家庭温情类读后续写沉浸于丧偶悲伤的爷爷为治愈孙女Rosa参加校园活动怒减十年沧桑讲义-T8高三3月联合测评英语试题

25届T8联盟第二次联考英语试题阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文AfterWalterBergen'swifedied,hewasthrownintodeepsorrowandloneliness(情绪描写).Hepaidnoattentiontoanything.Hishousefellintodisrepair,withdustgathering(非谓语动词)everywhere(with复合状语)anddirtydishespilingupinthesink(with复合状语并列项)(寓情于景).HegaveupcookingandsurvivedonTVdinnersandtoast.Hisclotheswentunwashed(人物失落的状态描写),andheneglectedhispersonalcare,withashaggybeardandmessyhair(with介短做伴随状语)(刻画人物交代背景信息).Hisdaughter,Melanie,wasextremelyworried.Shedrovetohishouseandpleaded,“Dad!Thisisn'tright.Youcan'tstayhere.elivewithus."ButWaltershotbackangrily,“Idon'twanttoliveinyourhouse.I'mfine.Justleavemealone!”Melanieleft,herheartheavywithconcern(独立主格刻画人物情绪).Afewweekslater,WalterwalkedtothesupermarkettobuyhisusualTVdinnersandbread.Ashecrossedtheroad,hismindelsewhere(独立主格刻画人物),hedidn'tlookeitherway.Acarhithim,andanambulancerushedhimtothehospital.Atthehospital,Melanieexclaimed,“Dad!You'renotlivingaloneanymore.You'reingtoourhouse."Walter,weakanddefeated(adj做主语补语),finallyagreed.AtMelanie'shouse,herhusbandRogerwasn'tpleased,“Yourfatherisdirtyandalwaysinabadmood.Whyishelivingwithus?"heplained.Melaniefirmlyreplied,“He'smyfather.He'soldandheartbroken.Heneedstostay."Rogersighedandsaid,“Iunderstand."Rosa,MelanieandRoger'sdaughter,wasnineyearsold.OneeveningduringdinnerMelanieannounced“Tomorrow,Rosa'sschoolhasGrandparent'sDay."Walter,curious(adj做主语补语),asked,“What'sGrandparent'sDay?"Melanieexplained,“Thechildren'sgrandparentsvisittheschool,watchthekids’activities,andplaygameswiththem.It'sreallyfun.Walterdeclared,“I'mRosa'sgrandfather.I'llgo."Uponhearingthis(ondoingsth一...就...),Rosajumpedup,rantoherroomandlockedherselfin(动词并列).Laterthatnight,asWalterwasabouttogotobedandwalkedpastRosa'sroom,heheardhersobbing.ThenfollowedRoger'svoice(倒装句),“Rosa,stopcrying.Grandpaisjustgoingthroughatoughtime.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右:2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:“No!”shoutedRosa.Paragraph2:Thestudentswenttotheschoolhalltofindtheirgrandparents.

25届T8联盟第二次联考英语试题阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文AfterWalterBergen'swifedied,hewasthrownintodeepsorrowandloneliness.Hepaidnoattentiontoanything.Hishousefellintodisrepair,withdustgatheringeverywhereanddirtydishespilingupinthesink.HegaveupcookingandsurvivedonTVdinnersandtoast.Hisclotheswentunwashed,andheneglectedhispersonalcare,withashaggybeardandmessyhair.Hisdaughter,Melanie,wasextremelyworried.Shedrovetohishouseandpleaded,“Dad!Thisisn'tright.Youcan'tstayhere.elivewithus."ButWaltershotbackangrily,“Idon'twanttoliveinyourhouse,I'mfine.Justleavemealone!”Melanieleft,herheartheavywithconcern.Afewweekslater,WalterwalkedtothesupermarkettobuyhisusualTVdinnersandbread.Ashecrossedtheroad,hismindelsewhere,hedidn'tlookeitherway.Acarhithim,andanambulancerushedhimtothehospital.Atthehospital,Melanieexclaimed,“Dad!You'renotlivingaloneanymore.You'reingtoourhouse."Walter,weakanddefeated,finallyagreed.AtMelanie'shouse,herhusbandRogerwasn'tpleased,“Yourfatherisdirtyandalwaysinabadmood.Whyishelivingwithus?"heplained,Melaniefirmlyreplied,“He'smyfather.He'soldandheartbroken.Heneedstostay."Rogersighedandsaid,“Iunderstand."Rosa,MelanieandRoger'sdaughter,wasnineyearsold.OneeveningduringdinnerMelanieannounced“Tomorrow,Rosa'sschoolhasGrandparent'sDay."Walter,curious,asked,“What'sGrandparent'sDay?"Melanieexplained,“Thechildren'sgrandparentsvisittheschool,watchthekids’activities,andplaygameswiththem.It'sreallyfirm.Walterdeclared,“I'mRosa'sgrandfather.I'llgo."Uponhearingthis,Rosajumpedup,rantoherroomandlockedherselfin.Laterthatnight,asWalterwasabouttogotobedandwalkedpastRosa'sroom.heheardhersobbing.ThenfollowedRoger'svoice,“Rosa,stopcrying.Grandpaisjustgoingthroughatoughtime.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右:2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:“No!”shoutedRosa.Paragraph2:Thestudentswenttotheschoolhalltofindtheirgrandparents.

1.文章分类与续写思路分析文章类型：情感治愈类（家庭关系修复+祖孙情感纽带）续写构思方向：主题：通过“Grandparent’sDay”活动，Walter与Rosa从隔阂到理解，最终建立情感连接。冲突：Rosa对祖父的抗拒vs.Walter的孤独与渴望亲情。解决：通过共同参与活动，Walter改变形象/行为，Rosa看到祖父的温暖。框架布局：段落内容要点衔接原文第一段Rosa拒绝祖父参与活动，揭露她对祖父邋遢外表的厌恶或对家庭变化的抵触。承接Rosa锁门哭泣和Roger的安慰。第二段Walter主动改变（如剃须、换衣服），活动中展现关爱（如帮Rosa赢游戏），Rosa态度转变。呼应Walter的“defeated”心态和Melanie的坚持。注意事项：承接原文：Walter的邋遢形象（shaggybeard,dirtyclothes）。Rosa的哭泣暗示她对祖父的复杂情绪。Roger的抱怨需间接解决（如Walter主动整理仪表）。巧妙设计：用动作描写体现Walter的改变（如“ranahandthroughhisnowtrimmedbeard”）。通过环境对比（混乱的家vs.整洁的学校）突出主题。2.故事山模式与原文分析故事山模式：开端：Walter丧妻后颓废。发展：车祸被迫搬入女儿家。高潮：Rosa抗拒祖父参与活动。解决：活动中建立情感纽带。分析表格：分析角度内容原文反应句人物刻画Walter的颓废形象“shaggybeardandmessyhair”,“clotheswentunwashed”情感层次Rosa的抗拒与Walter的孤独“Rosajumpedup...lockedherselfin”,“heardhersobbing”关键情节点车祸迫使Walter接受帮助“Acarhithim...finallyagreed”隐含主题亲情治愈伤痛“He’soldandheartbroken.Heneedstostay.”伏笔冲突点Roger的不满与Rosa的哭泣“Yourfatherisdirty...”,“Rosa...lockedherselfin”续写语料库动作描写（PhysicalActions）Rosa’ssmallhandstrembledassheclutchedtheedgeofherdress.

（紧张）Walter’sfingersfumbledwiththerazor,hishandsunsteadyfromyearsofneglect.

（笨拙）Shejerkedawaywhenhereachedout,herbodystiffwithresistance.

（抗拒）Hisshouldersslumpedindefeatasheturnedtowardthedoor.

（沮丧）Melanie’sgriptightenedonthesteeringwheel,herknuckleswhitening.

（焦虑）Rosa’sfeetdraggedasshereluctantlyfollowedherclassmatesintothehall.

（不情愿）Walterhesitatedbeforeknocking,hishandhoveringmidair.

（犹豫）Rogercrossedhisarms,hisjawclenchedinsilentdisapproval.

（不满）Rosa’sbreathhitchedwhenshespottedhim—cleanshaven,standingtall.

（惊讶）Withoutaword,shereachedoutandtookhishand,herfingerscurlingaroundhis.

（和解）心理描写（InternalEmotions）Awaveofshamecrashedoverhimasherealizedhowfarhe’dlethimselfgo.

（羞耻）Rosa’sstomachtwistedintoknotsatthethoughtofGrandpaembarrassingher.

（焦虑）Forthefirsttimeinmonths,aflickerofdeterminationignitedinWalter’schest.

（决心）Melanie’sheartachedatthesightofherfather’sholloweyes.

（悲伤）GuiltgnawedatRosaasshereplayedherharshwords.

（内疚）Walter’smindraced—whatifshestillrejectedhim?

（恐惧）AstrangewarmthspreadthroughRosa’schestwhenshesawhiseffort.

（感动）Roger’sirritationsimmeredbeneaththesurface,buthebitbackhisplaints.

（克制）TheweightoflonelinessliftedslightlyasWaltermethisgranddaughter’sgaze.

（解脱）Rosa’searlierangermeltedaway,replacedbyanunfamiliarsenseofsafety.

（安心）环境描写（Setting&Atmosphere）Theschoolhallbuzzedwithlaughter,astarkcontrasttoWalter’ssilentgloom.

（对比）Dustmotesfloatedinthesunlightstreamingthroughthegrimywindowsofhisoldhouse.

（荒凉）Thescentofantiseptichungheavyinthehospitalair,sterileandunweling.

（压抑）Outside,rainpatteredagainstthewindow,mirroringRosa’squiettears.

（象征）Thepolishedfloorsoftheschoolhallwayreflectedthefluorescentlights,toobrightandcheerful.

（反衬）Acolddraftseepedthroughthecracksoftheneglectedhouse,whisperingofabandonment.

（孤寂）ThearomaoffreshlybakedcookiesfromtheschooleventteasedRosa’snose,acruelreminderofnormalcy.

（感官细节）ShadowsstretchedlongacrossWalter’sbedroom,swallowingwhatlittlelightremained.

（绝望）Thegrandfatherclockinthehallwaytickedloudly,eachsecondareminderofwastedtime.

（时间流逝）Astheysteppedintothehalltogether,themurmursofotherfamilieswrappedaroundthemlikeaninvisibleblanket.

（氛围转变）高级替换词（场景分类）基础词高级替换词适用场景例句SadGriefstricken深度悲伤"Walter’sgriefstrickenfacehauntedMelanie."DirtyDisheveled外貌邋遢"HisdisheveledappearancemadeRosacringe."LookGaze(v.)凝视"Shegazedathim,searchingforthegrandpasheonceknew."SmellReek(v.)难闻气味"Hisclothesreekedofmothballsandneglect."WalkTrudge(v.)疲惫行走"Hetrudgedupthestairs,eachstepheavierthanthelast."例句推荐：类型例句动作WalterhesitantlyreachedouttostraightenRosa’scrumpleddress.心理ApangofguiltshotthroughRosaassheglancedatGrandpa’stiredeyes.环境Theschoolhallbuzzedwithlaughter,astarkcontrasttoWalter’ssilentgloom.高级替换词：基础词高级替换场景sadgriefstricken情感描写dirtydisheveled外貌描写lookgaze(v.)动作描写4.语法与语料分析语法现象：With复合结构：“Hishousefellintodisrepair,

withdustgatheringeverywhere.”(伴随状态)可积累语料：短语/词词性/释义例句shootbackv.愤怒回应“‘No!’sheshotback,hervoicetrembling.”heavywithadj.充满（情绪）“Theairwasheavywiththescentofrain.”

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"No!"shoutedRosa.

Hertinyfistsclenchedathersides(动作刻画心理),herchestheavingwithsuppressedsobs(独立主格刻画人物状态)."Idon’twantGrandpathere!"shecried,hervoicetremblingwithamixoffearandfrustration(独立主格+with复合结构).Walter,standingjustoutsidethedoor(现在分词短语做伴随动作),felthisheartsinklikeastone(心理描写).Hisgranddaughter’swordsechoedinhisears—dirty,smelly,embarrassing(并列).

Heglanceddownathiswrinkledshirtandunkemptbeard,shamewashingoverhim(独立主格刻画心理).Thatnight,insteadofretreatingintohisusualgloom,hedugoutanoldrazorandalongforgottensuit(与原文衔接).Thereflectioninthemirrorshowedamanhebarelyrecognized—broken,butnotbeyondrepair(adj短语做主语补语).Heintendedtochangewhathergranddaughter’simpressionabouthimthenextday.Paragraph2:

Thestudentswenttotheschoolhalltofindtheirgrandparents.

Rosalingeredneartheentrance,herstomachtwistingintoknots(独立主格刻画人物心理).WhatifGrandpadidn’te?Worse—whatifhedid,lookinglikebefore?Then,afamiliarvoicecalledhername.Sheturned—andfroze.TherestoodWalter(倒装句),cleanshaven(adj做主语补语),hissilverhairneatlybed(独立主格刻画人物形象),wearingabrightnavysuit(现在分词做后置定语).Heheldoutasmallwoodenbirdhe’dcarvedforher."Thoughtyoumightlikethis,"hesaidsoftly.Rosa’sbreathcaught.Theotherkidsstared,shefeltthatpridefloodedinher,lettingherfeelguiltyabout(现在分词做结果状语)whathadhappenedlastnight.Hesitantly,shereachedout—andtookhishand.Version2Paragraph1:

"No!"shoutedRosa.

Herfaceflushedredness(情绪状态描写)asshestompedherfoot,herpigtailsbouncingwiththeforceofheranger(独立主格刻画人物状态)."Grandpa’salwaysmoodyandsmellslikeoldtoast!"Thewordshungintheair(无灵主语句),sharpasbrokenglass(adj短语做补语).Walter,overhearingfromthehallway(现在分词做伴随动作),flinched.Hehadn’trealizedhowmuchhispresentstatushadhurther.Thatevening,insteadofsinkingintohisarmchair,hefumbledhisoldsuitcase—findingafadedbutcleanshirtandatie(现在分词短语做伴随动作)hehadn’tworninyears,andanoldrazor,usingwhichheshavedhimthoroughly(现在分词短语做伴随动作),finallyrevealingaface(现在分词短语做结果状语)he’dalmostforgotten.SecretlydeterminedtoimprovehisimageinRosa’seyes(adj短语做原因状语),hevowedtomaketomorrow’sGrandparent’sDayunforgettableforher(宾补).Paragraph2:

Thestudentswenttotheschoolhalltofindtheirgrandparents.

Spotting(现在分词做伴随动作)eachofherclasswasrushingtotheirgrandparents,Rosapacedbehindherclassmates,herstomachchurning(心理状态描写).WouldGrandpaembarrassher?Then,awarmhandtouchedhershoulder.Shespunaround—andgasped.Walterstoodthere,hisbeardgone(独立主格),hishairbed(独立主格),wearingapressedshirtandashysmile(现在分词短语做伴随动作)."ThoughtI’dtrytolook…presentable,"hemumbled.Rosa’seyeswidened(情绪描写：惊讶).Theotherkidswhispered,butforthefirsttime,itwasn’tindisgust.Aslowsmilespreadacrossherface(表情状态刻画).WithWalterpullingRosarightbeforehim,Rosastammeredout“I’mreallysorryaboutwhatIhadsaidyesterdaynight.”Waltersmiling(独立主格),Rosa’seyestwinkledwithmischief(人物神态描写)asshelookedathim,bothofthemsmiledwildly.Maybe,justmaybe,Grandpawasn’tsobadafterall.Version3Paragraph1:

"No!"shoutedRosa.

Hervoicecrackedlikethinice,hersmallframeshaking(独立主格刻画人物)."Grandpaneversmiles!Hejustsitsthere,all…sadandscary."Walter,lingeringinthehallway(现在分词短语做伴随动作),feltthewordslikeapunchtothegut.Hehadn’trealizedhowmuchhisgriefhadpushedeveryoneaway.Thatnight,insteadofretreatingtohisroom,hedugoutanoldphotoalbum—picturesofhimlaughing(独立主格或者名词+定语),holdingababyRosa(现在分词做伴随动作).Determinationflickeredinhischest(无灵主语句，心理描写).Thenextmorning,thescentofsoapandaftershavefilledthehouse.Paragraph2:

Thestudentswenttotheschoolhalltofindtheirgrandparents.

Noticing(现在分词做伴随动作)everyonewaschargingtowardstheirgrandparents,Rosawasalittleworried,herstomachinknots(独立主格刻画情绪).WhatifGrandpadidn’tshow?Then,afamiliarchucklemadeherturn(无灵主语句).