【公开课课件】读后续写：烘焙店

2021.04广二模读后续写4R解读、3大原则、2句提示和1个好结尾（4321法）“4321”method4Rs3principles2

givensentences1goodendingReadfortheplot/emotionalchange/conflict/theme1.action-response2.conflict-solution3.negative-positiveAramandRossi'sBakeryWalkingalongthenarrowbricksidewalk,Aramtookadeepbreath.Theairsmelledoflemonsandbakedbreadandcoffee,comingfromRossi'sItalianBakery.Hewasalmostthere.Aramstillcouldn'tbelievehisluck.Allhisfriendswereworkingboringsummerjobs-waitingtablesandbabysitting.Andherehewas,abouttostartasanactualbaker'sassistant,doingwhatheloved.ItwasallthankstohisAuntRita.SheknewMrsRossiandhadarrangedeverything.Itwastheperfectexperienceforhisfuturecareer.Rossi'sBakery,hewassure,wouldonedaybeknownastheplacewherehegothisstart.Ah,herehewas-thebakery.Afadedwoodensignoverthedoorread"Rossi'sBakery."Aramstraightenedhisshouldersandentered.MrsRossiwassittingatthecounter,lookingoldandwise.Aramgreetedherandstuckouthishand.MrsRossilookedatitforasecondbeforeturningaroundandwavinghiminside."I'mreadytolearneverything,"Aramsaid."Great.Let'sstartwiththecashregister,"MrsRossisaid,"becausethat'swhatyou'llbedoing."Sheshowedhimhowtousethecashregister.Itwasn'thard.Thepastrytrayswereallmarkedbyprice,andthereweren'tthatmanychoicesanyway."That'sit?"Aramsaid,hisheartsinking."Butwhendowebake?""Bake?Iorderwholesalenow.Nomorebaking.I'mtooold."ThenMrsRossisilentlyheldupherhands.Aramtookinherknotted,swollenfingers,andheunderstood.Awaveofdisappointmentstruckhim.Sadnessoverwhelmedhimsosuddenlythathecouldn'tthinkofawordtosay.Hesighed,andMrsRossisighed,too."Iusedtobakeitall.Breadandcakes.Andnoonediditbetterthanme.Butthatwaswhenthesethingsworked,"saidMrsRossiholdingupherhandsoncemoreandglancingacrosstheshelvesfilledwithemptybottleslabelledwithnamesofthevariousingredients(配料)sheonceused.Suddenlyshecamealive,wavingherarthritic(关节炎的)hands."Peopleusedtolineuparoundthecorner.Everyonewantedmybakedbread."ElementsofastoryWho

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duringsummerholidayRossi'sItalianBakery?Step1Analyzethestorywith4RsReadfortheplot/emotionalchange/conflict/themeReadforplotandemotionalchangeExposition(情节交代)Risingaction(conflict激化)Climax(conflict最大化/turningpoint转折点)Fallingaction(conflict缓延)Resolution(conflict解开)Denouement(结尾)Para1：ThenathoughtoccuredtoAramthathecouldaskMrsRossitoteachhim.Para2：MrsRossifinallysaid,"Let’sbuytheingredientsfirst."Aramwantedtostartasanactualbaker'sassistant.Mrs.RossitoldAramtoworkasthecashregister.AramunderstoodthereasonwhyMrs.Rossiquitbaking.hopefuldisappointedsadconflictAramMrsRossiabouttostartasanactualbaker'sassistant“Let'sstartwiththecashregister.”readytolearneverything“Nomorebaking.I'mtooold.”“Iusedtobakeitall.”Readforconflictandtheme1.Whatistheconflict?AramwantedtolearneverythingaboutbakeryfromMrsRossi,butMrsRossididn’tbakeanymore.2.Whatisthetheme?Andherehewas,abouttostartasanactualbaker'sassistant,doingwhatheloved.Itwastheperfectexperienceforhisfuturecareer.Rossi'sBakery,hewassure,wouldonedaybeknownastheplacewherehegothisstart."I'mreadytolearneverything,"Aramsaid."Bake?Iorderwholesalenow.Nomorebaking.I'mtooold.""Iusedtobakeitall.Breadandcakes.Andnoonediditbetterthanme.Butthatwaswhenthesethingsworked,"saidMrsRossi.Suddenlyshecamealive,wavingherarthritic(关节炎的)hands."Peopleusedtolineuparoundthecorner.Everyonewantedmybakedbread."Para1：ThenathoughtoccuredtoAramthathecouldaskMrsRossitoteachhim.Para2：MrsRossifinallysaid,"Let’sbuytheingredientsfirst."1.Oneshouldsticktohis/herdreamnomatterwhathappens.2.Oneshouldkeeplearningwhathe/shelikestoenrichhis/herlife.3.TheirloveforbakeryandtheirdreamtorejuvenatetheRossi’sBakerycoincided.4....Step2

Frameyouressaywith2givensentencesand3principlesPara1：ThenathoughtoccuredtoAramthathecouldaskMrsRossitoteachhim.Para2：MrsRossifinallysaid,"Let’sbuytheingredientsfirst."Focus:AramaskedMrsRossitoteachhim.1.WhatdidAramdoandsaythen?2.WhatwasMrsRossi’sresponse?3.Howtoendthisparagraph?3principles:1.action-response2.conflict-solution3.negative-positiveFocus:AramaskedMrsRossitoteachhim.1.WhatwasAram’sresponse?2.Whatwouldtheydothen?3.Whatwastheendingofthestory?action-responsenegative-positiveconflict-solutionMrsRossiwassurprisedtohearthat.表达程度（使用副词）MrsRossifeltoverwhelmingly

surprised.添加情感（使用形容词）HearingwhatAramsaid,MrsRossistoodstill,surprised.添加身体反应、肢体语言（使用独立主格结构/with结构/so...that/分词/修辞）MrsRossiopenedhermouth,unabletoutteraword/completelyspeechless(说不出话来).Withhermouthhangingopen(她张大嘴),shefroze,wonderinghowtoreplytoAram’swords.Sosurprisedwasshethatshestoodtherestill(她是如此惊讶以至静静地站在那),feelingspeechless.Raisinghereyebrowsinsurprise,(惊讶地抬起眉毛)MrsRossifroze,asifrootedontheground.

WriteabouttheemotionoftheroleIgotthemilkandfoureggsandthesugar.Thehardestpartwouldbebreakingtheeggsontheedgeofthebowl.I

sifted(筛)theflourandbakingpowdertogetherfirst.Andsalt.Iparticularlyrememberedthatbecauseitseemedstrangetoputsaltinacake.Iputallingredientstogetherandmixedthem.Itlookedcreamyanddelicious.Ipoureditintothebakingpanandputitintotheoven.Afterwefinishedtidyingup,Iopenedtheovendoorandpeeked.Thecakehadrisenandturnedtan.WithhotpadsIcarefullytookitoutandputitonthetable.--浙江省“七彩阳光”新高考研究联盟期中联考

Suddenly,anideawasstartingtoforminmyhead.“Whynotmakeagiftbyhand?”Isuggestedinahopefulvoice.“Acake!Momhasboughtsomeflourtomakeacake!"Aidensprangupfromhischair,hiseyessparklingexcitedly.AtdeepmidnightwhenMomwassoundasleep,weslippedoutofthebedandtiptoedintothekitchen.Withalltheingredientsneededprepared,wegotdowntomakingacake.Thewholehousewasquietexceptfortheslightsoundmadebyus.AidenwasbusyaddingtheingredientstotheflourwhileIwaskeepingstirringthem.Tooursatisfaction,whenthecakewastakenoutoftheoven,thekitchenwasfloodedwiththesweetfregrancefromit.WriteaboutthesceneofmakingcakesStep3

Finishyouressaywithgoodending对话式结尾：Aramsaid,“Thanks,MrsRossi,forteachingmehowtomakeacake.”感悟式结尾：ItdawnedonAramthat“Oneshouldsticktohis/herdreamnomatterwhathappens.”环境衬托式结尾：Outsidethebakery,thebirdsperchingonthetopofthebrancheschirrupedhappily,asifcelebratingtheirachievement.

回首过去式结尾：Manyyearshavepassed,lookingatthesign“AramandRossi'sBakery”hangingoutsidetheirshop,hewasfullofappreciationaboutthisplacewherehegothisstartasarealbaker.自然结尾：Rowsofpeoplelinedeverycornerofthebakeryagain,

andthefadedwoodsignshinedagainwithanewname“AramandRossi'sBakery”.

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Para1：ThenathoughtoccuredtoAramthathecouldaskMrsRossitoteachhim.Hesitatingforawhile,hepluckedupallhiscouragetospeaktoMrsRossi,“MrsRossi,I’mnotheretobeacasier,Iamheretolearntobeabaker.Couldyoupleaseteachme?”Raisinghereyebrowsinsurprise,MrsRossifroze,asifrootedontheground.Scratchingherknotted,swollenfingers,shesighed,“Iamtoooldtodothisnow.Lookatmyhands!”“ButIcanbeyourhands!”Aramrepliedwithtrembl