公开课如何在高考英语作文中增加细节实用教案

1、假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英国人Steven 的护照。请你用英语给你市某英文报社编辑写一封信，内容包括：1.简述时间过程; 2.交代护照相关信息(xnx); 3.委托报社刊登招领启事.注意: 1.词数100左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。广东(gung dng)一模书面表达第1页/共19页第一页，共20页。一个(y )问题主体信息写完往往只有60-70个字，不足100词，怎么(zn me)弥补词数？ 需要“适当(shdng)增加细节，以使行文连贯”。第2页/共19页第二页，共20页。Dear editor, Im LiHua, a high school student in

2、our city. Im writing to tell you a piece of urgent information. I picked up a passport last Sunday in the subway station when I was taking a ride home. There was nobody around when I found it on a waiting bench. The owner of it is Steven who comes from England. Having lost the passport, he must be v

3、ery anxious, but I have no idea how to return it to him. So I need your help. I wish you could post a notice on your newspaper to tell him about the missing passport, so that he can get it back. I would appreciate it if you could do me the favor. Im looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua结果结果(j

4、i gu)交际交际(jioj)语语心理心理(xnl)感受感受具体化具体化同位语同位语原因原因第3页/共19页第三页，共20页。如何适当(shdng)增加细节1.增加同位语2.补全前因后果或目的3.适当将写作内容具体化4.写出个人感受、评价或后果5.补充(bchng)功能性（交际性）语言第4页/共19页第四页，共20页。What kind of information can often be added to your article?1 增加(zngji)同位语1 I am LiHua, _ (我们学校(xuxio)的学生会主席). / _(来自中国的一位交换生). 2. I want to

5、 have a pen friend, _ (希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣的女孩). Chairman of the Students Union of my school.an exchange student from China.hopefully a girl with interests similar to mine.第5页/共19页第五页，共20页。2.补充补充(bchng)前因后果或目的前因后果或目的_(因为(yn wi)知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣），I am writing to invite you to participate in this activity. _(为了获

6、得(hud)一些实践经验) Im planning to take a part-time job in a foreign company.(1) Knowing that you show great interest in Chinese traditional culture,(2)In order to get some practical experience,_ (由于我有过丢身份证的经历），I can feel how anxious Mr Steven will be now.(3)Since I have the experience of losing my ID car

7、d,第6页/共19页第六页，共20页。（1) The activity will be held _(具体时间、地点）(2 )I know the owner is Steven _ (相关(xinggun)身份信息) 3 When I received the dictionary, I found that _(具体存在问题 如错印、缺页等)3.适当(shdng)将写作内容具体化 from 9 a.m. to 10 a.m. on April 11 in Classroom 501.from England, aged 38, married.there were some misprin

8、ts and pages from 23-45 were missing.第7页/共19页第七页，共20页。4 增加(zngji)结果或者是效果(1)I think it is a good chance to appreciate local operas, _ (这必将有助于你学到更多的中国文化）(2)We can set out early, _(以便我们(w men)有更多的时间阅读和挑选图书） (3)There are quite a few missing pages,_(变得无法使用) so that we can have more time to read and selec

9、t books which will surely help you learn more about Chinese culture.making it impossible to use.第8页/共19页第八页，共20页。1_（如果你能帮我这个(zh ge)忙，我将不胜感激（2）_（期待着你的早日回复）5.补充(bchng)功能性（交际性）语言(3 )_(如果如果(rgu)有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告诉我）诉我）I would greatly appreciate it if you could do me the favour.Looking forwar

10、d to your early reply.If there is anything I can do for you, please dont hesitate to let me know.第9页/共19页第九页，共20页。practice (add reasonable details）1.Im LiHua,_. (同位语) 2. Im writing to ask you to help me find the owner of a passport,_. (具体来源等) 3 With caution, I opened the plastic bag, _.（结果） 4 Last w

11、eek, I bought an English dictionary from your online bookstore _(目的/原因) 5_ (若你能考虑(kol)我的建议，我将不胜感激).第10页/共19页第十页，共20页。假如你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写封回信(hu xn)。 要点：1、参加中文学习班。 2、看中文书刊、电视。 3、学唱中文歌曲。 4、交中国朋友。 注意：1. 词数：100左右。 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 3. 开头语已为你写好.Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your l

12、etter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.第11页/共19页第十一页，共20页。 Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese s

13、ongs. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends. 第12页/共19页第十二页，共20页。 Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course, as youll be able to learn from the teachers and pr

14、actice with your fellow students. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese whenever possible. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily. In addition, You can al

15、so make more Chinese friends. They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese. Try writing to me in Chinese next time. Best wishes Li Hua第13页/共19页第十三页，共20页。(2016(2016全国课标卷) )假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resumeresume）。给外教Ms JenkinsMs Jenkins写信，请她修改所附材料的文字和格式（formatformat）。注意：1. 1.

16、词数100100左右；2. 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文(xngwn)(xngwn)连贯。第14页/共19页第十四页，共20页。 Im your student Li Hua. Im applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation. Could you correct the language and the format of the application letter and resume I have written?They are in the atta

17、chment.第15页/共19页第十五页，共20页。 Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course, as youll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students. Then, it also help

18、s to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese whenever possible. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends. They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese. T