2022届高考英语书面表达专题指导与练习讲评（图表式作文）练习讲评二

2012届高考英语书面表达（图表式作文）练习讲评二试题来源：2012届江苏省石庄高级中学高三学情调研测试随着工业的发展，空气污染愈来愈严重。在一些城市越来越多的人因为空气的污染而备受疾病的煎熬。现请你根据图表所示，就你所在城市空气污染的状况写一篇短文，并对市政府提出至少两条改进建议。

注意：1.词数150左右；2.参考词汇：车辆vehicle。讲评本篇书面表达题目中只有柱形图，在描述图表所反映的内容时，要注意柱形图的柱形的高度，并由此判断空气污染所产生的原因。整个表达需要包括下列内容：话题讨论的背景，图表中四个数据所反映的情况及其产生的原因，并向市政府提出改进的建议。第一步审题通过审题抓住主要数据反映的主要问题即所要表达的要点：通过审题抓住主要数据反映的主要问题即所要表达的要点：话题讨论的背景：1.随着工业的发展，空气污染愈来愈严重；2.在一些城市越来越多的人因为空气的污染而备受疾病的煎熬；3.以我们城市为例。图表1.空气污染50%的原因由车辆引起（路上行驶车辆越来越多，排放有害气体）；2.空气污染35%的原因由工厂引起（排放废水）；3.空气污染35%的原因由抽烟引起（对他人身体和环境有害）；4.空气污染10%的原因由其它因素引起。向市政府提出改进的建议。第二步谋篇Para1话题讨论的背景；Para2概述图表所反映的信息，即把现象产生的原因清楚地叙述出来。Para3向市政府提出改进的建议。第三步表达变点为句注意多重表达1.随着工业的发展，空气污染愈来愈严重；①Withthedevelopmentofindustry,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.②Asindustryisdeveloping,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.2.在一些城市越来越多的人因为空气的污染而备受疾病的煎熬。①Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplearesufferingfromdifferentkindsofillnessbecauseofairpollution.②Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplehavegotmiserablediseasesbecauseofairpollution.3.以我们城市为例。

Takeourcityforexample.图表1.空气污染50%的原因由车辆引起（路上行驶车辆越来越多，排放有害气体）。；①Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Therearemoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.②Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Moreandmorecarsandbusesaredrivingontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.2.空气污染35%的原因由工厂引起（排放废水）。①35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftenpourwastewaterintotheriver.②35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftendischargewastewaterintotheriver.3.空气污染35%的原因由抽烟引起（对他人身体和环境有害）。①Anotherfactorissmoking.Smokingdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.②Anotherfactorissmoking.Smokingdoesharmnotonlytoothers’healthbutalsotoenvironment.4.空气污染10%的原因由其它因素引起。①About10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.②Otherfactors,takingupabout10%,causeairpollution.向市政府提出改进的建议：围绕造成空气污染的其中两条原因进行联想。如：应该采取措施与空气污染作斗争。努力改善公共交通以满足公众的需求。禁止人们在公共场所抽烟；

Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Forexample,firstofall,thegovernmentshouldmakeagreatefforttoimprovethepublictransportsystemtomeetcitizen’sdemands.Inaddition,smokingmustbeforbiddeninpublic.Onlyinthiswaycanwesolvetheproblemassoonaspossible.连句成篇连句成篇的关键是将图表要点的叙述进行合并以及加上过渡句。

Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicleswithmoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftenpourwastewaterintotheriver.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.About10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.参考范文(1)Withthedevelopmentofindustry,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplearesufferingfromdifferentkindsofillnessbecauseofairpollution.Takeourcityforexample.Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicleswithmoreandmorecarsandbusesontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmtoothers’healthaswellastoenvironment.Besides,about10%ofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Forexample,firstofall,thegovernmentshouldmakeagreatefforttoimprovethepublictransportsystemtomeetcitizen’sdemands.Inaddition,smokingmustbeforbiddeninpublic.Onlyinthiswaycanwesolvetheproblemassoonaspossible.参考范文(2)Asindustryisdeveloping,airpollutionisgettingmoreandmoreserious.Insomecities,moreandmorepeoplehavegotmiserablediseasesbecauseofairpollution.Takeourcityforexample.Asisshowninthechart,airpollutioninourcityiscausedbythefollowingreasons.Abouthalfoftheproblemiscausedbyvehicles.Moreandmorecarsandbusesaredrivingontheroad,whichgiveoffpoisonousgases.35%ofairpollutioniscausedbyfactories,whichoftendischargewastewaterintotheriver.Anotherfactorissmokinganditdoesharmnotonlytoothers’healthbutalsotoenvironment.Therestofairpollutioniscausedbyotherreasons.Wesuggestthatthecitygovernmentshouldtakesomemeasurestofightagainstpollution.Newfuelcanbeusedtotaketheplaceofgas.Wecanplantmoretrees,grassandflowers.Allinall,ifeverybodyrealizestheimportanceofenvironmentanddoessomethingtostoppollution,theproblemwillbesolved.同步练习（重庆市重庆一中2010届高三上学期期中考试）（经过笔者改编）假如你是李华，在最近的研究性学习当中，受《21世纪中学生英语报》（The21stCentury）之邀，你对你所在的班60名同学（男女各半）进行了上网目的的调查。现将调查结果（如下表所示）用英语给报社的编辑写一封信，报道此事，以引起舆论的关注，并提出你的观点和建议。注意：1.报道应包括图表所示全部内容，可适适当增加细节；2.文章的开头与结尾已给出，不计入总词数；3.词数：150左右。

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