读后续写：Many friends are found with a smile 讲义-高三英语写作专项

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。MeiMeifrownedasshehelpedhermotherandfathersetoutthecookingsuppliesintheshinysteelkitchen.HerfamilyhadjustmovedherefromSanFrancisco,havingboughtasmallrestaurant,whichwassettoopeninthenextfewdays.“Movingherewasastupididea.IhavelostallmyfriendsinSanFrancisco.WhatshouldIdonow?”MeiMeigrumbled,mostlytoherself.“What'sthat?”Hermotherasked,openingaboxandliftingoutseveralpotsandawok.“Nothing,”MeiMeimumbled.Thegirlhadbeencomplainingaboutthemove,butherparentshadmadethedecisionandwerenowtoobusygettingreadyforthegrandopeningtolistentohercomplaints.Thefirstfewdaysathernewschoolhadn'tbeeneasy,either.Shefoundithardtotalktopeopleshedidn'tknow,anditseemedlikethestudentshadn'tevennoticedher.MeiMeisighedandgotbacktowashingdishes.Onthedayofthegrandopening,MeiMei'sparentswereallsmiles,welcomingcustomersintotherestaurant,brightlydecoratedingoldandred.EvenMeiMeiwasinagoodmoodassherushedaround,seatingguests,handingoutmenus,andpouringtallglassesofwater.Thiswasabigdayforherfamily.AtoneofthetablessatafamilywithtwodaughterswhowereaboutMeiMei'sage.Asshefilledtheirglasses,MeiMeirealizedthetwinswereinherclass.MeiMeiduckedherheaddownsoherlonghaircoveredherface,andsheturnedawayfromthetable.MeiMei'smotherfoundhersoonafter,inthekitchenloadingthedishwasher.“Honey,whatareyoudoingbackhere?Weneedyououtfrontwiththecustomers.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:“Mom,Idon'twanttobeoutthere!”Paragraph2:MeiMeiputahandfulofcookiesintoasmallplateandleftthekitchen._____________________________________________________________________【解析】【分析】这是一篇读后续写作文。【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，梅梅一家刚从旧金山搬到不熟悉的地方，梅梅很不适应，她发现很难与不认识的人交谈，而且学生们似乎根本没有注意到她。而梅梅家里餐厅开业的那天梅梅也去帮忙，这对她的家人来说是个大日子。结果梅梅遇到了班上的同学和父母来吃饭，梅梅转身离开了桌子。【情节分析】续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：“妈妈，我不想出去!”所以后文应该是讲述妈妈开导梅梅主动去和同学打招呼；第二段开头是：梅梅把一把饼干放进一个小盘子里，离开了厨房。本段应该写梅梅将饼干端给双胞胎，以及他们的反应。我们不难理清故事情节：movedfromSanFrancisco---openedarestaurant----shewasunhappybecauseshedidn’tknowanyoneinhernewschoolandfoundithardtomakefriendsbecauseshewasshy-----shehelpedinhermother’srestaurant----shefoundtwogirlsinherclassintherestaurantandhidaway.......【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：pleadwith,awkwardsituation,greet等高级词汇；MeiMeiwhispered,asifpleadingwithhermothernottoletherselffacetheawkwardsituation.方式状语从句；MeiMeifoundthatshewasaccepted.宾语从句等高级句式。【伏笔】①通过所给文章的第一段的首句frowned

，第二段的第一行adumbidea/joyless，

第三段的Thefirstfewdaysathernewschoolhadn'tbeeneasy,either.Shefoundithardtotalktopeopleshedidn'tknow,anditseemedlikethestudentshadn'tevennoticedher.Sophia

sighedandgotbacktowashingdishes.可以看出主人公Sophia在随着父母搬到一个陌生的地方后，心情是及其孤独lonely郁闷的depressed，同时她认为父母的这种做法非常不明智stupid.

一般而言，一个人在孤独郁闷时，最需要的是陪伴，而她的父母却在忙着新餐馆的开业和做生意。这点在所给文章的第二段这个句子看得出来：herparentswerenowtoobusygettingreadyforthegrandopeningtolistentohercomplaints.家人的陪伴是指望不上了，其实这里也为后面的她的两个同学的出现埋下了伏笔。②在她父母餐馆开业的当天，根据所给文章的第4段

sherushedaround,seatingguests,handingoutmenus,andpouringtallglassesofwater.通过这段的描写，可以看得出来Sophia

是个懂事considerate的孩子，尽管她不赞成父母搬到一个陌生的城市，但是她并没有因为此而不去给父母帮忙，因为她知道这天对她们全家很重要Thiswasabigdayforherfamily.而且在餐馆里帮忙，让她心情特别好Sophia

wasinagoodmood。

因为她知道自己作为家里的一分子，能为父母分担一些重担。③根据所给文章的第5段Atoneofthetablessatafamilywithtwodaughterswhowereabout

Sophia

'sage.Asshefilledtheirglasses,Sophia

realizedthetwinswereinherclass.

Sophia

duckedherheaddownsoherlonghaircoveredherface,andsheturnedawayfromthetable.而这里也是全文发展的高潮climax.躲在厨房的Sophia被她妈妈发现了。当她的妈妈得知事情的真相后，她鼓励Sophia勇敢地主动地去跟她的同学打招呼。这点在所给文章的第9段这个句子看得出来：That’sgood!Gotakethemsomefortunecookiesandsayhello。④笔者认为她的妈妈这样做，其实是在给Sophia传递着这样的一个信息：靠自己的双手劳动赚钱，是光荣的，高贵的。工作没有贵贱之分。而且这个饼干的名字是

fortune，所以她的妈妈认为会给Sophia带来一份好运气。⑤根据所给文章的第10段：firstshetoreopenawrapperandcrackedacookieopenforherself.其实这个动作刻画了Sophia的心情很忐忑不安nervousandanxious，她不知道接下来会发生什么。就在这时她无意间看见了饼干外包装上的一个句子，也就是所给文章的最后一段：“Manyfriendsarefoundwithasinglesmile,”itread..笔者认为这也是作者想要传递的一个情感主线。【答案】Paragraph1:“Mom,Idon'twanttobeoutthere!”MeiMeiwhispered,asifpleadingwithhermothernottoletherselffacetheawkwardsituation.“Why?”hermotherasks.“TheyaremyclassmatesandIdon'twanttogreettheminthissituation.”“Youshouldn'tbeafraid.Maybethisisyourchancetomeetthem.Goaheadandgetthemthesecookies,too.”MeiMeihesitatedandacceptedhermother'ssuggestion.Paragraph2:MeiMeiputahandfulofcookiesintoasmallplateandleftthekitchen.Sheservedthemthecookies,andthetwinsrecognizedMeiMei.Theygreetedherwarmly.AndtheytalkedalotaboutMe