读后续写生命之水学案 高三英语二轮专题

读后续写原题目：TheWaterofLifeItwasoneofthehottestdaysofthedryseason,Wehadnotseenraininalmostamonth.Thecropsweredying.Cowshadstoppedgivingmilk.Thecreeksandstreamswerelonggonebackintotheearth.Itwasadryseasonthatwouldbankruptseveralfarmersbeforeitwasthrough.Everyday,myhusbandandhisbrotherswouldgoaboutthetiringprocessoftryingtogetwatertothefarm.Ifwedidn'tseesomerainsoon,wewouldloseeverything.ItwasonthisdaythatIlearnedthetruelessonofsharingandwitnessedtheonlymiracleIhaveseenwithmyowneves.IwasinthekitchenmakinglunchformyhusbandandhisbrotherswhenIsawmysix-year-oldson,Billywalkingtowardthewoods.Hewasn'twalkingwiththeusualcarefreeabandonofayouthbutwithaseriouspurpose.couldonlyseehisback.Hewasobviouslywalkingwithagreatefforttryingtobeasstillaspossible.Minutesafterhedisappearedintothewoods,hecamerunningoutagaintowardthehouse.Iwentbacktomakesandwiches,thinkingthatwhatevertaskhehadbeendoingwascompleted.Momentslater,however,hewasonceagainwalkinginthatslowpurposefulstridetowardthewoods.Thisactivitywentonforoveranhourwalkingcarefullytothewoods,andthenrunningbacktothehouse.Finally,mycuriositygotthebestofme.Icreptoutofthehouseandfollowedhimonhisjourney.Hewascuppingbothhandsinfrontofhimashewalked,verycarefulnottospillthewaterheheld.Maybetwoorthreetablespoonswereheldinhistinyhands.Isneakedcloserashewentintothewoods.Branchesandthornsslappedhislittlefacebuthedidnottrytoavoidthem.Hehadamuchgreaterpurpose.AsIleanedintospyonhim.sawanamazingsight.Amotherdeerwithahugepairofdeerhornsappearedinfrontofhim,withababyfawn(多)lyingonthedryground.Ialmostscreamedtogethimaway.Paragraph1However,Billywalkedrightuptothem.Paragraph2witnessedthemostbeautifulheartworkinghardtosavealife主要内容旱季最炎热的日子里，已经将近一个月没下过一滴雨了。庄稼枯萎，河流干涸，几个农场甚至面临破产的困境。这一天，我在厨房里忙活的时候看见六岁的儿子比利从家到森林来来回回奔走了一个多小时。去的时候走得小心翼翼，回来的时候大步奔跑。好奇之下，我偷偷跟在他的身后想看看他究竟在干什么。结果发现他双手窝成杯状捧了几勺水前往森林。森林里出现了一只母鹿，顶着一对巨大的角，还有一只幼鹿躺在地上。我几乎惊叫起来。然而，比利径直向它们走去。会发生什么事呢？文本特点：这是一个有标题的故事：生命之水。故事的前半部分为续写提供了相当多的线索：缺少雨水的现状、一只快要渴死的幼鹿、这一天里见证了一次真正的分享和一个奇迹的发生。所有这一些都暗示了续写的两个片段要围绕“分享”和“奇迹”来讲述“这一天”里发生的事。结合标题“生命之水”，这个奇迹必然与水有关。设计理念：本节课基于学生在写作中体现出来的一个突出问题：缺乏文本分析的意识。在比利救了小鹿后天降甘霖的情节设计富有很大的魔幻现实主义特点，导致学生不敢想、不敢写，不明白需要构建什么样的情节；写作的许多细节与主题关联不大，甚至与上文冲突、无法连贯。希望从语篇分析的角度，引导学生关注原文、解读原文，了解如何利用上下文构建合理的情节，实现逻辑连贯和提高语言的准确性。Background/ConflictDying:cowsstopgivingmilkwouldbankrupt(使破产)severalfarmerscreeksandstreamslonggonebackintotheearthCropsdryinglfwedidn'tseesomerainsoon,wewouldloseeverythingInfer:Therewasanurgentneedforrain!lt'sbettertosolvetheconflictwhendesigningtheplot主要人物：I（mother'sperspective）Billymotherdeerwithahugepairofdeerhorns(mightbeadangertotheboy）babyfawnlyingonthedrygroundmightbedyingofthirst)情节设计：Para1:Didthemotherdeerhurthim?Whatwasthemotherdeer'sreaction?HowdidBillyfeedthebabyfawn?Whatdidthebabyfawndo?(standup/stilldyingofthirst)Para2:HowdidIfeelaboutthescene?WhatdidIdo?AppreciatetheuseofspecificverbsindescriptionHewasn'twalkingwiththeusualcarefreeabandonofayouthbutwithaseriouspurpose.Minutesafterhedisappearedintothewoods,hecamerunningoutagaintowardthehouse.Icrept(蹑手蹑脚地走)outofthehouseandfollowedhimonhisjourney.Hewascupping(窝成杯状)bothhandsinfrontofhimashewalked,verycarefulnottospillthewaterheheld.sneaked(crept)closerashewentintothewoods.Ialmostscreamedtogethimaway.It'sbettertofollowthelanguagestyle.DescribewhatIwitnessedvividlyHowdidBillyfeedthefawn?>Cautiously,Billycroucheddownbytheweakfawn,holdingthewaterinhiscuppedhandsandslowlysendingittoitsmouth.Anxiouslyyetgently,hekneltdownbesidethebabyfawn,carefullystretchedhisarms,andsentthetwoorthreetablespoonstoitsmouth.>Hecrouchedgingerlyinfrontofthefawn,stretchingouthishandswiththewaterinthepalms.“Drinkit!”hemurmured.Whatdidthefawndo?>Thebabyfawnlifteditsheadslowlyanddrankthewaterinhistinyhands.>Thepoorcreature,apparentlyindesperateneedofwater,lickeditupquicklywithitsshell-pinktongue.>Thethirstyfawndrankthewatergreedily,andmuchtomysurprise,thefeeblecreaturestruggledtoitsfeetslowly.Whatdidthemotherdeerdo?>Themotherdeerloweredherheadandlickedmyboy'scheekgently,asexpressinggratitude..参考范文Para1:However,Billywalkedrightuptothem.Cautiouslyhekneltdownbytheweakbabyfawn,seeminglyfamiliarwiththetwocreatures.Thefawnsufferingfromdehydrationandheatexhaustionlifteditsheadupwithgreateffortsandeagerlylappedupthewatercuppedinmybeautifulboy'shands.Themotherdeerstoodbyasifinguard.NotuntilthefawnlickedthelastdripofwaterdidBillymovealittlebit.Icontainedmyselfnottomakeaslightestsound,forfearofscaringthem.Iwitnessedthemostbeautifulheartworkinghardtosavealife.Withthewatergone,Billyjumpedtohisfeetandmetmysmilingeyes.Beforehetriedtoexplain,Istrodetohimandheldhimtight.Asthetear