高考英语复习：如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”

导学案如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”

语言表达“空乏平淡”是同学们在读后续写中存在的典型问题，究其原因就是：不会根据文

章主题和情节发展进行精彩生动的动作描写是其中主要原因之一。今天，学会5招，提升读

后续写技巧一一让续写中的人物变得“灵动”起来！

学习目标：

1.Learnwaystodescribevividlyincontinuationwriting.

2.Promotewritingskillsthroughpractice.

StepI：输入——夯实基础

L“看”

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①catchaglimpseof

②takeaquicklook

③lookinto___________________

④lookup_____________________

⑤gazeat______________________

@stareat_____________________

⑦glareat_____________________

⑧peepat______________________

⑨glimpse/glanceat

⑩gapeat_____________________

11blinkat____________________

12one'seyesfallonsomeplace___

13lookatsbstraightintheeye

14one'seyesfix/fdcus/concentrateon_

15one'seyesscan

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)偷瞄——眼________________________

(2)瞥见；不注意看到

(3)向里看，调查_____________________

(4)抬起头向上看_____________________

(5)凝视_____________________________

(6)盯住_____________________________

(7)怒目而视_________________________

(8)偷窥______________________________

(9)瞥一眼____________________________

(10)吃惊地看_________________________

(11)朝...眨眼__________________________

(12)某人的目光落在___________________

(13)直视某人的眼睛___________________

(14)某人的目光紧盯着

(15)某人的眼睛扫视___________________

2.“走”的精彩描写

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①tiptoe_________________________

②stride_________________________

③Sneak_________________________

(4)limp__________________________

⑤stumble_______________________

@stagger________________________

⑦slipintotheroom

⑧stormoutofthedoor

(9)dashback______________________

⑩rush/hurrytothestation

11pacerestlessly__________________

12wanderaimlessly

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)蹑手蹑脚_________________________

(2)大步走__________________________

(3)鬼鬼祟祟地走___________________

(4)痫着走___________________________

(5)跌跌撞撞地走____________________

(6)蹒跚_____________________________

(7)溜进房间_________________________

(8)冲出房门__________________________

(9)冲回_____________________________

(10)冲到车站__________________________

(11)不安地走动________________________

(12)无目的地漫步______________________

3.“手”的动作描写

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①graspatsth_______________________________

②seizesth(fromsb)

③drag_______________________________________

④reachforone'shand

⑤raiseone'shands

⑥slidone'shandsinto

(7)catch/holdofone'sarm

(8)cupone'shandover

⑨withone'sheadinone'shands一

⑩foldone,sarms

11catch/grabone'sarm

12pullsb.intoone*sarms

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)尽力抓住某物_____________________

(2)(常指通过暴力突然)夺取

(3)拖拽；吃力地往前拉

(4)伸手抓住某人_____________________

(5)举手_____________________________

(6)将手插进......___________________

(7)抓住某人的手臂

(8)捂住......________________________

(9)双手抱着头......

(10)某人双臂交叉___________________

(11)抓住某人的胳膊

(12)拉某人进怀___________________

StepII：学会“5招”使续写“灵动”——让你的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”

Suddenly,Amovingdot(点)onthehorizonwasspotted.Exhaustedbuthopeful,Jane

jumpedtoherfeettocatchaclearsightofit."Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangup

anddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyelling

atthehelicopterThistimeshewasspotted,whichmadeherfeelmore

delighted.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom

,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"

第1招：三联动——连续使用三个动词并列做谓语

例如：(上文中红色句子)

(1)"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterof...…

(2)JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom......

第2招：非谓动——非谓语动词与主句的谓语搭配使用

例如：(上文中蓝色句子)

(1)"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,

wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.

(2)Eyesbrimmincwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikea

flyingarrow,huR-ingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!H

第3招：副助动——句子前后或动词前后使用恰当的副词增强语效

例如：

(1)Suddenly,Amovingdot(点)onthehorizonwasspotted.

(2)....wavingheryellowblousedesperately..…

第4招：介宾动——介词短语修饰限定，尤其是with复合结构

例如：

(1)JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyinqarrow....

(2)Withbutterfliesinhisstomach,hewalkedtowardstheentrance.

第5招：无主动——无灵主语往往是时间或地点名词后接see或witness等动词

例如：

Thelittleriverandwoodsinmyhometownwitnessedmygrowth.

StepIII：Practicemakesperfect!

句子训练：

1.Helefthistent.

他一头雾水地离开他的帐篷

2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,we.

听说他得救了，我们松了口气。

3.Helookedatme.

他以可怕的眼神看着我。

4.Theyleftthecave.

他们惊慌地离开了那个山洞。

5.Shestaredatthestranger.

她惊愕地盯着那陌生人。

6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jack.

一看到那条蛇，杰克跳起来、抓起一块石头就扔过去。

7.,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,.

飞机急剧下降，机上的人们开始恐慌，全都尖叫起来。

8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,.

我们终于回到了营地，又渴又饿筋疲力尽。

9.,fearoverwhelmedme,.

夜幕降临，我感到极度害怕，使我浑身哆嗦。

10.,weran.

恶狼在后面紧追，我们拼命地逃跑。

StepIV：语篇输出——学以致用

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

（2021•江苏如皋第二次适应性考试）Onedarknightduringthesummerholidays,Iwalked

overtomyfriendJeremy*shousetostayover.Weweregoingtohaveamoviemarathonofour

favoritesci-fiadventurefilmseriesandstayuplatewithsomesnacksanddrinks.Ihadnotbeento

hishousebeforebecausehehadonlyrecentlymoved,soIaskedhimtotextmeoverhisnew

address:64CherryTreeRoad.

Jeremy*snewstreetwasanicepartoftown,linedwithtalltreesandmostofthehouseshada

hedgeorfenceatthefront.Someofthehouseshadtheirnumbersonthegate,someonthehouse,

andsomedidn'tseemtohaveanumberatall.IthadstartedtocloudoverasIleftmyhouse,and

asIturned

ontohisroad,itbegantorain.Astheraingotheavier,Irushedtofindnumbersixty-four

andeventuallyfoundit...orsoIthought.Iwalkedpastnumber62,soassumeditwasthenext

one,whichappearedtohavenonumber.Yousee,usuallytheoddnumbersareononesideofthe

street,theevennumbersontheother.

Iwalkedquicklyupthedrivewaytothefrontdoor.Itwasverydarktooandtherewereno

lightsoninsidethehouse,whichdidseemstrange.However,Iwasgettingdrenched（湿透的）and

wantedtogetinside!Irangthebell,butnobodycame,soIrangandknockedagain.ThenI

noticedtherewashousenumberafterall.Aridiculoussmallonethatsaid63.Therewasasudden

thud（口平的——声）insidetheapparentlyemptyhouse,andamomentlaterthefrontdooropened

violently.

Ahooded（戴兜帽的）manwithabeardandblueglasseshurriedpastmeandranintothe

street.Therewasashoutfrominside:"Waitforme,Rob!”Anothermanrushedout,buthe

droppedwhathewascarryingandtrippedonthedoorstep.Theothermanshoutedfromtheroad

“Cmon,Kev!”hepickedhimselfupandlookedatmebeforeracingafterhisfriend.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。

Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.

“Youwerebravefortryingstopthem,“saidtheofficer.

导学案一如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”答案

StepI：输入---夯实基础

4.“看”

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①偷瞄一眼

②瞥见；不注意看到

③向里看，调查

④抬起头向上看

⑤凝视

⑥盯住

⑦怒目而视

⑧偷窥

⑨瞥一眼

⑩吃惊地看

11朝…眨眼

12某人的目光落在..

13直视某人的眼睛

14某人的目光紧盯着……

15某人的眼睛扫视......

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)catchaglimpseof

(2)takeaquicklook

(3)lookinto

⑷lookup

(5)gazeat

(6)stareat

(7)glareat

(8)peepat

(9)glimpse/glanceat

(10)gapeat

(11)blinkat

(12)one'seyesfallonsomeplace

(13)lookatsbstraightintheeye

(14)one'seyesfix/focus/concentrateon

(15)one'seyesscan

5.“跑、走”

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①蹑手蹑脚

②大步走

③鬼鬼祟祟地走

④痫着走

⑤跌跌撞撞地走

⑥蹒跚

⑦溜进房间

⑧冲出房门

⑨冲回

⑩冲到车站

⑪不安地走动

⑫无目的地漫步

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)tiptoe

(2)stride

(3)sneak

(4)limp

(5)stumble

(6)stagger

(7)slipintotheroom

(8)stormoutofthedoor

(9)dashback

(10)rush/hurrytothestation

(11)pacerestlessly

(12)wanderaimlessly

6.“手”的动作描写

a.根据英语写出汉语意思

①尽力抓住某物

②(常指通过暴力突然)夺取

③拖拽；吃力地往前拉

④伸手抓住某人

⑤举手

⑥将手插进……

⑦抓住某人的手臂

⑧捂住……

⑨双手抱着头……

⑩某人双臂交叉

11抓住某人的胳膊

12拉某人进怀

b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语

(1)graspatsth

(2)seizesth(fromsb)

⑶drag

(4)reachforone?shand

(5)raiseone?shands

(6)slidone'shandsinto

(7)catch/holdofone?sarm

(8)cupone'shandover

(9)withone,sheadinone?shands

(10)foldone'sarms

(11)catch/grabone,sarm

(12)pullsb.intoone?sarms

StepHI,句子训练:

1.Helefthistentinconfusion/confused.

他一头雾水地离开他的帐篷

2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,wesi-hedin/withrelief.

听说他得救了，我们松了口气。

3.Helookedatmewithfrighteningnves.

他以可怕的眼神看着我。

4.Theyleftthecaveinapanic/,panicked,

他们惊慌地离开了那个山洞。

5.Shestaredinastonishmentatthestranger.

她惊愕地盯着那陌生人。

6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jackjumpedtohisfeet,graspedastoneandthrewatit.

一看到那条蛇，杰克跳起来、抓起一块石头就扔过去。

7.Withtheplanefallingrapidlv,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,allscreaming.

飞机急剧下降，机上的人们开始恐慌，全都尖叫起来。

8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,hungry,thirstyandexhausted.

我们终于回到了营地，又渴又饿筋疲力尽。

9Nightsettingin,fearoverwhelmedme,causingme