读后续写：断臂Chris的成长讲义-2023届高三英语二轮复习

读后续写：断臂Chris的成长Iwasa20-year-oldnursingstudentin1968,assignedasChris'spost-operativenurse.Chriswasaneight-year-oldboyfilledwithenergy,whoexcelledineverysportheplayed.Disobeyinghisparents'words,heexploredaneighbor'sconstructionsite,climbedaladder,andfell,whichgothimabrokenarmthatlaterhadtobecutoff.Thefirstfewdayspassedquickly.IprovidedChris'sphysicalcarewithforcedcheerfulness.Ashisneedformedicationdecreased,hislevelofawarenessincreased,asdidhismoodiness.WhenIsawhowalertheseemedashewatchedmebringinthingsforaspongebath,Iofferedhimthetowelandsuggestedhetakeover.Hewashedhisfaceandneck,thenquit.Ifinished.Thenextday,Iinsistedonhisdoingwholebathbyhimself.Hewasmorethanhalfwaythroughwhenhesatdownandsaid,"Ican'tmakeit!”“Youwon'tbeinthehospitalmuchlonger/91saidgently."Youneedtolearntotakecareofyourself.”“Well,Ican't,"hefrowned."HowcanIdoanythingwithjustonehand?"Puttingonmybrightestface,Isearchedforasilverlininginmymind.FinallyIsaid,"Sureyoucandoit,Chris.Atleastyouhaveyourrighthand.”Heturnedhisfaceawayandmuttered,"Tmleft-handed.AtleastIusedtobe.”Suddenly,Ifeltashamed.HowcouldIhavetakenright-handednessforgranted?ItseemedheandIbothhadalottolearn.Thenextmorning,IgreetedChriswithabigsmileandarubberband.Helookedatmesuspiciously.Iputmyrighthandbehindmybackandkeptittherebywindingtherubberbandaroundmyuniformbuttons."You'releft-handedandI'mright-handed/91said,"EverytimeIaskyoutodosomethingwithyourrighthand,Iwilldoitfirst,withmylefthand.AndIpromisenottopracticebeforeIseeyou.”注意：.续写词数应为150词左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:1startedfrombrushingteeth.Para.2:Tenminuteslater,Iultimatelysucceeded.01文章审题文章的审题要遵循记叙文的五大要素，通过阅读我们可以清楚如下内容：Who:I,a20-year-oldnursingstudent,isapost-operativenurseforChris.Chris,ancight-ycar-oldboy,withabrokenarmcutoff,neededtoliveindependentlywiththeonlyrighthand.When:inthe1960sWhere:inthehospitalWhat:IwantedtoteachChristotakecareofhimselfonhisown,buthewasunconfidentindoingso.How:Startingbybrushingteeth,thenmademoreprogressinlivingnormallywithonlyonearm.02文章的情节设计先确定Theme：文章的情节设计指的是在前面文章充分阅读的基础上，对后面的两段做出合理恰当的情节安排，特别是要注意这两段的首尾句。在这个过程中，我们要先定好文章的主旨，这是续写第二段的最后一句的设计。与通常写的温情系列相比，这篇文章是成长类的，但却又和典型的成长类的略有不同。例如，在“滑冰女孩”的成长故事中，突出了勇气和坚持，这样的话，大家迁移温情系列中的主旨升华句没有问题。但本篇并非是典型的成长类读后续写，它的主要矛盾是Chris原来不会使用右手，所以矛盾的解决一定是他的改变，他能自己照顾自己。所以，大家在结尾中生硬的搬套“Itisloveandkindnessthatmaketheworldgoaround.”是不恰当的。在这种情况下，我们需要使用其它方式结尾，比如环境描写，对话或者简简单单，Chris自身的成长和改变，都是非常恰当的。再设计Plot:.回看原文最后部分。基于主旨，我们进行续写两段的情节设计。这时候，大家需要再次回看原文的最后一段或者最后一部分的内容，这是续写的起点。“You，releft-handedandVmright-handedJIsaid,“EverytimeIaskyoutodosomethingwithyourrighthand,Iwilldoitfirst,withmylefthand.AndIpromisenottopracticebeforeTseeyou/5通过仔细阅读这一部分内容，我们可以看出，“我”要用左手先做，而Chris则要用右手跟着做。也就是说，"Iwilldofirst.Chriswillfollowlater.v“我”说的最后一句话，UIpromisenottopracticebeforeIseeyou.暗示出，我用不熟悉的左手也并不是一切顺利的。以上内容都为下面的两段规定了要写的内容。.仔细阅读两段的已给句。续写第一段，UIstartedfrombrushingteeth.v这句话暗示，接下来要“Itriedtobrushmyteethclumsily,butIfinallymadesomeprogress.v具体描写以下三个方面，审题时要用关键词列要点。第一步，列要点。WhatdidIdo?Problems/difficultiesMyprogress第二步，拓内容。“我”的动作(关键句1)：First,Ilaidthebrushonthetable,heldthebrushpastewithmylefthand,thenopeneditwithmyteeth.FeelingChris9seyesfixedonmy,Ismiled,"Look!It'snotthattough!”"我"的困难：squeezedthetoothpasteclumsily;movedmyhandawkwardly;evenbrushed/hitmynose/cheekHowever,whenItriedtomovemylefthand,itseemedasifitwerenotpartofmybody.Itwasn'tlongbeforemypalmgotsweatyandmyleftarmwasached.“我”的心情：Awaveofembarrassmentfloodedoverme.Soembarrassed/awkwardwasIthatIfeltmyfaceburning.Embarrassed,Ifeltbloodrushingtomyface.AninnervoicetoldmethatIhadtopersist,togiveChrisarayofhope.Chris的反应和心情：Lookingatmyawkwardaction,heturnedhisfaceandmutteredagain,“Yousee,itisimpossiblewithonlyonehandleft.”Chrisdraggedhisfeettome,withwateryeyes.AlthoughChrisbithisliptorestrainthelaughter,hiseyesbetrayedhim.Glancingatmyawkwardandfunnyactions,Chriscouldn'thelplaughing.“我”的进展(关键句2)：Hardasitwas,Iinsistedonpracticingwithmyrighthand.ClumsythoughIwasatfirst,Igraduallylearnedtocontrolthemovementofmylefthand.Afewminuteslater,Igotusedtousingmylefthand.续写第二段，“Tenminuteslater,Iultimatelysucceeded."首先，这句话暗示,十分钟的时间，而且是使用不熟悉的左手，我应该仅仅做了刷牙一件事，做不了刷牙、洗脸甚至洗澡这么多，这句话再次规定了第一段的内容。第二，根据原文的结尾部分，“我”做完之后，应该是Chris照做了，所以这段内容以写Chris为主，要写他开始学习使用右手，并产生了变化，即“Chrismanagedtobrushteethonhisown,andlaterhelearnedhowtotakecareofhimself.v所以这段的设计如下:第一步，列要点。WhatdidChrisdo?ChangesTheme其中，根据上文的主旨分析，此处主题的凸显最好不要用温情系列中的主旨句，改用环境描写，对话描写或者情节的完整结束。第二步，拓内容。关键句3+Chris的反应：“Chris,haveatry!”Iencouragedhim."Well,allright!”Herespondedandadded,UIwilldobetterthanyou!”ThenIaskedChristodothesame.Withouthesitation,hegrabbedthetoothbrushandbegan.Atfirst,hestruggledaswell.Butthankstohissportstalent,heeventuallydidbetterthanme.Wavingmybrushproudly,Iencouragedhimtohaveatry.Chris的变化：Afterthatday,Ikeptdoingthingsusingmylefthand,andChriscopiedmewithhisrighthand.Ourtrainingwenton.Chriseagerlyparticipatedandfinallyhewasabletotookaspongebathonhisown.Touchedbymywords,henoddedfirmly,eyessparklingwiththelightofhope.Frombrushingteethtohavingspongebath,Chrissucceededintakingcareofhimself.结尾（关键句4）：对话结尾：Holdinghislittlehand,Iadded,"Althoughtheproblemsaretough,Ibelieveyouwillbetougher/9Beforehewasdischargedfromhospital,herantomeandhuggedmetightly,murmuring,“Butforyourhelp,Iwouldn'thaveturnedanewleafinmylife."心理描写结尾：Itsuddenlyhitmethatallmyeffortswerewor