【公开课课件】高中英语读后续写（整合）

1、读后续写一、考纲摘录一、考纲摘录 第二节：满分第二节：满分25分。分。 提供一段提供一段350词左右的语言材料，词左右的语言材料，要求考生要求考生依据该材料内容依据该材料内容、所给、所给段段落开头语落开头语和和所标示关键词所标示关键词进行续写进行续写(150词左右词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文整的短文。阅卷时将主要考虑以下。阅卷时将主要考虑以下内容：内容： (1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接衔接程度程度; (2)内容内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语所给关键词语的覆盖情况； (3)应用语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇的

2、丰富性和准确性; (4)上下文的连贯性连贯性。 二、浙江近年考情表解二、浙江近年考情表解 三、命题揭秘三、命题揭秘 要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。所提供短文词数在350左右，划线词语涉及到名词(词组)、动词(词组)、介词(词组)和形容词等，其中，以名词名词(词组词组)为主，在续写中至少要使用5个关键词语， 需要注意：在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词可以改变动词的形式的形式，可以改变名词的单复数可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含但不要改变关键词语在原文中

3、的含义和词性义和词性；多以记叙文故事类文章记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。 1.创造性：创造性：即发挥想象力，该题型具有一定的开放性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造； 2.逻辑性：逻辑性：即根据已提供的关键信息，按照可能的合理的方向续写，使文章逻辑结构完整； 3.丰富性：丰富性：即语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满。 四、评分标准四、评分标准 A. 评分原则评分原则 1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2. 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所

4、属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。 3. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。 4. 评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑： (1) 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； (2) 内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况； (3) 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性； (4) 上下文的连贯性。 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 6. 如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。 B. 各各档次的给分范围和档次的给分范围和要求要求 五、注意事项五、注意事项 读后续写题与其他写作题的最大读后续写题与其他写作题的最大不同之

5、处在于，其答题形式是不同之处在于，其答题形式是根据根据所给阅读材料和两个段落首句（也所给阅读材料和两个段落首句（也即主题句）进行续写即主题句）进行续写。因此，续写。因此，续写部分必须与阅读部分保持高度的部分必须与阅读部分保持高度的“协同性协同性”。 协同性：续写的内容要与阅读短协同性：续写的内容要与阅读短文及所给段落首句高度衔接，续写文及所给段落首句高度衔接，续写内容想象丰富，在语言表达上恰当，内容想象丰富，在语言表达上恰当，应用较多（应用较多（5个以上）短文中标有个以上）短文中标有下划线的关键词语，模仿使用阅读下划线的关键词语，模仿使用阅读材料中的词语和句型较多且使用得材料中的词语和句型较多

6、且使用得当，语言表达准确流畅，上下文思当，语言表达准确流畅，上下文思路连贯。路连贯。六、课堂训练六、课堂训练 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up（被提及；（被提及；被讨论）被讨论） and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the

7、 lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but for

8、est and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. Help! No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane

9、was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day （破晓；（破晓；黎明）黎明）, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落）滴落） somewher

10、e at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she p

11、icked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and fla

12、g them if they came back again. 1. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 续写步骤： 第一步：审题 1.1.把握内容要点把握内容要点 划线词语：Jane, Tom, lake, walked, climbed, at a distance, stream, to her great joy, helicopter, yellow blouse（摘抄在草稿纸上） 所给首尾句： 1. But no more

13、helicopters came and it was getting dark again. （又一个夜晚） 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. （昨晚得睡着） 2.2.理清写作思路理清写作思路 吵架吵架出走出走迷路迷路失联失联自救自救思念思念寻路寻路直升机直升机获救获救/ /？ 段1首句dark again：Jane又得在荒野度过黑夜。可考虑描写环境及Jane的心理活动，如后悔？想念？期待？坚持？夜里会不会遇到野兽？这一夜又是怎么度过的？ 段2首句woke up：上段应有Jane入睡的情节。醒来后发生什么？自救成功还是被人所救？抑或遇难？直升机有无再

14、回来并发现她？3.3.根据要点回想备用词汇：根据要点回想备用词汇：环境：环境：forest, rock, valley, cave, waterfall 困难：困难：hungry, thirsty, injure, broken, blood, panic, suffer, cold活动：活动：fall, crawl（爬行，缓慢行（爬行，缓慢行进）进）, taste, attempt, make ones way to, pick up情绪：情绪：break down（情不自禁地（情不自禁地哭起来，被搞垮；垮掉）哭起来，被搞垮；垮掉）, depress救援：救援：rescue team, do

15、ctor, search for, spot 品质：品质：calm, courage, will评价：评价：amazing, make it（幸免于（幸免于难；渡过难关）难；渡过难关） 第二步：起草第二步：起草（写（写） 列出每段要续写的要点（可先写出一些关键词，尽量包括阅读短文中划线的词语），然后拓展拓展成几个支撑句。 拟写时，注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过正确使用句与句之间过渡词语使文句连贯。（鼓励使用短文中句式） 第三步：起草第三步：起草/ /段落写作段落写作 一个完整的段落通常由三部分组成：主题句、拓展句拓展句和总结句。 每个段落的这三部分内容只为同一个主题服务，不同的主题

16、应放在不同的段落中表达。tip:把10个划线词语抄录在草稿旁边段落的拓展： （1 1）举例举例/ /列举法列举法 （2 2）时空顺序法时空顺序法 （3 3）因果分析法因果分析法 （4 4）比较对照法比较对照法 （5 5）分类陈述法分类陈述法 确保语言连贯流畅的手段：启启用于引出主题句或扩展句用于引出主题句或扩展句 表表“首先首先”：first，at first，first of all，firstly，in the first place，in the beginning，to begin with，to start with 表表“最近、现在最近、现在”：at present，current

17、ly，lately，recently，presently 表表“总说总说”：generally，generally speaking 其他：其他： it is clear that ， it is self-evident（显而易见的；不（显而易见的；不言而喻的；明摆着的）言而喻的；明摆着的）that，there is no doubt that ， there is some evidence that 确保语言连贯流畅的手段：承承用于承接主题句或扩展句用于承接主题句或扩展句 表表“递进递进”：also，besides，furthermore，in addition，in addition

18、to，moreover，the most important，whats more 表表“事实、无疑、肯定事实、无疑、肯定”：as a matter of fact，in effect，in fact，indeed，no doubt，certainly，truly 表表“举例举例”：for example，for instance，such as，takefor example，especially，in particular “同义复述同义复述”：or，namely，in other words，that is to say, ，likewise（同样地；类似地），（同样地；类似地），in

19、the same way，similarly 其他：其他：at the same time，consequently，from now on，so，soon，second/ secondly，there are many reasons why确保语言连贯流畅的手段：转转用于表达语气的转折用于表达语气的转折 表表“让步让步”：although，despite，in spite of，nevertheless，regardless of 表表“转折转折”：but，however，yet，whereas （用以比较或对比两个事（用以比较或对比两个事实）然而，但是，尽管实）然而，但是，尽管，whil

20、e 表表“相反、相对相反、相对”：as opposed to，conversely (knv:sli相反地；反过相反地；反过来来)，in opposition to，instead of，on the contrary，on the other hand 表表“不同、区别不同、区别”：otherwise，unlike，the differences are as follows 其他：其他：luckily，fortunately，unfortunately确保语言连贯流畅的手段：合合用于总结、归纳，表示段落的结束用于总结、归纳，表示段落的结束 表表“总括总括”：in all，in conclu

21、sion，in sum，in summary，to sum up，to summarize 表表“简而言之简而言之”：in brief，briefly，in a word，in short， 表表“结果结果”：as a result，as a consequence，in consequence，consequently，so，hence，therefore，thus，accordingly 表表“最后陈词最后陈词”：at last，at length，finally，last，lastly，in the last place第四步：修改（写） A CHECKLIST:要点有无遗漏，要点有无遗

22、漏，时态是否一致，时态是否一致，主谓是否一致，主谓是否一致，文理是否连贯文理是否连贯，句型有无变化，句型有无变化，词数是否符合要求词数是否符合要求，） 拼写、标点符号是否有误等。拼写、标点符号是否有误等。要敢于创新，用更精彩的词、要敢于创新，用更精彩的词、句替换平淡的词、句，特别注句替换平淡的词、句，特别注意开头、结尾的精彩度，创造意开头、结尾的精彩度，创造亮点。亮点。第五步：誊抄务必做到书写规范，保持卷面整洁。务必做到书写规范，保持卷面整洁。用用下划线标出所用短文中标下划线下划线标出所用短文中标下划线的词语。的词语。Paragraph 1: But no more helicopters c

23、ame and it was getting dark again. Jane had to stay alone in the forest for another cold night. Although she felt a little sad, she didnt get fearful. She thought about Tom. “He must have called for those helicopters. Maybe he was in one of them and will come back again! I have to guide him tomorrow

24、.” She fell asleep and dreamed of seeing Tom. Paragraph 2: It was day break when Jane woke up. She ate some berries and then walked along the stream, hoping to find a suitable place to guide the helicopter. Fortunately, she saw a huge flat rock in an open area at a distance. She rushed to the rock,

25、climbed onto it and waited. To her great joy, the helicopter appeared again. The nearer it got, the more she flagged the yellow blouse. Luckily, the helicopter didnt miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rock slowly. Tom jumped off the helicopter and ran towards Jane. She broke down（情不自禁地哭起

26、来）（情不自禁地哭起来）and burst into tears.阅读部分：续写部分：introductionplot 1paragraph 1: plot n+1paragraph 2: plot n+2 + conclusionplot nplot 读后续写路线图：1It had been a year since Susan, thirty-four, became blind. As the result of a medical accident she was sightless, suddenly thrown into a world of darkness, anger, f

27、rustration and self-pity. Once an independent woman, Susan now became a powerless（无能为力的）（无能为力的）, helpless（无自理能力的；不能自立的；无助的）（无自理能力的；不能自立的；无助的）burden on everyone around her. No matter how much she cried or prayed, she knew the painful truth that her sight was never going to return. All she had to clin

28、g to (尤指情感上尤指情感上)依恋，依恋，依附依附 was her husband Mark. Mark was an Air Force officer and he loved Susan with all his heart. When she first lost her sight, he watched her sink into despair dspe(r) and he became determined to use every means possible to help his wife. Finally, Susan felt ready to return to

29、 her job, but how would she get there? She used to take the bus, but she was now too frightened to get around the city by herself. Mark volunteered to ride the bus with Susan each morning and evening until she got the hang of (掌握掌握的要的要领；了解领；了解的用法；找到了诀窍的用法；找到了诀窍) it. And that is exactly what happened

30、.For two weeks, Mark, military uniform and all (一身戎装一身戎装), accompanied Susan to and from work each day. He taught her how to rely on her other senses, specifically her hearing, to determine where she was and how to adapt to her new environment. He helped her befriend 做（尤指需要帮助者）的朋友；友善对做（尤指需要帮助者）的朋友；友

31、善对待待 the bus drivers who could watch out for (密切注意；留意密切注意；留意) her, and save her a seat.Each morning they made the journey together, and Mark would take a taxi back to his office. Although that meant he had to travel through the city and the routine was costly and exhausting gz:st , Mark knew it was

32、only a matter of time before Susan would be able to ride the bus on her own. He believed in her.Finally, Susan decided that she was ready to try the trip on her own. Monday morning arrived. Before she left, she embracedimbreist her husband tightly, her eyes filled with tears of gratitude for his loy

33、alty, his patience, and his love. She felt she was so lucky for he had given her a gift more powerful than sight.1. She said goodbye and, for the first time, they went their separate ways. 2. On Friday morning, as Susan was stepping onto the bus as usual, the driver said, “Miss, I sure envy you.” Cu

34、rious, Susan asked the driver why. Paragraph 1:She said goodbye and, for the first time, they went their separate ways. She made her way carefully up the steps with the white cane(手杖手杖). She paid the driver and then, using her hands to feel the location of the seats, settled into安顿下来；习惯于（新安顿下来；习惯于（新

35、居）；适应（新工作）居）；适应（新工作） one. She placed her briefcase on her lap and rested her cane against her leg. Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday ., each day everything on her own went perfectly. She was doing it!Paragraph 2: On Friday morning, as Susan was stepping onto the bus as usual, the driver said, “Mi

36、ss, I sure envy you.” Curious, Susan asked the driver why.“You know, every morning for the past week, a fine looking gentleman in a military uniform has been standing across the corner watching you when you get off the bus. He makes sure you cross the street safely and he watches you until you enter

37、 your office building. You are one lucky lady,” the bus driver said. When she knew the fact, tears poured down Susans cheeks, tears full of gratitude and happiness as well. Susan knew that she wouldnt have made such great progress without Marks help. Its Marks love that brought light into darkness.2

38、 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young

39、man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur said. “Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you

40、re sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”“No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.” The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the fir

41、st suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫抢劫)! Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to