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导主题语境：人与自我话题分类：个人成长类词数：3911文本解读分析2类似话题迁移3语言表达积累目录01PARTONE文本解读分析通过记叙文要素（5w），梳理关键信息，确定文章主旨。Itallbeganwithaperfectgift.AcoupleofmonthsbeforeIstartedhighschool,myparentsgavemethegreatestgiftanyteenageboycouldaskfor:asmartphone.Ilivedonthatphoneallsummerwithmyfaceburiedinitsscreen.Iheldmulti-daymarathonmessageswitheveryfriendtokeepincontactwiththem.Iignoredmyfamily,mysurroundingsandononeunfortunateafternoon,acloseddoorthatseemedtoappearoutofnowhere.WhatIwasdoingwassecondarytowhateveryoneelsewasdoing.Beingconnectedwasmoreimportantthanbeingpresent.

文本分析段落大意：我收到了一个礼物——手机，从此之后我沉迷于手机。最后会发生变化吗？会发生什么样的转变？So,IfeltextremelydispleasedwhenIlearnedaboutmyfather’stravelarrangementsforourfamilyvacationthatyear.“Thisyear,”mydadsaid,“we’llbedoingsomethingspecial.We’regoingcamping.”文本分析段落大意：对于爸爸的旅行计划我极其不满意。Hisexcitementwasmetwithadisappointedsigh.ButIwasn’ttooannoyed.Itwasn’tmydreamvacation,butitwasstillavacation.Iremainedunbotheredthroughoutthepacking,planningand,ofcourse,theinstructionsthatwentinoneearandouttheother.Mymindwasonmyphone,andthemessageswereflyingbackandforth.Iwassoabsorbedinthescreeninmyhand,infact,thatthefirsttimeIcanremembertrulylookingupwaswhenwedroveacrossabridgeonthewaytoourcampsite.文本分析段落大意：在去野营的路上，我只沉浸在手机里。Istaredoutthewindowinadazeandsawredwoodstoweringaboveus,andaroaringriverrushingby.Theairblowingintothecarfromtheopenwindowswashotandsmelledofpine.Butnoneofthatmatteredtome.ThereasonIhadlookedupwasforsomethingfarmoreserious.Moreshocking.Myphonenolongerhadservice.文本分析段落大意：令我震惊的是我手机没有信号了。Thenmydadrevealedthathehadchosenadestinationwheretherewasnophonesignal,andmyphone—mylifeline—wouldbeuselessuntilwereturnedhome.Iwouldbetrappedintheforestforfourdayswithnowaytocontacttheoutsideworld.文本分析段落大意：爸爸说他选择了没有手机信号的野营地，接下来的四天里我将不能用手机和外面的世界取得联系。Onthefirstday,Ishouted.Ibargained.Ibegged.However,nothingwouldaddsignalbarstomyphoneservice.Iwenttobedangrythatnight,thinkingIwouldbeboredtodeaththenextday.ButwhenIwokeupinthemorning,somethinghadchanged.文本分析段落大意：第一天，我大叫祈求，然而一切都是徒然。发生了什么变化？Elementsofnarrativewritingsettings背景narrative叙述characters人物theme主题plots情节emotions情绪Readingforsettings5wWhenOnafamilyvacationWhereAtacampsiteWhoMyfatherandIWhyMyfatherchoseadestinationwithoutphonesignal.WhatIwastrappedintheforestforfourdayswithnowaytocontacttheoutsideworld.ReadingforcharactersI:Ilivedonthatphoneallsummer…Iignoredmyfamily,mysurroundings…SoIfeltextremelydispleased…Itwasn’tmydreamvacation,butitwasstillavacation.…theinstructionsthatwentinoneearandouttheother.Ishouted.Ibargained.Ibegged.ButwhenIwokeupinthemorning,somethinghadchanged.Myfather:…we’llbedoingsomethingspecial……mydadrevealedthathehadchosenadestinationwheretherewasnophonesignal…addicted,indifferent→positive,maturefunny,wise,patientReadingforplots故事线情感线（I）Myparentsgavemeasmartphone.Addictedtothe

phoneIlearnedaboutourfamilyvacation.DispleasedMyfamilybeganpacking.NottooannoyedMyphonenolongerhadservice.Extremely

upsetIfocusedonmysurroundings.?Thefourdayspassedinaflash.?ReadingforplotsParagraph1:

Insteadofburyingmyselfinmyphone,Ifocusedonsomethingelse:mysurroundings.Paragraph2:

Thefourdayspassedinaflash,fulloffunactivities.思考一：我周围的环境是怎么样的？思考二：我的情绪如何？思考三：如何衔接到第二段四天过得很快？思考一：都有哪些活动？思考二：我从这些活动中领悟到了什么？Readingfortheme沉迷于手机，与忽略身边的亲人，形成强烈对比，暗示积极的主题：clue:第一段第三至五句

Ilivedonthatphoneallsummerwithmyfaceburiedinitsscreen.Iheldmulti-daymarathonmessageswitheveryfriendtokeepincontactwiththem.Iignoredmyfamily,mysurroundings…我们应重视与家人相处的时光，关注身边的事物个人成长类Negative—Positive1.Enjoyingthenatureandyouwillfeeltherealhappiness.2.Ineverfeltpleasurelikethosedays.3.Iwasshockedbythecharmingofthenature.4.Wewerepickedwildvegetables.5.Weweretookphotos.典型错误分析词性不分，语态混淆句式单一时空跨度大情节设计不走心过去式错误

Insteadofburyingmyselfinmyphone.Ifocusedonsomethingelse:mysurroundings.

Theblueskywithmilkycloudsfascinatedmewiththegentlewindbrushingmyface.Thelakearounduswasclean,whichhas

thereflectionofthetreesandflowersin

fullbloom.IwassoabsorbedintothescenerythatIforgotthephonethoroughly.ThemoreIexplored,thehappierIwas.Itwasn'tlongbeforeIwaskeenongoingbacktonature

Thefourdayspassedinaflash,tullitfunactivities.whatIdidmademegetakickfromthoseactivities.Andnotonlydidthetravelgetusclosetonature,italsopromotedthelovebetweenourfamilies.I

knewIwasexpectedto

makechangestonotliveonthephoneandburymyselfinitsscreenanymore.Nomatterwherelifetookus,wewouldalwaysstrivetohavetheeyestofindnature范文赏析Insteadofburyingmyselfinmyphone,Ifocusedonsomethingelse:mysurroundings.Animalscreatedsoundsthatwerebothloudandpeaceful.Myangerturnedintopeace,thenlittleinterestand,finally,excitement.Witheachminutepassing,Isankdeeperintoamorepeacefulworld.Theunique

sight

thatmetmysurprisedeyesnearlytookmybreathaway.Forthefirsttime,Ithoughtcampinginadestinationwheretherewasnophonesignalmightnotbesobad.环境描写，与所给开头有效衔接根据时间顺序推动情节发展金句：meetsb’seyes映入眼帘；takesb’sbreathaway

令人惊叹情绪过渡合理自然，与第二段开头衔接，避免突兀范文赏析

Thefourdayspassedinaflash,fulloffunactivities.Ihiked.Iswam.Ifished.NosoonerhadIcaughtsightofmydadmakingafirethanIjoinedhim,andafterseveralfalsestarts,wefinallymadeit.Ijumpedhighintheair,wildwithjoy.Dadtoldmestoriesofhislife.Whentheweekendcametoanend,Iwasextremely

amazedthatIhadn’tthoughtofmyphoneonce.Ihadn’tfelttheneedtokeepincontactwithanyone.ItdawnedonmethatwhatmatteredmostwerethemomentsIwassharingwithjustmyfatherandnature.活动描写，与所给开头有效衔接倒装句，catchasight看见通过感动+感悟，升华主题，Itdawnsonsb某人突然想起……情绪描写，利用文章给出线索有效衔接。keepincontactwith与……保持联系金句：形容词作状语。02PARTTWO类似话题迁移（个人成长类）个人成长类话题的读后续写是读后续写的热考话题之一，2021年浙江高考6月卷借叙述个人薪水话题，强调个人成长和对劳动的认识。类似话题迁移（个人成长类）解题思路

明确5w（who,where,when,what,why）解读人物，解读语言风格

梳理故事线，找准主题抓伏笔，构思情节1234类似话题迁移（个人成长类）按照情节的发展，这类语篇分为三个阶段阶段情节重点情绪刻画第一阶段成长前的苦恼生气＋绝望第二阶段成长中希望＋努力第三阶段成长后的升华感悟、感动＋升华03PARTTHREE语言表达积累成长前情绪描写积累（消极＋绝望）Shewastoofrightenedtotellherfamilywhathadhappened.她太害怕了，不敢告诉家人发生了什么Helowered/droppedhisheadinshame.

他羞愧地低下了头。IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.我感觉漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。2341Lookingaroundanxiously,Ialmostburstintotears/outcrying.焦虑地环顾四周，我差不多要哭出来了。成长中情绪描写积累（希望＋努力）Witheachminutepassing,Isankdeeperintoamorepeacefulworld.随着时间的流逝，我深深地沉浸在一个更加平和的世界。Myangerturnedintopeace,thenlittleinterestand,finally,excitement.我的愤怒变成了平静，然后是一点兴趣，最后变成了兴奋。Helookeduptome,hiseyessparklingwithhopeanddetermination.

他抬起头看我，眼睛里充满了希望与坚定。2341Ilookedather,tearsofloveandgratitudewellinupinmyeyes.我看着她，爱与感激的泪水夺眶而出。成长后的升华（感悟、感动＋升华）1IsmiledasIeventuallyrealizedtherealsourceofconfidence,Now,IamproudofwhatIlooklike,becauseIhaverealizeditisyourpersonalitythatdecideswhoyouare.

我笑了，因为我最终意识到了真正自信的来源。现在，我为我的样子感到骄傲，因为我已经意识到正是你的个性决定了你是谁。ItwasthefirsttimethatIhadtrulyrealizedthemeaningofthegift—patience.这是第一次我真正意识到这份礼物的意义—耐心。2成长后的升华（感悟、感动＋升华）1Mynosebeingverysour,Istruggledtofightbacktears,which,however,turnedouttobeinvain.我鼻子一酸，试图强忍住泪水，然而并没什么用。Iteventuallydawnedonmethatkindnessandlovedomakeadifference.我终于领悟到，善良和爱的确会产生影响。Ifeltawarmupsurgeinmyheart,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.我感觉到一股暖流涌上心头，眼泪沿着脸颊滑落。234ItdawnedonmethatwhatmatteredmostwerethemomentsIwassharingwithjustmyfatherandnature.我领悟到最重要的是那些我与父亲和大自然共享的时光。HaveatasteHowtotasteEnglishpoetrypoeticformpoeticimagerypoeticmeaningpoeticlanguageChooseoneofthepoemsandwriteashortessayaboutit.How

to

writeashortessayaboutapoem?如何写诗歌赏析类文章写法一：通过对全诗的整体分析，表达自己的观点写法二：就诗歌最突出的方面进行分析，表达自己的见解。写法一一篇较完整的诗歌赏析类文章包含如下内容：1.作者简介2.作品写作背景简介3.作品意象分析（诗句的解释或翻译，诗句所表达的情感、思想和意境）4.作品的艺术手法分析（通常结合在作品意向分析之中）5.作品艺术特点的综合评价（常带有总结的意味）写法二

采用这种写法时，作者只需要抓住其中一个方面，如意境、语言表达、某一手法等。对于其他方面则可不提及，因而采用这种写法的文章篇幅一般较短小。Writing阅读唐代著名诗人李白的名作《静夜思》，结合原诗内容，适度发挥想象，写一篇100词左右的诗歌赏析。ATranquilNightbyLiBaiAbed,Iseeasilverlight,Iwonderifit’sfrostaground.Lookingup,Ifindthemoonbright;Bowing,inhomesicknessI’mdrowned.AmongallofChina'sclassicpoems,thepoemATranquilNightmightbeoneofthemostlikedandrecited,whichwaswrittenbythefamouspoetLiBaiofTangDynasty.Theshortpoemvividlydescribesthefeelingofbeinghomesickafterseeingabrightmoonwhenthepoetwastravelling.Inthepoem,thepoetusedabed,moona