读后续写（第一次独自骑自行车）讲义-2023届高三英语写作专项

读后续写（第一次独自骑自行车）讲义-2023届高三英语写作专项读后续写第一次独自骑自行Afteraverymeaningfulconversationwithmydadabouttheolddays,wecameupwithanobjectthatwebothrememberedclearly.Itwasmyveryfirstbicycle.MymindtoldmeIgotitwhenIwasseven,whowascheatedtorideitforfiftyyardsalonethefirsttimeItried!Mydadputtogetherallthesmallpiecesofthebicyclefromabeautifulmaterialthathecalled"Yourowncar.,zOfcourseIknewhehadsomemagicalability,butIdidn'tthinkhecouldmakesuchanawesomeobject.Headdedtheseatandthepedals（踏板）sothatIwouldnothaveanyproblems.MydadrecalledthebicyclewasthesmallesthecouldfindwhileIrememberhowhugeitwas.IwassoafraidofitandtherewasnowaythatIwasgoingtocontrolthatmonster-sizedmaterial.ThebicyclewasleftinmybackyardasadecorationforamonthbecauseIrefusedtorideit.Honestly,Iwasscaredtotryit.Afteramonth,mydadgavemealecturetoteachmewhatbeingamanwasallabout.Iwasfinallydeterminedtotryit.MydadwasproudofmeandIfeltverymanly.HeandIwenttotheparktoseewhatwecoulddothere.Theparkwasemptywhenwearrived.Ihadnodoubtthatmydadtoldeverybodynottobetherebecausewehadtouseit.Ifeltsorryforotherpeople,butIwasproudtohavesuchanomnipotent（全能的）personasmydad.Wefoundasmoothandopenspace.MydadwasholdingthebackpartoftheseattomakesureIdidn'tfell.HepromisedmethatIwasnotgoingtofallbecausehewouldberunningrightbehind,holdingthebicycle.Istartedtopedalandthebicyclemoved.Iturnedaroundandfoundmyfatherwasnotbehind.类型：属于“亲子类”文章文体：一篇回忆录，回忆的是作者7岁时发生的故事，即第一段第一句和最后~^--theolddays,cameupwithanobject,rememberedclearly,mymindtoldme,whenIwasseven,thefirsttimeItried.主题：勇敢，独立，成长教学步骤：background:故事发生在“我”7岁的时候，讲述了父亲通过讲了一个“whatbeingamanwasallabout”的道理以及通过善意的欺骗，让我学会独立骑自行车，并使我成长的故事。character:I,dad;conflict:主要矛盾：WhydidIturnaround?根据第二段开头--Iturnedaroundandfoundmyfatherwasnotbehind；“我”为什么会回头看呢？结合第一段骑自行车的过程可知，“我”在父亲的指导下学会了骑自行车，想要和他分享“我”的喜悦，或者是告诉父亲让他歇一会，应该要设计一个分享喜悦但没有得到回应的过渡句来衔接第二段中的“我”转过头。Wherewasmyfather?根据材料中回忆父亲通过善意的欺骗让我学会骑车和第二段中的foundmyfatherwasnotbehind可知，父亲离我50yards远，那么怎么去体现"cheat”这个细节呢？不难想到，父亲在“我”骑了一半的时候早已放手，就在身后看着“我”；plot:1)根据第一段--Istartedtopedalandthebicyclemoved,推断出下文一定是讲骑车的具体过程，所以可以概括为三个阶段：.首先，紧张害怕，不知道如何掌握平衡；.其次，父亲鼓励和指导，“我”逐渐掌握要领；.最后，经过练习和适应，最终熟练；那么设计以上情节则需要结合：.动作描写-描述骑车的具体动作，手，脚等；.情绪描写-紧张害怕一逐渐放松一变得激动；.语言描写-父亲对“我”的鼓励；“我”向父亲分享喜悦；过渡句设计：没有人和我搭话—However,therewasnoresponse；简洁明了，不拖泥带水；2）根据第二段---Iturnedaroundandfoundmyfatherwasnotbehind,推断出下文首先是描写“我”的反应-惊慌失措，吓得一身冷汗；然后父亲在远处叫“我”，告诉“我”已经一个人骑车了50yards了；这时候可以情绪对比，惊慌失措变成有一丝自豪；也可以设计成“虽然有些生气，但更多的是成就感”，这里主要是为了照应上文的cheat,原本答应在后面扶着“我”，但是却中途放手，作为7岁的孩子，有点生气比较真实；最终必然是再次上车，真正开始独立骑车。theme：原文中第三段第一句"mydadgavemealecturetoteachmewhatbeingamanwasallabout”，暗示了主旨，前后呼应，即“独立，勇敢，成长二学生的几种错误类型：.搞不清50yards有多远，1yard=0.914米，很多学生写找不到父亲，情节匕发生偏离。.语言表达匮乏，动作描写+神情描写不会灵活运用.无过渡句，情节不连贯。.无主题词，结尾过于平淡，主题偏离，很多学生写的主题是“失败乃成功之母”“熟能生巧”“持之以恒就能胜利”等。.单词词性变化掌握不牢固。范文示例：/startedtopedalandthebicyclemoved.Initially,infearoftakingaspill,Ijustpedaledgingerly,withmysweatyhandsholdinghandlestightly/'Don5tpanic!Justlookstraightforwardandrilalwayssupportyou!”myfatherencouraged.ThewordsdispelledthepanichangingovermeandinjectedgreatpowerintomyheartsoIpedaledwithmorestrength.Thenthebikewaswindingforwardslowly.Graduallyandmagically,Igraspedthepaceofriding,thoughsweatshadalreadysoakedmycoat.Severalminuteslater,Ievenattemptedtospeedup."Oh,dad!I'vemadeit!Youcanhavearestnow!”However,therewasnoresponse.Itumedaroundandfoundmyfather卬4snotbehind.Mymindgoingblank,Ibrokeoutinacoldsweatandbrakedquickly.'TmhereJmydadwasstandinginthedistance,wavingatmeandposingathumb-upsign,"You'vepedaledforabout50yards,alonel^SortofangryasIfeltatthattime,Ifeltmoreaboutasenseofachievement.ThenIgotbackonmybicycleandpedaledmorebrisklyanddeliberately