2025高考英语大二轮写作篇-应用文写作和读后续写

2025高考英语大二轮写作篇——应用文写作和读后续写热考主题突破一、个人成长类个人成长类故事通常描述的是青少年在成长或学习过程中遇到比赛、表演、演讲等各种赛事或活动，因信心不足而出现害怕、恐惧、自我怀疑等情绪，要求续写如何克服消极情绪，直面困难与挑战，最终取得成功。近几年高考中考查过此类故事的有：1．2023年新课标卷讲了母语非英语的“我”参加英语写作比赛(续写重点：比赛后的获奖情况以及对老师感恩的细节描述)2．2022年新课标卷讲了David因害怕被嘲笑而对参加跑步比赛没有信心。(续写重点：在作者的开导下决定完成比赛的心理斗争以及比赛过程中如何克服困难、凭借坚强的毅力完成比赛)考生设计此类故事的续写情节时，要注意对主人公动作行为及心理变化的细节刻画。挑战自我型故事模型通常为：典例剖析(2023·新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ)WhenIwasinmiddleschool，mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil，soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay，whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So，whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply：“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself，Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords，Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea，butfunny；andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink，ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But，likeRevere’shorse，Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf­dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher，hereadit，laughedoutloud，andsaid，“Great.Now，writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain，andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit，thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin，Iwouldn’tcare.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。Afewweekslater，whenIalmostforgotthecontest，therecamethenews.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.[分步解读指导]Step1抓核心线索，理故事脉络人物I：creative，diligent，enjoyable，determinedmysocialstudiesteacher：caring，optimistic时间whenIwasinmiddleschool→afewweekslater地点inmiddleschool→inmyteacher’soffice冲突/矛盾如何从抵触英语写作转变为享受写作文章主题努力克服困难，实现个人成长故事线索(起)以英语为第二语言的“我”不喜欢英语写作→(承)“我”宁愿表演也不愿意尝试写作→(转)老师鼓励“我”参赛，“我”答应一试→(承)选定写作主题，遭遇困难不放弃，克服困难一直努力→(转)“我”享受写作的乐趣，不在乎是否得奖→(合)比赛获奖，事件感悟Step2衔接升华句，初建续写模型Step3思伏笔添细节，原续更融洽捕捉原文所设伏笔，充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接，以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。原文伏笔点过渡句中可与伏笔衔接的细节Para.1Englishwasonlymysecondlanguage.续写第一段可添加情节叙述：“我”是唯一一个母语不是英语的获奖者。Para.1Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.Para.5hereadit，laughedoutloudandsaid→老师高兴时的大笑续写第一段可添加神态细节：老师得知“我”获奖后高兴地大笑。Para.2...whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomething...？Para.2Encouragedbyhiswords，Iagreedtogiveitatry.→老师的鼓励续写第二段可添加细节：“我”感激老师激励自己参加写作比赛和对自己不断的鼓励。Para.5thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting续写第二段可添加语言细节：“我”告诉老师自己爱上了写作。必要事物：原文中的作者参赛作品中的“马”续写第一段可添加“我”脑海中浮现出努力创作马的形象的情节。Step4沿原文特点，写“3好”表达(准确、丰富、地道)原文长短句交替使用，恰到好处地推动了情节的发展，如作者在描写自己的努力过程时，使用了一系列的排比短句，淋漓尽致地描写了作者纠结、怀疑、想放弃又坚持下去的写稿过程；运用“时间状语从句＋动作链”描写老师的动作；利用一般疑问句和特殊疑问句描写内心活动。无灵主语句和叠字使描写更活泼生动。在叙述事情发展时，利用了状语从句、定语从句和比较级句式等。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效，这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。佳作赏析亮句解读Afewweekslater，whenIalmostforgotthecontest，therecamethenews.Iwonfirstplace！(衔接句④)SooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefwasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.[1]Finallycamethebigday!Whenmynamewasannounced，Iwalkedontothestageagainstwildcheersandthunderousapplause.[2]Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedtheprize，asymbolandrecognitionofmypastperseveranceandhardwork.[3]Thinkingaboutthis，Ishedtearsofgratitude，astherewasonespecialpersonwhomeantalottome.[4](结尾句③)Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.“Congratulations!Iknewyouwouldwin，”hesaid，huggingmetightly.(衔接句⑤)“Thankyou.Iwouldn’tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.”Asenseofgratitudewelledupinthebottomofmyheart.[5]Pattingmyshoulder，hesmiled，“Itisyoureffortsthatcountmost.”Fromthenon，IbegantoburymyselfinEnglishwriting.(结尾句①)Withmyteacher’sinspiration，Ideterminedtokeeponchallengingmyselfandembraceabetterme.(升华句②)[1]倒装句生动地表达了“我”获奖时的激动心情。[2]生动的语言和细致的动作描写出了颁奖时激动人心的场景。[3]现在分词作状语＋名词短语作同位语，描写出了“我”领奖时的兴奋和自豪的心情。[4]现在分词作状语＋高级表达＋定语从句，描写出了“我”对老师的感激。[5]无灵主语句描写出了“我”对老师深深的感激之情。吸睛收尾本文采取的是“自然式结尾”，即故事讲述完毕，文章自然结束，这样的结尾简单明了，朴素自然，使文章结构显得十分完整，但并不“草率”。本文用“Withmyteacher’sinspiration，Ideterminedtokeeponchallengingmyselfandembraceabetterme.”这句话顺其自然地结束故事，同时也表明了这件事给作者带来的影响，给读者留下了回味的空间。1．ItdawnedonAramthatoneshouldsticktohis/herdreamnomatterwhathappens.亚兰明白了：一个人应该坚持他/她的梦想，无论发生什么。2．SothankfulwasheforCathy’shonestythatheactuallyendedupdonatingagenerousamounttoVNSAtoshowhisgratitude.他非常感谢凯茜的诚实，最终他向VNSA捐赠了一大笔钱来表达他的感激之情。3．BraverywasthemostsignificantqualitythatIwantedhertopossess.勇敢是我希望她拥有的最重要的品质。4．ItwasMomwhotaughtmeweshouldnevertakeforgrantedtheverythingsthatmostdeserveourgratitude.是妈妈教育我，我们永远不应该把最值得我们感激的事情视为理所当然。5．ThoughitwasatoughyearthatIstruggledalotwithmyidentity，itwasonthatdaythatIrealizedIcouldbeaherothatkidsneeded.虽然这是艰难的一年，我经常为自己的身份而挣扎，但就在那一天，我意识到我可以成为一个孩子们需要的英雄。6．Throughourlives，wecangainalotandlosesomuch.Butbeinghonestshouldalwaysbewithus，ashonestyisalwaysregardedasavirtue.在我们的生活中，我们可以获得很多，也可以失去很多。但诚实应该永远与我们同在，因为诚实总是被视为一种美德。7．学习知识而成长It’snevertoolatetolearn.Eachindividualhastherighttoacceptmorechallengesandmakemoreattempts.活到老，学到老。每个人都有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多的尝试。8．发挥天赋促成长Actually，everyindividualpossessestalent.Bebravewhenyoufinditandalsomakeefforts.Youcancreatemiraclesintheend.事实上，每个人都有天赋，发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力，最终你会创造奇迹。9．追逐梦想而成长It’snevertoolatetogoforyourdream.Aslongasyougraspeveryopportunityandtakefulladvantageofit，youwillstandachancetorealizeyourdreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。Aslongaswedaretodreamanddon’tletdifficultiesgetinourway，anythingispossible.只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。10．克服困难而成长Thejourneytosuccessisnotsmooth.Itisfullofchallengesanddifficulties.Weshouldbebravetofacethem.Aslongaswedon’tgiveuphopeandmakeeveryefforttoovercomeallthedifficulties，wewillsurelyachieveourgoal(success)finally.通往成功的路不会平坦，充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标(成功)。即时演练(2024·山师附中6月模拟)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“No，littlegirl.Youcan’tgetinwithoutthemoney.”Jeffrey，thebusdriver，toldalittlegirlwhowantedtogetonthebusbutonlyhadafewpennies.Shemusthavebeenaroundsevenyearsold，andhewasn’tinthemoodtodealwithunaccompaniedchildrenthatday.“Please，sir.Iwanttovisitmygrandmother，”thelittlegirlbegged.“Thengoaskyourparentsforthemoneyandcomebacknexttime，”Jeffreyrepliedandgesturedwithhishandforthegirltogetout.Shefinallyleftthebuswithhershoulderslowered.Jeffreysawhersitdownatthebusstopanddroveoff.Hefinishedhisrouteandwenthomeforlunch，greetinghiswife，Greta，andsittingdownonthecouchtorest.WhenhebrowsedhisFacebookposts，animagecaughthisattention.Apicturewassharedofthelittlegirlhehadjustturnedawayafewhoursearlier.Theword“Missing”waswrittenontopoftheimage.Helearnedthatthegirlhaddisappearedadayago，andherparentsweredesperatelytryingtofindher.“Dear!WhathaveIdone？”heaskedhimself，standingupandgoingtothefrontdoor.WhenGretaaskedwherehewasgoing，Jeffreysaid，“Greta!Quick!Call911andthisnumber，”showingherthepictureofthegirl.“Isawthisgirlatabusstopearlier，andIturnedherawaybecauseshedidn’thaveenoughmoney.I’mgoingtofindher，butpleasemakethosecalls.”Havingtoldherwherethebusstopwas，hewentout.Jeffreyrushedtohiscar，speedingtothebusstop.Hopefully，thegirlwassmartenoughtostayinoneplace.Hecouldn’tbelievehowcarelesshehadbeenearlier.Shewasalittlegirlallalone.Ashedrovetothebusstop，Jeffreyvowedtobemorecarefulinthefuture，especiallywhenitcametochildren.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。Finally，Jeffreysawatinyfiguresittingonthebenchatthespot.Afewminuteslater，thepoliceandanothercarapproached.语篇解读文章通过描述一个公交车司机Jeffrey在对待一个没有足够车费的小女孩时的态度和行为，以及他后来得知这个女孩失踪后的反应和行动，来展现人性中的自私与善良，以及责任感的重要性。续写思路第一段续写思路：在这一段中，重点描述Jeffrey抵达公交站并发现小女孩仍然坐在那里的情形。他的内心充满了紧张和愧疚，担心她可能因为他的决定而处于危险中。当他看到那个小小的身影坐在长椅上时，他可能会有一种混合的情绪——因她还在原地而感到宽慰，但同时也为自己之前的自私感到自责。这一段可以描述他急匆匆地靠近她，确认她的安全，并试图安慰她，同时也反省自己的行为。这表明了他作为一个成年人和公共服务工作者的责任感。第二段续写思路：这一段可以聚焦于警察和另一辆车(可能是她父母的车)的到来，以及随之而来的事件发展。描述一下警察和小女孩的父母急切地赶到现场，他们的焦虑和担忧可以通过他们急切的动作和表情来表现。Jeffrey可能会向他们解释情况，并表达他的歉意。此外，这个场景也可以描写小女孩与她的父母团聚的感人瞬间，以及他们对Jeffrey的反应——他们可能对他的最初决定表示失望，但也可能感谢他后来的行动。这样的描述不仅增加了故事的情感深度，还强调了社会责任和个人行动的重要性。参考范文Finally，Jeffreysawatinyfiguresittingonthebenchatthespot.Hisheartpoundedwithamixofreliefandguiltashepulledoverandquicklygotoutofhiscar.Thelittlegirllookedup，hereyeswidewithsurpriseandabitoffear.Jeffreyapproachedhercautiously，hishandsraisedinanon­threateningmanner，andsaidsoftly.Heinquiredabouthernameandwhyshehadlefthome.“IwasgoingtoGrandma’shouse.Mymomwouldn’tletmego.”Sarahreplied，swingingoneofherfeetandlookingattheconcretefloor.“Yourparentsaresearchingforyou，andthey’llbeheresoon，”heassuredher，andthelittlegirlgavehimasmallsmile.Afewminuteslater，thepoliceandanothercarapproached.Thegirl’sparentshadarrived，theirfacesetchedwithablendofexhaustionandimmenserelief.Asthepolicebegantotakestatements，theparentshuggedtheirdaughtertightly，tearsstreamingdowntheirfaces.Jeffreystoodtotheside，watchingthereunionwithaheavyheart.Heknewhehadmadeagravemistakebutwasgratefulforthechancetocorrectit.Theincidentservedasastarkreminderoftheimportanceofempathyandunderstanding，especiallyinhisroleasabusdriver.Asthefamilyleftwiththepolice，Jeffreymadeasilentpromisetohimselftoneverletasimilarsituationhappenagain.二、家庭亲情类亲情类话题是读后续写的热考话题之一，2021年新课标Ⅰ卷主题为“给妈妈做母亲节早餐”，体现家庭成员之间的爱。家庭亲情类的读后续写故事一般围绕主人公与家人之间发生的日常生活事件展开，通常可分为两大类：第一类是相亲相爱的锦上添花比如纪念重要日子(如举办惊喜生日派对、送生日礼物、母亲节、父亲节等)或父亲教孩子学习新技能，孩子为长辈解决困难。这一类语篇的整体基调是快乐的、积极的、充满爱的。最后表达收获、开心、感恩等。第二类是解决小误会/小矛盾的握手言和比如亲子之间缺乏沟通，父母把自己的意志强加给子女，子女觉得父母做法不对，孩子想要帮父母却帮倒忙等。续写往往要求考生能够用续写原文的伏笔，让冲突得到化解，化解的方式可以是弥补、解释、道歉、回忆等。如果是亲人之间的矛盾、误会，结尾往往会冰释前嫌，握手言和。该题材下的语篇蕴含浓厚的育人价值，即培养学生的家庭责任感，引导中学生思考与亲人之间的关系，进而领悟到要珍惜平淡、温暖的亲情，意识到家庭和睦、家人间的关爱和尊重、有效沟通的重要性。此类语篇的结尾宜从以上方面进行主题升华。该类故事一直是高考读后续写的热门题材之一，需重点备考。典例剖析(2021·新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next，Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime，sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute，theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully，Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment，theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.[分步解读指导]Step1抓核心线索，理故事脉络人物Jenna&Jeff(twins)，mother，father时间onMother’sDay地点athome冲突/矛盾双胞胎杰夫和詹娜计划为他们的妈妈做早餐，希望给她惊喜，结果手忙脚乱，事与愿违，厨房一片狼藉文章主题亲情、爱，温馨、难忘的母亲节故事线索(起)双胞胎杰夫和詹娜计划为他们的母亲做早餐作为母亲节惊喜→(承)一切都很顺利，直到杰夫烧焦了第一块面包→(承)粥溢出了，杰夫的手触摸了热炉，另一块面包变黑了。→(转)他们的父亲出现了→(合)这对双胞胎把早餐带给了他们的母亲。Step2衔接升华句，初建续写模型Step3，思伏笔添细节，原续更融洽捕捉原文所设伏笔，充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接，以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。原文伏笔点过渡句中可与伏笔衔接的细节标题AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE续写第二段可写妈妈看到早餐时的惊喜首段HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.续写第二段可写妈妈看到早餐被端到床前时的快乐原文二、三段中叙述面包煎煳了，粥溢出了，厨房一片狼藉续写第一段可写父亲建议双胞胎收拾厨房尾段JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.续写第一段可写父亲如何处理这锅没煮好的粥尾段ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.续写第二段可写母亲看到杰夫的手，落下泪来特定物品pot，pan，eggs，milk续写第一段可写孩子们和父亲再次做早餐的场景Step4沿原文特点，写“3好”表达(准确、丰富、地道)原文对做早餐的动作描写细腻，体现出即使简单的早餐，倘若不熟练，也会有很大的麻烦。在描写做早餐时，利用场景描写表现双胞胎由最初的自信到最后的不自信和沮丧，使描述极具画面感；利用间接引语呈现人物对话。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效，这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。佳作赏析亮句解读Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment，theirfatherappeared.Seeingthemessinthekitchen，theirfatherwasstunned，askingwhatthetwinsweredoing.[1](衔接句④)“TodayisMother’sDayandwearepreparingabreakfastformomasasurprise，”saidthetwins.Movedbytheirsweetidea[2]，theirfatherdecidedtoofferthempossiblehelp.Notonlydidhecleanthestoveforthem，butalsohegavepatientguidancetothem.[3]Undertheirfather’shelp，thekidssoonfinishedFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.(结尾句③)Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Wakingupfromherdream，theirmotherwasstilltryingtofigureoutwhathadhappened.[4](衔接句⑤)“HappyMother’sDayandthisisoursurpriseforyou！”saidthetwinsexcitedly.Lookingattheirlovelyfacesandthebreakfasttheyhadmade，theirmotherburstintotears.Holdingthekidstightlyinherarms，shesaid，“YouarethebiggestsurprisethatIcaneverhaveinmylife.”[5](结尾句①)Haditnotbeenforthisspecialexperience，shemightnothaverealizedhowmuchherchildrenlovedher.[6](升华句②)[1]“现在分词作状语＋宾语从句”描写了父亲看到混乱场景时的惊讶。[2]过去分词作状语描写了父亲得知原因后的感动。[3]部分倒装句描写了父亲帮助双胞胎的场景。[4]现在分词作状语描写了妈妈刚睡醒时的茫然。[5]“现在分词作状语＋动作＋语言”描写了妈妈得知真相后的感动。[6]虚拟语气表达出了妈妈的心理活动。1．ItwasHenry’skindnessthatmademefeelthewarmthofourfamily.Iwilltreasureitwithallmyheart.正是亨利的善良让我感受到了我们家庭的温暖。我会用心珍惜它的。2．Ikeepthelittleplaneasareminderofmydaughter’sloveandalsothepowerofwords.我保留着这架小飞机，以提醒女儿对我的爱和语言的力量。3．EverytimeIfacedchallenges，athoughtofgivingupflashedinmymind，butthesupportofmyfamilygavemethestrengthtokeepgoing.每次面对挑战，我都想放弃，但是家人的支持给了我继续前进的力量。4．Thewarmgoldensunlight，floodinginthroughthewindow，togetherwithlovebetweenmyfamily，warmedus.温暖的金色阳光，透过窗户照进来，和家人之间的爱一起，温暖了我们。5．Sincethen，myfather’splainandencouragingwordshavealwaysechoedinmymind，guidingthewayofmylife.从那以后，父亲那句直白而鼓舞人心的话语一直在我的脑海中回响，指引着我的人生道路。6．Followingthat，itgraduallydawnedonmethattheloveofmotherispriceless，whichnothingcanmatch.此后，我逐渐意识到，母亲的爱是无价的，没有什么能比得上。即时演练(2024·湖北武汉模拟)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasstilllightoutsideandDadwasn’thomeyet.Momtoldusweneededtowaitfordinnersoallofuscouldeattogether.Ididn’tmind.Dadworkedalldaycleaningpoolsandifhewaslate，itmeantIcouldspendmoretimeoutsideplayingbasketballwithmybrother.Dadplayedbasketballinanold­fashionedway.Healwaysusedtwohandstoholdtheballandhewasalwayscarefultolineuphisbodywiththebasket.Eachofhisshotsisperfectlymeasuredsothattheballdropscleanlythroughthehoop.Afewyearsbefore，whentherehadbeenmoremoneytospend，Dadhadboughtusabackboardandahoopandhadsetupatallmetalpoleonthesideofthedriveway.Itwasprimitive，butstill，wecouldimagineitasabasketballcourt.WewouldplaybasketballalldayifMomletus.Wepracticedallsortsofshotsandtriedtosharpenourskillsbycuttingaroundeachother，sendingtheballthrougheachother’slegsandpassingitbehindourbacks.Itfeltlikemagicholdingaball，aimingatthebasket，sendingitintotheairandwaitingforittodropintothebasket—alltheproblemsoftheworldseemedtofadeaway.LatelyDaddidn’tseemagicanywhere.He’dlostmorecustomerstojoblosses.ManyofDad’scustomerswhohadlosttheirjobstoldhimtheycouldn’taffordtopayDadtocleantheirpoolsanymore.IcouldtellDadwasworriedeachnight.Isqueezedpastmybrothertoputinanotherlayup(带球上篮)．ThatwaswhenIheardDadarrivinghome.“Hey，guys！”Dadsaidashegotoutofthecar.Hisshouldersslumpedforwardwithtiredness.Itwasearlyandtherewasstillalotoflightleftinthesky.Inthefadingraysofthesun，thelightrevealedalotmorewrinklesonmyDad’sfacethanIremembered.注意：续写词数应为150个左右。IthoughtmaybeIcouldcheerhimup.Itwasalmosttoodarktoseetheballandthedinnerwasready.语篇解读文章讲述了作者的爸爸为了养家，帮别人清洗游泳池，作者在爸爸没回到家之前喜欢和哥哥一起打篮球，作者觉得打篮球的时候世界上所有的问题似乎都消失了。后来作者的爸爸工作不顺利，他累得两肩前倾，无法掩饰眼中的担忧，那一刻作者发现爸爸老了很多。续写思路1．第一段续写思路：由第一段首句“我想也许我能让他高兴起来”可知，第一段可描写作者尝试并成功让疲惫的父亲高兴起来的场景。2．第二段续写思路：由第二段首句“天太黑了，看不见球，晚饭也准备好了”可知，第二段可描写作者爸爸的转变。参考范文IthoughtmaybeIcouldcheerhimup.“Wanttoshootafewhoops，Dad？”Iasked，hopingtocheerhimup.“Sure，”hesaid，withawearysmile.“Wehavesometimebeforedinnertonight，don’twe？”Ibounce­passedtheballtohim，andDadcaughtiteffortlesslyandtossedtheballcleanlythroughthehoop.Dadcheeredforhimselfandslappedusahigh­five.Whentheballbouncedoffthehoop，Dadwouldsmileandjogtoretrievetheball.Asdaylightfadedanditgotdarker，eachofusenjoyedtherelaxationandDadsmiledbrightlyinawaythatIhadn’tseenforalongtime.Itwasalmosttoodarktoseetheballandthedinnerwasready.ReluctanttostepinsideasIwas，IrolledtheballtothecornerandfollowedDadashejoyfullygavemeataponmyback.It’snicetoseeDadsmilingagain，asifthetimehespentshootingbasketswithusrevivedhimandbroughtbackhisabilitytolaughalittle.Forashorttimewehelpedhimforgetaboutwhetherhisbusinesswouldsurvive.Afterall，Iwasoldenoughtounderstandfamilymeansstickingtogetherthroughthickandthin.

三、助人为乐类助人为乐类故事通常以主人公陷入困境为起点，随后主人公经过家人、朋友、老师、同学或陌生人的帮助，最终成功克服困难。有时，主人公也会发现他人陷入困境，经过深思熟虑后，主动伸出援手，帮助他人减轻困扰或解决问题。近几年高考题中考查过此类故事的有：1．2024年新课标Ⅰ卷讲述了“我”赶时间去坐大巴车参加一个会议，出租车司机Gunter与“我”之间虽然存在沟通困难，但仍将“我”安全送到巴士站，但“我”随后发现钱包里没有现金，而且也无法用银行卡支付；随后“我”去取款机处取钱，但也没有成功。于是，“我”跟Gunter约定四天后再见，并承诺届时会将车费还给他；Gunter答应了“我”。四天后，“我”与Gunter再见时履行了承诺。本文突出了助人为乐、信守承诺的优良品质。续写的重点在于“我”告知Gunter坏消息、“我”对Gunter许下承诺、“我”与Gunter再次见面、“我”感谢和报答Gunter以及Gunter回应的场景。续文结尾本着积极美满的原则，可以抒发“我”为遇上像Gunter这样的好人的感激之情，并添加“从此以后，我与Gunter成了好朋友”等顺其自然的合理情节。2．2020年新课标Ⅰ卷讲述了Meredith夫人鼓励她的孩子们去帮助穷人家的孩子Bernard赚钱，突出“授之以鱼不如授之以渔”的人生道理。续写重点在于Meredith一家如何准备爆米花以及Bernard如何赚到钱和赚到钱之后的喜悦心情。考生设计这类故事的续写情节时，需要注意对主人公接受帮助或帮助他人的过程进行细致的描写，同时也要结合对主人公内心感受的描写。因此，在写作时，考生应特别关注细节刻画、情感表达以及主人公的心路历程。此类故事模型通常为：典例剖析(2024·新课标Ⅰ改编)ImetGunteronacold，wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm，myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane，Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing，buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem，soIexplainedagainmoreslowly，buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup，Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury，Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally，withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully，therewasalongqueue(队列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus，turnedaround，andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit，”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes，butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment，Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There，attheentrance，wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar，madeamadrunforthemachine，andpoppedmycardin，onlytoreadthemessage：“Outoforder.Sorry.”注意：续写词数应为150个左右。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Fourdayslater，whenIwasbackinVienna，IcalledGunteraspromised.[分步解读指导]Step1抓核心线索，厘故事脉络人物I：decisive；calmTaxidriverGunter：helpful；friendly时间Onacold，wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember地点InVienna冲突/矛盾“我”钱包里没现金，无法支付给出租车司机。去提款机那里取钱，但是机器出故障了，“我”承诺司机过几天给他。文章主题陌生人相助，信守承诺情节线(起)“我”前往布拉格参加会议，由于航班延误，“我”担心会错过最后一班前往布拉格的巴士。→(承)下飞机后，“我”跳上了机场的第一辆出租车，遇到司机Gunter。由于一系列的沟通困难和误会，我们差点无法找到巴士站。→(转)在Gunter的帮助下，“我”在最后时刻到达了巴士站。然而，由于取款机故障，“我”的银行卡无法取钱。Gunter允许“我”先登上巴士，几天后再支付车费，体现了他的善良和对“我”的信任。→(合)四天后，“我”回到维也纳，如约与Gunter见面并还钱。“我”感受到童话般的人间温情。Step2五句定位，建续写框架Step3思伏笔添细节，原续更融洽捕捉原文所设伏笔，充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接，以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。原文伏笔点过渡句中可与伏笔衔接的细节Para.5Ijumpedoutofthecar，madeamadrunforthemachine，andpoppedmycardin，onlytoreadthemessage：“Outoforder.Sorry.”续写第一段可添加关于“我”用了各种办法仍无法付车费的尴尬和无助的情绪描写。Para.2WhenIwasabouttogiveup，Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury，Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.续写第一段可添加情节叙述：描写Gunter人很好，不辞辛苦，愿意帮忙。Para.3Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus，turnedaround，andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.续写第一段可添加神态细节：面对“我”无钱支付，Gunter微笑着同意“我”先走。Para.1IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.续写第一段结尾可添加“我”成功登上去布拉格的巴士，顺利参加了会议的衔接句。Para.1ImetGunteronacold，wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.续写第二段结尾可添加“我”对这段经历的感悟以呼应该段开头的“我”与Gunter见面。必要细节：原文中“我”做出的承诺续写第一段可添加“我”提出要兑现承诺的情节。Step4沿原文特点，写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道)原文使用了多变的句式和生动的描写，恰到好处地推动了情节的发展，如运用了动作链描写讲述“我”下飞机后匆忙搭乘出租车去赶最后一班巴士，运用了形象的动作描写和生动的神态描写讲述“我”和出租车司机Gunter经过一番曲折和沟通后终于前往巴士站，运用无灵主语描写了“我”发现自己没带现金、银行卡支付失败以及取款机无法使用时的无助。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效，这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。佳作赏析亮句解读IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Helookedatmeindisbelief，askingmewhattodo.(衔接句④)Givinghimanotherapologeticsmile[1]，IaskedhimforadelayinpaymentandpromisedtocallhimandpayhimbackthemoneyIowedhim.Tomysurprise，Gunterwrotedownhisphonenumberwithouthesitationandgaveittome[2]．“Justkeepyourpromise，Sir.”Afeelingofgratitudewashedoverme.[3]Igavehimafirmhandshake，madeamaddashforthebusandjumpedontoitjustbeforeitleft.[4](结尾句③)Fourdayslater，whenIwasbackinVienna，IcalledGunteraspromised.Wemetatthebusstationwherehehaddroppedmeofffourdaysbefore[5]．(衔接句⑤)AssoonasIsawhim，Igavehimabighug.Itoldhimthatwithouthiskindnessandtimelyhelp，thingswouldn’thavegonesmoothly[6]．Ipaidhimfortheride，alongwithageneroustip，whichhedeclined.Ifeltblessedtohavemetsuchawarm­heartedman.Thenwepartedwayswithafirmhandshakeandapromisetokeepintouch.(结尾句①)Gunter’skindnesshadturnedapotentiallydisastrouseveningintoamemorablestoryIwouldcherishforyearstocome.[7](升华句②)[1]运用现在分词短语作状语呼应原文。[2]动作链描写有效衔接续写第二段首句信息。[3]无灵主语句，生动形象地描述“我”的感激之情。[4]呼应原文，三连动增强了动作的画面感。[5]运用限制性定语从句，和原文形成有效衔接。[6]运用虚拟语气，和原文形成有效衔接，侧面表达了“我”的感激之情。[7]最后主旨升华，回扣原文。1．Sometimes，asmallactofkindnesscanbepowerfulenoughtomakeahugedifference.有时，一个小小善举的力量会强大到产生巨大影响。2．Justasthesayinggoes，“Rosesgiven，fragranceinhand.”正如谚语所说：“赠人玫瑰，手有余香。”3．Withonesmallgesture，youmaynotonlyspreadlove，butalsopositivelyinfluenceothers’lives.小举动不仅能传递爱，还能积极地影响他人的生活。4．Actually，asmallgestureofcarewillpossiblymeltpeople’sloneliness.事实上，一个表达关爱的小举动可能会融化人们内心的孤单。5．(2020·新课标Ⅰ)ItislovethatmakestheworldgoroundandBernardfeltitdeepinhislittleheart.伯纳德在他小小的心灵深处感受到，是爱使世界运转。6．Thiskindacthasalastinginfluenceonme.Ialwaysgiveothersahelpinghandifpossible.这种善举对我产生了持久的影响。我总是尽可能地帮助别人。7．Thoughmanyyearshavepassed，Ihaveneverforgottenthelessonhetaughtme：onlywhenyouhelpthoseintroubleislifemeaningful.虽然许多年过去了，但我从未忘记他给我上的那一课：只有当你帮助那些有困难的人时，人生才是有意义的。8．Nogooddeedevergoeswasted.Therefore，shareyourlovefromyourhearttodayandfillyourlifewithgooddeeds.好事不会白做。因此，今天就分享你心中的爱，用善行充实你的生活。即时演练(2024·安徽黄山二模)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。I’musedtopeoplestaringatme：Strangelooksbecauseofthestrangesoundsmybrothermakes.PublicplaceshavebeendifficultplacesformyfamilytodealwitheversinceMyleswasdiagnosedwithautism(自闭症)attheageoftwo.Ibuiltawallaroundmyheart，ashelltoprotectmyweakestpartsfromotherpeople’sopinionsaboutmyfamily.Ithurttoomuchwhentheydidn’tunderstand，soItoldmyselfitdidn’tmatter.SowhenIfoundmyselfatarestaurantwithmybrother，whostartedscreamingandhittingthetable，Ilookedupwithcautiouseyesatthemiddle­agedwomanapproaching.Herfacewasperfectlypeacefulassheassessedthesituationatthetablewithmybrotherandme.Ireadiedmycomeback.Ifshehadacomplaintaboutmybrother’sbehavior，Iwaspreparedtopullthetriggerandgiveherthepiece