读后续写：Kevin勇擒“贼”讲义-高考英语复习写作专项

读后续写：Kevin勇擒“贼”讲义Kevinwasprettybored.Hismotherbusiness.Therefore,hewasleftinthectrouble,thoughsometimeshewantedtodoriskycouplehadbothgonetowork,soitwasstrangethatsomeonstaredatthemanattwindowintothehouse.WithhThinkingthatthemanmigharrived,Kevindecidedtodosomething.HerushedoutofMrs.Hcrossedthestreetquickly.Grabbingthroughthewindow."Stoprightthere!Youmustleaveriholdingthebranchwithfrelief.“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather'swatchwashere,"heexplained,tryingtoliftaflooAtthatmoment,thesoundsofapolicecarechoed(回响)intheair.Themanstoodupinapanic,thenranthroughthehousetowardthewindowandjumpedout.pursuedandarrestedtheman.KevinwentbacktoMrs.Hill'shouse.Somehowhewasn'tsurehehaddonetherightthing."Whatifhehastoldthetruth?"hethoughttohimself.Theman'swordsstation.文章通过描述Kevin在无聊中发现邻居家有人闯入，并决定采取行动阻止这一事件，展示了他的勇气和正义感。然而，在事件结束后，Kevin开始怀疑自己是否做对了，因为闯入者的解释听起来也有一定的可信度。这反映了即使在做出正确决定后，人们也可能会有自我怀疑和反思。即探讨了勇气、责任感和自我反思的主题。第一段描写Kevin如何向Green解释事件经过敢去警察局。敢去警察局。第一段描写确认手表证据，男人清白，Kevin做了正确的事本段描写Kevin来到警察局解释来龙去脉，证明男人的清白间的互动：Kevin意欲向男人道歉，却得到男人的夸赞，内容如释重负。回扣首段exciting/risky的渴望得到实现，但更重要的是做了正确的事情。1.1.Kevin向警察解释一切2.手表证明男人清白，被释放后Kevin致歉，男人夸赞Kevin。3.收获：有了exciting的体验，并点赞自己做了正确的事情。写作误区写作误区一：“没有真善美，续写不结尾”。文本中的man是房子前主人的儿子，不是真正的小偷，把他写成真正的小偷属于偏离真善美(虽然他行为怪异：破窗进入私宅，看到skinnyboy就breatheasighofrelief,看到警察就panic且run,但也许是正常的途径确实麻烦，他想短平快解决呢)。文中的手表是本文线索，它是房子前主人遗留的物品。且原文暗含细节floorboard,证实陌生男子说话的可信度。第一段续应要写手表在地板下面被找到，在其它地方被找到属于偏题。续写分清主次，包括故事情节，也包括人物角色。故事山写作也显示第二段应为risingaction和resolution,即问题得到解决，人物的收获，主题的升华等。如果第二段大笔墨描写如何证明theman清白，以及theman和watch之间的历史渊源属于把次要信息主要化了，应精简。此外，本段最终的主要人物角色仍应该是Kevin。构思过程(321原则：3处衔接2处过渡1个主题)(321原则：3处衔接2处过渡1个主题)参考范文Paragraph1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,KevinwenttotalktoKevin'shurriedGreenkneltdown,tenderlypprotectingmyhome.""ButthemanclaimedhewashGreenproposed,"thenlet'scheout",inspectingtheliftedfengravings—"IamesRoger.1975”.“Thisobviouslydoesn'tbelonGreen.“HadIwrongeneedtohelptheman",urgedKevin,hisvoicewithobviousanxietandrecountingthewholestory.ItquicklybecameevideindeedoncelivedintheGwiththeengravingsonit.Twasconfirmedinnocent.Uponhisrelefwithsomethingfarbetter—doingtherightthing.Paragraph1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwthemanbrokeintotheman'sfather.Afterlisteningintently,Mr.andMrs.GreenexpressWithouthesitation,theyhurriedtocheckiftherewasawatchunderthefloorboard.tellingthetruthafterall",Kevinthoughttohimself.Paragraph2:KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolice