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1、 Writing （中考作文总复习）（中考作文总复习） Xinchang Chengguan Middle SchoolAlice YuanpatientkindA good teacherfriendlyhumorousstricthard-workingknowledgeablecaring（2015年绍兴市中考作文）年绍兴市中考作文）你校英语社团正在开展主题为你校英语社团正在开展主题为“What should a good teacher be like?”的讨论，为此采访的讨论，为此采访了一些学生和家长，请你根据下表内容，用英语写一篇短文进了一些学生和家长，请你根据下表内容，用英语写一

2、篇短文进行交流，并阐述你的观点。行交流，并阐述你的观点。学生主要观点学生主要观点家长主要观点家长主要观点你的观点你的观点与学生相处融洽与学生相处融洽课堂生动有趣课堂生动有趣学识广博学识广博严格要求学生严格要求学生注意注意:（）文章必须包括表中所有内容，可适当增加细节；（）文章必须包括表中所有内容，可适当增加细节；（）你的观点至少两条；（）你的观点至少两条；（）词数：（）词数：；（）短文首句仅供选择使用，不计入总词数。（）短文首句仅供选择使用，不计入总词数。Students and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher

3、 should be like.仔细审题，圈出要求。仔细审题，圈出要求。体体裁：裁： 时态：时态：话题式作文话题式作文一般现在时一般现在时（2015年绍兴市作文）年绍兴市作文）你校英语社团正在开展主题为你校英语社团正在开展主题为“What should a good teacher be like?”的讨论，为此采访了一些学的讨论，为此采访了一些学生和家长，请你根据下表内容，用英语写一篇短文进行交流，生和家长，请你根据下表内容，用英语写一篇短文进行交流，并阐述你的观点。并阐述你的观点。学生主要观点学生主要观点家长主要观点家长主要观点你的观点你的观点(至少两条）至少两条）与学生相处融洽与学生相处

4、融洽课堂生动有趣课堂生动有趣学识广博学识广博严格要求学生严格要求学生Students and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher should be like. 2 列列 (List) 列出提纲，定好框架。列出提纲，定好框架。Ending 结尾结尾Beginning 开头开头Body 正文正文作文框架作文框架 3 .连连(Connect) 找出要点，连词成句。找出要点，连词成句。学生学生主要观点主要观点与学生相处融洽与学生相处融洽课堂生动有趣课堂生动有趣家长家长主要观点主要观点学识广博学识广博严格要求学生严格要求学

5、生你的观点你的观点(至少两条）至少两条）get on well withlively and interestingknowledge/ knowledgeablebe strict with students good teacher should get on well with students.His class should be lively and interesting. good teacher should be knowledgeable.He should be strict with his students. good teacher should be patie

6、nt and care about students.patientcare aboutStudents and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher should be like.耐心耐心关心学生关心学生Students thinkParents thinkI think Students and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher should be like. Students think a good teacher should

7、 get on well with his students. His class should be lively and interesting. Parents think a good teacher should be knowledgeable. He should be strict with the students. I think a good teacher should be patient and care about his students.hat should a good teacher be like?3.词汇项目有限词汇项目有限4. 词数不符要求词数不符要

8、求1.句式单一句式单一2.行文不够连贯行文不够连贯Not bad!连句成文连句成文三、三、高级高级句型句型二二、 丰富的词汇和语言丰富的词汇和语言被动语态被动语态复合句复合句一、一、合理的合理的连接词连接词/过渡语过渡语固定结构固定结构 Students and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher should be like. Students think a good teacher should get on well with his students. _, his class should be liv

9、ely and interesting. _, parents_. they think a good teacher should be knowledgeable. _, He should be strict with the students. I think a good teacher should be patient and take good care of his students.hat should a good teacher be like?HoweverBesidesthink differently.dont think so.dont really agree

10、.学生观点到家长观点的过渡句：学生观点到家长观点的过渡句：两个观点之间的连接词：两个观点之间的连接词：Also Whats moreTip 1 合理运用合理运用连接词连接词或或过渡语过渡语连句成篇连句成篇使衔接自然，行文连贯。使衔接自然，行文连贯。A little better ! 表并列：表并列：and, both and; as well as 表转折：表转折：but, yet, however 表因果表因果：because, so, as a result 表递进表递进：not onlybut also; whats more 表结果表结果：so that ; such that ; 表

11、先后表先后：First, Second, Third, Next, Finally 表时间表时间：when, while, after, before, as soon as ore linking words (连接词连接词) a. A good teacher is supposed to get on well with his students.b. Its important for a good teacher to get on well with his students.Tip 2 使用使用丰富并高级的词汇丰富并高级的词汇和和句型句型使文章增色。使文章增色。A good te

12、acher should get on well with his students. （原句）（原句）c. A teacher who gets on well with his students is certainly welcomed.定语从句，被动语态定语从句，被动语态be supposed to its+adj.+for sb.+to do固定句型：固定句型：语法结构：语法结构：A good teacher should be knowledgeable. His class should be lively and interesting. A good teacher shou

13、ld be strict with his students.和同伴一起讨论，用更优美的句和同伴一起讨论，用更优美的句子来表达。（至少两句）子来表达。（至少两句）What should a good teacher be like?Students and parents have different opinions about what a good teacher should be like. Students think that a good teacher should get on well with them. Also, he must be able to make th

14、e class lively and interesting so that students will have fun learning. However, Parents dont really agree with their kids. They think a good teacher is supposed to be knowledgeable. Besides, its important for a teacher to be strict with the students to help them behave well. In my opinion, a patien

15、t teacher is certainly regarded as a good one by both parents and students. Whats more, he is expected to believe in his students all the time and encourage them to face the difficulties. 合理使用连接词合理使用连接词/句。句。.使用不同方式表达使用不同方式表达.更丰富高级的词汇和语法。更丰富高级的词汇和语法。拼写、时态、标点、主谓一致等拼写、时态、标点、主谓一致等.检检 Great !中考评分标准中考评分标准

16、第五档（1820分） 包含所有要点，完全完成了试题规定的任务； 有清晰的文本框架，较多的语法和词汇； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑、行文连贯、表达清楚； 语言基本无误。第四档（1417分）基本包含所有要点，遗漏少量次要点，较全面地完成了试题规定的任务；有较清晰的文本框架，比较多样的语法结构和词汇；行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚；语言有少量错误。第三档（1013分） 包含大多数要点，基本完成了试题规定的任务； 少许语句不通顺，语言错误较多，但不影响整体理解。第二档（69分） 只包含少数要点，未恰当完成试题规定的任务； 多数语句不完整； 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，语言有较多错误，影响

17、理解。第一档（05分） 只包含个别要点，未完成试题规定的任务。 多数语句不完整或意思不明，内容不连贯，错误很多。0分 未能传达给读者任何信息； 写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。Enjoy being a judge我来做评委在限定的分在限定的分钟内，最先给钟内，最先给出分数的三位出分数的三位同学中，谁的同学中，谁的最接近教师评最接近教师评分？分？中考作文选篇（一）得分：中考作文选篇（一）得分：_ （二）得分：（二）得分：_中考作文选篇（一）中考作文选篇（一） 教师评分教师评分: _ 14.书写不够漂亮；书写不够漂亮；.有少量错误；有少量错误；.缺少丰富的词汇和多样化的语缺少丰富的

18、词汇和多样化的语法结构；法结构；.表达不够地道，较为表达不够地道，较为Chinglish 。中考作文选篇（一）中考作文选篇（一） 教师评分教师评分: _ 1420教师评分教师评分: _中考作文选篇（二）中考作文选篇（二） （2014年新昌卷作文）年新昌卷作文）你班同学非常喜欢看湖南卫视明星亲子真你班同学非常喜欢看湖南卫视明星亲子真人秀节目人秀节目爸爸去哪儿爸爸去哪儿，并关于，并关于“什么样的爸爸才是好爸爸什么样的爸爸才是好爸爸”展开展开了讨论，请你根据下面的表格提示，用英语简要的介绍并表明你自己了讨论，请你根据下面的表格提示，用英语简要的介绍并表明你自己的观点。的观点。要求：要求：1. 语句通

19、顺、连贯，时态正确。语句通顺、连贯，时态正确。 2. 要写出你的观点，至少要写出你的观点，至少2点。点。 3. 参考词汇：参考词汇： 批评批评criticize, 为为树立榜样树立榜样set a good example for。 4. 词数词数100左右，开头和结尾已给，不计入字数。左右，开头和结尾已给，不计入字数。 特点特点大部分学生大部分学生和孩子一起玩，细心照顾孩子和孩子一起玩，细心照顾孩子, 让孩子开心让孩子开心.一些学生一些学生严格，孩子犯错时严肃批评，帮助孩子进步严格，孩子犯错时严肃批评，帮助孩子进步, 为为孩子树立榜样孩子树立榜样.你你The other day, we had

20、 a discussion about what kind of father is a good father._.Enjoy yourself every day !Score 1. _ 2. _ 3. _714202. 审题不清审题不清a. 没有汇报讨论结果，没有汇报讨论结果， 只有自己想法只有自己想法b. 人称混淆人称混淆c. 格式错误格式错误3. 语言表达语言表达a. Chinglish以及拼音现象以及拼音现象b. 句式单一句式单一c. 标点不规范标点不规范d. 句子结构问题句子结构问题e. 个人观点缺乏个性和深度个人观点缺乏个性和深度学生答题中存在的问题学生答题中存在的问题1. 卷面问题卷面问题卷面不洁，乱涂画，卷面不洁，乱涂画，修改不当修改不当 不分段不分段 书写不清晰漂亮，字书写不清晰漂亮，字太小太小d. 词间距过大，显得散乱词间距过大，显得散乱e. 篇幅未满整卷容量的篇幅未满整卷容量的90%字体工整字体工整, 卷面干净；卷面干净； 紧扣主题紧扣主题, 条理清晰；条理清晰；句型丰富，长短适中；句型丰富，长短适中； 语言地道语言地道, 过渡自然。过渡自然。 阅卷教师喜欢什么样的作文阅卷教师喜欢什么样的作文? 阅卷教师讨厌什么样的作文阅卷教师讨厌什么样