读后续写之三句衔接（2022年全国1卷）讲义-高三英语写作专项

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Wesatdowntoeachother,butDavid

wouldn'tlook

atme.（第一段）I

watchedasDavid

move

uptothestartlinewiththeotherrunners.（第二段）01—续写原文解读（5W1H）When：thedayofthebigcross-countryrunWhere:

small

town/

byafenceWho:

I(ateacher)andDavid(a

primarystudentwithbraindisease)Whatproblem：Davidwantstoquitthecross-countryrunforfearthatotherswouldlaughathimbecauseofhisabnormalgesture.Topic：encouragementandlovefromothersTIPS：通过分析原文主要人物间的冲突点或者矛盾（David害怕同学们的嘲笑想要放弃比赛），从而解读文章主题（同学之间的关爱团结的主题）02—三大衔接句Para1:We

satdownnexttoeachother,but

David

wouldn'tlookat

me.关键词：Davidwould’tlookatme思考：David不看我的原因，进行衔接思路：David躲避我的目光，表明他心理纠结要不要参赛，心情很沉重。所以，衔接para1段首句可以从动作描写来外现David心理活动，同时和首句的动词进行并列。衔接句1（Para1第二句）：Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,andhissmiledisappearedontheface,withhislimbsshakingasweakasleaves.Para2:IwatchedasDavid

moveduptothestartingline

withtheotherrunners.关键词：Davidmoveduptothestartingline思考：David为什么会参加比赛思路：合理推理，Para1侧重刻画作为老师的“我”成功说服David，通过言语或者其他方式使David重获自信。Para2侧重描写比赛场景，David勇敢完成比赛，得到大家的鼓励和欢呼，突出团结关爱的主题。反推Para1结局：David决定参加比赛衔接句2（Para1最后一句）：承上启下Turningaround,

hegaveme

asmileand

walkedto

thestartingline

whereother

kids

werereadyto

start.衔接句3（Para2第二句）：对David和其他选手的起跑/准备过程进行动作描写He

tookadeepbreathand

calmed

himself

down.

(对David准备过程的描写）David

tookfirst

step,

slowlybutfirmly.

(对David起跑动作的描写）Asthegun

rangout,

David

andotherrunnersbegantorun.

(对David和其他选手起跑的描写）Start!

Allthe

kids

disappered

swiftly

likelighteningintoforest,

leaving

David

staggeringandstruggling

hisstepforward.

(对David和其他选手起跑的对比描写）03—范文

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,andhissmilealsodisappearedontheface,withhislimbsshakingasweakasleaves.

“It”snottherealyou,David”,Ibrokethesilence,walkedtohisfront,

holdinghisshouldersandcontinued,“Listen,David,youhavepreparedsomuchforthisrunning,ifyouwanttoquit,Iwillbeforyou.”

Davidburstintotears.

Suddenly，agroupofkidsemergedaroundus.ThecameuptoDavid,andembracedhimandshouted“Cheerup.David,youcandoit!”Davidstoppedcryingandhisfacelitupbytheirencouragement.Turingaround,

hegavemeasmileandwalkedtothestartinglinewhereotherkidswerereadytostart.(124)

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

Start！Allthekidsdisappearedswiftlylikelighteningintotheforest,leavingDavidstaggeringandstrugglinghisstepsforward.

Buthisbodywasuncontrollable,soonhisheelswerebleeding,becausehisshoeswerewornout.Afteralongtime,Davidwasstill100metersawayfromthefinishingline.Thepathwaslinedwiththecoachandotherkidsintears,whowereinformedofthepoorbodyconditionofDavid.Noonelaughedathim,butcheeredupandclappedforhim.Davidwastouchedandhewassteppingforwardwhenhewastrippedbyabigrock.“Heisbleeding!”criedtheotherkids.“David!David