2023年英语全国1卷读后续写-老师鼓励我参加写作比赛讲义- 高三英语一轮复习

2023年6月新高考I卷读后续写题目展示WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,asspedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likerevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin.Iwouldn’tcare.注意：续写词数应为150个左右；请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwenttomyteacher’officeaftertheawardpresentation.优秀下水文Paragraph1：Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Withmyhearthammeringhard,Irippedtheordinaryenvelopesentbythecommitteeopen,notexpectinganythingpleasant.However,muchtomysurprise,thereslippedoutaglisteninggoldenmedal,withabig“top1”andmyinvitationsonit.Believeinme,youcan’timaginehowear-splittingmycrywas,thoughIdidn’tcareabouttherankbutmyworkbeingpaidoff.Laterinawardpresentation,Icouldn’thelpcurvingmylipsintoanear-to-eargrin,andanexpertinthejudgingpanelremarkedmynovelasParagraph2：Iwenttomyteacher’officeaftertheawardpresentation.TherewereseveralstudentsaroundhimwhenIhandedhimthemedalwithslightlytremblingarms,butIhadneverseenhimlaughingharderthanhedidatthatmoment.Fornearlyaminute,theringinglaughterwithexhilarationechoedintheoffice,andIfoundmyselfinhistightembracethen.“Youaremybeststudent,bro.”Hesaid,givingmeamightypatonmyshoulder.“Justwriteandgoahead.”Tearsmingledwithbothpleasureandthankfulnessstreamingdown.IfeltlikeRevere’shorseoncemore.Ihadgottired!Ihadhaddoubts.Ihadwantedtoquit.ButImustkeepgoingandworkhard,becausemyfuturewasthere,waitingforme.优秀下水文逐句分析Paragraph1：①这一句话和前面的news衔接，交代news的具体内容，这是大家都能完成的基本写在任务。但请注意我标红色的三个点：rip...open：撕开、committee:组委会、notexpectinganythingpleasant是这句的高光点，“不期待任何令人愉悦的事情发生”与文本最后一句的“WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghad

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IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.”在情绪上完全有延续关系的。②“However”一词转折，转变前面句子所夹裹的情绪（对比赛结果感到无所谓），通过转变事件的走向来转变人物的情绪：我打开信封看到的是刻着“top1”的金牌。大家在习作的时候可能会意识到要写这个主人公拿到了好的名次，但却忽略了怎么扎根于现实情况来刻画这个“好的名次”：那这篇作文的“goldmedal”就是一个很好的例子，让阅卷老师读到的时候会觉得这个学生是有在利用读者意识回归现实的。③这句话有一个很厉害的高光点，大家应该也没写到：这篇题目文本中有很大篇幅“我”的独白，就是“我”在黑夜里为了习作苦思冥想的独白。那这一句话里面的“Believeinme”就是延续了这种独白，同时这句话也把“我”的情绪带出来了：mycrywasear-spliting。④这句话的高光点也标注好了：Later和后面的评委点评，前者是用一个词把场景直接置换到颁奖典礼，后者是通过评委的点评侧面来写“我”作品的优秀，过渡自然，场景设置真实。⑤再次用转折词（But）来切换情绪和场景：那些颁奖典礼上的欢欣，我只想和我的老师分享，同时和第二段开头衔接。Paragraph2：①在讲这句话之前，需要大家看一下这一段段首句里的一个词：office。大家在习作的时候有没有考虑过：既然“我”要去办公室，“我”是不是需要刻画一下“office”的场景呢？那这篇作文的第一段第一句：老师身边有很多学生环绕着，这么简单的一个句子，也就是办公室场景的刻画，也做到了很好的衔接。除此之外，这段后面的“laughingharder”也是对于原文的协同。②...foundmyselfinhistightembrace

then.这句话的高光点也很好，一方面写"我”不知不觉中被老师拥抱，写得是“我”沉浸于老师