2024届高考英语作文复习专项：2024年九省联考读后续写课件

2024九省联考读后续写

参考范文

【含丰富续写语料】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(过滤)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya'spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What'sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.

Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Para2: NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.

【词汇、语块积累】makesurethetankswerefreeofanyitems-确保水箱内没有任何物品presentHildawithacandywrapper-给希尔达一个糖果包装纸blameHildaforhercarelessness-因为她的粗心责备希尔达decidetodosomespyingonMaya-决定对玛雅进行一些侦查surfacedempty-handed-空手浮出水面swamtothebackpartofthetank-游到水箱的后部stuckhernosedownbehindthebox-把鼻子伸到箱子后面emergedfromthewater-从水中出现removingherscubagear-正在脱下她的水肺装备withacombinhermouth-嘴里叼着一把梳子waitingforhertreat-等待她的奖励handfulofitemsstillwet-一把仍然湿漉漉的物品故事人物Hilda:

一名在海洋公园与海豚训练师一起工作的志愿者。她聪明、观察细致，能够发现并解释玛雅的行为。Katherine:

海豚训练师，最初因为误解责备Hilda，后来意识到Hilda的洞察力和玛雅的特殊行为。Maya:

一只聪明的海豚，喜欢收集物品，并将其藏在过滤箱后面。Beginning:Hilda作为志愿者在海洋公园工作，负责清理水箱。Build-up:Katherine错误地责备Hilda粗心，因为Maya呈现了一个糖果包装纸。Hilda决定观察Maya，发现了海豚收集和隐藏物品的行为。Climax:Hilda揭示了Maya的秘密，向Katherine展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意识到了Hilda的洞察力和Maya的特殊行为，两人之间的误解得到了解决。Denouement:故事以Katherine对Hilda的认可和对Maya行为的新理解结束，突出了观察、理解和团队合作的重要性。主题1：Katherine（海豚教练）与Hilda（志愿者）解除误会，加深了彼此信任、尊重与友谊。

主题2：

海豚的聪明，关爱动物。写作思路1：

直接告诉Katherine关于Maya的秘密参考范文1Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.参考范文1Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.写作思路2：

间接告诉Katherine关于Maya秘密

【带着Katherine一起去filterbox，增强故事的画面感，和情节丰富性】参考范文2Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.ShethengesturedforKatherinetofollowhertothebackofthetank.Together,theypeeredbehindthefilterbox,whereHildacarefullyreachedin.Herhandemergedholdingasmall,glitteringobject.Itwasacharmbracelet,shimmeringwithtinybeads.“Mayahasbeenhidingthingslikethishere,”Hildaexplained,hervoicefilledwithwonder.Katherine'seyesfollowedeverymovement,herinitialdisbeliefslowlyturningintofascinationassherealizedthedepthofMaya'splayfulantics.参考范文2Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.AlookofunderstandingcrossedherfaceasshewatchedMayaswimgracefullyaroundthetank.“Imisunderstoodthesituation,”Katherineadmitted,turningtoHildawithanapologeticsmile.“You'vedoneagreatjobuncoveringMaya'slittlehobby.”Theatmospherelightened,andthebondbetweentrainer,volunteer,anddolphingrewstronger.AstheywatchedMayaplayfullyinteractwithherhiddentreasures,asenseofunityandjoyfilledtheair,replacinganyearliertension.描述Hilda展示Maya收集的物品的场景1 HildacarefullylaidoutMaya'scollectiononthepoolside,aneclecticmixofshinypebbles,colorfulbeads,andevenasmalltoycar,eachitematestamenttothedolphin'scuriousnature.Hilda小心地将Maya收集的物品摆放在泳池边，这些五花八门的物品包括闪亮的鹅卵石、彩色的珠子，甚至还有一辆小玩具车，每一件都证明了海豚的好奇本性。2 HildaspreadtheitemsMayahadgathered,fromseashellstobottlecaps,beforeKatherine,eachpiecenarratingasilentstoryofthedolphin'sunderwateradventures.Hilda将Maya收集的物品摆在凯瑟琳面前，从海贝到瓶盖，每一件都默默诉说着海豚在水下的冒险故事。描述Katherine对这一发现的反应1 Katherine'seyeswidenedinastonishmentassheexaminedthearrayofobjects,herinitialskepticismmeltingintoadmirationforHilda'skeenobservation.Katherine在审视这些物品时目瞪口呆，她最初的怀疑转变为对Hilda敏锐观察能力的赞赏。2 AmixofsurpriseandcontemplationcrossedKatherine'sfaceassherealizedthedepthofMaya'sactions,herperspectiveonHilda'scapabilitiestransformingwithnewfoundrespect.当Katherine意识到Maya行为的深度时，她的脸上露出惊讶和思考的表情，她对希尔达能力的看法随着新发现的尊重而转变。带着Katherine一起去filterbox1 Withagestureofshareddiscovery,HildaledKatherinetothefilterbox,wheretheycarefullyunearthedahiddentroveoftrinkets,eachitemshiningwiththestoryofMaya'ssecretunderwatercollection."Hilda带着发现的喜悦引领Katherine来到过滤箱旁，在那里他们小心翼翼地挖掘出一个隐藏的宝藏，每一件小饰品都闪耀着Maya秘密水下收藏的故事。2 Together,HildaandKatherinepe