郊区suburbs情景作文假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华

2009年高考情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“GreenActioninOurClass”为题的英文稿件。注意：词数不少于60

提示词：郊区suburbs

情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“GreenActioninOurClass”为题的英文稿件。注意：词数不少于60

提示词：郊区suburbs

审中文信息标题图的顺序不能错！词数提示词第一人称过去时图1.出发

图2.种树过程图3.安插提示牌图4.照相留念

审图四幅图的先后顺序：

图1内容要点及细节要点出发细节清晨骑车出发风景和心情图2内容要点及细节要点种树细节挖坑搬树种树浇水图3内容要点及细节要点安插提示牌细节安插提示牌爱护树木图4内容要点及细节要点照相留念细节手里拿着种树工具站在小树林和牌子旁心情或感受图1内容要点及细节要点Setout细节EarlyinthemorningonApril12th；suburbs;bybike；图2内容要点及细节要点planttrees细节arrive;digholes;carrytrees;watertrees;图3内容要点及细节要点putupaboard细节putupaboardsaying”pleaseprotecttrees”图4内容要点及细节要点takephotos细节takephotos;standinarawwithtoolsinhands;besidetheboardandtrees顺序要点要点的细节支撑连接词Picture1setoutearlyinthemorning;onApril12th；suburbs;bybike；earlyinthemorning

Picture2planttreesarrive;digholes;carrytrees;watertrees;assoonaswearrivedattheplantingspot;whenwereached…；uponarrivalPicture3putupaboardputupaboardsaying”pleaseprotecttrees”afterwards;afterfinishingplantingallthetrees;Picture4takephotostakephotos;standinarawwithtoolsinhands;besidetheboardandtreesbeforeleaving;inordertotreasuretheactivity阅卷过程中发现的问题时间和地点不清：onApril12th,suburbs关键词错误：dig-dug，board字数不足60词-1无结尾-1人称错-酌情扣分时态错-降档情景作文写作要求内容要点、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性。考试说明指出：情景作文评分原则先看内容定档重点参考语言质量注重整体语言运用能力要点齐全，语言好，进三档以上（12分以上）缺要点，语言差，四档或五档（11分以下）情景作文各档范文高考范文：April12ismemorablebecauseourclasshadameaningfulexperience

onthatday.Inthemorning,webicycledtothesuburbstoplanttrees,talkingandlaughingalltheway.Uponarrival,webegantoworkimmediately.Somewerediggingholes.Somewerecarryingandplantingyoungtrees.Otherswerewateringthem.Aftergettingtheworkdone,weputupaboard

remindingpeopleto

protectthetrees.定档：一档Beforeleavingwetooksomephotostorecordourgreenaction.Seeingthelinesoftrees,weallhadasenseofachievement.Wefeelit’sourdutytoprotectandbeautifyourenvironment.点评

GreenActioninOurClass

IamLiHuafromClass1Senior3inHongXingmiddleschool.OnApril12thourclassorganizedanactivitytoplanttreesinsuburbstomakeourcountrymorebeautiful.

EarlyinthemorningonApril12th,

myclassmatesandIwenttothesuburbsbybicycle.Andtherewas

anawsomebreath-takingsceneryonourwaywhichcouldbejustappreciatedinruralareas,greenmountains,goldenwheatfieldandsoon,whichbroughtusgreatjoys.

覆盖了所有内容要点，有细节描述，句式和词汇较丰富，所写内容连贯，结构清晰，体现较强的语言运用能力。17-18分

Whenwegotthere,wewentintoworkingatonce.Someofusdugholestoplanttreesandsomeofustookthelittletreestotheholes.What’smore,therewerealsosomecarefulgirlswateringthetreeswhichwerejustplanted.Thankstoourgreatefforts,allthetreesweresoonplantedandtwoofourclassmatesevenputupaboardreading“loveandprotectthetrees”infrontofthelittleforestmadebyus.Afterallthehardwork,wealsotookphotosofourwholeclasswithtoolsinourhandinfrontofthetrees.

Exhaustedbuthappy,wehadasignificantdayandIhopeourcountrywillbemorebeautifulbecauseofthedecoratingoftrees!点评 I’mLiHuaastudentofSeniro3classofHongXingMiddleSchool. Inordertorespondtotheappealationofmakingourcourntry

greener,ourclassdecidedtogotosuburbstoplanttreesonApril,12th. Earlyinthemorning,wewenttothedestinationbybike.Therearemanytreesandricebythesideoftheroad.Onourwaytothere,weenjoyedthebeautifulviewandtalkedhappily.Assoonaswegotthere,webegantowork.Someofusdug,someburried,somewateredandtheresttookthetreestoplaceswhereneedthem.Afterplantingtrees,wechoseanobviousplacetomakeasignread“Protecttreess”

standtopreventpeoplefromcuttingtrees.Atlast,wetookphotesinfrontofthetrees.Almostwornoutaswewere,weextremelyexcited,forwedidaqualificationdeed.基本覆盖了全部内容要点，细节描写不够充分，基本完成规定的写作任务。存在语法和用词等错误。12分

点评 HongXingmiddleschoolhadanactivitytomakethecountrygreenthanbeforeonApril12nd.Classonegreadethreestudentsmadetheactioninsuburbs.Firstofall,theymetatcountryroadinthemorningandwenttothesuburbsbybike.Afterthearrivedatthesuburbstheybegantoplantedthetreeandwateredthetree.Whiletheyfinishedplanting,theymadeasignbesidethetrees.Thewordsinthesignareplaseprotectthetrees.Finallytheytooksomephotosandbacktothehome. Whatameaningfulday!要点描述不充分；尤其是第二幅图没有展开；所用句式和词汇有限；有语法等表述错误，影响对内容的理解。6分

好句子Whenwegotthere,itwasstillearly.Weworkedsohardthatwefinishedtheworkquickly.Afterfinishingplantingtrees,weputupaboardremindingpeopleofprotectingthetrees.Standinginfrontofthetrees,wetookaphototorecordthismeaningfulactivity.Itwasourdutytobeautifyournation.ThatwaswhatIgainfromouractivity.Thesweatrolleddownfromourneck,butwewerestillfullofenergy.Pleasurecanbeseenonourfaces.Wehopedth