人教版高中英语读后续写之故事的逻辑性课件

1、Continuation Writing- How to write a reasonable story 1Continuation Writing11. Acknowledge basic rules of continuation writing 2. Learn to explore useful information in reading3. Learn to develop coherent emotion and logical plot line 4. Learn to polish and upgrade sentencesLearning Objectives21. Ac

2、knowledge basic rules of 什么是读后续写？提供一篇350词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙文，且以事件发生的时间为序）。根据该材料的内容情节等，续写两段，150词左右（每个段落都给出了第一句），将其发展为一篇逻辑合理情节完整的短文。3什么是读后续写？提供一篇350词左右的阅读材料（一般是记叙文读后续写考查什么？核心素养：思维品质：想象能力和创新精神语言能力：阅读和写作具体说来，四个方面：把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力创造性思维能力对语篇结构的把控能力语言运用的准确性和丰富性4读后续写考查什么？核心素养：具体说来，四个方面：4评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档（2

3、1-25分）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的 各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的 各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。

4、应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1-5分）与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯。与原文剧情融洽，逻辑且合理续写内容丰富有看点语法结构和词汇多样准确语句间衔接自然，结构紧凑5评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档与所给短文融

5、合解题思路读懂原文情节回扣原文，结合段首句确定情节走向组织细节拟写草稿丰富润色细节6解题思路读懂原文情节回扣原文，结合段首句确定情节走向组织细节77Challenge yourself1. Do bears attack people?2. Where did the event happen?3. How many people were mentioned in the event? Who were they?6. Would the two boys in danger?4. How did Sam and David feel when they talked about the b

6、ear?5. What would the bear do when it sensed the presence of two boys?8Challenge yourself1. Do bears Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was

7、 reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a

8、 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious

9、about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,

10、” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam. “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”9Do bears attack people? The an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bea

11、r may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the win

12、dow of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 10 “We can put some food in t续写的两个段落的段首句（已给出）Paragraph 1:Just the

13、n, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 11续写的两个段落的段首句（已给出）Paragraph 1:111212Challenge yourself1. Do bears attack people?2. Where did the event happen?3. How many people were mentioned in the event? Who were they?6. Would the two boys in

14、 danger?4. How did Sam and David feel when they talked about the bear?5. What would the bear do when it sensed the presence of two boys?13Challenge yourself1. Do bears Who attack?feel ?WhereWhat did the bear do?danger?certainly positive (yes !)David, Sam, parents, Mrs Brown, policeman the bear would

15、 attack them. backyard of Davids familyexcited and eager to see the bearwould be in danger if nescesary help was absent Background InformationBackground Information 14 Who attack?feel ?WhStep 1 精读文章Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were c

16、oncerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was f

17、ound. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backy

18、ard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it

19、,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?” “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees

20、 it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some lef

21、tovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.出现熊袭击事件，警察警告Sam和David渴望亲眼见到熊熊非常贪吃商量以食物为诱饵吸引熊待大人出门时开始行动等待熊的出现时有点不耐烦了15Step 1 精读文章Do bears attack peoStep 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coher

22、ent in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯 情节合理 符合逻辑 符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合16Step 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coherent iStep 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯 情节合理 符合逻辑 符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合17Step 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coherent iDo bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a s

23、mall city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sigh

24、tings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had app

25、eared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run

26、away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”18Do bears attack people? The

27、an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone

28、at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of th

29、e backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 19 “We can put some food in t “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, s

30、till in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear.

31、 Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 20 “We can put some food in tdevelopment of emotion line 情感线Sam and David felt _ to see the bear, and got _ when they cant so when they finally saw the

32、 bear, they ought to feel _so when the bear noticed them they ought to feel_but the bear would _ thembecause it was fierceexcited and eagerexcitedso frightened / scaredattack Para 1Para 2bored21development of emotion line 情感excited and eagerboredexcited / Para 1scared / Para 222excited and eagerbore

33、dexcited Sam感到害怕了？说好的兴奋呢？23tip: coherent in emotion !Sam感到害怕了？说好的兴奋呢？23tip: coherendevelopment of plot line 情节线Sam and David felt _ to see the bearWhat would the boys and the bear do when the bear came in?why would the bear looked up?what would happen between bear and two boys?will the boys die?but

34、the bear would _ themonce they saw Sam and Davidexcited and eagerattack Para 1Para 224development of plot line 情节线Sa “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any n

35、oise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed

36、and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 25 “We can put some food in t如果没发现，如何和第二段开头看见衔接？26tip: logical between Para1 and Para2 !如果没发现，如何和第二段开头看见衔接？26tip: logi第一段就已经深

37、情对视了？27tip: logical in plot !第一段就已经深情对视了？27tip: logical in 剧情神反转 28剧情神反转 28Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV st

38、ation. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier

39、this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had alw

40、ays dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would re

41、turn for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”29Do bears attack people? The an熊壮怂人胆？熊被人喊跑了？30tip: common sense熊壮怂人胆？熊被人喊跑了？30tip: common se史上最佛系的熊 31史上最佛系的熊 31在熊的注视下表演装死？32在熊的注视下表演装死？32熊和孩子们分享食物？画面美好得不忍直视。33熊和孩子们分享食物？画面美好得不忍直视。

42、33脑洞开得有点大！34tip: logical ending is appreciated ! 脑洞开得有点大！34tip: logical ending 人与动物和谐相处？大圆满结局?35人与动物和谐相处？大圆满结局?35Step 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感连贯 情节合理 符合逻辑 符合常识回找伏笔：情感和情节角色调度：冲突和配合36Step 2 理清思路两“情”相悦： coherent iDo bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So p

43、eople in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report a

44、ny bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear

45、that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But

46、 it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”37Do bears attack

47、people? The an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two

48、 boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at th

49、e gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 38 “We can put some food in tbefore the bear came(Reading part)after the bear came(Para 1)after the bear saw the boys(Para 2)bearate all of her chicken David and Samexcited and eager to see the bear their parentswent out Mrs Br

50、ownate all of her chicken policeasked and warned might notice the bear finally saw itso excited might be attackedso frightened could ask the policecould come to their rescuecould come to their rescue39tip: add up some logical plots if necessary ! ate the leafoverattack? caught?run away? before the b

51、ear cameafter the Step 3 拟写草稿怎样让记叙文生动起来？动作描写3-5个表情或心理3-5个对话1-2个环境描写1-2个话题激活词汇：动作：step out, tighten, lose balance, shoot, apologize, forgive 情感：excitement, curious, frightened, scared, fierce, ashamed 环境：scenery40Step 3 拟写草稿怎样让记叙文生动起来？40对话太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41对话太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step 4 润色成篇润色包括动作情感环境类的生动描写，

52、丰富词汇和语法句型的打磨升级等Tips:1. 动作，情感，环境类描写日常积累。2. 丰富词汇和语法句型日常积累。（时态语态，定语从句，名词性从句，状语从句，非谓语动词，倒装句式，强调句式，It形式主语句，虚拟语气.）3. 对话酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42Step 4 润色成篇润色包括动作情感环境类的生动描写，丰富 Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Upon seeing the bear coming in, the two boys eyes twinkled with excitement. He

53、looked into the backyard. Obviously, he saw the leftover. He pushed open the door and came in. He looked around, and seeing no one in the backyard, he then started enjoying the food. So curious was Sam that he unconsciously stepped out of the house in order to watch the bear closely. It seemed as if

54、 the bear were safe enough to be closed to. 连贯动作二 / 非谓语做原因状语情感一动作一43动作三 / 倒装情感二 / 虚拟语气 Just then, they saw somet When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. At the sight of the fierce bear, Sam felt so scared thathis throat tightened and his knees feltweak. So was David, who froze with terror, too scared t

55、o move an inch. Sam lost his balance,staggered backandtoppled over. Just at the moment, their parents, together with the police, rushed in, shooting the bear. So ashamed were they that they couldfeelthe blood rush totheirface. They apologized to their parents, who forgave them finally, reminding them to be always aware of such dangerous animals as the bear.情感三 / 结果状从情感四动作四 / 连续动作同做谓语动作五，转折（高潮）/ 非谓语做伴随状语44情感五 / 倒装动作（结