2025年高考英语复习应用文写作与读后续写精讲精练16.读后续写作基本技法

读后续写作基本技法(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:续写词数应为150个左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

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1:厘清主题，把握走向要素描述主题whenMother’sDay本文以母亲节为线索展开,讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐,自己动手做起早餐来,但不幸的是,他们接连失败,后来在父亲的帮助下获得成功,他们把早餐献给亲爱的母亲,母亲非常感动的故事。whereAthomewhoThetwins—JeffandJennawhatThepairpreparedbreakfastfortheirmother.whyTheywantedtogivetheirmotherasurprise.Step

2:寻找主线，深挖要点文段线索文脉线索前文情感线excited→disappointed故事线First,theyboiledtheporridge.→Next,theymadetheFrenchtoast.→Asliceofbreadturnedblack.→Thentheyfoundtheporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.→Theotherpieceofbreadturnedblack,too.续写要点1.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.2.TheirmotherwassurprisedtofindthebreakfastcookedbyJeffandJenna.Step

3:精研首句，起承转合

根据所给续文段落首句产生问题链接,形成续写思路,采用G-N(Given-New)和Q-A(Question-Answer)策略,做好起承转合,创造新的情节。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Q1:WhatwasFather’sfirstinstinctwhenfacedwiththemess?Q2:Howdidthetwinsexplaintheirplantotheirfather?Q3:WhatdidFatherdotohelpthetwinstomakedeliciousFrenchtoastandchickenporridge?Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Q1:WhatwasMother’sfirstinstinctwhenthetwinswokeherup?Q2:WouldthetwinsgiveMotherabigsurprise?HowdidtheyexpresstheirbestwishestoMother?Q3:HowdidMotherfeel?Howcanyoudesigntheendingmoreappealingandmeaningful?续写第一段梗概Theirfatherhelpedthemadjustthefireandtheypreparedbreakfastsuccessfully.Howhappytheywere!续写第二段梗概Thetwins’motherwassurprisedtoseethedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher.Shewasdeeplymovedbyherchildren.Step

4:吃透语言，风格一致

为了使所写的内容和语言和原文保持连贯性和一致性,读后续写需要通过在理解原文的基础上,巧妙利用“拉平效应”,创造性地模仿和使用语言,即继承原文语言表达方面的显著特征,包括写作手法及语言表达技巧,从而一方面保证写作的效率和流畅度,另一方面保证写作在各个语言层次和表达风格上和原文保持一致。通过分析语篇,可以从五个方面理解原文的语言应用技巧:1.场景描写(Surroundings)场景描写指的是描写人、物、事发生的时间、地点、自然环境及社会场景等。场景描写可以充当背景信息,提供人、物、事发生的具体设定。其次,场景描写可以表达角色的感情、情绪,可以随着情节的发展有所变化,甚至可以提示、推动情节的发展,增强语篇的代入感。2.动作描写(Actions)动作描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的行为举止,是情节发展的具体体现。恰到好处的动作描写不仅可以塑造生动形象的人物,还可以反映人物的情感态度及心理变化,并最终反映人物的性格特点及思想品质。3.心理描写(Feelings)心理描写指的是描写人物在具体情况下的看法、感受、情感及心理活动,并由此反映人物的性格特点及思想品质。心理描写除了对心理的直接描写,还可以结合动作描写及场景描写,共同构成有意义、紧凑的语篇。4.有效对话(EffectiveDialogues)有效对话是记叙语篇中塑造人物的一个重要手段。对话的有效性首先体现在符合人物设定,这样不仅能够有效地推动情节的发展,更能够增加记叙的生动性。此外,对话语言也要符合记叙语篇的语言特点,即生活化、简化及去书面化。5.修辞(Figuresofspeech)修辞是增加语言生动性的最佳手段。它可以引起共鸣,使抽象的情境具体化。常见的可以应用的修辞有比喻、拟人、夸张和排比等。考场满分作文1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.②Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,③whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.④Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.⑤Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.

⑥Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,⑦“HappyMother’sDay!”⑧Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.评卷老师点评:①过渡自然流畅。②时态、语境和前文相互照应。③使用高分句式。④使用高分句式。⑤使用高分句式。⑥使用并列结构。⑦使用直接引语,生动真实。⑧动作及情感表达真实细腻。考场满分作文2:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Faced

with

the

messthetwinshadmadeofthekitchen,Fatherfeltannoyedbuttriedtocontainhimself.Jennaranuptohim,whispering“We...WejustwanttomakebreakfastforMomasMother’sDaygift.”Afterhelearnedwhatallwasabout,hisannoyancegavewaytoreliefanddelight.Immediately,hejoinedthemandtheystartedalloveragain.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.The

kitchen

filled

with

the

scent

of

breakfast

and

sweetness

of

a

family.Looking

at

the

work,thethreeexchangedanunderstandingsmile.After

signaling

them

to

keep

it

a

secret,Fatherslippedintothebedroom,pretendingtoknownothingaboutit.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Motherfailedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto.“HappyMother’sDay!”Thetwinscongratulated.“Wemadebreakfastforyouasyoudothatforus.Mom,weloveyou!”Thoughstillinherpajamas,Mothertookabiteofthetoastandsippedthehotporridge.Lost

inthedeliciousbreakfastandpurelovefromhertwins,shesobbed,with

delightful

tears

streaming

down

her

face.Lovingly,shepressedtwogentlekissesontheirforeheads,proudly

enjoying

their

best

wishes.Theirfatherwasstandinginthedoorway,recording

this

touching

scene.ThewholeroomwasbathedinahappyMother’sDayatmosphere.评卷老师点评:

文章用词精准(whisper,understanding,signal,pretend,lostin,streamdown,proudly等),句式高级(非谓语动词、独立主格和介词with的复合结构等),通过动作、对话和心理活动等描写,生动、形象地呈现了双胞胎孩子在母亲节为妈妈做早餐,献上一份特别的节日礼物和惊喜。考场满分作文3:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthemess,Father

froze

with

shock,as

if

rooted

on

the

ground.Fromtheblackbreadandthespilledporridge,hesuddenlyfiguredouttheirsecret.A

smile

of

understanding

flashed

across

his

face.Herealizedtheirintention.HejoinedtheminpreparingtheMother’sDaysurpriseimmediately.Theystartedalloveragain.Everythingwentsmoothly.The

chicken

and

rice

were

dancing

harmoniously

in

the

boiling

water

pot

and

bread

slices

were

showing

off

its

most

tremendous

golden

color.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Despitetheoilstainsonthetwins’aprons,nothingseemedimperfect,andallwasinplaceexceptthemostimportantone.The