2022届高考英语读后续写之动作表达篇问题拓展评价单

2022届读后续写之动作表达篇问题拓展评价单表达微技能之准确的动作神态描写：肢体语言篇一词块的积累Head:drop/lower/bend/bow/hangone’shead低头scratchone’shead挠头lay/restone’sheadon....把头靠在...上buryone’sheadin...把头埋在...里feelone’sheadspinning觉得天旋地转withone'sheadheldhigh/holdone'sheaduphigh昂首挺胸Handsandarms:waveone'sarms挥舞手臂withcrossedarms双臂交叉着throwone'sarmsaroundsb._____拥抱某人______________placeahandonone’sshoulder____把手放在某人的肩膀上________holdone’shandtightly___紧握某人的手_________________patsb.ontheshoulder轻拍某人的肩膀wipeout/awaytears__擦去眼泪_________stretchone’sarms伸展胳膊Legsandfeet:slipinto溜进去step(back)onto踏上leaptoone’sfeet跳起来springfromthechair从椅子上跳起来stamp/stompone’sfeet跺脚6.chase/runafter_____追逐；crouchinaseat蜷缩在座位上rushinto/outof...____冲进...里面/冲出_______二句子的积累Head:Hisheaddropped,andtearsfellintohislap.Shehuggedthemtoherchest,andatlastshewasabletolookupwithtearfuleyesandasmile.Theynoddedtheirheadsinagreement.Hehung/dropped/lowered/benthisheadinshame.Sheshookherheadindisbelief.Handsandarms:Shestroked(轻抚)herfingersthroughmyhair,andsaid,“Thingsaregoingtobefine.”Hestoodtherewithcrossedarms,lookingangry.Hestormedoutandslammedthedoorshut.Sheloweredherheadintoherhand,shouldersshakingasshefoughtbackthegrief.Hereachedouthishand,withhisthumbandindexfingerforminga“heart”saying“Iwillalwaysbetherewithyou.”Legsandfeet:Jennywalkedslowlytothefront,withherlegstrembling(颤抖)andherheartbeatingnearlyoutofherchest.Hesprungfromhischairandrushedtopickupthetelephone.Wewerestumblingaround(跌跌撞撞)inthedarklookingforacandle.Sheslippedoutofbedandtiptoed（踮着脚走）tothewindow.Sheplantedherfeetfirmlyinfrontofhim.三小试牛刀EventhoughIblewthepresentation,Iwalkedoutofthemeetingroomwithmyheadheldhigh（昂首挺胸）andthencriedinmycar.(运用“with+n.+非谓语动词”的复合结构)Thewomanwasstaringtenderlyatthegirl,_wipingout/awaytearsfromhercheeks(为她擦掉脸颊上的泪水，运用非谓语动词作状语).Iknewmymompassedtheflowertome,whichwasmeanttoaccompanyme(是让它陪伴我，运用定语从句).我的手在颤抖，手心开始出汗，我能感受到我的心跳得很快。Myhandswereshaking,mypalmsbegantosweat,and_Icouldfeelmyheartbeatingfast.__当她儿子把花递给她时，简微笑着给了他一个大大的拥抱。Janesmiledandgavehersonahugehugwhenhehandedhertheflower.我身体微微前倾，摆动胳膊，逐渐加速，起跳，最终在空中舒展四肢。Withmybodyleaningslightlyforwardandmyarmswaving,Igraduallyspedup,jumpedupandstretchedmylimbsintheair.(用“with+n.+非谓语动词”的复合结构作状语)铃声一响，同学们就冲出了教室。_Nosoonerhadthebellrungthanthestudentsrushedoutoftheclassroom./Hardly/Scarcelyhadthebellrungwhenthestudentsrushedoutoftheclassroom._(使用倒装句).读后续写写作练习阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHolland,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray(喷雾).Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。The

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arrived.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Mac:词汇方面原文风格剖析：原文作者恰当使用形容词作定语，细致描写相关名词的特征原文作者恰当使用副词作定语，精准描写人物和狼的动作与情感原文作者灵活使用动词，细致准确地描绘出句子主语在特定的时间，特定的情况下的动作与形态，极具画面感Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHolland,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray(喷雾).Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。The

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arrived.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【思路分析】本文主要讲述了Mac在骑车前往阿拉斯加的途中被一头狼追赶的故事，需要注意几个关键信息和情节变化：Mac与朋友骑行——朋友车坏，让Mac先行——Mac独行，欣赏风景——被狼追赶，最初误以为是狗——心跳加速，朝狼喷洒喷雾——狼后退，一分钟后又赶上，咬破帐篷包——再次喷洒喷雾，狼更快地追赶——Mac向经过的汽车求助，同时不敢减速——Paul和Becky开车路过，发现险情——Mac听到汽车声，拦下汽车，而狼就离他十几码远。结合两段的开头，第一段：汽车突然停在Mac前面；第二段：几分钟之后，另外两个骑行者也到了。开始构思，第一段中汽车停下后会发生什么?汽车里的Paul和Becky会有什么反应?下车帮忙还是紧闭车门袖手旁观?如果帮忙，以何种方式?赤手空拳还是有防狼工具?此时，Mac，Paul和Becky他们各自的心态如何？恐慌？害怕?勇敢?还是激动?结合第二段可知，此时，他们处在僵持状态(deadlock)的可能性最大。第二段中提到另外两个骑行者到来，他们是谁?根据theother可以考虑是Mac的骑行朋友。他们来了之后怎么办?狼会攻击这么多人吗?有没有可能会有更多的狼来?还有没有其他经过的车?考虑情节发展，个人认为只有一头狼，最好的发展应该是它最终逃之夭夭，消失在远方。【写作指导】第1段的写作中，围绕两段的首句我们可以尝试回答这些问题：WhatwouldPaulandBeckydoaftertheypulledover?Wouldtheyhelpout?________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Whatwouldtheydotofightagainstthewolf?Wouldtheyusetoolsornot?_______________________________________________________________Howwouldtheyfeelthen?Scared?Excited?Panic?Calm?_______________________________________________________________第2段的写作中，围绕着首句我们可以尝试回答这些问题：Whowerethetwocyclists?WeretheyMac’sfriends?_______________________________________________________________Whathappenedaftertheyarrived?_______________________________________________________________Wouldthewolfattackthemorjustranaway?_______________________________________________________________考虑选择哪些关键词，如赤手空拳barehands；与……斗争fightwith/against；靠近approachto；僵持状态deadlock；危险状况dang