如何抓住阅卷教师心理-美化作文[课件]

1、Beautify Beautify CompositionComposition 15分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括 内容要点的完整，语法与词形的正确，但内容要点的完整，语法与词形的正确，但 是全都是很简单句子的一个堆砌，没有任是全都是很简单句子的一个堆砌，没有任 何的亮点。而何的亮点。而20多分的作文句型词汇方面多分的作文句型词汇方面 就做了很好的包装，它的句子如人穿的衣就做了很好的包装，它的句子如人穿的衣 服，它已经不是普通校服，而是李宁、耐服，它已经不是普通校服，而是李宁、耐 克等名牌，所以让人觉得很克等名牌，所以让人觉得很“拽拽”，而高，而高 考英

2、语写作要的就是这种很考英语写作要的就是这种很“拽拽”的感觉的感觉. 1515分和分和2020多分的作多分的作 文到底差在哪里？文到底差在哪里？ 书面表达在评阅书面表达在评阅 时遵循三原则时遵循三原则 语言第一位（语言高级）语言第一位（语言高级） 内容第二位（要点齐全）内容第二位（要点齐全） 结构第三位（文章分段）结构第三位（文章分段） 一、高级词汇和语法一、高级词汇和语法 二、修辞手法二、修辞手法 三、有效的连词三、有效的连词 四、名人名言或谚语四、名人名言或谚语 语言第一位（语言高级）语言第一位（语言高级） 龙头；猪肚；凤尾。龙头；猪肚；凤尾。 还要强化还要强化“高级、复杂高级、复杂”两个概

3、念两个概念 1、词组优先原则、词组优先原则 2、地道原则。、地道原则。 3、避免重复原则、避免重复原则 4、后、后、高高、长原则长原则 后学到、较高级、较长词汇。后学到、较高级、较长词汇。 四项原则四项原则 1、词组优先原则、词组优先原则 原文A new railway is being built in my hometown. 修正A new railway is under construction in my hometown. 2、地道原则、地道原则 原文Through traveling, I learned a lot of knowledge. 修正Through travel

4、ing, I gainedobtained a lot of knowledge. 4、后高长原则后学到、较高级、较长词汇。 原 词 替换词 hard diligently very rather, extremely pay attention to attach importance to happy delighted, enjoyable more and more the increasing number of 3、避免重复原则、避免重复原则 原文I like reading while my brother likes watching television. 修正I like

5、reading while my brother enjoys watching television. 一、一、肯定不如双否好肯定不如双否好 二、二、陈述不如倒装妙陈述不如倒装妙 三、三、主动不如被动巧主动不如被动巧 四、从句不如分词傲四、从句不如分词傲 要强化要强化“语法、修辞语法、修辞”两个概念两个概念 修辞的使用在书面表达中算作很大的亮点，在高中阶段很修辞的使用在书面表达中算作很大的亮点，在高中阶段很 少有学生会注重修辞的应用。双重否定也是种修辞，而且对少有学生会注重修辞的应用。双重否定也是种修辞，而且对 于考生来说，只要稍加注意，可以在文章中设计双重否定的于考生来说，只要稍加注意，可

6、以在文章中设计双重否定的 句子。就变成了亮点句，起到强调作用。句子。就变成了亮点句，起到强调作用。 一、肯定不如双否好一、肯定不如双否好 The postman comes on time every day. The postman never fails to come on time. 1.He came here at 5 p.m.yesterday.(一般句式) 2.He did not come here until 5 p.m.yesterday. I couldnt have made so much progress in English without his help.

7、I have made great progress in English with his help. 倒装是一种最简单易行的使句子呈现亮点的方法。在 高中阶段只需掌握倒装的四种形式，足以应对书面表 达，如何应用倒装，有很多方法和技巧。 1.Only when we realize the importance of environmental protection can we solve the problem of pollution. 2. So precious is time that we cant afford to waste it. 3.Diligent as he wa

8、s, he failed in passing the exam. 4. By no means should teenagers get into the habit of smoking. 二、陈述不如倒装妙二、陈述不如倒装妙 Never before have I seen such a wonderful film. I will never marry you. Never will I marry you. 1.否定词开头：否定词开头： 2. Not until/till 5 pm. did he come here yesterday. 3. It was not until/t

9、ill 5 pm. that he came here yesterday. 1. He didnt come here until 5 pm. yesterday. 把地点状语放在句首后面主谓倒装。这样做的好处之一是把地点状语放在句首后面主谓倒装。这样做的好处之一是倒装本倒装本 身就是高级结构身就是高级结构，第二是，第二是倒装后把真正的主语放到了句子的末尾，倒装后把真正的主语放到了句子的末尾， 后面还可以继续加从句后面还可以继续加从句，使整个句子再呈现更多的亮点使整个句子再呈现更多的亮点。 In the center of our school lies our library， which

10、 is between the garden and the teaching building. 2.地点状语开头地点状语开头 Our library is in the center of our school. In the center of our school lies our library. On the bank stand some flowers. In the sky hang little stars. Only in this way can we achieve our goal. 3.Only+介词短语：介词短语： Only in this way can I

11、improve my English Only by taking exercises can we keep healthy 4. 形容词形容词+as+主语主语+be动词：动词： 1. Young as I am, I can manage it 2. Rich as our country is, we have a lot of problems 3. Badly injured as he was, he managed to take down the cars number. 4. So glad am I to hear from you. 三、主动不如被动巧三、主动不如被动巧

12、英语是一门英语是一门客观的语言客观的语言，而汉语是，而汉语是主观主观 的语言的语言，具体体现在，具体体现在英语中经常用被动英语中经常用被动 语态，汉语经常用主动语态语态，汉语经常用主动语态；英语中经英语中经 常用是事物或形式主语开头，强调一件常用是事物或形式主语开头，强调一件 事发生在什么人身上，而汉语经常用人事发生在什么人身上，而汉语经常用人 称开头强调一个人发生了什么事称开头强调一个人发生了什么事。所以。所以 使用被动语态符合英语的习惯，如果能使用被动语态符合英语的习惯，如果能 将整个文章中将整个文章中两个句子两个句子变成被动语态，变成被动语态， 就会呈现句型的变化，使整篇文章句型就会呈现

13、句型的变化，使整篇文章句型 丰富。丰富。 例如在例如在2006年的高考中，很多学生在表达我们年的高考中，很多学生在表达我们 每次可以借五本书最多借十天时：每次可以借五本书最多借十天时： We can borrow five books at most, and we can keep them for ten days. At most five books can be borrowed at a time and they can be kept for ten days. 哪种表达法分数会更高？哪种表达法分数会更高？ 几乎所有的状语从句都可以变成独立主格或分几乎所有的状语从句都可以变成独

14、立主格或分 词结构，时间状语从句，原因状语，条件状语词结构，时间状语从句，原因状语，条件状语 等。例如条件状语从句：等。例如条件状语从句：If such is the case, you should apologize to her. 如何变成独立主如何变成独立主 格或分词结构呢？学会下面的口诀，如果你的格或分词结构呢？学会下面的口诀，如果你的 作文中有状语从句，马上可改成独立主格或分作文中有状语从句，马上可改成独立主格或分 词结构这个最大的亮点。词结构这个最大的亮点。 四、从句不如分词傲四、从句不如分词傲 口诀：一去，二看，三改。口诀：一去，二看，三改。 一去：去连词；二看：看主语；三改：

15、改分词。一去：去连词；二看：看主语；三改：改分词。 第一步，去掉连词if； If such is the case, you should apologize to her. 第二步，看前后两句话的主语，前后主语不一致， 所以要改成独立主格； 第三步，改分词，is 变成分词是being 最后变成 Such being the case, you should apologize to her 如果前后两句话主语一致，就变成分词结构。 原文原文 The young man couldnt help crying when he heard the bad news. 修正修正 Hearing t

16、he bad news, the young man couldnt help crying. 原文原文 If everything is taken into consideration, we ought to have another chance. 修正修正 Everything taken into consideration, we ought to have another chance. 高三学生学习紧张，考试压力大，高三学生学习紧张，考试压力大， 因此，做一些户外运动时很有必要的。因此，做一些户外运动时很有必要的。 请你以请你以“Health and Sports”为题完为题

17、完 成一篇短文。可以围绕主题适当展开，成一篇短文。可以围绕主题适当展开， 词数词数100120。 范文评讲范文评讲: Some students say that taking sports is just a waste of time. At school, there are so many subjects to learn and so much homework to do that time is precious to them. To us senior three students, every minute counts. As a consequence, there

18、is no time available, especially for students to take outside sports. However, I should utter a sonorous voice that sports are essential to us. As an old saying goes, “All work and no play make Jack a dull boy.” Concentrating on study for all day long without any relaxation is not effective and do h

19、arm to our health. Taking some exercises after class can relive the pressure of taking examinations. Of course, it is improper for students to overdo sports. As a whole, we should make a balance between sports and study. Health and Sports The majority of students hold the view that taking sports is

20、just a waste of time. At school, there are so many subjects to learn and so much homework to do that time is precious to them. As for us senior three students, every minute counts. As a consequence, there is no time available, especially for students to take outside sports. However, I should utter a

21、 sonorous voice that sports are essential to us. As an old saying goes, “All work and no play make Jack a dull boy.” Concentrating on study for all day long without any relaxation is not effective and do harm to our health. Taking some exercises after class can relive the pressure of taking examinat

22、ions. Of course, it is improper for students to overdo sports. As a whole, only by making a balance between sports and study can we benefit a lot from it and keep fit forever. 09年湖北高考英语作文年湖北高考英语作文 假设你是华华假设你是华华,与英国网友汤姆约定用对方的母语通信与英国网友汤姆约定用对方的母语通信, 以以 提高各自的外语水平提高各自的外语水平. 最近你收到汤姆的电子邮件最近你收到汤姆的电子邮件(附后附后),

23、 发现有一个成语使用不当发现有一个成语使用不当.请根据下列要点请根据下列要点,用英文回一封电用英文回一封电 子邮件子邮件. 要点要点:1. 不应使用不应使用 “无所不为无所不为”,应使用应使用 “无无 所事事所事事”; 2. 说明这两个成语的用法说明这两个成语的用法; 3. 给予鼓励给予鼓励. Hi Tom, Nice to read your e-mail today. I noticed youve begun to use Chinese idioms and used most of them correctly. However, Im afraid there is one mis

24、take Id like to point out. It is “无所不为无所不为”. This idiom means “do all kinds of bad things ”. Are you doing all kinds of bad things at home? I guess what you were really trying to say is that you have got nothing to do these days. In that case, you should use “无所事事无所事事”. We usually use “无所无所 不为不为” to

25、 express the idea that people dare to do anything bad, and “无所事事无所事事” to describe the situation in which people have got nothing meaningful to do. Have I made myself clear? Anyway, Im amazed at the progress youve made. However, Im afraid there is one mistake Id like to point out. It is “无所不为无所不为”. T

26、his idiom means “do all kinds of bad things ”. Are you doing all kinds of bad things at home? I guess what you were really trying to say is that you have got nothing to do these days. In that case, you should use “无所事事无所事事”. “无所不为无所不为”is usually used to express the idea that people dare to do anythi

27、ng bad. Only when people have got nothing meaningful to do will they pick over “无所事事无所事事” to describe their situation. Have I made myself clear? Anyway, how amazed Im at the progress youve made! 高考的书面表达重在设计，如何高考的书面表达重在设计，如何 设计出让阅卷老师看了眼前一亮设计出让阅卷老师看了眼前一亮 的句子，写出有分词，倒装，强的句子，写出有分词，倒装，强 调，修辞的句子，使整篇文章句调，修辞

28、的句子，使整篇文章句 型丰富，不单一，有效的使用连型丰富，不单一，有效的使用连 接成分使文章连贯，方能在高考接成分使文章连贯，方能在高考 中拿到高分。中拿到高分。 如何指导高考考生如何指导高考考生 进行英语写作备考进行英语写作备考 英语作文基础技能写作英语作文基础技能写作 造句功能重基础能力培养造句功能重基础能力培养 简单句须有复杂结构相伴简单句须有复杂结构相伴 复合句表述最讲恰到好处复合句表述最讲恰到好处 联句成篇练习要天天不断联句成篇练习要天天不断 熟能生巧必定能妙笔生花熟能生巧必定能妙笔生花 写作格式最好长短交错式写作格式最好长短交错式 誊写核对措辞时态誊写核对措辞时态 标点符号准确到位

29、标点符号准确到位 每天练笔熟悉句型每天练笔熟悉句型 名句谚语铭记心上名句谚语铭记心上 注重一词多义形式注重一词多义形式 英汉互译强化记忆英汉互译强化记忆 限时练笔提炼思路限时练笔提炼思路 平时演练实战见效平时演练实战见效 写作要领清晰明了写作要领清晰明了 有形无形写作概念有形无形写作概念 细细审读要求题示细细审读要求题示 拟好提纲排列顺序拟好提纲排列顺序 思路清晰分段陈述思路清晰分段陈述 草稿写作认真细心草稿写作认真细心 第一步：仔细阅读写作要求，确定写作要点；第一步：仔细阅读写作要求，确定写作要点； 基础写作步骤： 第三步：依据句式结构要求，巧妙整合各句。第三步：依据句式结构要求，巧妙整合各

30、句。 第二步：认真拟好写作顺序，先写出简单句；第二步：认真拟好写作顺序，先写出简单句； Tom is an American student. He comes from Los Angeles. He studies at a university in China. He is interested in the cultures of Eastern Asia. Tom, an American student, who comes from Los Angeles, studies at a university in China because he is interested in

31、 the cultures of Eastern Asia. 实例一 通知 新光中学高三年级学生将于10月19日去体检。 1.体检地点：第一人民医院 2.体检日期：10月19日，星期三 注意： 1.7:45在医院门口集合，可以骑车或步行前往 2. 体检前空腹 3. 在医院保持安静，听从医生和护士的安排。 1. The students of Senior three in Xinguang Middle School are going to have their physical check-up. 2. The physical examination is held in the 1st

32、 Peoples Hospital on Wednesday, 19th October. 3. The students should meet at the gate of the hospital at 7:45 a.m. 4. You can go there by bicycle or on foot. 5. Youre not allowed to have anything before the check-up that morning. 6. You must keep quiet in the hospital. 7. You should follow the docto

33、rs and nurses there. NOTICE All the students of Senior 3 in Xinguang Middle School will have a physical check-up in the 1st Peoples Hospital. The physical check-up will be held on Wednesday, 19th October. All the students must meet at the gate of the hospital, getting there by bicycle or on foot. Yo

34、u are not allowed to have anything before the check-up. And by the way, you should keep quiet there waiting for the check-up and follow the doctors and the nurses， please.78 words 看图作文的写作方法看图作文的写作方法 1.以一图两为的方式进行写作以一图两为的方式进行写作 2. 巧用连词的前后呼应巧用连词的前后呼应 3. 叙述事件过程用过去时，叙述事件过程用过去时， 谈论自身看法用现在时谈论自身看法用现在时 1. 以时

35、间为主线以时间为主线 2. 以动作顺序为写作主线以动作顺序为写作主线 3. 也可夹叙夹议的方式也可夹叙夹议的方式 4. 一种时态为主，多为过去时一种时态为主，多为过去时 记叙文的写作方法：记叙文的写作方法： 图表题示写作方法图表题示写作方法 1. 不同观点分开写，最好分段写不同观点分开写，最好分段写 2. 注意连词褒贬搭配，语气恰到好处注意连词褒贬搭配，语气恰到好处 3. 首段提出事由论点，主体两段摆论首段提出事由论点，主体两段摆论 据，叙述理由；据，叙述理由； 4. 尾段必须陈述自己的观点；尾段必须陈述自己的观点； 5. 巧用成语重意义匹配，分数要上档次巧用成语重意义匹配，分数要上档次 英语

36、成语与谚语英语成语与谚语 Roman is not built one day. When in Rome, do as Romans do. Dont count your eggs before they are hatched. Never cry over the split milk. Therere two rabbits fighting each other in your heart. He looks like a cat on a hot brick. One stone, two birds. One coin has two sides. As strong as a

37、 horse As busy as a bee There is no place like home. A swallow doesnt make a summer. Two heads are better than one. All that glittering is not gold. 假设你是一名中学生，叫李华，请根据下表内容假设你是一名中学生，叫李华，请根据下表内容 用英语写信给某报社用英语写信给某报社Just Ask栏目主持人栏目主持人Ralph，请求，请求 帮助解决一个长期困扰你的问题。帮助解决一个长期困扰你的问题。 你的情况1. 学习成绩好 2. 爱母亲 3. 有点害怕母亲

38、 你母亲的情况1. 大学教授，工作勤奋 2. 很少有时间和你说话 3. 对你很严，易发脾气 你的问题1. 很少交流 2. 希望互相了解 3. 不知如何沟通 注意：1. 词数：100左右 2. 可是当增减细节，使内容连贯 3. 开始结尾句已给出，不计入总词数 4参考词汇：发脾气lose ones temper Dear Ralph, Im a middle school student. And I always do well in my studies. Much as I love my mother, I have a little fear of her. She is a profe

39、ssor in a university. She works diligently so that she is so busy with her work. On account of her little free time, she seldom has a talk with me. On the other hand, she is strict with me and very easy to get in a temper. I really dont know how to improve this problem seldom communication. Im eager

40、 to know more about my mother and communicate with her more and more, but theres no chance. And I really dont know how to communicate with her. Generation gap as we have, I believe there must be a way to get it across. I do hope well be closer. What can I do? Sincerely yours, Li Hua Dear Ralph, Im a

41、 middle school student. Though I do well in my studies, I have got something that always worries me a lot I dont know how to communicate with my mother. Love her as I do, Im sort of afraid of her. My mother is professor in a university and she works very hard to do everything well. So she seldom has

42、 time to talk with me, and is always strict with me. Whats more, she loses temper easily. My problem is that we seldom communicate with each other. I wish we could understand each other better, but I really dont know how to do the communication. Can you offer me some advice? I do hope well be closer

43、. What can I do? Yours Sincerely, Li Hua Dear Ralph, Im a middle school student. I always do well in my studies, but Im not happy. I dont get along well with my mother. Thats why I write to you. My mother is a professor in a university, and she works very hard. I love her, but Im a bit afraid of her. She is strict with me because she wants me to be excellent. She often works all day long and easily loses her temper. Shes so busy that she has little time to talk with me. I think I have some problems myself. I seldom communicate with her because I think we have nothing to talk about. I kn