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冷集04篌后篌与之适劭竟察
***考情分析***
年份卷别类别话题
20232023年新高考I&II卷人与自我老师鼓励参加作文比赛终获大奖
20222022年新高考I&II卷人与自我鼓励身残志坚男孩参加校越野赛
***写作指导***
【题型分析】
运动竞赛是“读后续写”题材中的热门主题之一。它不仅展现了角色在挑战中的拼搏精神,还体现了无畏
进取、团队协作的价值。无论是学校比赛、校外竞技,还是面对突如其来的个人挑战,运动竞赛总是伴随
着挫折与突破,最终让主人公在磨炼中得到成长。因此,这一主题既能激发读者共鸣,又能传递出不屈不
挠、永不言弃的精神。
运动竞赛类故事通常包含几个情感阶段:最初的兴奋、竞赛中的压力与挑战、经历挫折后的坚定,最
终收获成功的喜悦与成就感。这些情感层层递进,为续写提供了丰富的表达层次。
情节结尾的主题通常是:毅力、决心、努力、团队合作、谦虚、自信、亲子关系、责任感、公平和尊
重对手等。
1.毅力、决心与努力:
主人公面对挫折,经过教练和父母的鼓励和教导,取得了胜利,最终比赛教会了如何取得成功
主人公面对身体上的残疾,经过父母或者教练的鼓励,勇于迎接挑战,最终取得胜利
2.团队合作:
主人公先是忽略团队合作,最后经过队友、教练或者父母的提醒,关注团队合作
3.自信:
主人公对比赛的不自信,到自信的过程
4.谦虚:
主人公经历失败之后反思自己,发现自己过于骄傲,然后后悔
5.勇于承担责任:
经历一次比赛失败,主人公没有推卸责任,而是勇于承担,反思自己的不足,最后取得胜利
6.公平和尊重对手:
在跑步比赛中,智者让男孩与盲人和老太太一起跑,并让他们共同完成比赛,展示出真正的比赛精神
在于相互帮助和尊重对手
7.亲子关系:
主人公即将参加比赛,但是母亲却突然生病,于是不得不一边照顾母亲,一边准备比赛,最后上场之
后拿到了冠军
8.乐观和积极:
主人公丢掉了比赛的设备,虽然感到沮丧,但最终依靠自己的实力赢得了比赛,展示了乐观心态的重
要性。
主人公要参加比赛,但是她的马又小又丑,孩遭受了他人嘲笑。主人公没有放弃,
【写作方法】
在“运动竞赛”主题的续写中,参考以下六个步骤可以更完整地呈现主人公的拼搏历程与心理成长:
第一步:提炼六个要素,概括主旨大意
从原文中提取出六个基本要素:谁(Who)、何时(When)、何地(Where)、做什么(What)、为
什么(Why)和如何(How)。这些要素帮助考生梳理出运动竞赛的场景和情感主旨,为续写打下扎实的情
感基础。
第二步:理清情节脉络,把握情感起伏
运动竞赛类故事情感波动较大。通过梳理情节发展线与情感起伏线,考生可以更好地遵循原文的逻辑,
在续写中展现主人公在竞争中的情感变化,合理构建出逐步提升的情感层次。
第三步:分析段落首句,设计情节进展
段首句在续写中起到承上启下的关键作用。考生可以根据段首句的逻辑关系(顺承、转折、因果等),
设计出主人公在比赛中的互动情节。例如:段首句是比赛开始的信号,那么接下来的内容可以描写主人公
的起步表现、初期的紧张心情和逐渐进入状态的过程。
第四步:设计结尾高潮,提升主题深度
结尾设计时,可以通过主人公关键时刻的决策或坚持来呈现情感高潮。例如,在关键时刻,他凭借信
念超越对手,或在失败中找到内心的成长,展现拼搏精神的深刻内涵。
第五步:列出关键词汇,续写连贯句群
在续写过程中,可以列出关键词汇和主要事件,按发展顺序构建出连贯句群,使续写内容更加流畅。
确保情节逻辑清晰,情感层次分明。
第六步:润色词句,誉写成文
完成续写草稿后,通过润色词句,使表达更生动细腻。润色时可以使用多样化的词汇与句式,使续写
内容更具表达风格。最后,用整洁的书写将最终稿誉写在答题纸上。
故事情节构建支架
在续写运动竞赛主题时,情节构建可以分为以下三步:
第一步:竞赛开始——紧张与激动
比赛前:做准备一准备中遇到困难后还是坚持
情感表现:期待、紧张、兴奋
肢体动作:深呼吸、摆好姿势、紧握双拳
第二步:奋力拼搏——坚持与突破
比赛中:比赛开始T遭遇打击一受到鼓励,调整心态-全力以赴一击败劲敌/输掉比赛
行动表现:全力冲刺、咬牙坚持、不放弃
情感变化:从紧张到坚定,从犹豫到充满斗志
第三步:结果揭晓——收获与反思
比赛后:比赛结束后观众、亲人、评委等反应一与在场人物的互动-登台领奖一情感升华,主题感悟
情感表现:激动、自豪、感悟
主题升华:理解拼搏意义、感悟坚持的力量、珍视努力的成果
叱*素材宝库***
第一步:比赛前
1.紧张期待
pulsingwithanticipation满怀期待
braceoneselfforthechallenge准备迎接挑战
nervestinglewithexcitement紧张又兴奋
standpoisedatthestartingline在起跑线蓄势待发
Hestoodatthestartingline,everymuscletensed,asadrenalinesurgedthroughhisveins.
(他站在起跑线上,每一块肌肉都紧绷着,肾上腺素在血管中激增。)
Asthecrowdroared,awaveofanticipationwashedoverher,fillingherwithbothexcitementandtrepidation.
(观众的欢呼声席卷而来,期待的浪潮涌上她心头,让她既兴奋又忐忑。)
2.准备中遇到困难后还是坚持
①HardasItrained,Istillmadelittleprogress,whichputmeonthevergeofcollapse.ButasImadeanother
attempt,awaveofexcitementwelledupinsideme.
尽管我训练得很努力,我仍然没有取得什么进步,这使我处于崩溃的边缘。当我再次尝试时,一阵兴奋涌
上心头。
©WheneverIwasexhausted/fulloffatigue,theguy'swordsechoedinmymind,whichinstillpowerintome.I
wouldnotlethiswifebeatmeagain.
每当我疲惫不堪的时候,那家伙的话就在我脑海里回荡,给我注入了能量。我不会再让他妻子打败我了。
©SometimesIwasburnedout,butIwasdeterminedthatnothingwouldweighmedown.
有时我筋疲力尽,但我下定决心,没有什么能把我压垮。
第二步:比赛中
1.比赛开始
①Withthesoundofthestartinggun(piercingthroughtheair),theracebeganasexpected.
发令枪发射(响彻天空),比赛如期开始了。
②Thewhistlewentoffandthecompetitorsbegantotaketheirplaces.
哨声响起,所有参赛者各就各位。
2,奋力拼搏
pushbeyondone'slimits突破自我极限
strugglethroughexhaustion咬牙坚持住疲惫
drivenbyanunwaveringdetermination被坚定不移的决心驱动
holdonwithunyieldingresolve坚持不懈
Eachsteppoundedagainstthegroundashepushedforward,drivenbyafiercedetermination.
(每一步都重重地踩在地上,他奋力向前,心中充满了强烈的决心。)
Asthefatiguesetin,shegrittedherteeth,refusingtolettheexhaustionholdherback.
(当疲惫袭来,她咬紧牙关,决不让疲劳阻挡她的脚步。)
3.遭遇打击
⑴突发意外
①Helostthebalanceandfelltotheground他失去了平衡,倒在了地上。
②Hetrippedoverandfell,breakingtheskinonhisknee.他被绊倒摔了一跤,磕破了膝盖。
③Hegotcrampinthelast200metersoftherace.在比赛的最后200米,他抽筋了。
⑵身心疲惫
①Herwholebodyached,notjustherlegs.她全身疼痛,不只是腿疼。
②Shewassotiredthatherlegsjustwouldn'tobeyheranylonger.她太累了,腿已经不听使唤了。
⑶局面落后
①Hequickenedhispace,butstillcouldn'tcatchupwiththem.他加快了步伐,但仍然追不上他们。
②Ioutdistancedtheotherplayersatfirst,butsoontheyspedupandleftmeinthedust.
起初我超过了其他选手,但很快他们加快了速度,把我甩在了后面。
4.受到鼓励,调整心态
①Iwasabouttogiveupwhenmyteachercastanencouragingglanceatme,whichinstilledpowerintome.
我正要放弃时,老师向我投去鼓励的目光,这给我注入了能量。
②IwasabouttogiveupwhenIfoundmyteachersmilingandcheeringforme,whichinstilledpowerintome.
我正要放弃时,这时我发现我的老师在微笑着并且为我欢呼,这给我注入了能量。
③Iwasabouttogiveupwhenteacher'sencouragingwordsechoedinmymind,("Ifyoubelieveinyourself,
nothingisimpossible,)whichinstillpowerintome
我正要放弃时,这时老师鼓励的话语我脑海里回荡,(“如果你相信自己,就没有什么是不可能的,")这给
我注入了能量。
©Couragefounditswaybackthemomentshecaughtsightoftheblueribbon.
当她看到蓝丝带的时候,她又找回了勇气。
5.全力以赴
跑步类:
①Iwilledmylegstokeepgoing.我用意志力驱使我的腿继续前进。
②Imadeeveryefforttorunfaster.我拼尽全力,跑得更快。
©Straighteningup,Igatheredupallmystrengthtomakeadashforthefinishline.
我挺直身子,用尽所有力气冲向终点线。
©Refusingtogiveupatthispoint,hejumpedtohisfeetandranasfastashecould.
他拒绝在这个时候放弃,于是一跃而起,以最快的速度奔跑。
游泳类:
©Swiftlyadjustinghisbreath,heswamforwardlikeanarrowoffthebowstring.
他迅速调整呼吸,像出弦的箭一样向前游去
②Heswamtothefinishlinewithallhisstrength,withhisarmspushingforwardfastandhislegshittingthewater
hard.他用尽全力游到终点,双臂快速向前推进,双腿用力撞击水面。
③Sodynamicwashethatheswamswifterthanever.Withhisarmwaving,hecutthroughthewatersmoothlylike
aflyingfish.他活力四射,游得比以前更快了。他挥动着手臂,像飞鱼一样平稳地划水。
5.击败劲敌施掉比赛
①HardasItried,Ifailedtherace.虽然我非常努力,我还是输掉了比赛。
②IhadmyarmsheldhighasIcrossedthefinishline.Itwasanarrowvictory.
我高举双臂冲过终点线,这是一场险胜。
(3)Running/Swimmingrightpasther,Imanagedtowintherace.(Ifellonthegrass,tearsofjoyfillingmyeyes.)
我超过了她,赢得了比赛。(我倒在草地上,眼里充满高兴的泪水。)
第三步:比赛后
L比赛结束后观众、亲人、评委等反应
①Themomentthehostannouncedthatshewonthefirstprize,otherplayersrushedtohimandcongratulated
him,andherparentsweregrinningfromeartoear,theaudienceburstintothunderousapplauseandcheers.
主持人宣布她获得一等奖的那一刻,其他运动员跑向他祝贺他,她的父母笑得合不拢嘴。观众爆发出雷鸣般
的掌声和欢呼声。
2.与在场人物的互动
①ItrottedtowardsMareyaandgaveherabighug.我小跑着走向Mareya,给了她一个大大的拥抱。
②IthrewmyselftoMareya'sarms,heldbackmytearsandsaid,"Thanks,Mareya”
9,
我扑到Mareya的怀里,忍住眼泪说:“谢谢,Mareyao
③HisDadrushedinfrontofhimandheldMikeinhisarms.4tYoumadeit,boy!Youarethechampion!?,Dad's
voicewastremblingwithexcitement.
他的爸爸冲到他前面,把迈克抱在怀里。“你成功了,孩子!”你是冠军!”爸爸激动得声音发抖。
3.登台领奖
①(with)tearsrollingdownmyface,Istoodonthewinner'spodiumandacceptedtheprize.
我站在领奖台上领奖,泪水顺着我的脸颊流了下来
4.收获感悟
savorthetasteofvictory品味胜利的喜悦
overcomewithaprofoundsenseofachievement深感成就
cherishthejourneyratherthantheoutcome珍惜旅程胜过结果
reflectonthetruespiritofcompetition反思竞赛的真正意义
Ashecrossedthefinishline,awaveofaccomplishmentwashedoverhim,fillinghisheartwithpride.
(当他跨过终点线,成就感如潮水般涌上心头,让他心中充满了自豪。)
***主旨升华***
句型一:Itisthrough...that...
Itisthroughrelentlessconfrontationwithhisownweaknessesandlimitationsthatheunearthedaboundless
reservoirofinnerstrength,onehehadscarcelyknownexisted.
(正是通过不断直面自身的弱点和局限,他发掘出了一股难以估量的内在力量,这是一份他从未真正
意识到的能量。)
句型二:Thejourneyfrom...to...
Thejourneyfromwaveringself-doubttounwaveringself-assurancewaspavedwitharduouschallengesand
invaluableinsights,eachsteprevealingagreaterstrengthwithin.
(从动摇的自我怀疑到坚定的自信,这段旅程布满了艰难的挑战和宝贵的领悟,每一步都揭示出更为
强大的内心力量。)
句型三:Notuntil...did...
Notuntilhecrossedthefinalthreshold,feelingboththeweightofexhaustionandthethrillofaccomplishment,
didhetrulycomprehendtheunyieldingpowerofperseverance.
(直到他跨过终点的那一刻,感受到筋疲力尽的沉重与成就的激动,他才真正领悟到坚持不懈的巨大
力量。)
句型四:Ifnotfor...
Ifnotforthecountlesssetbacksheencounteredalongthepath,hewouldneverhaverealizedhisfullpotential,
norwouldhehaveacquiredtheresiliencetoovercomelife*sunforeseenobstacles.
(若不是在旅途中遭遇无数次挫折,他将永远无法意识到自己的全部潜能,更不会获得那份面对未知
挑战的坚韧。)
句型五:Whatstartedas...turnedinto...
Whatstartedasasimpletestofspeedandendurancetransformedintoanenlighteningjourney,onethatrevealed
hisowncapacityforresilienceandself-discoveryinthefaceofadversity.
(一场原本仅是速度与耐力的测试,最终转变为一段充满启发的旅程,揭示了他在逆境中展现出的韧
性与自我发现的潜力。)
句型六:Throughthecrucibleof...onecantruly...
Throughthecrucibleofintensecompetitionandunwaveringresolve,onecantrulyglimpsetheprofound
strengthlyingdormantwithin,apowerthatwaitsonlyforcouragetosummonitforth.
(在激烈竞争与坚定决心的熔炉中,方能真正窥见那深藏内心的强大力量,这股能量只待勇气唤起,
便会迸发。)
片段写作***
战胜自我
Despitefacingnumeroussetbacks,___didnotg
尽管面对诸多挫折,__没有放弃,反而__o
iveup,butinstead___.
Throughsheerdeterminationandhardwork,___
凭借坚定的决心和努力,——终于实现了――。
finallyachieved___.
Encouragedby___,___wasabletoovercome_
在——的鼓励下,——克服了——,并成功完成了――。
—andsucceedin___.
Theroadto___wasdifficult,but____showed
通往——的道路充满艰难,但—一展现了极大的毅力。
greatperseverance.
Withhardworkandpersistence,___eventually
通过努力和坚持,——最终克服了所有障碍。
overcameallobstacles.
Ididn'tcomeclosetoplacing,butIhadgiveneverythingIhadtofinish.UIswammyrace.AndIthinkI
won."Raceisnotonlytobeatyourcompetitorsbutalsotoraceagainstyourself.
团队精神
Atfirst,___ignoredtheimportanceofteam起初,—忽视了团队合作的重要性,但后来意
work,butlaterrealized___.识到了—O
Withthesupportoftheteam,___managed
在团队的支持下,—一设法—,最终—O
to___andfinally___.
Itwasonlythroughteamworkthat___was只有通过团队合作,—才能实现—O
abletoachieve___.
__learnedthevalueofcooperationafter
—在与团队紧密合作后,学会了合作的价值。
workingcloselywiththeteam.
Theteam'ssuccessdependedoneveryone
团队的成功取决于每个人的合作,包括—。
workingtogether,including___.
Sincethismemorablebasketballmatch,wehavebeenreadyforeverybattle.Thereisnolimittowhatwe
canaccomplishaslongasweplayateam.
收获友谊
Duringtherace,___showedgreatrespectf在比赛中,—通过—展现了对—的极大尊
or___by___.重。
__treatedtheiropponentswithfairnessan无论结果如何,—都以公平和尊重的态度对待
drespect,regardlessoftheoutcome.对手。
__understoodthattruevictorycomesfro
—明白了真正的胜利源于尊重对手。
mrespectingone'sopponents.
Winningorlosing,___maintainedrespectf
无论胜负,—始终对—保持尊重。
or___.
__realizedthatcompetitionisnotjustabo—意识到比赛不仅仅是为了胜利,也是为了公
utwinning,butalsoaboutfairness.平。
Wildcheersandapplauseeruptedfromthestand.WhenDavidheldthetrophyhigh,heknewthatitwas
thefootballfromhismotherthatovercamethelanguagebarrierandbefriendedhisclass.
Igrinned.Shegiggled.66Atie,”Mr.Bealsaid,shakinghishead.ButCassieandIknewthatwehadwon
somethingmoreimportantthantheEggDropChallenge.Somefriendshipsaren'tlikeeggsafterall.Theycan
survivealittlebouncing.
***高考真题精讲***
[2023新课标I&n卷]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithout
thinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.Writingwas
sodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicby
actingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.
So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyour
stories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourselfIthinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.^^Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedto
giveitatry.
IchosePaulReveredhorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(车艮匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseat
nightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraight
fromthehorse9smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.
Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?I
sympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeReveredhorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworked
hard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaul
Reverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.
WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,"Great.Now,writeitagain."I
wroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoyment
ofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.
Iwenttomyteacher9sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.
【答案】
Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprize
inthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.Iwassohappytohearthenewsthat
Iimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.66Iknewyou'dwin!Iamproudofyou.Youmadeit!”hesaidexcitedly.Then
camethebigday.WhenIwasinvitedtothestagetoreceivetheaward,Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.Isaid,
"It'syouwhomakemefallinlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.Withoutyourrecognitionandguidance,I
couldn'thavewrittenthisarticle.Againthankyouverymuch!^^
Iwenttomyteachersofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Myteacherwaswaitingforme.Holdingmyhands,
hesaid"Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.^^“YouknowIdidn'tlikewritingbefore,butnowI
amcrazyaboutit!Iwilltrymybesttocreategoodworks."Isaidseriously.Sincethen,Ihavewrittenmanygood
worksandnowIamafamouswriter.Iowemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadto
writing.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者上中学的时候,社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作
者不喜欢写作,于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下,作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然
很累,但是没有放弃,坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时,作者感到写作让他很快乐,他已经不在乎输
赢了。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后,当我几乎忘记比赛的时候,传来了消息。”和第二段首句“颁奖后我去了
老师的办公室。”可知,第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖,在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的感激。
②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知,第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作,自此作者
坚持写作取得了成功,作者将这一切归功于自己的老师。
2.续写线索:比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴—颁奖典礼感谢老师一颁奖后来到老师办公室——老
师告诉作者坚持写作一作者表达了对写作的喜爱一作者写作取得了成功一感激老师
3.词汇激活
行为类
①告知:inform/tell
②成功做到:makeit/succeed
③表达:express/convey
情绪类
①高兴的:happy/glad
②激动地:excitedly/withexcitement
【点睛】[高分句型1]IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbean
awardpresentationintwodays.(运用了由连接词that引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型2]It'syouwhomakemefallinlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.(运用了强调句)
[高分句型3]Iowemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadtowriting.(运用了who
引导的限制性定语从句)
[2022新课标I&H卷]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthe
smalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.
IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmall
fortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththe
otherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.
Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!
Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.wasafraidthatkids
fromotherschoolswouldlaughatheexplaineduncomfortably.46Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethim
decide.”
Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell——hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.After
makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfrom
sidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.
Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis
classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheywere
doing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.It
justtookhimlonger-thafsall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlong
aftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,Iwasfamiliarwiththe
challengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.
____________________________________________________________IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothe
startinglinewiththeotherrunners.
【答案】
Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Isaidgentlyandquietly,ctNoonecanchange
yourmind,exceptyourself.Ifyoudesiretochallengeyourself,thereisnothingtodowithothers5thoughts.Hesat
stillwithadeepbreath.46Ybuhaveafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyou
showuphere”,Iaddedwithasinceretone.Hearingmywords,Davidturnedtometremblinglywithtearsspillingout
ofhiseyesandexpressedhehadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecross-countryrun.Hiscoachheardwhat
Davidsaidandgavemealook-thekindthatwasmoredeterminedthananyoneelse's.
IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Theracestarted.Itseemedthatthe
runwaywasextremelylongforyoungchildren,nottomentionachildwithaheartdisease.Davidinsistedonrunning
asifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,thoughhewastrippedoverwithintheafewkilometers.Itdidn'ttakelong
beforehepickedhimselfupagainandcontinuedhismission.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheering
forhim."Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.Toeveryone'sjoy,he
reachedthefinallineandrankedthe20th.Itwasnomoreimportantwhetherhewonthefirstplaceornot.Itwashis
braveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.
【导语】本文以赛跑为线索展开。作者是一名特殊教育教师,在大型越野赛跑那天,发现患有大脑疾病的
大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因,他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知,因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫,
所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心,不理会别人的看法,大卫最终
参赛,尽管遇到困难,他战胜了自己,这已经无关名次,而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着,但大卫不愿看我一眼。”和第二段首句内容”我看着大卫和其他选手一
起走到起跑线上。”可知,第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛,大卫经过强烈的心理斗争,最终决定
参加比赛。
②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上可知,第二段可描写大卫开始参赛,虽然
中途遇到困难,仍然坚持到最后,完成比赛。
2.续写线索:鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛
3.词汇激活:
行动类:
①深呼吸:withadeepbreath/breathedeeply
②坚持做:insistedondoing/besticktodoing
情绪类:
①热情:enthusiastically/withgreatpassion
②骄傲:beproudof/takepridein
【点睛】[高分句型1].Youhaveafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyou
showuphere.(由which引导的非限制性定语从句和why引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2].Hearingmywords,Davidturnedtometremblinglywithtearsspillingoutofhiseyesandexpressedhe
hadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecross-countryrun.(现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)
[高分句型3].Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.(含有It
was...that结构的强调句型)
***名校模拟题提升练***
【25届浙江绍兴一模】
泳跑双赛
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Foryears,swimmingwasoneofthosethingswhereIthought:'Tmnotgoodatit,andIneverwillbe."That
thoughtlingeredtheremostofmychildhood.
ThisallchangedlastyearwhenthecompanyIworkedforannouncedthattheyweregoingtoarrangea
swimrun,aracewhereyoupartiallyswimandpartiallyruntofinishtherace.Ofcourse,itwasavoluntaryactivity
andIwasnotgoingtoparticipate.
However,astheweeksprogressed,Istartedthinkingtomyself:"Whatwoulditfeelliketobreakthroughmy
comfortzoneandfinallyfacemyinsecurity?”Tohelptheswimrunparticipantspreparefortherace,thecompany
arrangedanopportunitytolearnhowtoswimfreestylewithaswiminstructor.Iultimatelydecidedtoatleast
participateinthefirstswimminglesson.
Iwasmentallypreparedtobetheworststudentduringthelesson.However,asitturnedout,Ihadplentyof
co-workersthatwereequallybadatswimming.Afterafewswimminglessons,Ievengotcomplimentsforhow
quicklyImanagedtoimprove.NotonlyhadIshatteredmyoldbeliefaboutmydisabilityinwater,butsomething
elsehadstartedtostir.Ihadgottenatasteforswimmingandwascurioustoseewhereitcouldleadme."How
woulditfeelliketobecompletelycomfortableinthewater?”Iwondered.
IstartedgoingtothepublicbathhousetopracticethefewtipsIhadgottenfromtheswimminginstructor.I?d
watchYouTubevideosandtryandmimicthemovementsbymyselfinthewatertothebestofmyabilities.
Withoutadoubt一inthebeginning,Ilookedlikeadrowningmonkey.Iwouldswim;Iwouldsink,
coughingupwater,andrepeatitalloveragain.Vdgetyelledatforswimmingtooslowatthefreestylerange.
However,Ifocusedontheprocessandthesoon-to-benewskillsetthatIdidnotgetdiscouragedbytheslow
progressnortheoccasionalscolding.
Paragraph1:Thethoughtsofglidingthroughwatereffortlesslywaswhatkeptmegoing.
Paragraph2:Regardingtheswimrun,Ieventuallydecidedtoparticipate.
【答案】
Paragraph1:Thethoughtsofglidingthroughwatereffortlesslywaswhatkeptmegoing.Iimaginedmyself
cuttingthroughthewaterlikeatrueswimmer,eachstrokebecomingalittlesmootherandmorecontrolled.With
eachfailedattempt,Ionlygrewmoredetermined,pushingmyselftorise,coughoutwater,anddivebackin.Every
practiceatthepoolbecameaquiet,personaltriumph,whereprogresswasslowbutsteady.Aftereachsession,Ifelt
agrowingsenseofconfidence,inchingclosertomyvisionofmasteringthewater.AsIlookedbackatthecountless
hoursspentinpractice,IknewIhadfinallyreachedapointwheretakingonthechallengenolongerseemed
impossible——itfeltlikeacallIwasreadytoanswer.
Paragraph2:Regardingtheswimrun,Ieventuallydecidedtoparticipate.Standingatthestartingline,Ifelta
mixofexcitementandapprehension,myheartpoundingastherealityoftheracesetin.Thewhistleblew,andwith
adeepbreath,Idivedin,lettingmyhard-earnedskillsguideeachstroke.Thecoldwatersurroundedme,butI
embracedit,feelingtherushofeachmovementasatestamenttomyperseverance.Transitioningtotherunning
portion,fatiguebegantosettlein,yetthethoughtofovercomingmylong-heldfearkeptmemovingforward.AsI
crossedthefinishline,Ifeltanoverwhelmingwaveofprideandaccomplishment.Irealizedthateverystruggle,
everysetback,hadbeenworthit.Sometimes,thelimitsthatholdusbackaretheonesweimposeon
ourselves——andtoday,Ihadbrokenthroughthem.
【郑州市2024年高中毕业班第一次质量预测】
青春马拉松:超越自我,不负韶华
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Itwasmyfirstlongrace一amarathon.Thewindandtherainchilledmetotheboneandthesunwasyet
outtowarmuptheair.Thestartinggunwouldgooffanysecond.Iwasready.Iwas28andinthebestshapeofmy
life.Atleast,IthoughtIwas.Iranallthetimeandhadalreadyrunseveralraces.Butnoneofthemwas26.2miles.
Thefarthest
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