作文-情景作文1 李达,高级语言提升

1、情景作文讲义李达核心思想1. 绝对不丢要点2. 要点要比细节写得好！3. 写作线索（驱动力）=情感（起承）转和+动作变化doubtbrainwaverecollect/the shining moment flooded into my mindemotional moment写要点一、人物-“有来有往”1. 我-动作的发出者2. 对方-动作的承受者二、动作（X+1）1. 四肢-“用句型进行整合”a. 坐SitSeat oneselfLie onRest onBe seatedGive ones feet a restLean overLean onb. 站StandBe on ones fe

2、etRisec. 爬（山）hiking in the mountainClimbAscendGo upMountRiseSoarEscalated. 慢跑Take a walk/strollMarchWanderParadeRaceStride intoTake a giant stride2. 五官-“变具体动作，变高级单词和词组”a. 眼看glare atgaze atstare atglance atobservediscerncatch sight ofglimpsecatch a glimpse ofdistinguishperceivescrutinizelay/set eyes

3、on发现find outdiscoverlearnascertain预见foreseepredictforecastanticipateenvisagepicture遇到encountermeetrun into/acrosscome acrossbump into咨询consultconfer withtalk tocall onturn to认出spotidentifyrecognizedetect见证witness陪伴escortaccompanyshowleadwalkb. 耳听hearlisten tocatchhearken to偷听eavesdrop onc. 鼻气味aromaf

4、lavorscentstenchfragranceincense闻breatheinhalesniffsmell the fragrance ofd. 舌说answerconveydeliverexpresscongratulateexpress gratitudemaintainreadrepeatspeaksuggesttellvoicecommunicateutterbreak silencegive voiceput forthput into words声称宣布announceassertclaimdeclareaffirmstate提到mention回复replyrespond揭示

5、revealdisclose猜guess其他implyjudgereciteremark味道aromabittergingerjoltpunchpiquancyrelishsaltsourstingsweetzest品尝bitecheweatenjoysamplesavorsipcriticizelicknibblerelishtry the flavor ofe. 手embracehugnudgepetpettingpushscratchstroketapfeelreachstrikecontactpalm3. 心理描写-“动作和心理进行整合”a. 情感状态b. 想法动机thinkingwi

6、shinghopingwonderingrealizingconsidering过渡1. 心理活动“（非谓语）心理，（主谓宾）动作”2. 动作hardlywhenscarcelywhenno soonerthanhaving done, 3. 时间soon came the exciting/breathtaking/thrilling/exhilarating/stimulating/emotional moment when4. 切忌要自然感情变化正常细节切忌耀眼开头结尾1. 开头2. 结尾a. 个人成长not only did i/we, but alsob. 鸡汤文i realize

7、what a better world we will have if we could devote some of our attention to the environmental protection.c. 文学性-场面描写、比喻+大小although it seemed to be just an ordinary day, still, the scenery of the sun descending over the lake, the laughter and the smile on our faces will never fade away from my memor

8、y.练习方法1. 大家小家+传统文化类16西城期末-看阅兵式16丰台期末-做传统衣服16西城一模-跟奶奶学剪纸15丰台一模-家人共度元宵节14海淀二模-帮助家人视频通话2. 出游类16海淀期末-参观抗日纪念馆16海淀一模-颐和园写书法16朝阳一模-丝绸之路旅行16朝阳二模-伦敦冬令营前往博物馆16西城二模-骑车郊游14东城二模-西安自助游14朝阳二模-游览西山3. 献爱心+志愿16丰台一模-支持抗癌男孩16海淀二模-林居孩子没带钥匙16东城二模-福利院献爱心16丰台二模-大凉山支教15海淀一模-志愿讲解员15朝阳一模-文化志愿活动15海淀期末-爱心粥14海淀期末-改变中国式过马路14朝阳期末-

9、扫雪14西城一模-绿色出行14朝阳一模-地铁内捡垃圾14丰台一模-收留流浪狗14西城二模-归还钱包14丰台二模-汽车撞到老人4. 校园活动类16东城期末-接待澳大利亚访华团16朝阳期末-做航模16东城一模-板报比赛15海淀期末-社团招新15东城期末-校园记者15西城一模-汉字听写15东城一模-开设选修课14西城期末-参加最后一届校运动会14东城东城期末-校庆活动14海淀一模-为朋友送行14东城一模-英语比赛换！1. 表达make，而换用具体动词This society still makes women unable to enjoy equal rights.Women&

10、#160;are still denied equal rights.2. 表示more and more，换用increasing/growing number和increasingly + adj.More and more students find learning English has become more and more difficult.Students in growing numbers find learning English has become increasingly difficult.3. 表达

11、many，换用a vast majority ofMost students take a part-time job after class.The vast majority of students take a part-time job after class.4. 表达not onlybut also，换用means more than, it also meansTaking a part-time job can not only earn a little money, but (also) have an oppor

12、tunity to contact society.Taking a part-time job means more than a little money you can earn. It also means an opportunity to contact society.5. 表达I feel，换用感叹句How terrible I felt today! I failed again in the math exam.6. 宾语是nothing, anything, everything，换被动句I have searched all my pockets,

13、but nothing was found.7. 定语从句中动词带有介词，介词换到先行词前We came to a place to which they had never paid a visit before.8. 进行时态表情绪，换出always加强感情色彩I am always feeling terrible when I take a bus.9. 肯定句，换nothing but变幽默I could find nothing but bad luck when I returned home learning that my handbag had been left on t

14、he counter.10. 动宾结构，换what引导的名词性从句What he gave me, which I knew, were not only a Christmas present but also a heart full of love and a mind of my existence in it.11. 数词+名词，换as many asAs many as ten years ago, my hometown used to be covered by forests.12. 主语不同的并列句，换独立主格The weather being fine, a large

15、number of people went to climb the Western Hills.插入语1. 副词IndeedSurelyHoweverObviouslyFranklyNaturallyFortunatelyStrangelyHonestlyBrieflyCertainlyProbablyPossiblyGenerallyBesides2. 形容词及其短语Strange to sayneedless to saymost important of allworse still3. 介词短语In other wordin a sensein generalin my viewIn

16、 a wayin summaryin the first placein additionfrom my perspectiveof courseto our knowledgeto ones joy/delight/satisfaction/surprise/astonishment/amazement/regret/disappointmentas a matter of factfor instance4. 分词短语Judging fromStrictly speakingGenerally speakingSpeaking ofConsidering5. 不定式短语To be sure

17、To sum upTo tell the truth6. 口语中的插入语Believe it or notWhat is moreI believeI wonderYou knowThat isAs I see itIm afraidI supposeI guess非谓语With复合结构强调句倒装句无灵主语-好处-无灵主语有哪些？什么场景能用？-怎样把已知的句子变为无灵主语句？引入：用非人称做主语I love everybody.My love goes to everybody. (无灵主语有什么生动的动作)有灵：什么人发生了什么事儿无灵：什么事发生在了什么人身上无灵被动语态The fact

18、 was accepted by people. (被动语态)The fact acquired peoples acceptance. （无灵）无灵主语与概念隐喻密不可分概念隐喻的一个重要功能就是将经验意义抽象化，即把通常用小句体现的经验隐喻化为名词词组的体现的成分。As soon as I saw the river, I remember my hometown.The sight of the river reminds me of my hometown.情景作文为何用无灵主语？增加主语的多样性，运用了多样的句式使语言生动，表达丰富使表达更客观，较强的语言运用功能Last Monda

19、y while I was wandering on the playground, I saw a poster, saying that the school TV station was looking for new reporters.Last Monday while I was wandering on the playground, a poster caught my attention, saying that the school TV station was looking for new reporters.怎样用无灵主语转化无灵句将过程（动词）和特性（形容词）经过隐

20、喻，不再是小句里的过程或修饰语，而是名词形式体现的参与者（无灵主语）Because there was no business, he was worried.The absence of business upset him.1. 表身心状态和情感的名词做主语表情感状态的抽象名词Happiness, delight, excitement, satisfaction, prideAnxiety, nervousness谓语动词的选择：进入：flood into, pour, rush into, appear, spring up, strike, occupy, seize,存在：fill

21、, ripple, linger, fill every corner of my heart, immerse in离开：leave, fade, escape可用场景：明显体现人物表情和心情的图片或用语开头和结尾抒情这个老者脸上出现了无助的表情Helplessness appeared on the face of the old man.2. 具有行为和动作意义的名词做主语Sight, thought, smell, taste, attempt一般由感官动词演变而来可用场景：1. 涉及要点描述的句子，因为要点一般为动词词组2. 结尾抒情，想到什么让我感到非常（自豪）他对烤鸭垂涎欲滴Th

22、e sight of the glossy and shining ducks arouse his appetite.我对这个竞赛感到十分高兴。The thought of the whole meaningful process of this context filled my heart with extreme delight.the thought that our teamwork achieved us such a great success at the contest filled my heart with a strong sense of satisfactory.

23、3. 时间、地点等名词做主语，用作开头、结尾、段首常用谓语动词：See, find, witness, spectate使用场景： Last freezing winter witnessed a volunteering hot porridge delivery activity.The neat and orderly Capital Library saw the meaningful voluntary activity that we organized today.我们家在上一个元宵节过的非常愉快The previous Lantern Festival has spectate

24、d a magnificent family-reunion time.Last lantern Festival witnessed the harmonious and enjoyable reunion atmosphere of our family.4. 时间做主语，用在段首用来衔接A few moments brought us to + 地点A few minutes brought us to the peak of the mountain.替换we arrived at+地点+after a few moment通过句子成分转换1. 宾语转换为主语I saw the bulletin board.The bulletin board caught/drew my attention/came into my view.I had/came up with an idea.An idea hit me.The whole class g