Showdon'ttell读后续写之动作和情绪描写公开课课件高考英语一路复习

新高考英语一轮复习本课目标1.复习读后续写”三原则四步骤”2.能够理解并使用固定句式进行动作描写和情绪描写3.能够根据短文细节,合理选用动作描写和情绪描写撰写与原文相呼应的细节,提升续文合理度,与原文融洽度及语言优美度.读后续写高考真题

题号问题原因办法体裁主题思想2021新高考Ⅰ双胞胎做早餐把厨房弄得一团糟给母亲惊喜,庆祝母亲节…theirfatherappeared父亲助攻记叙文母亲节惊喜2020新高考ⅠBernard如何赚钱帮助养家经济衰退Johnhadanidea:做爆米花卖钱记叙文助人献爱心2020.07浙江野熊来到营地前熊闻到面包大蒜气味triedknownactions:...辣椒水直升飞机记叙文险境求生2020.01浙江小宠物狗郁郁寡欢小主人上大学Mumhadanidea:给它买个狗伴记叙文让宠物狗高兴起来2018.06浙江农场游玩迷路小兔惊马？？？记叙文迷途脱困2017.06浙江骑行遇狼未知向路过轿车求助记叙文险境求生快速完成优质续写文的策略探索续写规律:01原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯语言表达风格一致。03曲折性原则故事情节应跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。02正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好,和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。三原则四个步骤2.细读首句，构思框架仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。1.读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。4.修改润色，整洁誊写思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。3.增加细节，开始写作依据情节发展和常识，在确定的框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。Characters:Who,Events:What(when,where,how,why)环境描写,语言描写,动作描写,情绪描写,心理描写,检查错误升级句式注意三个衔接Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?题材题材Show,don’ttell1.描绘画面动作链:一连串的动作构成画面√使用一连串动作让画面动起来妙招一:动作描写–动作链题材题材例1:①Fortunately,hethrewmeabranchandpulledmeout.②Helayonhisstomach,pushedthebranchbeforehimandwoundhiswaytowardsme.Igrabbledthebranchwithcareandwasultimatelydraggedoutoftheicewater.动作1动作2并列的主要动作-全用谓语动词表示（动词时态要一致）动作3动作4动作5妈妈抱住孩子.形成动作链:冲向前蹲下来一把抱住Shedashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredmeintoherarms.

描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个动作以上，可以用这样的结构：主+谓1,谓2and

(then)谓3，

这可以进行大量的动作细节描写，完整的交代过程。Shehuggedmetightly./Shegavemeahug.他把肉扔向狼.2.他上台领奖并发言.Hetookoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.Practice:Heglancedatthetrophy/cup,tookadeepbreathandsaid,“Thankmyopponent”.妙招一:动作描写–动作链

题材题材例2:①Theyoungmanfailedthesecondroundandwassoneverousthathewasatalosswhattodo.②Havingfailedthesecondround,theyoungmanwassoneverousthathewasatalosswhattodo.主语动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动且先发生用havingdone）Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，非谓语(主动且完成:Havingdonesth),主+谓主语动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动且先发生,用havingdone）3.排了三个小时的队伍,他被告知票被卖完了.Practice:非谓语(主动且完成:Havingdonesth),主+谓Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.Blamedbyhisteacherandlaughedatbyeveryone,hefeltratherupsetanddepressed.主语动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（被动形式done）3.受到老师的责难和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。动作3Practice:Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，使用非谓语(done被动),主+谓Thegirlbeganblowingherwhistle,

tryingtogetother’sattention。主语动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动用doing）4.女孩开始吹她的口哨，尝试去吸引其他人的注意力。Practice:Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用:主+谓,非谓语(主动用doing)Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?题材题材1.描绘画面动作链:一连串的动作构成画面Skill1:描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个动作以上，可用:主+谓1,谓2and

(then)谓3，Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用:非谓语,主+谓主+谓,非谓语非谓语:①主动且完成:Havingdonesth②主动:doing③被动done仿写练习1-主+谓1...,谓2...,and谓3....在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容点击此处添加标题在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容点击此处添加标题1.女孩停止了啜泣(sob)，从女人身边退了(step)回来，开始唱歌。__________________________________________________________________2.她登上(board)飞机，坐在座位上，寻找她的书。__________________________________________________________________3.那个女人从他手里抓起最后一块饼干，怒视(glareat)着他.__________________________________________________________________Thegirl

stoppedsobbing,steppedbackfromthewomanandbegan

tosing.She

boardedtheplane,satonherseatandthen

lookedforherbook.Thewoman

grabbedthelastbiscuitfromhishandandthen

glaredathim.仿写练习2-doing/done...(分词作状语),主语+谓语在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容点击此处添加标题在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容在此处添加内容点击此处添加标题Hearingthis,Cathrineranasfastasherlegcouldcarryher.Whendecoratingthehousewithmymother,Iaccidentallybrokeanexpensivevase.RealizingthatIcan'taffordtocontinuemyfurtherstudy,I

hadtostopchasingmydream.Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?题材题材Show,don’ttell2.感受情绪√喜怒形于色√感受情绪:喜怒形于色----Heishappy.Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.facebodyvoiceSkill1:从面部/肢体和声音三个方面体现人物的喜怒哀乐.v.咯咯地笑v.长声尖叫感受情绪:喜怒形于色----Sheisangry.Hercheeks/eyesturnedredandhereyebrowsnarrowed/mouthpouted.Sheraisedherclenchedfists.Sheclenchedherfistsandputthemonherhips.Shebegantogrowlatmethroughclenchedteeth.紧握双拳双手叉腰向…咆哮感受情绪:套用固定句式例2:Shefeltagreatsenseofangerwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.她感到一股强烈的怒意在内心升腾/奔涌.2. Judgingfromhervoice,itwasevidentthatshewastrappedingreatconcern/worry.从她的声音判断,很明显她陷入了极大的忧虑之中.Sb情绪sb’ssbsb’ssb情绪固定句式再升级情绪+结果:

感到一股强烈的愤怒在内心升腾奔涌,妈妈严厉地批评了Harry.外界刺激+情绪:看着冷的发抖的我,妈妈感到一股强烈的震惊在内心升腾奔涌.Feelingagreatsenseofangerwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher,momcriticizedHarrystrictly/harshly.

动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动形式doing）Lookingatmeshiveringwithcoldness,momfeltagreatsenseofshockwellingupinherheartandsurgingthroughher.动作1动作2主要动作-用谓语动词表示（时态）次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动形式doing）感受情绪:套用固定句式Skill2:套用固定句式sb.feltagreatsenseof+情绪名词+wellingupinsb’sheartandsurgingthroughsb.“某人感到一股强烈的……在内心升腾,奔涌”(情绪内隐)Judgingfromsb’svoice/eyes/expression/behavior,itwasevidentthatsbwastrappedin+情绪名词.(情绪外露)从某人的声音/眼神/表情/行为判断,很明显他陷入了…状态之中.点拨:由于增加了情节,必然会增加动词,在不增加连词的情况下,需要把部分动词变成非谓语;在“情绪+结果”结构中,一般“情绪”使用非谓语,“结果”使用谓语;而在“外界刺激+情绪”结构中,一般“外界刺激”使用非谓语,“情绪”使用谓语.前加”诱因”后加”结果”Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?题材题材2.感受情绪喜怒形于色Skill1:从面部/肢体和声音三个方面体现人物的喜怒哀乐.Skill2:套用固定句式sb.feltagreatsenseof+情绪名词+wellingupinsb’sheartandsurgingthroughsb.“某人感到一股强烈的……在内心升腾,奔涌”(情绪内隐)Judgingfromsb’svoice/eyes/expression/behavior,itwasevidentthatsbwastrappedin+情绪名词.(情绪外露)从某人的声音/眼神/表情/行为判断,很明显他陷入了…前加”诱因”后加”结果”结合技巧1题材题材Show,don’ttell1.描绘画面(动作描写)2.感受情绪(情绪描写)Skill1:主语一致的主要动作≥2:主+谓1,谓2and

(then)谓3，Skill1:从面部/肢体和声音三个方面体现人物的喜怒哀乐.Skill2:套用固定句式sb.feltagreatsenseof+情绪名词+wellingupinsb’sheartandsurgingthroughsb.Judgingfromsb’svoice/eyes/expression/behavior,itwasevidentthatsbwastrappedin+情绪名词.(情绪外露)Summary

积累丰富的动词积累情绪相关名词grief.n.悲痛,忧伤sorrow,n,难过悲伤sadnessn.悲哀miseryn.痛苦anguishn.苦闷,痛苦disappointmentn.失望despairn.绝望contentmentn.满足rapturen.狂喜gleen.欢乐,高兴felicityn.幸福ecstasyn.狂喜,入迷Skill2:当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用:非谓语,主+谓主+谓,非谓语非谓语:①主动且完成:Havingdonesth②主动:doing③被动done以“说”为例:

①chatvi.&n.聊天；闲聊

②whisperv.小声说；耳语

③speakv.说；演讲；发言

④informvt.通知；告知

⑤announcevt.宣告

⑥declarevt.宣布；声明

⑦claimvt.声称；要求

⑧roarvt.咆哮⑨sighv.叹气⑩murmurv.低声说2021新高考Ⅰ卷:

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，

使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.(1)读懂大意,理清脉络(2)细读首句,构思框架增加细节,开始写作(4)修改润色，整洁誊写AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

一对双胞胎计划给母亲做早餐作为母亲节的惊喜,Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

计划按部就班地进行着ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.But

thestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.续写:Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.负能量正能量反转在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了母亲非常惊喜![段首句]决定故事走向不随意添加新人物[段首句]决定故事走向负能量---转---正能量(1) 读懂大意,理清脉络(2) 细读首句,构思框架(3) 增加细节,开始写作原文中找可呼应的[细节]契诃夫法则:原文中提到的每一个元素都应该在后面出场,不然就没有必要提及.原文细节1:Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.…Butthestovewasamessnow.…Jeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.…Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.厨房一团糟!!!Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐

在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了他们都非常开心和自豪Para.2

母亲非常惊喜!注意三衔接:…theirfatherappeared.Para2:…carriedthebreakfastupstairs…woketheirmotherup.衔接一衔接二所给短文的最后一段Module1读后续写-增加细节原文细节2:ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐

在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了他们都非常开心Para.2

母亲非常惊喜!主线任务是庆祝母亲节!!!双胞胎祝母亲节日快乐Para2:…carriedthebreakfastupstairs…woketheirmotherup.衔接三Module1读后续写-增加细节原文细节3:ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Jeff小可爱的小手手被烫伤了.Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐

在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了他们都非常开心Para.2

看到早餐,听到祝福,母亲非常惊喜!双胞胎祝母亲节日快乐母亲注意到Jeff的小手母亲心疼的同时,亦感动万分收尾点睛,升华主题Para2:…carriedthebreakfastupstairs…woketheirmotherup.Module1读后续写-增加细节Module2读后续写-遣词造句

Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐4.在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了5.他们都非常开心和自豪Skill1+skill2:面部+肢体语言.+Judgingfromsb’svoice/eyes/expression/behavior,itwasevidentthatsbwastrappedin+情绪名词.(情绪外露)从某人的声音/眼神/表情/行为判断,很明显他陷入了…Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.一般过去时(看到一片狼藉的厨房):父亲双手叉腰,眉头紧皱,从他的表情判断,很明显他…Hiseyebrowsnarrowedandhishandsrestedonhiships.Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplodedafterseeingthemess.Module2读后续写-遣词造句

Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐4.在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了5.他们都非常开心和自豪了解情况后,蹲下来,给拥抱/拍肩膀,说…Havingdone…

主+谓语1,谓语and谓语3(先安慰):他蹲下来,拍拍我们的肩膀/给我们一个拥抱,然后说到:”时间还来得及,让我们一起来吧”.计划Module2读后续写-遣词造句

Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐4.在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了5.他们都非常开心和自豪1.Theystartedthebattleonceagain.动作链:主+谓语1,谓语and谓语3方向1:直接写:他们立即开展了行动.方向2:衔接细节:他们清洗了锅,重新煮上了粥,并且烤上了面包.2.Theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeandtoastedthebreadonceagain.Module2读后续写-遣词造句

Para.1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后,没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐4.在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了5.他们都非常开心和自豪动作链有了经验和父亲的帮助,早餐做好了,散发出宜人的香味.Provided/armed/equippedwiththeexperienceoffailureandanextrahelpinghand,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffpleasantsmell.谓语非谓语非谓语Module2读后续写-遣