高中英语写作课课件

"我们一起(yīqǐ)研究高考"英语高考第II卷第二节书面表达〔25分〕第一页，共70页。1近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提纲只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制具体内容，属于(shǔyú)半开放式的提示；考查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可说，有利于考生的自由发挥。第二页，共70页。2高考英语评分原那么：1.此题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。少于80和多于(duōyú)120的，从总分中减去2分。4.评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点，应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。第三页，共70页。3高考英语评分原那么：5.拼写与标点符号(biāodiǎnfúhào)是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英，美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6.如书写较差以至影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次。7.语言首先要求准确通顺。8.鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。第四页，共70页。4英语各档次(dànɡcì)的给分范围和要求第五档(很好);(21-25分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误(cuòwù)，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.完全到达了预期的写作目的。第四档(好)：(16-20分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。4.语法结构或词汇方面应用根本准确，些许错误(cuòwù)主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.到达了预期的写作目的。第三档(适当)：(11-15分)1.根本完成了试题规定的任务。2.虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。4.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误(cuòwù)，但不影响理解。5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。6.整体而言，根本到达了预期的写作目的。第五页，共70页。5第二档(较差)：(6-10分)1.未恰当完成试题规定的任务。2.漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。3.语法结构单调、词汇(cíhuì)工程有限。4.有一些语法结构或词汇(cíhuì)方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。5.较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。6.信息未能清楚地传达给读者。第一档(差)：(1-5分)1.未完成试题规定的任务。2.明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。3.语法结构单调、词汇(cíhuì)工程有限。4.较多语法结构或词汇(cíhuì)方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。5.缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。6.信息未能传达给读者。第六页，共70页。6总结(zǒngjié)：什么样的作文是一篇好作文无遗漏信息点，即要点全面篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词句式复杂多样地道的高级词汇(cíhuì)和恰当的词组接下来，我们具体(jùtǐ)感知一下优秀作文的要素。第七页，共70页。7二、感知(gǎnzhī)典型范例——词汇(cíhuì)层面1adj.聪明(cōngmíng)的、脑筋好的clever→wise→smart→bright→intelligent第八页，共70页。8二、感知典型(diǎnxíng)范例——词汇(cíhuì)层面2asurprising→amazing→astonishing第九页，共70页。9他昨天下午来的。1.

Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.2.

Hedidn’tcomehereuntilyesterdayafternoon.3.

Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.4.

Itwasyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.二、感知典型(diǎnxíng)范例——句型(jùxínɡ)层面1第十页，共70页。10令她吃惊的是，小女孩知道(zhīdào)这么多事情。1.Heissurprisedthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.2.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.3.Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.二、感知典型(diǎnxíng)范例——句型(jùxínɡ)层面2第十一页，共70页。11二、感知(gǎnzhī)典型范例——段落(duànluò)层面1Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Thisvillageisverysmall，whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.However,ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peoplehereareleadingaricherandhappierlifethanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.第十二页，共70页。12二、感知典型(diǎnxíng)范例——篇章(piānzhāng)层面1第十三页，共70页。13第十四页，共70页。14第十五页，共70页。15第十六页，共70页。16DISCUSSION:

Whatisagoodwriting？Howtocatchtheexperts'eyes?第十七页，共70页。17beattractive,beautiful,completedinalimitedtime!Whatisagoodwriting？Agoodcompositioncontentstructure

language第十八页，共70页。18DISCUSSION:Whatisagoodwriting？Content:Everythingwhichisrelatedtoyourviewneedstoinclud.(内容要完整)〔内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家(rénjiā)给的是文字提示，可以用笔在试题处标出1,2,3,4，如果人家(rénjiā)给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。〕第十九页，共70页。19Structure: *Goodbeginningandending(好的开头结尾) *Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(结构合理,行文流畅)Language: *NoChinglish(防止中文式英文) *NoGrammaticalmistakes(没有语法错误) *Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(词语(cíyǔ)的准确运用和句式的富于变化)第二十页，共70页。201)TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded.2)TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing.3)Thoughshe'salmost40，butshestillplanstocompete.4)Iforgotmydictionaryathome.5)Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone.

Languageheavy.leftistakeAvoidChinglish!第二十一页，共70页。21改错(ɡǎicuò)1.Ican'tunderstandthemwhenImeetnewwords,soI

havetorefertotheminthedictionary.2.TheabilitytoreadEnglishpassagesisslowly.3.ThereisnodoubtthatEnglishStudyneedslotsof

timeandefforts.4.Onlybythisway,canwekeepupwithotherstudents.5.I'mLiHua,anewstudentofyou.meetwithlookuplowlearninginLiHuayours第二十二页，共70页。226.MyEnglishleveliscommonandIcan'tspeakverywell.7.Ibelievewecangetalonewellwitheachother.8.Besides,IthinkspeakingEnglishisasimportantaswritingEnglish.9.IstudyEnglishfor12yearssoIthinkIknow

English

verywell.10.TherearesomeadviceinteachingEnglish.∧averageitalongspokenwrittenhavestudiedis第二十三页，共70页。23Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富(fēngfù)的句式1.Theyeventhrewrubbishintothelake.Theytotallyignoredthenoticeablesign"Nolittering"nearby.(使用(shǐyòng)V-ing形式)

Theyeventhrewrubbishintothelake,_____________thenoticeablesign"Nolittering"nearby.totallyignoring第二十四页，共70页。24Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富(fēngfù)的句式NotlongagoIwonthefirstprizeintheEnglishcontest_______inourschool.(12山东(shāndōnɡ))held2.NotlongagoIwonthefirstprizeintheEnglishcontest.Itwasheldinourschool.(使用(shǐyòng)过去分词)第二十五页，共70页。253.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用(shǐyòng)名词性从句)4.Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(改被动语态)___________________________thelittlegirlknowsso

manythings.What

surpriseshimisthat___________________theconferencebeputoff.Itissuggestedthat第二十六页，共70页。265.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调(qiángdiào)句型)6.Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp.(用虚拟语气〕_______________hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper_____heknewwhathadhappened._______________________thephysics

exam_________________yourhelp.It

was

not

until

Icouldn’thavepassed

thatbutfor/without第二十七页，共70页。277.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.(使用状语(zhuàngyǔ)从句)8.Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(用定语从句)_______________________________hesays,

Iwon’tbelieve.The

girl______________________________isspokenhighlyof.

Nomatterwhat/Whateverwhosecompositionwaswellwritten第二十八页，共70页。289.Ifyoustudyhard,youwillmakerapidprogress.〔用并列句〕10.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用(shǐyòng)倒装句)______________hecomebackfromBeijing______hewassentabroad._______________________makerapidprogress.Study

hard,and

you’llNosoonerhad

Hardly/scarcely...when...than第二十九页，共70页。29四、明确(míngquè)写作步骤抄改连扩抓审书面表达第三十页，共70页。30四、明确写作(xiězuò)步骤

1.

Cross-question(审题)※

Mainidea※Style※

Verbtense※Person2.Seizethemajorpoints/keywords(抓要点)figureouttheoutline(提纲)4.Ensurethefluency

(添加过渡，确保连贯）Conjunctions/conjunctiveadverbspassage5.

Errorcorrecting(查错改错)3.Sentencesconnection(连句成文)Words/phrasesSentencespassage第三十一页，共70页。31assessPleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow.第三十二页，共70页。32书面表达评价表工程自评他评1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?2.句子开头注意大小写了吗?3.有没有注意标点符号?4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?5有单词拼写错误吗?几个?6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?7.注意主谓一致了吗?8.有没有语态(yǔtài)的错误?9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?11.简单句表达正确吗?12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?第三十三页，共70页。33五、培养几种(jǐzhǒnɡ)技能第三十四页，共70页。34Simplesentence(简单句):Hearingthenews,hewashappy.

B)CompoundsentenceA〔并列句〕:HegavemeabookbutIforgottobringitbackhome.C)CompoundsentenceB〔复合句〕:Whatheisdoinghasnothingtodowithme.“标准的英语句子〞就是我们(wǒmen)经常讲的三种句子：1.学会(xuéhuì)使用标准的英语句子第三十五页，共70页。35Hereare3waystomakesentences:I.巧妙(qiǎomiào)运用短语，写出标准的简单句：1)借助(jièzhù)名词短语做同位语如：李立，男，19岁，1991年生；籍贯(jíguàn)：广东。LiLi,aboyof19,wasborninGuangdongin1991.2)借助介词短语做定语

如：李飞,男，10岁，棕色短发，穿白色茄克。LiFeiisaten-year-oldboywithshortbrownhairandinawhitejacket.第三十六页，共70页。36如：有了Tom的帮助，我们(wǒmen)很快就找到了他们的村子。WiththehelpofTom,wesoonfoundtheirvillage.4)借助(jièzhù)非谓语动词短语做定语或状语如：他们站在大树下，等待(děngdài)着总统的到来。Theywerestandingunderthebigtree,waitingforthepresident.Standingunderthebigtree,theywerewaitingforthePresident.3)借助介词短语做状语第三十七页，共70页。37II.巧用连接词，写出标准(biāozhǔn)的并列句：如：他给我很多钱，我不要(bùyào)。IwasjustwalkingdownthestreetcornerwhenIsawyou.如：我刚走到拐角处，就见到你了。

Hegavemealotofmoneybut

Irefused.第三十八页，共70页。38III.用好从句(cónɡjù)和引导词写出标准的复合句：1)名词(míngcí)性从句如：老师生气。原因(yuányīn)：王力迟到。ThatWangLicamelatetoschoolmadetheteacherveryangry.2)定语从句如：中国,地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口众多。

China,whichliesintheeastofAsia,isagreatcountrywithalargeareaandpopulationaswellasrichnaturalresources.Iwasdeeplymovedbythis,becauseIknowLeiFengisstilllivinginourhearts.3)状语从句如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。第三十九页，共70页。392、灵活运用九种(jiǔzhǒnɡ)句式有意识的将以下句式结构运用到作文(zuòwén)中去，可以迅速地让我们的作文(zuòwén)靓起来。重要的是我们要学会如何灵活的变通、巧妙地运用到考试作文(zuòwén)中去。第四十页，共70页。401.PeoplegrowriceinthesouthofChina.

RiceisgrowninthesouthofChina.

2.Theyhaveprintedoneandahalfmillioncopiesofthedictionarysince1986.

Oneandahalfmillioncopiesofthedictionaryhavebeenprintedsince1986.一、主动(zhǔdòng)句与被动句的互换。→→第四十一页，共70页。41二、将陈述句改为(ɡǎiwéi)倒装句。IcouldhardlyunderstandtheimportanceofEnglishatthattime.

HardlycouldIunderstandtheimportanceofEnglishatthattime.

2.Wedidnotrealizeourmistakesuntilatthattime.

Notuntilatthattimedidwerealizeourmistakes.第四十二页，共70页。42三、将简单句改为(ɡǎiwéi)强调句Smokingdidgreatharmtohishealth.

Itwassmokingthatdidgreatharmtohishealth.

2.Ourmoneyisearnedthroughhardworkbyourparents.

Itisthroughhardworkthatourmoneyisearnedbyourparents.3.Hewentthereyesterday.Hedidgothereyesterday.第四十三页，共70页。43四、将两个(liǎnɡɡè)简单句合并为并列句1.Youcandoit.Icandoit.Oneofusmustdoit.

you

Imustdoit.2.Iwanttobuythisbike.Idon’thaveenoughmoney.

Iwanttobuythisbike,

Idon'thaveenoughmoney.Eitherorbut第四十四页，共70页。44五、将两个(liǎnɡɡè)简单句合并为复合句1.同位语和同位语从句(cónɡjù)LiuXiangisanexcellentathlete.HewonthefirstprizeinMen’s110HurdleRaceinthe2004OlympicGames.________,__________________,wonthefirstprizeinMen’s110HurdleRaceinthe2004OlympicGames.2)Thewordistrue.Thepresidentwillgiveourschoolaspeech.___istrue_____thepresidentwillgiveourschoolaspeech.LiuXianganexcellentathleteItthat第四十五页，共70页。452.定语(dìngyǔ)从句1)The2019OlympicGameswillbeheldinBeijing,anditssloganisOneWorld,OneDream,The2019OlympicGames,__________________________________________________2)Inmyopinion,theGreatWallandtheSummerPalacearewellworthvisiting.Inmyopinion,theGreatWallandtheSummerPalace__________________________________________3)Yesterday,wewenttotheEastGate,andweboughtalotofclothes.Yesterday,wewenttotheEastGate,___________________________OneDream,willbeheldinBeijing.arethetwoplaceswhicharewellworthvisiting.whereweboughtaWhosesloganisOneWorld,lotofclothes.第四十六页，共70页。463.主语(zhǔyǔ)从句1)Hiswonderfulperformanceonthestageimpressedme.mostwashiswonderfulperformanceonthestage.2)Itsatisfiedme.Thedininghallprovidesuswithalargevarietyofkindsofdishes.thedininghallprovidesuswithalargevarietyofkindsofdishes.3)Ilearnedfromthestorythataslongaswehavepatience,confidenceandperseverance,wecanrealizeourdreams.aslongaswehavepatience,confidenceandperseverance,wecanrealizeourdreams.WhatimpressedmeWhatsatisfiedmeisthatWhatIhavelearntfromthestoryisthat第四十七页，共70页。47推荐(tuījiàn)句型Whatsurprises\astonished\satisfied\impressedmeisthat…WhatIwouldliketosuggest\advise\putforwardisthat…Whatmattersmostisthat…WhatIlearn\concludefromthestoryisthat…第四十八页，共70页。484.表语从句推荐句型(jùxínɡ)：…isnolongerwhatitusedtobe.1)我的家乡不再像以前那样了。Myhometownisnolongerwhatitusedtobe.2)他不再是以前那样了。Heisnolongerwhatheusedtobe.第四十九页，共70页。495.状语从句(cónɡjù)结果、程度so…that…;such…that…让步nomatterhow\what\when\where….=whatever,however,whenever,wherever时间…wasdoing…when…,assoonas,themoment,thenexttime,everytime第五十页，共70页。501)不管前面有多少困难，我们都要学会独立的克服他们。______________________________________________,weshouldlearntoovercomethemindependently.

2)我正沿着马路走，突然(tūrán)我听到有人叫我。I____________alongtheroad______suddenlyIheardmynamecalled.Nomatterhowmanydifficultiestherewaswalkingwhenareaheadofus,第五十一页，共70页。51六、将两个简单句合并为一个由which引导的非限制性定语(dìngyǔ)从句1.Recentlymanystudentsspendtheirmoneyonunnecessarythings.Differentpeoplehavedifferentopinionsaboutit.

Recentlymanystudentsspendtheirmoneyonunnecessarythings,about

differentpeoplehavedifferentopinions.2.Manyboyslearntosmoke.Itdoesharmtotheirhealth.

Manyboyslearntosmoke,_______________________________whichwhichdoesharmtotheirhealth.第五十二页，共70页。52七、it作形式主语(zhǔyǔ)或形式宾语句型1.Youpretendtoknowwhatyoudon’tknow.It’snogood.

It’snogoodpretendingtoknowwhatyoudon’tknow.2.ItiseasytogetonwithPam.Ifind.IfinditeasytogetonwithPam.第五十三页，共70页。53八、分词结构(jiégòu)代替状语从句Ifyouworkharder,youwilldobetterintheexamnexttime.______________,youwilldobetterintheexamnexttime.2.Becausemyfriendwasfrightenedoflosinghisjob,hesaidnothingtothepolice._______________________,myfriendsaidnothingtothepolice.Workinghard

Frightenedoflosinghisjob

第五十四页，共70页。54九、将状语从句或并列句中的其中(qízhōng)一个分句变成with引导的短语或者复合结构。With+宾语+adj./adv./介词短语/todo\doing\done常用(chánɡyònɡ)句型withapopulationof….withatotalareaof…withalonghistoryof…years第五十五页，共70页。551)这个地区占地2000平方千米，人口10万。Thisareacoversanareaof2000squarekilometers,________________________2)我们学校周围种了很多花，吸引了大量的学生来参观。_________________________________,itattractsalargenumberofpeople.3)我们学校是一所有(suǒyǒu)100多年历史的名校。Ourschoolisafamousone________________________________

withapopulationof100,000.

Withmanyflowerssurroundingourschool

withahistoryofover100years.

第五十六页，共70页。564〕没有做完作业，这个小孩不敢去上学。___________________________,theboydarednotgotoschool.5)这两个男人早早就睡了，蜡烛烧了一晚上(wǎnshang)。Thetwomenwenttobedearly,____________________________________.6)他睡觉的时候嘴巴张得大大的。Hesleep______________________.withcandlesburninganightlong

Withhomeworknotfinished

withhismouthwideopen

第五十七页，共70页。57七、实战演练(yǎnliàn)稳固第五十八页，共70页。58实战(shízhàn)演练稳固1请根据以下的情景说明,使用5个标准的英语句子(jùzi)描述全部所给的信息内容。标题为“MyEnglishLearning〞注：所给情景有时是中文要点，有时是表格。我学英语已经六年了，在英语学习上有了一定的进步，但总是觉得英语难学，尤其(yóuqí)是英语中的一些习惯用法。自己今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语，争取早日掌握这门语言。第五十九页，共70页。59①我学英语已经六年了IhavebeenlearningEnglishforover6years.②在英语学习上有了一定的进步(jìnbù)IhavemadesomeprogressinmyEnglish.③但总是觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法。ButIalwaysfeelEnglishishardtolearn,especiallysomeEnglishidiomsaredifficult.④自己今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语Iwillworkhardatthisusefulforeignlanguage.⑤争取早日掌握这门语言。Iwilltryhardtograspthisforeignlanguage.第六十页，共70页。60

MyEnglishLearning①

IhavebeenlearningEnglishforover6years.

ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.

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IhavemadesomeprogressinmyEnglish.

Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish.

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NowI’mdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish.

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ButIalwaysfeelEnglishishardtolearn,especiallysomeEnglishidiomsaredifficult.

ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish,suchassomedifficultidioms.⑤Iwilltryhardtomasterthisforeignlanguage.

Difficultasitis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.第六十一页，共70页。61

MyEnglishLearning

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ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.②

Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish.③NowI’mdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish.④ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish,suchassomedifficultidioms.⑤Difficultasitis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.第六十二页，共70页。62实战操练：最近，你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根据下表提供(tígōng)的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况。60%的同学认为1、不应收门票2、公园是公众休闲的地方3、如收票，需建大门、围墙，会影响城市形象

40%的同学认为1、应收门票，但票价不宜高2、支付园林工人工资3、购新花木注意：1、信的开头(kāitóu)已为你写好2、参考词汇：门票：entrancefee实战(shízhàn)演练稳固2第六十三页，共70页。631．60％的同学认为公园不应该(yīnggāi)收费。Sixtypercentofthestudentsthinkthattheparkshouldnotchargeentrancefees．＝Sixtypercentofthestudentsholdtheviewthatentrancefeesshouldnotbecharged．被动句＝Sixtypercentofthestudent