初中英语写作公开课

LearningtowriteSunnyIlikeLiuQian.Heisacreativemagician.IlikeLiuQianbecauseheisacreativemagician.2009CCTVSpringFestivalGalasurpriseddidmagicshowsHedidmagicshowssowellthateveryonewasreallysurprised.so…that…(春节联欢晚会）Hedidmagicshowswell.Everyonewassurprised.Hetooktheringoutofanegg.Peoplecheeredforhim.whenassoonasafterbecausewonmanyprizesworkedhard,Makesentenceswithsuitableconjunctionbecauseso…that…beforeafterwhen(连词）notlike,fish,healthyalthoughso…that…butbecauseMakesentenceswithsuitableconjunction(连词）knewLiuQian,met,2001,Beijingnot…until…whenassoonasbeforeaftersinceMakesentenceswithsuitableconjunction(连词）JayComparethearticlesABWhicharticledoyouthinkisbetter?Why?LiuQinwas7yearsold.Hefellinlovewithmagic.Hegraduatedfromtheuniversity,thenhebecameamagician.Hedoesn’thaveateachertoteachhim,butheworksveryhard.Hespendsallhistimethinkinghowtodesigntheshows.Healsodidshowsonstreetstoimprovehimself.Everyoneknowsitisthebiggestchallengeforamagician.WhenLiuQianwas7yearsold,hefellinlovewithmagic.Hedidnotbecomeaprofessionalmagicianuntilhegraduatedfromtheuniversity.Nooneknowsthathelearnsbyhimself.Heworkssohardthatheevendoesnothavetimetorelax.Hespendsallhistimethinkinghowtodesigntheshows.Healsodidshowsonstreetstoimprovehimself.Asweknow,itisthebiggestchallengeforamagician.

complexsentence(复合句）

JackLiuQian‘spenpalTalkShowNameJackFamilyparents,died,caraccidentHobbywatchLiuQian’smagicshowsweekendactivitiesbusy,dohomework,takelessonsProblemstressedout,examHisparentsdiedinacaraccident.HelikeswatchingLiuQian’smagicshows.Onweekendsheisbusy.Hedoeshishomeworkandtakeslessons.Heistoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.BirthdayMarch.12th,1994HewasbornonMarch.12th,1994.Theboy’snameisJack.Jackusedtohaveahappyfamily.Unluckily,hisparentsdiedinacaraccident.Hewas10yearsold.However,hedoesn’tgiveuphimself.Heworksveryhard.Hegetsgoodgrades.HelikeswatchingLiuQian’smagicshowstorelaxhimself.Heisatopstudent.Hehasabigproblemthesedays.Heistoostressedout.Theimportantexamiscoming.▼when▼so▼that▼Although▼becausebecause,although,when,so…thatDearJack,Iknowyouhavemanyproblems.Youhavemuchhomework.Youhavetosleeplate.Thenyoufeelsleepyinclass.Youaretoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.Youstudyhard.YourEnglishisnotgood.HereIhavesomeadviceforyou.First,whynotsleepalittleearlier?Youdon’twastetime.Youcanfinishyourhomeworkquickly.Second,you’dbetterrelaxyourselfbywatchingmyshow.Third,youmustbeconfident.Ihopeyouwillbebettersoon.

Yours,LiuQianDearJack,Iknowyouhavemanyproblems.Youhavesomuchhomeworkthatyouhavetostayup.

Thenyoufeelsleepyinclass.Youaretoostressedoutbecauseoftheexams.Althoughyoustudyhard,youarenotgoodatEnglish.HereIhavesomeadviceforyou.First,whynotsleepalittleearlier?Ifyoumakefulluseofeveryminute,youwillfinishyourhomeworkquickly.Second,you’dbetterrelaxyourselfbywatchingmyshow.Third,youmustbeconfident.Ihopeyouwillbebettersoon.

Yours,LiuQian充分利用Writingstrategy:properconjunctions(适当的连词)

Otherways:goodphrases（词组）Howcanwemakethearticlesmorefluent

(流畅的）andmorebeautiful?wonderfulsentencepatterns（句型）WritingShow假如你是Jack,写信给刘谦，感谢他的建议，并告诉他你的变化以及对考试的信心。你的变化包括：1.按时完成作业，睡眠每天8小时…2.学习努力…取得好成绩…3.自信，不紧张…DearLiuQin,Thanksforyourlastletter.Youradviceisreallyhelpful.Ihavechangedalot.Now…Theexamiscomingsoon.ActuallyIamnotworriedatall.IbelieveIwilldoagoodjobafterworkinghard.Yours,JackDon’tforgettoshowuswonderfulsentences!SampleIhavechangedalot.Now,Ifinishmyhomeworkontimeandhardlystayuplateatnight.BecauseIsleep8hourseveryday,Iamenergeticinclass.Also,Imakefulluseofeveryminute.IstudysohardthatIcangetgoodgrades.Totellyouthetruth,Iamprettyconfiden