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Mymother’sgift

Adandelion(蒲公英)inmydictionaryalwaysremindsmeofmylunchtimeswithmymother.

WhenIwasinthethirdgrade,Iwaspickedtobetheprincessintheschoolplay,andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakingly(费力地)practisedmylineswithme.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.Finally,myteachertookmeaside.Sheexplainedthatshehadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.Ididn’ttellmymotherwhathadhappenedwhenIwenthomeforlunchthatday.Butshesensedmyunease,andinsteadofsuggestingwepracticemylines,sheaskedifIwantedtowalkintheyard.

Itwasalovelyspringdayandtheroseleaveswereturninggreen.Wecouldseeyellowdandelionspoppingthroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithalittlebitofgold.Iwatchedmymothercasuallybenddownbyoneofthedandelions.“IthinkI’mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,suddenlypullingaflowerupbyitsroots.“Fromnowon,we’llhaveonlyrosesinthisgarden.”

“ButIlikedandelions,”Iprotested.“Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”Mymotherlookedatmeseriously.“Yes,everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway,doesn’tit?”sheaskedthoughtfully.Inodded,pleasedthatIhadwonherover.“Andthatistrueofpeopletoo,”sheadded.“Noteveryonecanbeaprincess,butthereisnoshameinthat.”

Relievedthatshehadguessedmypain,IstartedtocryasItoldherwhathadhappened.

“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,remindingmeofhowmuchIlovedtoreadstoriesaloudtoher.“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.”

Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.LunchtimeswerespentreadingovermylinesandtalkingaboutwhatIwouldwear.注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aftertheplay,ItookhometheflowerIhadplacedinthepocket.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________读后续写题“3221”建模

【前文大意】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者三年级时被选中在学校戏剧表演中扮演公主，但因为总是在舞台上忘词而被老师调换成叙述者的角色。在妈妈的启发和鼓励下，作者学会了为叙述者这个角色感到自豪并努力背诵台词，认真做准备。一、阅读前文找“3”——Who?Whathappened?

How(feeling)人物(Who)：I,mymother冲突事件(What

happened):

(前文第1段末句)

She(myteacher)

explainedthatshehadwrittenanarrator’sparttotheplay,andaskedmetoswitchroles.(前文最后1段)

Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.人物情感变化（How）:

painstakinglypractisedmylines—myunease—Mymotherlookedatme

seriously—sheaskedthoughtfully—Relieved

that

shehadguessedmypain,Istartedtocry—withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.

二、续写情节构思“2+2”（一）充分理解两段续写的首句，结合前文，合理构思每段2个情节。1.由第一段首句Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.（演出当晚的后台，我感到很紧张。）可知，第一段可描写作者是如何克服紧张以及完美完成表演的，即续写线索：感到紧张——发现蒲公英——恢复平静——完成演出。2.由第二段首句Aftertheplay,ItookhometheflowerIhadplacedinthepocket.（演出结束后，我把放在口袋里的花带回家。）可知，第二段可描写作者把花收藏起来，对母亲心存感激。即续写线索保存蒲公英——感谢母亲。（二）充分理解前文，注意“伏笔”情节，在续写中呼应；划出前文的好词佳句，适切用于续写。1.Adandelion(蒲公英)inmydictionaryalwaysremindsmeofmylunchtimeswithmymother.在我的字典里的一朵蒲公英让我时时想起和妈妈在一起的午餐时间。2.Andforweeksmymotherhadpainstakinglypracticedmylineswithme妈妈煞费苦心地给我练习台词。2.ButnomatterhoweasilyIdeliveredthemathome,assoonasIsteppedonstage,everyworddisappearedfrommyhead.但是，不管在家里怎么背得滚瓜烂熟，只要一上舞台，我的脑子里就成了一片空白。3.Butshesensedmyunease.但是，她感觉到我的不舒服。4.Wecouldseeyellowdandelionspoppingunexpectedlythroughthegrassinbunches,asifapainterhadtouchedourlandscapewithalittlebitofgold.我们可以看到，一丛丛黄色的蒲公英冒出草坪，仿佛是一位画家为了给眼前的美景增色而着意加上的点点金色。5.”IthinkI'mgoingtodigupalltheseweeds,”shesaid,suddenlypullingaflowerupbyitsroots.我看得把这些野草都拨了，”她说着，一边使劲把一丛蒲公英连根拨出。6.“ButIlikedandelions,”Iimmediatelyprotested,

Allflowersarebeautiful—evendandelions.”

“可是我喜欢蒲公英，”我不满地说，“凡是花都好看蒲公英也不例外。”7.“Everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway,doesn’tit?”sheaskedthoughtfully.“每一种花都以自己的方式给人带来愉悦，不是吗？”她体贴地问道。8.“Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator,”shesaid,remindingmeofhowmuchIlovedtoreadstoriesaloudtoher.“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.”

“但你可以做一个美丽的叙述者。”她说，提起我是多么喜欢大声读故事给她听。“叙述者的角色和公主的角色一样重要。”9.Overthenextfewweeks,withherconstantencouragement,Ilearnedtotakeprideintherole.LunchtimeswerespentreadingovermylinesandtalkingaboutwhatIwouldwear.在接下来的几周里，在她不断的鼓励下，我学会为我的角色自豪。在午餐时间，我反复朗读我的台词，我和妈妈谈论我穿什么衣服（上台表演）。三、文末“1”点题句文末（通常是结尾句，但视具体行文，可能在接近结尾处）为“1”点题句，升华故事蕴含的正能量意义，比如本文主题是“Everyflowergivespleasureinitsownway.(每朵花以自己的方式给人带来愉悦。)”

或

“Thenarrator’spartisasimportantasthepartofaprincess.(叙述者角色和公主角色一样重要。)”或“母亲的持续鼓励帮助孩子树立信心。”学生优秀作品

Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,

Ifeltnervous.

I

struggledtomemorize

thewordsintheplay

painstakingly.Suddenly,Ifeltthattherewassomethinginmypocket.Takingitoutofmypocket,Ifoundthat

itwasadandelion.Immediately,Mother'sencouragementoccuredtome.I

saidtomyself,

“I'vepractisedforalongtimetobewellprepared.Icandoit!”Takingadeepbreath,Ibegantoplay,confident.Theplaywasperformedsmoothlyandsuccessfullyandtheaudiencebrokeintoastormofapplause.

BackstagestoodI,hearingtheapplauseandheldingbackmy

exciting

tears.

Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower1hadplacedinthepocket.

ThesecondI

arrivedhome,I

rantomymotherandhuggedhertightlywithtearswellingupinmyeyes.

“I'vemadeit!”

Icriedout.Abigsmileappearing

onherface,shesqueezed

meinherarms,saying.

“It'stheresultofyourtirelesseffort!

Youarethemostdistinguishednarrator!”Itwasmymotherthattaught

metheimportanceofconfidenceinaspecialway.Theroseleavesturngreenandfall.

Adandelion

inmydictionary

alwaysreminds

meofbeingconfident,

whichismymother'sgift

for

methatIwilltreasureforever.

(95+102=197words)该篇作文续写内容与前文高度融合，情节推进自然，续写的第2段里呼应了前文情节，第1段如何镇定心情，获得表演成功的描述非常生动，第2段

“Youarethemostdistinguishednarrator”点题自然贴切，文末最后一句回应前文首句，起到前后呼应的效果。全文行文流畅，语言表达准确，词汇丰富，句式多彩，卷面整洁，堪称佳作。充分展示了认真学习和学以致用的能力。学生优秀作品

Backstageonthenightoftheperformance,Ifeltnervous.

Myheartbegantoraceandmymindwentblank.Icould

feelmypulsepoundinginmytemplesandmypalmssweating

likecrazy.WhenIfeltalmost

fainted,myteachercameovertome."Yourmotheraskedmeto

givethistoyou."shesaid,passingmeadandelion.WhenIsawit,Iknewmymomwasoutthere.

Mymother'sencouragementand

guide

floodedintomymindimmediately.Itookadeepbreathandcalmeddown.Whenthe

play

started,Iquicklyenteredastateofmind.Iputthe

dandelioninto

mypocketand

performedwonderfullyasa

narrator.

Aftertheplay,Itookhometheflower1hadplacedinthepockel.

Mymother

received

thedandelionand

putitinthe

dicti