it’snotlongbefore）改写句②爆米花卖完的情况，进一步说明爆米花受欢迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，soitwasnotlongbeforebagsofpopcornweresoldout.WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Havinggottheapprovaloftheirmother，thechildrenbegantocarryouttheplanhappily.Earlyinthemorning，theycouldn’twaittocallat（迫不及待地去拜访）Bernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears（Bernard的母亲感动得热泪盈眶）.Afterwards，theygotdowntomakingpreparations（着手做准备）togetherwithBernard.Soonafter，theysucceededinmakingpopcornandpackeditwithpaperbags.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hewentdoortodooraroundthecommunitywherehelived，nervousandanxiousalongtheway（一路上既紧张又不安）.Muchtohisastonishment（令他非常惊讶的是），hispopcornwasverypopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.Itwasnotlongbeforebagsof