备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材1挑战自我

热考话题1挑战自我[2022新高考Ⅰ]Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路线）throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid，whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong？Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent！Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened."Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，"heexplaineduncomfortably."Igavehimthechoicetorunornot，andlethimdecide."Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊恼）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted，Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme，hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren，butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice，andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren，hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool，IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.人物主要人物David：从文中的描述"smallfortenyearsold""bigtoothysmile""hadworkedsohardforthisevent""hadabraindisease""alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability"和"hadnotmissedasinglepractice"可知，David身患残疾但积极乐观、意志坚强。次要人物"I"：从文中的描述"makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted"和"familiarwiththechallengesDavidfaced""proudofhisstrongdetermination可以看出，"我"是一个关爱学生的老师，也暗示了续写部分应有"我"与David沟通并试图劝说他参加比赛以及David听从劝说并以坚强的意志完成比赛的情节。原文最后一段中描述的"hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid"表明，同学们对David态度友好，这也为续写第二段David在赛场上时同学们的表现埋下了伏笔。情节及情感线越野赛前得知David决定不参加比赛（David情绪低落，害怕被嘲笑）→找教练获悉原因，回想David虽患脑疾却认真积极训练（"我"为他感到自豪）→续写第二段提示语，David走向起跑线（David重拾勇气和信心）。主题根据读后续写"结局圆满"的原则可知，David最终应该完成了比赛。再结合原文中David遇到的困难——行走不稳、害怕被嘲笑等可知，文章最终的主题应该体现David直面挑战、克服恐惧、战胜自己。续写第一段根据续写两段的提示语可知，本段主要描述David从不愿参加越野跑，到走向起跑线参加比赛的转变过程。涉及的人物是"I"和David，主要故事情节："我"开导、鼓励David以及他对"我"的劝说的反应，侧重人物对话、动作、表情和心理描写。尾句衔接第二段提示语：David最终决定参加越野跑。续写第二段根据续写第二段提示语可知，本段的故事情节应发生在越野赛跑线路上，涉及的主要人物是David，也可以呼应原文，加入"我"、教练和学生们的反应。主要故事情节：David在越野赛跑过程中的具体表现及比赛结果，侧重人物在比赛过程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的动作、心理描写。最终升华主题，David战胜了内心的恐惧。1.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.①用形容词作状语改写句子，使行文更连贯。Inspired，hedecidedtohaveatry.②运用连续动作描写将David决定参赛这一过程细化。Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage，"Iwillhaveatry."2.Theycheeredhimon.①将人群具体到个人或一些人，因为"我"尤为关注David，所以他一摔倒，"我"应该是第一个作出反应的人，紧接着是他的同学们。这样使情节发展更加自然顺畅。Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.②用as引导的时间状语从句改写句①，并运用现在分词短语作状语改写cheerhimon，使句子语法结构更丰富。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.③为句②同学们的加油鼓励增加具体的话语，使内容更富有画面感。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon."Comeon，David.Youcandoit！"theyshoutedenthusiastically.3.Davidfinishedtherun.①使用具体的动作描写表示David完成比赛，切合当时比赛的氛围和场景。Davidcrossedthefinishline.②为句①增加对David通过终点线时人们的欢呼声和喝彩声的描写，使情节自然，更具有画面感。Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine，withhislimbsunavoidablyshaking."It’snottherealyou，David，"Ipattedhimgentlyontheback（轻轻地拍了拍他的后背）andsaidquietly."Youhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun？"Iheldmybreath（屏住呼吸）asDavidlookedup.Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage（深吸一口气，鼓起勇气），"Iwillhaveatry."IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thestarter’sgunsounded！Davidsparednoefforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses，buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon."Comeon，David.Youcandoit！"theyshoutedenthusiastically.Touched，hepickedhi