2023届高考英语应用文话题猜测2讲义

猜想五：野生动物爱护写一篇作文，介绍你知道的一个野生动物爱护实例，以及你对之的看法。〔角度不限，可以从个人，组织或国家层面入手；内容不限，可以是针对任何一个威逼的举措，也可以描写任何一类动物。词数限制200词。〕OnDec.23rd2019,theChinesepaddlefish,whichhadlivedonearthformillionsofyearsandwasoftenconsideredasymbolofChina,wasofficiallyannouncedextinct.Whatcausedtheirextinction?Themainreasonishumanactivities.Ontheonehand,thehighlyintensifiedfishingoperationsontheYangtzeRiverhavecausedirreparabledestructiontoitsecosystemandbiodiversity,destroyingvitalhabitatsoftheChinesepaddlefish.Ontheotherhand,withChina’seconomybooming,theYangtzeRiverhasbeenotonlyChina’sbusiestriverforshipping

butasourceofwaterforindustrialproductionandadestinationforpollutedwater,furtherexacerbatingthelivingenvironmentofmanyspecies.Eventually,theincreasing,unrestrainedhumanactivitieshasmadeitimpossiblefortheChinesepaddlefishtosurvive.

Theextinctionofthebelovedspeciesisawakeupcall,raisingpeople’sawarenesstotheimportanceofwildlifeconservation.DeterminedtohealtheecosystemoftheYangtzeRiver.theChinesegovernmentenacteditsfirst10yearfishingbanontheRiveranddevotedbillionsofdollarstohelpfishermendevelopnewlivelihoods.Inmyview,thefishingbanisabraveandessentialstepforChina’ssustainabledevelopmentandhassetagoodexampleforuscitizenstofollowforsavingtheenvironmentandprotectingwildlifearenotonlythegovernment’sdutybuteveryone’sresponsibility.原作及我的点评In2020,theYangtzeRiverfishingbanwasfinallyputintoactionafterthetotalextinctionoftheChinesepaddlefish.Whatcausethedeathofthem?Themainreasonisabouthumanactivities.Alargenumberoffishingoperationshavecauses(caused过去分词)irreparabledestructiontotheecosystemandbiodiversityoftheYangtzeRiver.Althoughpreviousbansonfishinghavebeenpublishedmanyyear(years复数)ago,it(使用they)onlylasts(last)onemonth,whichisnotadequateforthefishtobreed.Meanwhile,greaterintensityoffishingafterthefishingbanperiodhasalsobeenthehelperofirreversibledamage.TheextinctionoftheChinesepaddlefishisawarningfromnature,raisingpeople’sattentiontotheconservationofwildlife.Aimingatprotectingthesefish,thegovernmentpublishedthefishingbanwhichwilllastfor10years,dissuadingthefishermenfromcatchingfish.Andfortunately,itworkseffectivelyandplaysavitapartinimprovingthecircumstanceofYangtzeRiver.综合点评主体段对于白鲜灭亡的缘由分析写的很好一一规律清楚，语言流畅，并且留意了对重复单词和短语的替换。但是缘由的内容还是欠缺肯定的详细性，没有特殊点出白鲜灭亡的缘由，比方栖息地削减等等。本段的说服力还可以进一步提升。此外，相比第一段，作者对整个大事的看法描述长度较短，比拟仓促。“修改建议:把首段和第三段整合起来。开头先不要说长江禁渔令，先说白睛豚灭亡了，设置悬念，引出读者爱好。然后其次段分析白鲜灭亡缘由。再引出政府和人们对这个大事的思索，然后再引业禁渔金及其影响。最终把作者的看法摆出来，升华一下。这样文章结构的完整性会更好。猜想六：文化遗产写一篇作文，答复下面两个问题：whyshouldweprotectculturalheritagesandwhatareyouractions?Ashistoricalrecordandourlegacyfromthepast,tangibleandintangibleculturalheritagesnotonlyshowthewidevarietiesofhistoricaldevelopmentprocesses,butalsoprovideuswiththeinsighttodealwithcontemporaryproblems.Itis,therefore,ofgreatimportanceforustosetaboutpreservingthosetreasuresofmankind.

Personally,Ihavetriedtoprotectculturalheritagesbyspreadingawarenessonsocialmediaplatforms.Forinstance,aftervisitingaculturalheritagesite,Iusuallysharebeautifulphonestakenbymeonlineandintroducetheintriguingstoriesbehindeachpicture.Sofar,Ihavereceivedmanypositiveresponsesfrommyreaders,sayingthattheywouldvisitthosesitesinthefuture.Heritagepreservationisnotsolelythegovernment’sresponsivity.Instead,itrequiresthecollectiveeffortofeveryone.AndIhaveeveryintentiontocarryoncontributingtothisgreatcausewithallIcan.原作及我的点评Ashistoricalrecordandourlegacyfromthepast,culturalheritagenotonlyshowsthewidevarietiesofhistoricaldevelopmentprocess(processes复数),butalsoprovidesuswiththeintelligencetodealwithcurrentproblems.Byprotectingculturalheritages,wecanalsodevelopculturalconfidenceandpassthewisdomwhichesfromourancestorstothenextgeneration.Withoutculturalheritageprotection,anationwillforgetitshistory.ltwillbeprettydifficulttorebuildthebrilliant(词性错误，或缺少名词),soit'sofgreatimportancetosetaboutprotectingheritagesforbothnationsandinternation(拼写错误).Asforme,makingmorepeoplegettoknowabouttheimportanceofpreservingtheseinvaluablesites(这是你主句行为的结果，简化句应当放到句尾，假如是目的，此处应当采纳tomake),lusedtovisitmuseumstolearnits(their复数)historyandintroducethemtoothers.Bytheway,lalsosharethenewsthroughthelnternettocallfor(callon号召)morepeopletoparticipateinit(it指代不明)首段很充分地谈论了culturalheritage的重要性，相比之下，其次段对于个人爱护经受的描述缺乏，且缺少升华。由于缺少细节和例子，其次段作者行为的说服力微弱。此外，在首段和其次段之间仅仅有asforme连接是缺乏的，阅读上给了读者割裂感。修改建议:让两个问题的答复在篇幅上达成一个平衡，最终再用一段话加以总结，才算是一篇结构完整的写作。“猜想七：音乐请学员们回忆自己的听歌经受，选出一个你最爱的一首歌或者一张专辑，运用上面的音乐观赏流程，写一个自己的音乐评论。〔词数限制180词，学会取舍哦〕Legendsneverdie,ingoutin2017asthethemesongforLOL,issimplymyfavoritesongbothfortheexhilaratingmelodyandfortheunyieldingspirit.

Startingwithsoftpianoplayingatthebackground,thesongsoonincorporatesstrongbeatsandapassionaterhythm,bringinglistenersintotheworldofLOLwithanatmospherechargedwithtension.Asthemusicbuildsuptheclimax,myheartbeatexcitedlywiththepowerfulvoiceofthesinger.It’shardtoavoidshakingmybodyalongwiththerhythm.Inadditiontothebloodboilingmelodies,thelyricsalsoinspireastheycallonpeopleto“bleedforreachinggreatness〞andshowhighadmirationforheroeswho“runintosmokewhenthefireisfierce.〞Thereisnodoubtthatthissongcanbepraisedasoneofthemostpassionateandiconicbattlesongs.

Everytimethissongesintomymind,itmotivatesmetoovereanydifficultyandturnimpossibleintopossible.ThefaithbroughtforthinmyheartpropelsmetokeepongoinguntilIreachmyfinalgoal.

原作及我的点评Legendsneverdie,ingoutin2017asthethemesongforLOL,isconsideredasmybestlovedsongnotonlyforitsmelodybutalsoforitsspirit.ingwithapassionaterhythm,theacpanimentplayedbythepianobringsusintotheworldofLOLwithanatmospherechargedwithtension.Asthemusicmovesontotheclimax,itseemsthatmyheartbeatexcitedlywiththelyrics,andit’shardtoavoidmyselffromshakingmybodyalongwiththerhythm.Thelyricsarealsoinspiring,asitcallsonpeopletobleedforreachinggr