写作基础知识

第一部分基础知识部分

1.构词：

Tele...telephone,television,telegram,telescope/(microscope)bio...biology,biologist,biography,

autobiography,autobiography,biographer,biochemistry/Pre,pro...preview,review,interview/prefer,

refer,transfer,confer/project,reject,eject/predictdictator,dictation,contradict/protect,architect,

detective/predictdictator,dictation,contradict/protect,architect,detective/Pose...position,

composition,propose,proposal,expose,exposure,oppose,opposite,depose,impose,repose,

repository.

猜字练习

1.Accordingtoelectrostatictheory,allsubstancescanbedividedintotwofairlydistinctclasses:

conductors,inwhichelectricchargecanfloweasilyfromoneendtotheother,andinsulators,in

whichitcant

2.ThedoorwassolowthatIhitmyheadonthelintel.

3.Markgotonthemotorbike.Isatbehindhimonthepillionandweroaredoffintothenight.

2.语法：

A.主语

1.Hisfatherworksinafactory.

2.SeeingafilmisbetterthanListeningtotheradio.

(It'snousetellinghimthsnews.)

3.TolearnEnglishwellisnoteasy.

(ItisnoteasytolearnEnglishwell.)

4.Whathetoldmeyesterdaywastostudyharder.

5.Whentheywillcomehasn'tbeendecided.

6.Thatwaneedmoremoneyisquiteobvious.

(It'sapitythatyouhavemissedsuchagoodfilm.)

B.宾语

1.Heboughtsomebooksyesterday.

2.Thankyouforcoming.

3.rilsendhimthebook.

4.Thenewsmadehimfbelverysad.

5.Idon'tknowwhetherhe'll^omeornot.

6・Let'sseehowwecandoit.

C.谓语

1.Hewantstogotobuyaticket.

2.Therearealotofboysontheplaygroundplayingfootball.

3.Hewentoutoftheroomquickly,followedbyhisdog.

4.Aftertellinghimthenews,webegantoeatthebananasservedbyhiswife.

D.定语

1.TheAmericanteacherspokesoslowlythateveryoneintheclasscouldfollowhim.

2.AmancalledJackwrotethisbook.

3.Thewomansittingthere,watchingTV,isourEnglishteacher.

4.ThemeetingtobeheldnextMondaywillbeimportant.

5.Theonlyreasonwhyhediditwasthatheneededmoney.

E.状语

1.Igetupat6:(X)inthemorning.

2.Iwaswritingwhenhecamein.

3.Asluckwouldhaveit,noonewashurtwhentheboilerexploded.

4.Scienceisthebodyofknowledgeaboutnaturethatrepresentsthecollectiveefforts,insights,

findingsandwisdomofthehumanrace.

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Passage1

Thereseemsnevertohavebeenacivilizationwithouttoys,butwhenandhowtheydevelopedis

unknown.Theyprobablycameaboutjusttogivechildrensomethingtodo.

Intheancientworld,asistoday,mostboysplayedwithsomekindsoftoysandmostgirlswith

another,Insocietieswheresocialrolesarerigidlydetermined,boyspatterntheirplayafterthe

activitiesoftheirfathersandgirlsafterthetasksoftheirmothers.Thisistruebecauseboysandgirls

arebeingprepared,eveninplay,tostepintotherolesandresponsibilitiesoftheadultworld.

Whatisremarkableaboutthehistoryoftoysisnotsomuchhowtheychangedoverthecenturies

buthowmuchtheyhaveremainedthesame.Thechangeshavebeenmostlyintermsofcraftsmanship,

mechanics,andtechnology.Itistheuniversalityoftoyswithregardtotheirdevelopmentinallparts

oftheworldandtheirpersistencetothepresentthatisamazing.InEgypt,theAmericas,China,Japan

andamongtheArctic（1匕极的）peoples,generallythesamekindsoftoysappeared.Variations

dependedonlocalcustomsandwaysoflifebecausetoysimitatetheirsurroundings.Nearlyevery

civilizationhaddolls,littleweapons,tinyanimalsandvehicles.

Passage2

AftertheviolentearthquakethatshookLosAngelesin1994,earthquakescientistshadgoodnews

toreport:Thedamageanddeathtoll（夕匕亡人数）couldhavebeenmuchworse.

Morethan60peoplediedinthisearthquake.Bycomparison,anearthquakeofsimilarintensity

thatshookAmericain1988claimed25,000victims.

InjuriesanddeathswererelativelylessinLosAngelesbecausethequakeoccurredat4:31

a.m.onaholiday,whentrafficwaslightonthecity'shighways.Inaddition,changesmadetothe

constructioncodesinLosAngelesduringthelast20yearshavestrengthenedthecity'sbuildingsand

highways,makingthemmoreresistanttoquakes.

Despitethegoodnews,civilengineersaren'trestingontheirsuccesses.Pinnedtotheirdrawing

boardsareblueprints（蓝图）forimprovedquake-resistantbuildings.Thenewdesignsshouldoffer

evengreatersecuritytocitieswhereearthquakesoftentakeplace.

Inthepast,makingstructuresquake-resistantmeantfirmyetflexiblematerials,suchassteeland

wood,thatbendwithoutbreaking.Later,peopletriedtoliftabuildingoffitsfoundation,andinsert

rubberandsteelbetweenthebuildinganditsfoundationtoreducetheimpactofgroundvibrations.

Themostrecentdesignsgivebuildingsbrainsaswellasconcreteandsteelsupports.Calledsmart

buildings,thestructuresrespondlikelivingorganismstoanearthquake'svibration.Whentheground

shakesandthebuildingtipsforward,thecomputerwouldforcethebuildingtoshiftintheopposite

direction.

Passage3

Hello,Iwasonceanairlinehostess.NowI'monmyfirstbustripandI'mquiteamazedatthe

servicesofferedduringthetrip.Includedaremealsontheway,restrooms,publicaddress

announcementsandauniformedhostess.JustnowIintroducedmyselftothehostessonthebus,and

wecomparedexperienceonairandgroundtravel.

Atlunchtime,shegaveoutmenusofferingachoiceofsandwiches.Asshebeganfillingorders,

shefoundthatthereweren'tenoughegg-saladsandwiches.Shequicklywenttowhispertothe

driver.Thebussoonstopped.Thehostessdashedtoanothersimilarbusthatwasallthetime

followingours,andsoonshereturnedwithaboxofegg-saladsandwiches.Asshepassedmyseat,she

asked,'Couldyoudothatonaplane?'

Passage4

WhatAreGoodManners?

Whataregoodmanners?Thisisaquestionwherepeople'sviewsmaydiffergreatlyduetotheir

differentcultures.InsomeAsiancountriesitisconsideredgoodmannerstotakeoffone'sshoes

beforeenteringahouseorleavesomethinginone'scuporbowlwhendrinkingoreatingatafriend's

place.ButtheserulesofbehaviorarenotobservedbytheirEuropeancounterparts,whoareexpected

tokeeptheirshoesoneventhoughtheyareverymuddyandalways

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finishtheirdrinkorfoodtoshowtheirhoststhattheyhaveenjoyedthem.

Nevertheless,thereareuniversalstandardsbywhichtojudgewhatwell-manneredpersonsare

like.Sympatheticandhelpful,theyneverlaughatpeopleintroublebutareeagertorender

assistance.Theyarekindtopeopleandanimalsalike.Respectfulofsocialrulesofcourtesy,theywait

quietlyfortheirturnswhenqueuingfbrabus,givetheirseatstotheelderly,andrisetotheirfeetwhen

addressingtheirseniorswhoarestanding.Iftheywanttosmoketheyneverlightupacigarette

withoutfirstseekingtheconsentofthepeoplearound.Theyarepolite,neverforgettingtosaytheir

“please“whenmakingarequestor“thankyou“whenreceivingafavor.Knowingpeople's

weaknessesfbryouthandbeauty,theyneveraskrudequestionsabouttheirageormakeinappropriate

remarksabouttheirweight.Theyappreciatepeople'srespectfortimeandarealwayspunctualwhen

invitedtodinner.

Inshort,theyarekind,polite,sympathetic,helpfulpeoplewhorespectothersandareconsiderate

oftheelderly.

Passage5

私人汽车的利与弊

TheAdvantagesandDisadvantagesofaPrivateCar

Withtherapiddevelopmentofthesociety,therearemoreandmoreprivatecars.Withaprivate

car,lifeseemstobemuchmoreconvenient.Nolongerdowehavetospendalongtimewaitingfora

bus,andnolongerdowehavetoworrywhetherwehavejustmissedthelastbus.

Aprivatecarcanalsogiveyoumuchtrouble.Youhavetopaymuchtaxforyourcarthoughyour

factorydoesnotrunwell.Ifyoustopyourcarina“Noparking“place,thepolicemanwillwritedown

yournameandthetroublewillthenwaitforyou.Ifyouarealoverofourearth,youwillalsofeel

painful,becauseyourcargivesoffmuchpoisonousgasandwillmakethepollutionmoreandmore

serious.

WereitlefttomedecidewhetherIshouldhaveaprivatecarornot,Ishouldnothesitatea

momenttopreferthelatter.Don'tthinkI'mafraidoftrouble.Theabsenceofmoneyiswhatreally

counts.AndIdocherishaclear,blue,brightsky.

PartIIWriting:

Oursocietyneedshonesty

我们的社会需要诚信

下列句子有毛病吗？

OiAsweknown,accompanythesocietydeveloping,moreandmorepeoplebecomedishonest...

O2Alotofpeoplewasdishonest.Forexample,oneday,Ichoosedonebaginashop.Theysaid

thebagbuiedtherecanbereturned“But,youmustnotlostthereceipt"...

O3Iwashurted.Ihatedtheshop.Fortheshopkeeper,itisatime-settedbomb...

ChEvenintheschools,dishonestthingsareexist...suchthingsisharmful.

OsOurgovernmenthasrealizetheimportanceofhonesty.

Oeltiswhatisinsidethataccounts.

OvHappinessiswantingwhatwedesireratherthangettingwhatwewant.

OsTherearemanybusinessmensellgoodsthatcant'ssatisfycustomer'sneeds.

OoAhonestpeoplesaid“wemuststudyinghardinorderto...n

OioHonestyplaysanimportantroleinthemodernsocietywhichisdevelopingmoreandmore

quickly.Butsomepeoplejustnothonest.Forexample,whenastudentwhowaslateforschool

becausehegotuplateliedtotheteacher.Hesaidthereisatrafficjam.Ofcourse,heisunhonest.

作文动词错误最多：时态不一致；。2主谓不一致；03句子结构有问题；

解决方法：多读（浅显英文）；。2注意老师讲的六个句子条件；。3交卷前细细再看一

遍。

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第二部分主干部分内容

PartVWriting

TrafficinBigCities（讲评）

1.Traffichasbecomeasocialprobleminbigcities.

2.Onewaytosolvethisproblemis

3.Anotherwayis

Traffichasbecomeasocialprobleminbigcities.Ofcourse,haveacarisagoodthings,butif

everypersonownacar,thestreetswillbecametoocrowded.So,TrafficJamsoccurredduringthe

rushhoursandaccidentshappenedmoreoften.

Onewaytosolvethisproblemisdeveloppublictransportationsystem.Forexample,weshould

buymorebusesandweshouldbuiltmoreroads,especiallyround-the-cityroads.Andunderground

trainsisalsoagoodsolution.

Anotherwayistoreducethebigcity'spopulation.

Ourcountrypopulationcontrolisawiseandnecessarypolicy.Ifbigcitypeoplereduce,traffic

willlesscrowded.

OnMakingFriends（容易）

1.交友的需要

2.真正的友谊

3.我的交友原则

Asahumanbeing,onecanhardlydowithoutafriend.Ifwedon'thaveafriendintheworld,our

lifewillnotbeinterestingandwewillfeelverylonely.Ifwehavefriends,wecanhelpeachother,and

wecanlivemorehappily.

Butwhatistruefriendship?Atruefriendcansharehappinessandsadnesswithyou.Abadfriend,

ontheotherhand,onlylovesyouwhenyouareluckyandrich.Whenyoubecomepoorandpowerless

theywilldesertyou."Afriendinneedisafriendindeed”.So,weneedtruefriendshipindeed.

Ichoosemyfriendsonlywhentheycansharenotonlymyhappinessbutalsomysadnesswith

me.Otherwise,Iwouldnotmakefriendswiththem.

Hobbies（容易）

1.儿乎人人都有自己的爱好

2.有些爱好是有价值的和对人有益处的，然而也有些不是这样。

3.坏嗜好常会导致不良后果。

Almosteveryonehassomekindsofhobbies.Itmightbecollectingstampsorcoins,growing

flowers,keepingpetbirds,fishing,huntingorpainting,etc.Heorshedoeswhatheorshelikestodo

intheirsparetimeforenjoyment.

Somehobbiesarevaluableandbeneficialwhileothersnot.Forexample,ifyoulikeswimming,

thatwilldoyougood.Itwillmakeyouhealthierbothphysicallyandmentally.Youwillhavea

strongerheart,strongerlungsandyou'llhaveyourmindrefreshed.Butifyoulikeplayingmahjong,

youjustsitthere,playingeveryday,sometimesevenuntilmidnight.Thatwillbeverybad.

Badhobbiesoftenleadtounpleasantresults.Forexample,Afriendofminelikesdrinking

alcoholtoomuch;hiswifequarrelswithhimalmosteveryday.Atlast,heexhaustedallthesavingsin

thefamilyanditledtothefamilybreak-up.Let'skeepgoodhabitsandgetridofbadones.

Competition（难）

Outline

1.Theimportanceofcompetition

2.Thefunctionofcompetition

3.Myownpractices

Competitionmakespeopleactiveandcreative.Itisverynecessarytocompeteifhumansociety

wantstoadvance.(Evenanimalscompeteforsurvival.)Withoutit,wewouldbecomelazyand

nobodywouldtakeanyresponsibility.'Threemonks,therewillbenodrinkingwatef,.ThisChinese

proverbvividlydescribeswhyChina'sproductivitywassolowbeforeMr.Dengcameinto

power.Atthattime,wehadtheso-calledplannedeconomy.Therewasnocompetitionatall.So,

farmersdidn'tworkhard.Workersdidn'tworkhard.Chinawasontheedgeofcollapse.

Competitioncanstimulatepeopletotrytheirbesttodoanything.Forexample,in100-meterrace,

eachsportsman

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runsasquicklyaspossible,tryingtowinthechampion.Thesamethingshappeninoursociety

andinourdailylife.Ifacompanywantstosurpassothers,itmustcompetewiththem.Itmustraise

itsefficiency.Allthecompaniesdoingthiswilldodoubtbenefitthewholesocietyandthewhole

humanrace.

Beingastudent,Imustcompetewithotherstudentsinourstudies.Imuststudyhardinallthe

fieldssothatIcanbeausefulmanwhenIenterthesocietyaftergraduation.

LosingandGainingWeight(难)

Outline：

1.Thecomparisonofone'sbodytoacar:thesimilaritiesofone'sbodyandone'scar.

2.Thewaysforgainingweightandlosingweight.

3.Myownpractices.

Theprocessofgainingorlosingweightcanbeexplainedbycomparingyourbodytoyour

car.First,yourcarcan'trunifthereisnopetrolordieseloil.Becauseitneedsenergy.Thesame

thinghappenstoyourbody.Yourbodyalsoneedsenergy-thefoodyoueatcanbeconvertedinto

energy-withwhichyoucanrun,youcantalk,youcandoeverything.Second,ifyoueattoomuchand

youidle,youwillgainweight.Weknowacarwithtooheavyaloadcan'trunquicklyand

safely.Maybeitwillbreakdown.Forthesamereason,ifyouaretoofat,itisalsoveryinconvenient

anddangerous.Youmightgetheartdisease,diabetes,hypertensionandsoon.Ifsuchthingshappen,

doctorswouldaskyoutoloseweight.

Youeattoomuchandyoudon'ttakeexercise,you'llgainweight.So,ifyouwanttolose

weight,youhavetodotheopposite.Youwillbeonadiet.Youwillgooutanddosomeexercises,

suchas,running,swimming,playingfootball,etc.Soon,you'llbebackingoodconditionandgood

sh叩eagain.

AsfarasIamconcerned,1getupandgotobedearly,doplentyofexerciseseveryday,andpay

specialattentiontothefoodIeataswell.Idon'teattoomuchmeat.Instead,mydietconsistsof

vegetables,fruits,eggs,fish,beans.Inthisway,Icankeepfit.

PartVWriting(15points)

Directions:

A.Studythefollowingsetofpicturescarefullyandwriteanessayinnolessthan120

B.YouressaymustbewrittenclearlyonANSWERSHEET.

C.Youressayshouldcoveralltheinformationandmeettherequirementsbelow:

1.Interpretthefollowingpictures.

2.Predictthetendencyoftobaccoconsumptionandgiveyourreason.

SectionIII(2005年)Writing

PartA

51.Directions:TwomonthsagoyougotajobasaneditorforthemagazineDesign&fashions.But

nowyoufindthattheworkisnotthatyouexpected.Youdecidetoquit.Writealettertoyourboss,

Mr.wang,tellinghimyourdecision,statingyourreason(s),andmakinganapology.Writeyourletter

withnolessthan100words.WriteitneatlyonANSWERSHEET2.Donotsignyourownnameat

theendoftheletter,use“LiMing“instead.Youdonotneedtowritetheaddress.(10points)

DearMr.wang.

Iamwritingtoinformyouaboutmydecisiontoresignfrommycurrentposition.Thereareatew

factorsinvolved

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thatIfindintolerable.

Firstofall,thesalaryhasproventobemuchlowerthanyouoriginallypromised,andIhavea

largefamilytosupport.Inaddition,theofficeislocatedinthedowntownarea,yetIliveinthe

suburbs,soitisexhaustingformetospendoverthreehourscommutingeveryday.Mostimportantly,

IfeelratherdisappointedandleftoutonthejobitselfasinthepasttwomonthsIwasnevergivenany

reallyimportantresponsibility.

Isincerelyhopethatyouapproveofmyresignation.Iamsorryforanyinconveniencecaused.

Yourssincerely,

LiMing

PartB

52.Directions:Writeessayof160-200wordsbasedonthefollowingdrawing.Inyoureasy,you

shouldfirstdescribethedrawing,interpretitsmeaning,andgiveyourcommentonit.

Thecartoonsymbolicallydepictshowthreesonsandadaughtertreattheirold,helpless

father.Theyeachstandinadifferentcornerofafootballfield.Theeldestsonkicksoutthefather,

whohuddlesupintoaball.Theotherchildrenarepreparedtowardhimoff.Itissadtoseenoneof

themiswillingtoreceivetheirfather.

Thepictureisthought-provoking,andwhatitillustratesisacommonphenomenonintoday's

society:manygrown-upchildrenrefusetosupporttheiragingparents.Whiletheyenjoyacomfortable

life,theirparentsareneglectedandreducedtoutterpoverty,astheseelderlypeoplehavegrownso

physicallyweakthattheysolongerhavebetrayedtheirownconscienceandthereforemaysubject

themselvestosocialcontemptandcriticism.

AccordingtoChineseculture,tobekindtoonesparentsistheheightofvirtue.Weowesomuch

toourparentsinthattheynotonlygaveuslifebuthavedonemuchinbringingusup.Itisagainst

natureforustoshirktheresponsibilityoftakingcareofourparentswhentheyareold.Rather,we

havethedutytopaybacktheirlovebymakingtheirlateryearsenjoyableandhappy.

SectionIVWriting(2004年)

66.Directions：Studythefollowingcarefullyandwriteanessayinwhichyoushould

1)describethedrawing

2)interpretitsmeaning,and

3)supportyourviewwithexample.

Youshouldwriteabout200wordsneatlyonANSWERSHEET2.(20minutes)

终点又是新起点

Inthispicture,wecanseeamanrunningtothefinishingpoint.

Obviously,hewillwinthematch,butthisisnotthemostimportantthingthepicturewantstotell

us.Justinfrontofhim,thewords“startingpoint“canbeseen—althoughhehascometofinish,anew

raceiswaitingforhim.

Theideaconveyedbythecartoonisapparent:theendisanewstart,soweshouldnotbesatisfied

withthepresent

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achievement.Nowadaysoursocietyisdevelopingveryfastandnewchallengesandcompetition

neverstop.Ifwestoptohavearest,maybewewillnotbeabletokeepupwiththedevelopment.So,

wemustworkharderandharderinordernottobeeliminatedfromthesociety.

Takemyfatherasanexample.Hedidn'thavechancetogotocollege.

Butbyself-studyhebecameatechnicianinafactory.Manypeoplethoughthewascontent.But

heneverstoppedstudying.Hestudiedlawinhissparetime.Laterhebecamealawyer.'Thefinishing

pointisjustanewstartingpoint”,hesaidtome.

PartVWriting(15points)

Directions:

Title:ImportanceofEducation

Timelimit:40minutes

Wordlimit:120-150words(motincludingthegivenopeningsentence)

YourcompositionshouldbebasedontheOUTLINEbelowandshouldstartwiththegivenopening

sentence.

YourcompositionmustbewrittenclearlyontheANSWERSHEET.

Openingsentences:

Theprosperityofanationdependsonherdevelopmentofeducation.

Educationisvitaltothedevelopmentofanindividualasitistothatofanation.

Yet,somepeoplearestillignorantofitsimportance.

IncomeSourcesBetweenChineseandAmericanstudents

DescribethedifferencesoftheincomesourcesbetweenChineseandAmericanstudents.

Analyzepossiblereasonsforthesedifferences.

Predictfuturetendency.___________________________________________________

ParentsPart-timeJobFellowshiporscholarship

Americanstudents50%35%15%

Chinesestudents90%5%5%

IncomesourcesofChinesestudentsarequitedifferentfromthoseof

Americanstudents.Inchina,studentsget90%oftheirmoneyfromtheirparentswhile

inAmerica,only50%ofstudents,moneyisprovidedbyparents.Inaddition,Chinese

studentsearnonly5%oftheirmoneyfrompart-timejobsand5%fromfellowshipof

scholarshipwhileincomefromthesetwosourcesforAmericanstudentstakesup35%

and15%respectivelyoftheirtotalincome.

Ithinkthereareprobablythreemainreasonsforthesedifferences.First,becauseof

theinfluencesofdifferentsocialandfamilyvalues,Chinesestudentshaveformedthe

habitofaskingformoneyfromtheirparentswhileAmericanstudentshavedeveloped

moresenseofbeingfinanciallyindependent.Second,mostChineseparentsdevotetoo

muchcaretotheirchildrenandtheywouldrathersaveuptoaffordtheirchildren's

educationandlifethanencouragethemtoholdpart-timejobs.ButinAmerica,many

parentspaymoreattentiontodevelopingtheirchildren'sabilityofself-reliance,sothey

encouragetheirchildrentofindpart-timejobstoearnsomemoneybythemselvesrather

thanprovidethemwitheverything.Third,sinceAmericaismoredevelopedthanChina,

itisrelativelyeasyforstudentstofindpart-timejobs.InChina,opportunitiesforstudents

togetsuitablepart-timejobsareratherrare.

IbelievewiththedevelopmentofChina,moreandmoreChinesestudentswill

realizeandpaymoreattentiontothenecessityofself-dependence.Inaddition,moreand

moreopportunitieswillbeprovidedforthemtoholdpart-timejobs.Somorestudents

willgooutoftheivorytowertobroadentheirknowledgeandtobecomethemasterof

theirownlives.

PartVWriting（参考范文）

ABriefHistoryofWorldCommercialFishing

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Asisshowninthepictures,wecanseeclearlythatwiththeincreaseofcommercialfishing,the

numberoffishessharplydecreased.Inonepicture,therewerevariouskindsoffishesandonlyone

fishing-boatin1900.Onthecontrary,in1995therewasonlyonefish,butmanyfishing-boats.

Thepurposeofthispictureistoshowusthatdueattentionhastobethepaiddecreaseofocean

resources.Owingtooverfishing,thenumberoffisheshasobviouslydecreased.Ifweletthissituation

goasitis,wewon'lknowwherefishisinthefuture.Bythattime,ourenvironmentwillsufferagreat

destruction.

Therefore,itisimperativeforustotakedrasticmeasures.Foronething,weshouldappealtoour

authoritiestomakestrictlawstocontrolcommercialfishing.Foranother,weshouldenhancethe

awarenessofpeoplethattheoceanresourcesareveryvitaltous.Onlyinthiswaycanweprotectour

oceanresources.Also,Ibelievethatwehumanbeingscanovercomethisdifficulty,andwewillhave

abrightfuture.

作芟讲评

GoodHealth

A.19分样题

...whereveryouareandwhateveryoudo,stayinghealthyisalwaysimportant.（Importanceof

goodhealth的主题句）withtheimprovementofourlivingstandards,peopleareattachingmoreand

moreimportancetotheirhealth.（保持健康的客观条件）Westudentscan'lkeepthehighstudy

efficiencywithoutgoodhealth.Thesamethingistruewithworkers,scientistsanddoctors.（反例J

证明说明健康的重要性）

Inmyopinion,gooddietandexercisesaretwomajorwaystokeephealthy.（howtokeepfit的

主题句）Thefoodweeateverydaymustberationalandshouldincludemeat,vegetables,eggs,and

fruit.（第一方面的分论点）Itisimportanttodrinkwatereverydayandnottogetaddictedtodrinking

coffeeorsomeothersoftdrink.（第一方面的另一分论点）Exercisingeverydayisalsoessentialfor

ustostayhealthy.Wecanridebicycles,playtennisorswim.Ofcoursewedon'tneedtoexhaust

ourselves.Weshouldplanourphysicalexercisesaccordingtoouractualcondition.Anhouradayis

enough.（第二方面的论点）

Asauniversitystudent,Ihavemuchfreetimetodoexercises.（Myownpractices的第一点）

Iusuallyplaybadmintonandtennis.ButsometimesIamlazyanddonotexercisesforallkindsof

excuse.Suchascoldweatherandexams.Imustcorrectit,Iamalsocarefulwithmydiet.（Myown

practices的第二分点）Inaway,keepinghealthyisnotveryhard,ifyoujusttakeitseriously.

评语：本篇的内容切题，包括提纲的全部要点（见上边的注释）；文章通顺，语言流畅，

句式变化多样；用词面较宽；虽有个别不妥之处，但该生英语基本功较好，表达能力较强，长

度符合要求。

B.15分样题

...Withtherapiddevelopmentofoursociety,thepaceofpeople'slifeisbecomingmore

quick.Inordertoworkefficiently,weknowthatgoodhealthisa（用词错误）vitalimportancetoall

ofus.（提纲要点,切题；Importanceofgoodhealth论点）Forexample,apersoningoodhealthis

abletoundertakemorehard（结构错误应该harder）taskswhichunhealthypeoplecan'l（结构错误）。

Therefore,everyonewantstohavebetterhealth.（支持论点的论据）

Tokeepfit（提纲要点，切题，下边说明Waystokeepfit的几种方法），firstly,weshouldpersist

indoingphysicalexerciseseveryday.（分论点一）Secondly,weshouldhaveagooddietwhichis

goodforone'shealth.（分论点二）Thirdly,itisknowntoallthatgoodhealthisconnectedtoone's

feelings.（与分论点一相比，句式有变化）Thosewho

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arealwaysinhighspiritswillenjoygoodhealth.Finally（词语变化），itisnecessarytogiveup

badhabit,forexample,smokingtoensuregoodhealth.

Astomypractices（Myownpractices的几种情况）,Igetupearlyinthemorningandgooutfor

breathingfreshair.Intheafternoon,Ialwaysspendanhourorsotoplaytenniswithmyfriendsin

theuniversity.I'mconfidentthatIamindeedingoodhealthcondition.

评语：内容切题，包括提纲的全部要点；表达基本清楚，文字连贯；句式变化较多；结构

与用词有少量一般性错误；长度符合要求。

C.11分样题

...Goodhealthismuchimportantforeveryone,includingmenandwomen,oldand

young.（Importanceofgoodhealth的主题句，并且与第•句话相衔接）Wearestudents,soweneed

goodhealthforstudying.（句子结构不太好）Ifwehaveaba