读后续写森林中的“仙女”讲义-广东省广州市高三上学期调研测试

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2024届广东省广州市高三上学期调研测试话题

姐妹感情，幸福的童年生活文本分析

Mylittlesister,Meg（本文的主要人物梅格）,saidthatshewasn'tafraidofthedarkanymoreandshe'dbeOKstayingwithAuntLilyinthe

country."

Aslongas

you'rethere,Mike,"shehadsaid.Still,Mumwasworried.

Meghadneversleptawayfromhome,awayfromthecity（为下文梅格想回家做铺垫，这是她第一次离开家在乡下过夜）.SoItoldMumIcouldhandleeverything.（文章第一段讲明了主要任务Meg和Mike和故事的主要背景，我陪着梅格去姑妈Lily家住，这是梅格第一次离开城市去乡下过夜）

Eventhoughwewereonlystayingovernight,

Meghadbroughtsixbooksallaboutfairies(仙女

)（点明梅格喜欢仙女故事，这是续写故事的关键）.Afterweunpacked,

AuntLilyinvitedustopicksomeflowers.Aswefollowedherthroughtheforest,Megheldmyhandtightly.Butoncewereachedthe

sunlit

grassland,sheletgo."Butterflies!"whisperedMeg.Shescreamedwithdelightwhenoneflewnearher.

（“尽管我们只住一夜，梅格带了六本仙女故事书”体现了梅格喜爱仙女故事，第二段写到我们到了姑妈家，去草坪采花，梅格见到蝴蝶很兴奋）

MaybeIhadnothingtoworryabout,Ithought.IstillrememberedwhenIwasherelastsummer,Ifoundsomeamazinginsects,

likefireflies(萤火虫)andwalkingstickswhichI'dneverseeninthecity.

（这里注意到萤火虫是续写时理解“Tinyfairies”的关键，我在草坪上想到了去年夏天我在这里时发现的令人惊奇的昆虫，萤火虫等）

"Fairiesaremagical.Seethesebeautifulflowerstheygrow!"shekepttellingabsolutelyeverythingsheknewaboutfairies.（梅格相信仙女的存在，她认为这些鲜花是仙女种的，文章多次点出梅格喜爱仙女）

Iwasgladthatifshekeptitupuntilbedtime,thenmaybeshe'dfallrighttosleep.

Megdidkeepchatting,rightthroughsupper.Thenthesunbegantoset.

"Doesitgetreallydarkouthereatnight?"（太阳下山后，梅格有些担忧，晚上会不会很黑，她有些想家）

sheasked.Hereyeswere

fixedon

thewindow.

"Sure,butwe'vegotplentyoflightsinside,"saidAuntLily.SheleanedoverandgaveMegawarmsmile.ButIcouldtellshewasstillworried."Icouldreadtoyou."

Ihadn'tevenfinishedapagewhenherbottomlipstartedshakingslightly."Mike,"shesaid,

hereyesstartingtofill."Iwanttogohome."（梅格因为想家而哭了，我作为姐姐想办法安慰她）Iquicklysearchedthroughherbookforsomethingtokeepherfromcrying.

Thebookfellopentoapagethatwas

dogeared

fromuse,apagethatwasobviouslyoneofMeg'sfavorites.Thetextread:"Amongthetreesdeepintheforest,thelightsoffairies

gleam

(闪烁)."Aha!HowcouldIforgetthose

"tinyfairies"

（这里的”tinyfairies”正式前文铺垫过的萤火虫）outthere?注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered."Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"本文主要特点本文结构完整，多次对要续写的故事作出铺垫，在阅读文本时要注意圈画铺垫，方便在续写时快速准确的抓住关键点，本文细节描写，动作描写较多，对妹妹梅格的性格和人物特点描写细腻，我们在续写时也可以适当使用原文中的部分词语丰富人物和续写内容。写作中可能存在的问题本文中的关键点"tinyfairies"

是萤火虫，在原文中只出现了一次，考生可能在阅读时没有注意到，在续写时看到又不明白所指什么，再回去找而浪费了时间，在阅读时应关键点注意圈画铺垫，方便在续写时快速准确的找到关键点。在续写时要提前构建好两段的内容，注重心理和细节描写。生词积累1.

一词多义countryn.①国家②全国人民③乡下，乡村④地区，地域⑤乡村音乐

adj.①乡下的，农村的②乡村音乐的③祖国的2.

aslongas只要3.

sunlitadj.阳光照射的4.

fixon集中于，固定于5.

dogearedadj.

（书页）折角的；褴褛的,破旧的。6.

gleamv.

发微光，闪烁；显得光洁明亮；（眼睛）表露出，流露出；（因兴奋而眼睛）发光，发亮好词好句1.形容兴奋①asenseofjoyandhappinesssweptover/floodedoversb.心头满是喜悦。②bathingusinextremejoy.Everyonewasgrinningfromeartoear.

使我们沉浸在狂喜之中。大家都笑得合不拢嘴。③Asmilelituphisfaceandhiseyeswereshining/twinkling/sparklingwithgreatjoy/excitement.

他脸上露出笑容,双眸闪烁着喜悦/激动的光芒。④Delightedandthrilled,Igaveajumpintheairandthenskippedintothesupermarketalongwithmysmilingmother.

我高兴地蹦跶了一下,然后蹦蹦跳跳地跟着我微笑着的妈妈进了超市。⑤Itbroughttomylipsabrightsmile,whichshonelikeadiamond.它使我的嘴角露出了钻石般闪耀的微笑。2.

自然环境①Morningsunshinefloodedinthroughtheopencurtains.清晨的阳光透过拉开的窗帘倾泻进来。②Themountainwasbathedinthequietmoonlight.山沐浴在静谧的月色中。③Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars,shininglikediamonds.夜空繁星点点,像钻石般闪耀。段首句分析Passage1:"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered.Meg,我想带你去外面看点东西“我小声的说。分析：看什么东西是一个重点，在原文第三段我们可以获取关键信息，“我”想让Meg看的是萤火虫。但由第二段续写开头可知，他们并没有出去，所以这一段要写“我”用了什么方法让Meg通过窗户就可以看到萤火虫。Passage2"Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"“小仙女，Mike！”她把额头贴在窗户上说，“到处都是！”分析：因为Meg相信仙女的存在，在她伤心时，作为姐姐的“我”应该根据她的爱好去安慰她，所以这一段要注意体现Meg的情绪变化，由伤心想家—>开心入睡下水文"Meg,there'ssomethingoutsideIwanttoshowyou,"Iwhispered.”No,I'mnotgoinganywhereunlessIgohome.”Withtearyeyes,Megpulledthequiltoverherhand.Iwentoutoftherooaloneintotheforest,which

wasbathedinthequietmoonlight.Underthestarrynightsky,Ifoundthose"tinyfairies".Iopenedthejarandletsomefirefliesflyintoit.Shininglively,theseguysweregoingtoamuseMeg,whowashomesickandbelievedinfairies.Irushedtoourhouse,mycheekflushingandmyheartbeatingwildly.Onarrivingatourhouse,Iknockedthewindowandsaidwithexcitement”Meg!See!”Atthesametime,Iopenedthejarslowlyandcarefully."Tinyfairies,Mike!"shesaid,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,"Everywhere!"Asmilelitupher

faceandher

eyesweretwinkling

withgreatjoy.Those"tinyfairies"

dancedfreelyintheyard,andMegnevertookhereyesoffthem.”Theyaresleepingfairies,speciallytoremindyouthatthelittlefairyshouldsleep,andtheywillacpanyyouwhileyouaresleeping.”Isaidlightly.”I’mgoingtobednow,goodnightMike!”Megquicklyclimbedintothebedand