专题02读后续写（如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节）-2023年新高考英语满分作文读后续写高分突破万能金句

专题02如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节之高分技巧、高分手段和易错点故事构思读后续写能否拿否拿高分某种程度上取决于故事情节的构思。这就要求考生做到学会分析情节。分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手，即who,when,where,what,why,how。然后根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化来续写文章。简化为：第一步：分析段首句。根据其关键信息，提出问题，预设故事情节发展走向。第二步：关注段首句和续写部分的衔接。思考续写第一段和第二段的衔接。根据情节发展构思末句，通过收尾呼应，达到文章升华，体现故事主题。高分技巧高分手段读后续写的故事情节设计中，矛盾冲突和转折总体上应当体现清代袁枚《随园诗话》中“文似看山不喜平”的意思，即写文章好比观赏山峰那样，喜欢起伏，不喜欢平铺直叙。所以读后续写的冲突就体现了这种跌宕起伏，而最终的矛盾冲突会变为积极的正能量。易错点在续写过程中，应当体会原材料故事中的语言特点，从人物动作描写，场景描写，情感情绪描写，人物心理和神态外貌描写等方面进行润色，提升语言表达的准确性，完成语言风格高契合度的短文。典例剖析【2022年高考浙江卷6月】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Ineededtodosomethinginmycommunity(社区)inordertocompletethecommunityservicehoursrequiredtograduatefromhighschool.Someofmyfriendshadsigneduptospendtimeatasoupkitchen,soIdid,too.Itseemedlikeagoodthingtodo.Ithoughtthatwewouldjustbepassingoutdinnerstothoseinneed,butIfoundoutwewouldbedoingeverythingfrompreparingtoservingthedinner.Webeganpreparingthefood,frommixingsaladdressingtoseparatingfrozenmeat.Muchstillneededtobedonebeforedinnerwasserved,butalreadyoutsidethebuildingmanyhomelesspeopleweregathering.Itwasn’tuntilacoupleofhourslaterthatweopenedthedoorsandbeganservingdinner.Asthelineofpeoplecametowardme,Igotalittlescared.I’dcomefacetofacewiththehomeless:HowshouldIact?Howwouldtheytreatme?Wouldtheyhatemeforhavingmorethantheydid?Whilesomeofthepeoplelookedveryfriendly,someofthemlookedsodangerous.Ididn’thavetoomuchtimetoworryaboutit.Iwasassigned(分配)toservethesaladwiththeladynexttome.ShesmiledatmeandsaidifIneededhelp,she’dberightthere,whichIfoundquitecomforting.Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemworeclothesthatweretornanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemakingthebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealandawarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一步：故事情节构思：Who:homelesspeopleandmeWhere:atasoupkitchenWhen:whentheybeganpreparingthefoodforcompletingthecommunityserviceWhy:Thinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchenWhat:manyhomelesspeopleweregatheringbeforetheshopopened故事梗概：本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者为了完成高中毕业所需的社区服务时间，需要在所在的社区做点什么，作者去了施粥所，作者发现准备过程中要做的事情很多，作者看到无家可归的人靠近时心里有点害怕，但是却忙得没有时间去担心这些，作者看到了年龄和国籍各不相同的人，这让作者感到很难过。情节构思：无家可归的人笑——作者舀粥——无家可归的人感激——作者感悟——作者发出呼吁第二步：第一段和第二段首句的衔接由第一段首句内容“Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.”可知，第一段描写作者是怎么为无家可归者施粥。由第二段首句内容“IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.”可知，第二段描写作者对这次社区服务的感悟。高分手段1行为类倒：pour/decant意识到：realizethat/beawarethat③主张：urgesb.todo/advocatesb.todo情绪类感谢：gratefully/thankfully急切的：anxious/eager高分手段2[高分句型1]Thisexperiencemademerealizethattherearesomanypeopleinthisworldwhoneedourhelp.(由that引导的宾语从句和who引导的定语从句)[高分句型2]Iwillneverforgetthewaytheylookedatmewhentheyweregivenfood.(由关系代词that引导的定语从句，省略了that和when引导的时间状语从句)【满分范文】Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.IwantedtomakethemknowthatIwasreallyanxioustohelpthem.Tomyrelief,theysmiledpolitelybackatmewhentheysawmysmile,andIcouldseetheirexhaustionintheireyes.IwantedtoknowwhattheyweregoingthroughandIwasdesperatetoknowwhatIcoulddoforthem.TheynoddedgratefullyasIpushedmyspoonintothepotandtookalargespoonfulandpoureditintotheirbowls.IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.Thisexperiencemademerealizethattherearesomanypeopleinthisworldwhoneedourhel