高考英语读后续写竞赛故事类陌生人的关爱可以改变一个孩子的未来课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习爱心故事——陌生人的关爱可以改变一个孩子的未来1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part1题目呈现3续写原文Jose’sfatherdiedwhenhewas9andhismotherhasbarelyearnedenoughtopaythefamilybills.Thedropoutrateoftheschoolheattendedwashighbecausetherewerelotsofkidsfromfatherlesshomeswithnomoney.ButJosewasdifferent.Hetriedtofindjobsmowinglawnsanddeliveringnewspapertohelphisfamily.Healsoexcelledinmathandartatschool.Hewantedtobearemarkableman.WhatJoseexpectedmostwastheBoyScoutmeetingeveryWednesdayafternoon.Theirscoutmaster,GeorgeguidedthetrooptolearnhowtogiveVCR,treatsnakebitesandidentifyplants.TheyclimbedatCampCherokeeandattendedtheNationalScoutJamboreeinVirginia.Georgekeptclosetothekids.Heknewtheirstrugglesandwishes.Heoftendugintohispocketwhenoneofthemneededalittleextramoney.Heledthetroopwithagentlehand,encouragedthembutlettheboysfindtheirownwayforward.Healwayssaidtotheboys,“Ihavealwaysbeenhereforyou.”“Hewasafatherfigurewatchingoverme,”saidJose.HeworshipedGeorgeandpracticedhard,hopingtowinanEagleScoutbadgejustlikehisscoutmaster.4续写原文Butatthestartofhisjunioryear,hisfamilyfacedacrisis:Mariacouldnotfindenoughworktokeepthemfromlosingtheirapartment.Besidesmowinglawnsanddeliveringnewspaper,Josehadtotakeanafternoonjobcleaningofficesandoneatnightmakingmicrochipsatthemanufacturingplant.Therewasnotimeleftforhomework,littleforsleep.HemissedclassesandtheweeklyBoyScoutmeeting.Forthefirsttime,hisgradesslipped.Georgesensedthechange.“Whyareyouskippingmeetings?”heaskedandJosewouldonlysayhehadtoomuchworktodo.5段首句Para1：GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.Para2：JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.6Part2题目分析7点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点8续写思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了家庭贫困的失去父亲的少年Jose在童子军团长George父亲般的帮助和鼓励下，最终学业进步并且获得老鹰胸章的故事。本文体现陌生人的关爱可以改变一个孩子的未来。9续写思路分析Para1：GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.由第一段首句内容“当另一个童子军提到真正的原因时，George才知道。”可知，第一段可描写George对Jose旷课和成绩下降的反应，他的帮忙措施，以及Jose一家人接受帮助。10续写思路分析Para2：JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.由第二段首句内容“Jose对George的关心作出了回应，他的成绩逐渐提高，并对童子军活动充满热情。”11续写思路分析续写线索George了解了原因——George提供帮助——Jose成绩提高——Jose获得胸章——Jose感谢12续写素材可用词汇：行为类帮助：lendahand/giveahand提出：propose/putforward克制：containoneself/holdback情绪类善良的：good-hearted/kind-hearted感谢：gratefully/thankfully13续写素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Hecouldn’thelpworryingthatsuchagood-heartedandtalentedboymightnotgetwherehedreamttobeifnobodypushedhim.(运用了where引导宾语从句)[高分句型2]AsGeorgewenttothestageandpinnedthebadgetoJose’schestandpattedhisshoulder,theboycouldn’tcontainhimselfanymore.(运用了as引导时间状语从句)14Part3范文呈现15范文呈现GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.Thenewsshookhim.Hecouldn’thelpworryingthatsuchagood-heartedandtalentedboymightnotgetwherehedreamttobeifnobodypushedhim.AsJose’sscoutmaster,hefeltitwashisdutytolendahand.Hewenttothefamilyapartmentandproposedadeal.HewouldpayMaria$400amonthtocoverhalftherentandsomeotherexpenses.Inreturn,Josewouldquithisjobsandgobacktoschool.Theeveningendedwithahandshakeallaround.16范文呈现JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.Hedidwellnotonlyinmathandartbutalsoinallsubjectsandsetanewgoalofstudyingengineeringinthefuture.Atthesametime,withhisgreateffortsandpractice,hesuccessfullywonanEagleScoutbadgeattheendofhisjuniorschool.AsGeorgewenttothestageandpinnedthebadgetoJose’schestandpattedhisshoulder,theboycouldn’tcontainhimselfanymore.HehuggedGeorgetightly,fightingtearsandsaidgratefully,“Thankyouforalwaysbeinghereformelikeafather.”17范文译文18范文译文何塞回应了乔治的担忧，他的成绩逐渐提高，他对侦察的热情。他不仅在数学和艺术方面表现出色，而且在所有科目上都表现出色，并设定了未来学习工程