【县公开课课件】《How to Beautify English writing》写作公开课

HowtoBeautify

EnglishWriting?Ourappearanceneedsbeautifying,whataboutourwritings?firstimpressionouterbeautybeautifulhandwriting

FindoutthebeautyinthewritingStep1：Leading-in【2018·全国Ⅰ卷】DearTerry,Howareyoudoing?Inyourlastletter,youaskedmeaboutbeingaguesttoaChinesefriend’shome.Now,Iamwritingtoinformyouofsomerelevantdetails.Tobeginwith,accordingtoourtradition,youaresupposedtoarriveearly,sothatyoucanhelpthefamilypreparethedinner,whichismeaningfulandinteresting.Besides,you’dbetterbringsomegifts,likeabookoraChineseknot.What’smore,whenyouareenjoyingthemeal,youneedtoavoidmakingnoiseswhilechewingfood.Hopefully,thesesuggestionswouldbehelpfulforyou.Ihavetheconfidencethatyouwillhaveagreattime.Bestwishes!Yours,

LiHuaDoesthewriteruseanylinkingwords（连接词）?Arethereanygoodsentencepatterns（句式）?Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary（高级词汇）?Arethereanymistakes?

LanguageIseverythingtothepoint(切题)?Areallthedetailsstated?ContentDoeseachparthaveatopicsentence?Istheessaydividedintoparts?StructureASSESSMENTInnerBeautyStep2：InnerBeautifying----languageAdvancedwordsGoodsentencepatternsLinkingwords首先:firstly

其次:secondly

最后:

finally;首先:tobegin/startwith;firstofall

其次:

then,next,besidesfurthermore,what’smore,inaddition,

最后:lastbutnotleast1.Linkingwords逻辑角度linkingwords对称顺序转折顺序因果顺序条件顺序让步顺序递进顺序foronething,fortheotherthing,ononehand,ontheotherhandbut,however,while,though,otherwise，inreality,insteadbecause,since,as,thanksto,asaresult(of)if,unlessaslongas,onconditionthat,though,as,evenif/though,whether,wh-(what,when,where,how)everand,what’smore,besides,

inaddition,what’sworseadj.；adv.;phrases2.Advancedwordshappyasksoaboutprogressbeinterestedinvery

bigadvancement/achievementbepassionateaboutdelightedinquiretherefore/consequentlyberelevant/linkedtotremendous，huge，giant，enormousYoushouldlearnmoreaboutlocalcustomsandmannersinadvance.Itwillhelpyouadapttothenewsurroundings.

定语从句3.GoodsentencepatternsYouaresupposedtolearnmoreaboutlocalcustomsandmannersinadvance,whichwillhelpyouadapttothenewsurroundings.定语从句，名词性从句，状语从句ItcannotonlybroadenmyviewbutalsohelpmelearnmoreabouttheChineseculture.

倒装句3.GoodsentencepatternsNotonly

canitbroadenmyviewbutalsohelpmelearnmoreabouttheChineseculture.I’mwritingtoinviteyoutotakepartintheChineseTraditionalCultureShow.ItwillbeheldattheArtCentreinourschool.I’mwritingtoinviteyoutoparticipateintheChineseTraditionalCultureShowtobeheldattheArtCentreinourschool.

非谓语3.Goodsentencepatterns

Step3：InnerBeautifying----Structure&Content

Findandtranslatethekeypointsinthewriting.2019年福建省质检书面表达假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack来信询问“嫦娥四号”探测器（Chang’e-4probe）名称的由来。请你给他回信，内容包括：1．“嫦娥四号”登月成功；2．嫦娥的传说；3．中国人的登月梦。注意：1．词数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。内容要点（3点）及次要点（2点）1.合适的开头：询问“嫦娥四号”探测器（Chang’e-4probe）名称的由来。2．“嫦娥四号”登月成功；3．嫦娥的传说；4．中国人的登月梦。5．恰当的结尾拓展传说，写跟登月有关的内容。拓展登月梦，从古到今不断的探索和进步次要点1次要点2Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.askmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probeChang’e-4probegettothemoonsuccessfullyastoryaboutChang'e.合并句子，适当拓展使行文连贯（基础篇）DearJack,

_______________________________

askedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.____________________________________________Chang’e-4probe

gottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear._____________________ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon._____________________________________________________.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.

I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.Youtellyousomethingaboutit.Wewereveryhappy.Chinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Shewasthefirst

Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.IamwritingtoStep4：WriteandbeautifyEnglishwriting

Beautifyyourwritingbyusingadvancedwords,goodsentencepatternsandlinkingwords.AdvancedwordsDearJack,I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.YouaskedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutit.Chang’e-4probegottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear.Wewereveryhappy.ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e.ShewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.Yours,LiHuadelightedlandedonrelevanttoitnamedafterChang’ehavelongdreamofexploringWeChinesetremendousinquiredGoodsentencepatterns（Discussion)DearJack,I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.YouaskedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutit.Chang’e-4probegottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear,weareveryhappy.ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e.ShewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.

delightedlandedonrelevanttoitnamedafterChang’ehaveunyieldingdreamofexploringtheWeChinesetremendouswhichmarksamilestoneinChinesedevelopmentinscience.Theregoesatalesayingthatchang'e,wasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon,that'swhytheprobeinquired

Yours,LiHuaDearJack,

I’mdelightedthat

youwrotealetterinquringmeabout

theoriginof

thenameofChang’e-4probe.I’mwritingtotellyousomethingrelevanttoit.Chang’e-4probe

landedonthemoonsuccessfullythisyear,whichmarksamilestoneinChinesesciencedevelopment.

TheregoesatalesayingthatChang'ewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon,shewasregardedasthesoul,hopeanddesireinexploring,

that’swhytheprobeisnamedafterChang’e.WeChinesehaveunyieldingdreamofexploringthemoon.wehavemadetremendousprogressinthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.ConsequentlyLinkingwordstherefore,ItisuniversallyacknowledgedthatAnduptonow,

Yours,LiHuaDearJack,

I’mdelightedthat

youwrotealetterinquringmeabouttheoriginofthenameofChang’e-4probe.Consequently,

I’mwritingtotellyousomethingrelevanttoit.Chang’e-4probe

landedonthemoo