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EnglishWritingWafangdianSeniorMiddleSchoolLengNa theTrendofEnglishwritingincollegeentranceexaminationAnalysesofsomeCommonMistakesinEnglishWritingMarkingcriterionWritingtips Content 历年高考书面表达题 辽宁命题趋势 虽然每年的书面表达都属于提示型写作 但越来越重视创造情景 由单纯汉语提示转向图表提示为主 汉语提示为辅 考生必须首先理解图画或表格的含义 然后才能开始组句成文 文体类型丰富 名人传记 活动记事 情况汇报 学校介绍 求职自荐 趣味故事等内容 文体呈多样化 题材内容丰富贴近生活 常见错误分析 括号中为正确的表达方式 1 单词拼写错误单词拼写错误率极高 许多考生甚至出现很低级的错误 比如 litter little perfer prefer intresting interesting famlies families chioce choice ourself ourselves stroy story agaist against 等 2 词语搭配不当或用词不准确考生对常用短语 表达法掌握不够 出现不当搭配 比如 lookbook readthebook lookthefilm seethefilm Manypeoplecostmuchmoney spendmuchmoney prefertoseeingthefilm prefertoseethefilm spendusashorttime takesusashorttime afterreadthebook afterreadingthebook writeskill writingskill 等 3 画蛇添足有些考生在全文结束时画蛇添足 加上一句错误的问句 比如 Areyouagree Sowhatdoyouchoice 4 汉语式英语在书面表达中所体现的中文式思维是极为普遍的现象 如 Seeingthefilmwillsavemuchtime Seeingfilmsareconvenient 5 交白卷或抄与题材无关的段落经抽样发现 0分试卷约占3 9 左右 这些得0分的考生中 有的是只字未写 有的是虽有所写却未能传达给读者任何信息 而有的则是挑选阅读材料中的其中一段抄下来 6 书写潦草在阅卷中发现 有相当一部分考生的作文卷面不清 书写潦草 影响信息的传递 评分原则中有一条表明 若书写较差 影响交际 将分数降低一个档次 7 语言平乏 词汇档次欠高不少考生大脑记忆库词汇量储存不够 难以灵活运用语言 导致语言平乏 同一种表达重复较多 8 文章缺乏连贯性有些考生在词汇的运用和内容的表达上都基本达到要求 但由于句与句 段与段之间没有添加恰当的连接成分 使句子之间和段落之间缺乏必要的过渡和衔接 影响了表达的效果 9 死背范文部分考生死背范文 表达不灵活 例如 有些考生不管所给首句 文不对题地顾自另起一句 I mwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwerecentlyhadaboutwhether 1 句子缺谓语Thebuildinglikeamatchbox 2 主谓不一致 尤其是单数第三人称作主语时 谓语的单复数形式出现错误 Aworkerofthefarmleadustothefield Correction Thebuildinglookslikeamatchbox Aworkerofthefarmleadsustothefield 3 时态错误Whenhecameback hefoundthathiswifehasgonetobed 4 词性混用Ifanyoneagainsttheplan pleaseletmeknow Whenhecameback hefoundthathiswifehadgonetobed Ifanyoneisagainsttheplan pleaseletmeknow 5 介词误用Inmysurprise hehasgotthefirstprize 6 冠词误用WeelectedLiHuathemonitoroftheClassFive 7 名词的数混淆ItisraretoseesuchaniceweatherinBeijing Tomysurprise hehasgotthefirstprize WeelectedLiHuamonitoroftheClassFive ItisraretoseesuchniceweatherinBeijing 8 动词用法错误Whereareyoucomefrom 9 习惯用法错误1 IandMyparentswereworkinginthefieldsatthattime 2 Thereasonisbecausehedoesnotknowwhattodonext Wheredoyoucomefrom MyparentsandIwereworkinginthefieldsatthattime Thereasonisthathedoesnotknowwhattodonext 书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求 第五档 21 25分 完全完成了试题规定的任务 准确 清楚地表达了短文的内容 要点无遗漏应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误 但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式所致 具备较强的语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间的连接成分 使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的 第四档 16 20分 完成了试题规定的任务 比较准确 清楚地表达了短文的内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确 少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单的语句间的连接成分 使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的 第三档 11 15分 基本完成了试题规定的任务 能说出短文的基本内容 但逻辑关系较混乱 要点有遗漏 没有写自己的认识应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求有一些语法结构和词汇的错误 但不影响理解应用简单的语句间连接成分 使全文内容连贯整体而言 基本达到了预期的写作目的 第二档 6 10分 未恰当完成试题规定的任务 未能清楚地表达短文的内容 写了一些无关内容语法结构简单 词汇项目有限有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误 影响了对写作内容的理解较少使用语句间的连接成分 内容缺少连贯性信息未能清楚地传达给读者 Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition 1 Recitesomeusuallyappliedsentences 2 Applygoodsentencepatterns 3 Applygoodtransitionalwordsandphrases 4 Applyadvancedwordsandphrases 5 Goodhandwriting 6 Sixwritingsteps 1 Recitesomeusuallyappliedsentences 一 开头句型 1 Asfaras isconcerned2 Itgoeswithoutsayingthat 3 Itcanbesaidwithcertaintythat 4 Astheproverbsays 5 Ithastobenoticedthat 二 衔接句型 Acaseinpointis Asisoftenthecase Asisstatedinthepreviousparagraph如前段所述Buttheproblemisnotsosimple Therefore然而问题并非如此简单 所以 Butit sapitythat 三 结尾句型 Iwillconcludebysaying Therefore wehavethereasontobelievethat Allthingsconsidered 总而言之Itmaybesafelysaidthat Therefore inmyopinion it smoreadvisable 四 举例句型 Let stake toillustratethis 试举例以兹证明let staketheabovechartasanexampletoillustratethis Hereisonemoreexample Take forexample Thesameistrueof 五常用于引言段的句型 Somepeoplethinkthat Tobefrank Icannotagreewiththeiropinionforthereasonsbelow Foryears hasbeenseenas butthingsarequitedifferentnow Ibelievethetitlestatementisvalidbecause Icannotentirelyagreewiththeideathat Ibelieve Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition 1 Recitesomeusuallyappliedsentences 2 Applygoodsentencepatterns 3 Applygoodtransitionalwordsandphrases 4 Applyadvancedwordsandphrases 5 Goodhandwriting 6 Sixwritingsteps 一改变时态例 Thebellisringingnow 一般Theregoesthebell 特殊二改变语态例 Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff 一般Itissuggestedthattheconferencebeputoff 特殊三使用不定式例 Heissokindthathecanhelpme 一般Heissokindastohelpme 特殊 四使用过去分词例 Shewalkedoutofthelabandmanystudentsfollowedher 一般Followedbymanystudents shewalkedoutofthelab 特殊 五使用现在分词例 Iftheweatherpermits Iwillcometomorrow 一般Iwillcometomorrow weatherpermitting 特殊 六使用名词性从句1Hedidn tturnup Itdisappointedeverybody 一般Thefactthathedidn tturnupdisappointedeverybody 特殊2 Tohissurprise thelittlegirlknowssomanythings 一般Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings 特殊 七使用定语从句例 Thegirlisspokenhighlyof Hercompositionwaswellwritten 一般Thegirlwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenisspokenhighlyof 特殊八使用状语从句例 Iwon tbelievewhathesays 一般Nomatterwhathesays Iwon tbelieve 特殊 九使用虚拟语气例 Theshipdidn tsinkwithallonboardbecausethereweretheeffortsofthecaptain 一般Butfortheeffortsofthecaptain theshipwouldhavesunkwithallonboard 特殊十使用倒装句型例 ThoughI mweakI llmaketheeffort 一般WeakasIam I llmaketheeffort 特殊 Describethefollowingpictures 1 他是一个八岁的男孩 A Heisaboyandheiseightyearsold B Heisaboy whoiseightC Heisaboyofeight 2 那女子笑着说 此事很奇怪 A Itisverystrange thewomansaidandsmiled B Itisverystrange thewomansaid withasmileC Itisverystrange saidthewoman smiling 3 当他从车上摔下时 有人正经过 A SomeonewaspassingbywhenhefelloffB Someonehappenedtobepassingbywhenhefelloffhisbike 4 哥哥骑车带着我 A MybrotherwasridingabikeandIsatatthebackofit B Mybrotherwasridingwithmesittingontheseatback Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition 1 Recitesomeusuallyappliedsentences 2 Applygoodsentencepatterns 3 Applygoodtransitionalwordsandphrases 4 Applyadvancedwordsandphrases 5 Goodhandwriting 6 Sixwritingsteps 递进型 besides what smore letalone tosaynothingof whatwasworse moreovereven等 解释型 thatis tosay inotherwords or inthesameway 等 转折型 however but yet although otherwise instead等 列举型 firstly secondly finally first atfirst atlast next 举例型 forexample suchas thatis forinstance 等 因果型 because of since as therefore so asaresult thanksto thus owingto seeingthat等 强调型 aboveall indeed surely certainly ofcourse afterall atleast atmost firstofall 等 归纳总结型 inconclusion inaword tosumup inshort ingeneral generallyspeaking等 Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition 1 Recitesomeusuallyappliedsentences 2 Applygoodsentencepatterns 3 Applygoodtransitionalwordsandphrases 4 Applyadvancedwordsandphrases 5 Goodhandwriting 6 Sixwritingsteps 6 Sixwritingsteps Step1 仔细审题Step2 理清要点Step3 译写单句Step4 连句成篇Step5 检查润色Step6 定稿誊写 中央号召创建节约型社会 可是许多校园内部浪费现象严重 请你在班会上发表演讲 号召同学们从我做起 杜绝浪费 提示 1 浪费现象 水 电 餐厅的食物及其他 2 危害 自身性格 父母财政负担 自然资源 3 制止浪费现象的措施 由自己设想 要求 1 词数150左右 演讲的开头和结尾已写好 不记入总词数 2 不要逐字逐条翻译 要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文 Step1 仔细审题 Aspeech Para 1 Measures Phenomena Harm Para 3 Para 2 Step2 理清要点 Step3 译写单句 Step4 连句成篇 Para 1Phenomena havelightsonordertoomuchfoodandleaveleftoversonthetable Somestudentshavethelightsoninthedaytime Somestudentsordertoomuchfoodandleavealotofleftoversonthetable Someasktheirparentsforalotofpocketmoneyandspendtoomuchonsnacksordrinks usepapercasuallyspendpocketmoneyonsnacks Somestudentsleavetapwaterrunningafterwashing leavetapwaterrunning Para 2Harm haveabadeffectonone scharacterbuildingaddfinancialburdentoone sparentsuseuptheworld slimitednaturalresources school burdenwithextraexpenditure 开支 Thebadhabitofbeingwastefulwillhaveabadeffectontheirowncharacter Itaddsfinancialburdentotheirparents Theworld slimitednaturalresourceswillbeusedupsoon Para 3Measures haveaclearawarenessoftheserioussituationeducatestudentsinschoolsetrulesstartfromoneselftaketheleadinreducingthewaste Inmyopinion weshouldhaveaclearawarenessoftheserioussituation Weshouldeducatethestudentstoformthegoodhabit Weshouldstartwithourselvesandtaketheleadinreducingthewastetosaveeverything Somestudentsleavetapwaterrunningafterwashing Somestudentshavethelightsoninthedaytime Somestudentsordertoomuchfoodandleavealotofleftoversonthetable Someasktheirparentsforalotofpocketmoneyandspendtoomuchonsnacksordrinks Thebadhabitofbeingwastefulwillhaveabadeffectontheirowncharacter Itaddsfinancialburdentotheirparents Theworld slimitednaturalresourceswillbeusedupsoon Inmyopinion weshouldhaveaclearawarenessoftheserioussituation Weshouldeducatethestudentstoformthegoodhabit Weshouldstartwithourselvesandtaketheleadinreducingthewastetosaveeverything 117words Step5 检查润色 Somestudentsleavetapwaterrunningafterwashing Somestudentshavethelightsoninthedaytime Somestudentsordertoomuchfoodandleavemuchleftoversonthetable Someasktheirparentsforalotofpocketmoneyandspendtoomuchonsnacksordrinks Thestudentsleavetapwaterrunningafterwashingandhavethelightsoninthedaytime whichmeansahugewasteofwaterandelectricity Somestudentsgetintoabadhabitoforderingmuchdeliciousfoodinthecanteenbuttheydon teatallthefood leavingmuchonthetable Someasktheirparentsforalotofpocketmoney Soitishightimewehadtodealwiththeproblem Thereasonsareasfollows 在表达准确 保持连贯的基础上 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高级的词汇 Comment Thebadhabitofbeingwastefulwillhaveabadeffectontheirowncharacter Itaddsfinancialburdentotheirparents Theworld slimitednaturalresourceswillbeusedup Inthefirstplace thebadhabitofbeingwastefulwillhaveabadeffectontheirowncharacter Secondly itaddsfinancialburdentotheirparents Lastbutnotleast theworld slimitednaturalresources suchaswaterandelectricity willbeusedupsoon FirstofallFirstly Tobeginwith Inaddition Besides Moreover What smore Finally What sworse 在表达准确 保持连贯的基础上 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高级的词汇 恰当使用过渡词或过渡句 使文章结构紧凑 Comment Inmyopinion weshouldhaveaclearawarenessoftheserioussituation Weshouldeducatethestudentstoformthegoodhabit Weshouldstartwithourselvesandtaketheleadinreducingthewastetosaveeverything Buthowcanwereducewaste Inmyopinion itiseverybody sdutytofightagainstwaste Ontheonehand Ishouldstartwithmyselftosaveeverything Ontheotherhand I dliketoremindmyfriendsheretotaketheleadinreducingthewaste AsfarasIamconcerned Ithinkonlywhenallofusarefullyawareofitsseriousnesscanthesituationbeimproved Ontheonehand itisnecessaryforschoolstoeducateeverystudentnottowasteanythinginanyformandontheotherhandeveryoneofusshouldstartwithourselvestofightagainstwaste Itisnotuntilallofusareinvolvedintheactivitythatwecanbringthesituationundercontrol 在表达准确 保持连贯的基础上 尽量使用较复杂的语法结构和较高级的词汇 恰当使用过渡词或过渡句 使文章结构紧凑 适当地变换句型结构和所用词汇 尽量避免重复和单调 Comment Nowdays itiscommonthatthestudentshavetapwaterrunningafterwashingandleavethelightsoninthedaytime whichmeansahugewasteofwaterandelectricity Somestudentsgetintoabadhabitoforderingmuchdeliciousfoodinthecanteenbuttheydon teatallthefood leavingmuchonthetable Someevenasktheirparentsforalotofpocketmoney Soitishightimewehadtodealwiththeproblem Thereasonsareasfollows Sample Inthefirstpla