【高考英语书面表达】读后续写与概要写作

考点33书面表达之读后续写

序号内容

1考点解读命题趋势

2考向策略答题技巧真题（典例）引领

3考点过关真题再现模拟检测

【考点解读】

读后续写是随着我国高考改革由教育部考试中心研制的英语高考新题型，2016年10

月在浙江省首次使用。该题型通过读写结合，检测学生的英语书面语言理解与表达能力。

要求学生能够梳理故事文体的结构、分析故事发展的线索、想像故事发展的情节以及续写

故事的发展和结局。

从试题结构看，读后续写评价的是书面理解能力和书面表达能。因此，在写作之前，首

先读懂文本，理清故事情节，然后构思故事的发展和结局。下面介绍一下读后续写的答题

技巧：

【考向策略】

答题技巧

第一步：通读文本，提取线索词和信息句，写出每段段落大意。

第二步：根据文本每段内容，结合所给续写部分的首句，构思完整的故事情节。

第三步：根据续写部分所提供的首句，写出续写部分每段的段落大意，围绕续写

部分的段落大意进行合理的细节描写。

第四步：润色成篇。

真题X典例）引领1

【2021•全国新高考1卷】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningfor

Mother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.

TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthe

kitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothe

kitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftitto

boilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.

Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstove

burnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.

Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothe

sinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,

theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmand

turnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycould

continuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJefTshandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryof

pain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!

Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father's

appearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytook

positiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.

Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Delicious

breakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthe

deliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,butthe

loveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookinga

breakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,uHappyMother'sDay!”Mother

huggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

【解析】

【分析】本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早

餐，自己动手，做起饭餐来，但是不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在父亲的帮助下，获得

成功，他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲，妈妈非常感动的故事。

【详解】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了•“可知，第一段可

描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。

②由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲。“可知，第二段可

描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐，非常感动。

2.续写线索：帮助一指导一积极一献礼—感动

3.词汇激活

行为类

①帮助：help/assist

②.指导：guide/conduct

③.献礼：presentagift/giveagift

情绪类

①.积极：positive/positively/takepositiveactions

②.感动:moved/touched

【点睛】

[高分句型1].Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.

（which引导的非限制性定语从句）

[高分句型2].Itwasnotonlythebreakfast,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedhervery

much.（使用notonly...but（also）句型及强调句型）

真题（典例）引领2|

【2020•浙江】

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:to-holographpolarbears.Wewerestayingata

researchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld^-thetownofChurchillin

Manitoba,Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwild

animals-shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,I

likeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.

Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylake

sniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.

Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpots

hard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebears

off.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassive

paws（爪子）.

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe

30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesof

thebear.

Elliand1fearedthefencewouldn*tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.The

campmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.

SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.With

anangryroar（吼叫），thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.

注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

【范文】

Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Heexposedhissharpteeth,

glaringatusasheranforward.Andagainthebearstoodonhisbacklegs,wantingtosnapatthe

fencelikeamonster.Itseemedthathismouthwasfullofbloodandhiseyeswereredwithanger.

Seeingsuchterriblesight,Icouldfeelacoldnessfloodingfrommyback.Elliswasstunnedthere,

withthemouthwidelyopen.Ihadtotakeaction,soIpickedmycourageandtriedtofrightenhim

awaywiththepepperspray,butfinallyfailed.

Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Itlandednearourcampanditsloud

noisesscaredthebear.Helookedirritatedandchargedatusagain.Icriedout,"Watchout!”We

instantlysteppedawayandranasfastaswecouldtothehelicopter.ThankMyGod!Wesucceeded

inclimbingontotothehelicopter,gaspingwithrelief.Lookingdownatthebear,wefoundthathe

waseatingthebreadwejustmade.Severalhourslater,wearrivedathomesafeandsound,butwe

realizedthatweshoulddosomethingtohelpthebears.

【解析】

读后续写作为新题型之一，突出考查了考生根据所获得的综合信息，吸收，内化并转变成

自我语言的一种能力，同时通过对文本结构的分析和合理性地推测与想象，用自己的语言

接续文本，体现了核心素养中的思维品质和语言能力。读后续写是对原文的阅读，然后进

行“狗尾续貂”，在写作时，要注意“三个读”：先读原文，了解文章的大意，主旨，文章逻

辑结构，故事的6要素，情节发展等等；第二读要注意10个关键词，对关键词进行合理地分

类，确定哪些是最重要的词，哪些次之，然后构思合理的使用；第三读要注意读给出的两

个首句，确定全文结尾的逻辑关系。与此同时，也要注意字数的安排，控制在150+20左右

,建议两段的长短均匀为宜。

真题（典例）引领3|

[202（）年全国新高考1】

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeople

inthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.People

weretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisiting

thepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,she

wouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasa

mansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.

Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseehim,“shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.t4Heissucha

helptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,but1don*tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.wishwecouldhelp

himtoearnmoney,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^

“SodoI,“saidHarry.44Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihavea

greatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobea

goodone."Itellyouwhatwecando,“saidJohn.44YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?

Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundto

thehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右：

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

【范文】

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothe

localsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcomandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.When

theygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywent

toBernard'shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswerevery

grateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundto

thehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.

Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhe

sellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrew

uptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathe

couldtohelpthoseinneed.

【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。

1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困

的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bema

rd也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意-制作爆米花

,让Bernard去卖爆米花。

2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境

的。

3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的

向后延续发展要合乎情理。

4.根据第一一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,

too.（当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意）可以针对如何实现制作爆

米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnew

business.（一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意）可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花

让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。

5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应

使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当

的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要

点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。

【考点过关】

让真题再现

（2018•浙江省高考真题）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事

O

AVacationwithMyMother

Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmy

mother-loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenI

waseleventellsalotabouther.

MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedto

spendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayof

ourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofour

friends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,and

weloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.

Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler's

checksMomhadforgotten.

DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdriving

whileDadslept:"Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI'llstand

outsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:"Honey,where

arethekids?”"What?!Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.,,Wewerenever

actuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.

Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvain

forsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-looking

backyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dad

turneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections（反对）.Ifastrangefamily

showeduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworld

isasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

Paragraph2:

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.

（2017•浙江省高考直题）

第二节读后续写（满分25分）

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onabright,wannJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhis

hometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,butthey

hadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）

alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshow

themthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that*sabigdog!”hethought.But

whenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatching

upwithhim.

Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthe

sprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shaking

itshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearing

openhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthe

chase（追赶）。

Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshow

down.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatzxxkoncehehitthehill,he'dbeeasy

caughtupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.

Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn't

thinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,

theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygot

closer,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledin

frontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

2021.全国高考真题）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事,

Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn*tunderstandmy

worldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydad

earnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatI

wouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathigh

schoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowinga

football,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadabout

sportsorpracticedmytrombone（长号）.

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmer

hiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,riding

downthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedand

pointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwe

soonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingof

weeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughI

wasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingto

thehousehold.0Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasI

wished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn't

interested.IdecideditwasnotfajrthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1：Thepayarrivedatlast.

Paragraph2：Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.

模拟检测,

（2021.重庆南开中学高三月考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使

之构成一篇完整的短文。

In2019,1rescuedaskittishdonkey（容易受惊的驴）.Bocamefromanearbycattleranchand

nowlivespeacefullyonmyranchintheBitterrootValleyofMontana,alongwithanotherdonkey,

threehorses,andtwodogs.ButthekeytoBo'ssuccessfulrecoveryfromnervousrescuetohappy

ranchanimalwasn'tanythingIdid.Itwasmygrandson,Dylan.

Whenhewasjustshyoffouryearsold,DylancamewithhisparentstospendtheFourthofJuly

withmeontheirwaytoCanadaforavacation.Bokepthisdistancefromthegrown-ups,buthe

displayedanunusualfascinationwithDylan.Sowedecidedtointroducethem."Moveslowly,keep

yourarmsdown,bequiet,andstoopdownsometimes,vItoldmygrandson.Dylancautiously

approachedBo,stepbystep,holdingasoftrubbercomb.Boheldhisground,butheseemed

interestedwiththislittlevisitor.DylanrubbedBo'sshouldersandnecksoftlywiththecomb,

removingremainsofhisthickwintercoat.

Ifshardforanalmostfour-year-oldtostaystillforlong,andmotivationovercameself-control.

Dylanmadeonequickmove,andBojumpedoffwithlightsteps.ButBoandDylanwerenotready

togiveup.Dylanapproachedagain.Towitnessapreschoolerlearntocontrolhimselfinsuchashort

timewasamazing.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按照如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Aswewatched,truelovedevelopedbetweenthisoncedistrustfuldonkeyandagentleboy.

Theymetagainoneweeklaterasthefamilypassedthroughontheirreturntrip.

（2021・重庆巴蜀中学高三月考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使

之构成一篇完整的短文。

Arshadhadbeenoutwindowshoppingwithhisparents.Thatwasalltheydidthesedays

becausetheydidn'thaveenoughmoneytoaffordalltheshinyclothes,shoesandotherfancyitems

thewindowsdisplayed.Evenfromadistance,theylookedsopromisingandinvitingthatone

couldn'thelpbutgooverandlookatthem.

EversinceArshad'sfatherlosthisbusinessandhadtoclosedownhisgarmentshop,Arshad's

familybarelyhadthemoneytomakeendsmeet.Theyevenhadtomovetoarentedhouse,which

wassmallerandwassituatedintheshabbierpartofthecity.Unlikehisprevioushouse,wherehe

hadabigluxuriousroomalltohimself,hereArshadhadtosharehisroomandbedwithhisnaughty

youngerbrotherwhoalwayshadtheroominahorriblemess.

Whatwasworse,theplaygroundinthisneighbourhoodwasnothingliketheoneinhis

previousneighbourhood;theswingswereallbroken,themonkeybarswereallrustedandgrimy,

andthesee-saw（跷跷板）onlyhadoneseat.Thereweren'tevenanybookshopsnearbywherehe

couldspendhisfreetime,flippingthroughhisfavouritecomicbooksandnovels.

Thatday,Arshadandhisbrotherweretemblyboredwhentheirfatherdecidedtotakethemall

outforwindowshopping.WhenhisfathersawthesadlookonArshad'sface,hesatdownnextto

himandsaidinasolemntone,"Remember,therearechildrenouttherewhodon'tevenhavethe

thingsyoudo,like,warmclothes,aroofovertheirheads,goodeducationandallthedeliciousmeals

thatyourmotherpreparesforyou,threetimesaday.Youshouldalwaysbegratefulforwhatyou

have.”

Afterthetriptothemall,Arshad'sfatherdecidedtotakehistwoboystoagovernmentschool

intheirneighbourhood.Thechildrenintheschoolbarelyhadchairsintheirclassrooms.Instead,

theysatonruggedcarpetsdrapedoverahard,stonefloor.Threeorfourchildrensharedtorn,

second-handbooksamongstthemselves.Theplaygrounddidn'tevenhaveanyswingsandthere

wasnotevenacafeteria!

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Arshadrememberedhowhealwayscomplainedabouttheswingsinhisplayground.

Thinkingofthehappychildreninthatschool,Arshaddecidedtodosomething.

2021•湖南高三二模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇

完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

WrinklesofconfusionrippledacrossHolly'sforeheadassheopenedthegiftfromherbest

friend,Susan.

“I…Ithoughtyoucoulduseitforsomething."Susan'sstammeredexplanationdidnothingto

helpusunderstandwhyatwelve-by-eighteen-inchdarkbluecarpetremnant（残余物）wasbeing

presentedasabirthdaygift.

Holly,mydaughter,triedbravelynottoallowherdisappointmenttoshow.Shelaidthecarpet

onthekitchencounter,andthetwogirlsheadedoutsidetoplay.

Thenextmorning,Icarriedakitchenbagoutside.MyheartachedasIsawSusan'scarpetlying

inthetrashcan.Hesitatingonlyamoment,Ireachedinandpickeditup.Aftergivingitalight

brushing,Ibroughtitintothehouseandplaceditinthehallcloset.Occupiedwiththebusinessof

dailyliving,thecarpetwassoonforgotten.

PriortoHolly'sbirthday,Susanhadbeenaregularvisitorinourhome.Onseveraloccasions,

sherodethebushomewithHollyandwasoneofthefewfriendseverpermittedtostayoverona

schoolnight.ButnowIrealizedithadbeennearlythreeweekssincewe'devenheardmentionof

Susan'sname.Imissedherwarmsmileandeager-to-pleaseways.

Oneday,Hollyhadarrivedhomefromschool.4tSusaninvitedmetocomeovertoherhouse

afterschooltomorrow,sheannouncedasshetookherbooksdownonthekitchentable.Although

hervoicecarriedaso-whatattitude,Isensedshewaspleasedbytheinvitation.

Arrangementsweremade,andthegirlsrodehometogetherontheschoolbusthefollowingday.

AsInegotiatedthewindingcountryroadthatledtoherhouse,Susanchattednervouslyabouther

fostermomandtheseventeencatsshehadtakeninandcaredfor.SoonwearrivedatSusan'shouse.

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Awomanwearingashapelesssweaterstoodinthedoorwaytogreetusasweapproachedthe

smallshabbyfarmhouse.

Paragraph2:

HearingmywordsabouteverythingofSusan,Hollysatsilentlyinthecar,withherhead

stretchingforward（前伸）asifwillingthecartomovefaster.

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唳真题再现

【范文】

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,

Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.

Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedout

instantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuilda

fire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyinfront

ofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistentcuriously.Soon

welearntthattheboyinragsevendidn'thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom“fbrgot”totake

thistentwithusagain.

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohadanice

timelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,which

wasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthatpoor

boywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwasalso

shethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.

【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母

所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。

【详解】

首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感

情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事（尤其是前

文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而

带来的趣事）（也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这

一个点）；

其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：

此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述

;例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色（同时回忆往事），最终把故事的落脚

点放在“家人的感情"''亲情”"生活的乐趣"''与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有

同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节

可以写的角度比较多；

再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰

程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中

,考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方

面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型

单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。

应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。

【点睛】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:虚

拟语气和with复合结构Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,

withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.

what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthat

tent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.

高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。

遇皿gggj?

【范文】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulandBeckygotoutofthecar

immediatelytogivethehelp.Withnothingonthehand,theydidn'tdaretofightagainstthewolf.

However,theystillapproachedtothewolfbravely.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthem

andturneditsheadback,howlingangrilytowardsPaulandBecky.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycle

andwasreadytofightagainstthewolf.Thencamethedeadlock.

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,where

threemencircledthewolf.Mac*sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththe

wolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometook

outtheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople's

threatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthe

distance.

【解析】

本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事。时态要

考虑以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键

词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出

的内容提示进行合理构思。

Thepayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasverytiring,Iwasveryhappyinmy