【读后续写】2022年1月浙江省高考读后续写讲评：An Unlikely Hero 名师课件-陈星可

2022年1月浙江省高考读后续写讲评AnUnlikelyHero陈星可浙江省天台中学目录Contents1Understandthestory3Designtheplot2Learnthelanguage4Appreciatethework

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WhenDr.Gullicksonwasassigning(指定)projectmatesforhispsychologyclass,IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall,Ihopedhewouldn'tassignmetoworkwiththefiercelycompetitive,extremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate(命运)wouldhaveit,Dr.GullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.He

lookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.Ifelthetreatedmeas

thoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehimtogetan

“A”inthecourse.Hewasn’tmeanorabusive;hejustgaveme

theimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.

Needlesstosay,Ididn'tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitanddidn'tsayanythingforfearthatImakethingsworse.

Theprojectrequiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesis(假设),setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.

WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades-theexactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn'twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat.

Afterlongdiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwell-beingforteenagers.Iwasn'tsurewhatitmeantbutatleastwehadatopic.Paragraph1:Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Paragraph2:OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Learnthelanguage1.把我和我的朋友配成一对2.和某人一起玩得开心3.最重要的是4.竞争很激烈的5.妨碍进展6.虚构，凭空想出7.不必说，不用说8.掸掉，打发走9.退课10.在某个时刻，曾一度11.突然停止1.pairmewithmyfriend2.havefunwithsb.3.aboveall4.fiercelycompetitive5.hold...back6.dreamup7.needlesstosay8.brushoff9.droptheclass10.atonepoint11.stopshortLearnthelanguage13.临阵退缩，逃脱14.充分利用15.起草，制定计划16.得到的消息17.住院出院18.至少13.chickenout14.makethebest/mostof...15.drawplans16.getwordthat...17.beadmittedto/intohospitalbereleasedfromhospital18.atleast,ataminimum

Understandthestory

When________(assign)projectmates,Dr.Henderson,insteadofpairingmewithmybestfriend,announcedthatI______________________(work)witha_________(fierce)competitiveandseriousfellow.Iwentuptointroducemyself,buthesimplyignoredmeforfear______Iwouldholdhimback,andmakethings_____(bad),possiblyleadingtohis__________(fail)togetan“A”.Still,Itriedtomakethe_________ofit,developinghypothesis,testingit,analysingthestatistics________(collect)andpresentingthefindings.Atonepoint,Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassbutstopped,notwantingtogivehimthesatisfactionof____(I)chickeningout.Andaftersome_________(discussion),weeventuallydrewupourplans.

assigningwouldwork/wouldbeworkingfiercelythatworsefailurebest/mostcollectedmydiscussions

UnderstandthestorystorylineemotionlineHopehewouldpairmewithmybestfriendsmatchedmewiththepersonIwantedtoavoidintroducedmyselfandtriedtomakethebestofitdiscussedanddrewupplans...Hewasadmmittedtohospital...expectantdisappointedcautious?????????????????????????9Designtheplot--UnderlinedwordsDr.Gullicksonteammateprojectfindingsgradesatisfactiondiscussshareseriousalone

根据文本的脉络，结合划线词所包含的信息，文末可以做如下情节构思：paragraph1:A.经常见面制定计划---我逐步了解并参与到project其中--他开始接受我，我们开始真正的合作teammate，有条不紊地进行--为了获得A-grade，我们拼命，累但是快乐（指向第二段生病）B.经常见面制定计划---他直接忽略我独自alone搞，这激发我的斗志，暗地里开展project---发现了我的努力接纳我share,discuss--有条不紊地推进project。paragraph2:A.他生病---我去医院探望--向他保证完美完成project--课堂上呈现findings，得到想要的A-grade---share好消息，他笑了，satisfaction写在脸上--成为好朋友；B.他生病--我经常去医院，在他的指导下，做好数据分析---在课堂上完美呈现findings--努力得到回报---share消息，很开心satisfaction收获了A-grade还有友情。10Designtheplot--UnderlinedwordsDr.Gullicksonteammateprojectfindingsgradesatisfactiondiscussshareseriousalone

构建含有划线词的句子：1.1.Theseriousteammatetotallyignoredme,puttingtheprojecttotallyinhischarge.1.2.Nottreatingmeandmyinvolvementseriously,hesimplycarriedouttheprojectalone.1.3.Icouldn’thelpcomplainingaboutDr.Gullickson’sdecision,whichputmeinsuchanembarrassingsituation.1.4.Atthispoint,hestartedtosharesomethingwithmeanddiscusstheprojectwithme,whichgavemeasenseoftrueengagement.1.5.Twofellowsworkingtogether,theprojectseemedtobeprogressingfast.1.6.WiththeambitionofgettingGradeA,weworkedaroundtheclock,confidentthatourjointeffortswouldpayoff.11Designtheplot--UnderlinedwordsDr.Gullicksonteammateprojectfindingsgradesatisfactiondiscussshareseriousalone

构建含有划线词的句子：2.1.Lookingatmyteammateliethere,weakandworried,IassuredhimthatIcouldmakeit.2.2.Withhisguidance,notonlydidIanalyzethestatisticsaccurately,Ialsopresentedoursharedfindingsperfectly,whichendedupwithan“A”,ourdesiredgrade.2.3.Ididanamazingpresentationofoursharedproject,whichDr.Gullicksonthoughthighlyofwithan“A”.2.4.WhenIsharedthegoodnewswithmyteammate,theseriousfellowsmiled,satisfactionwrittenalloverhisface.2.5.Buttome,whatwasmoreimportantwasthatIbefriendedtheseriousfellowwhohadoriginallywantedtoavoid.2.6.Thestoryhadagoodending:Iearnedagoodgradeforoursharedwork,herecoveredfromhisillness,andwebecamegoodfriends.12Designtheplot--firstsentencesParagraph1:Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Paragraph2:OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Q1:Atthebeginning,howdidtheworkmatetreatmeandmyinvolvementinit?Q2:Duringtheprocess,whatchangeshappened？（attitude)Q3:Howdidweworkasapair?Andhowwastheprojectgoingon?逆推法Ourprojectseemedtobeprogressingwellthoughwewereextremelyexhausted.Q1:Atthehospital,whatdidIdecidetodoaboutourproject?Q2:TogetanA,whatdidIdo,thoughalone?Andwhatwastheresult?Q3:Howdidhereacttotheresults?AndwhatelsedidIharvest?13Designtheplot--firstsentencesParagraph1:Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Q1:Atthebeginning,howdidtheworkmatetreatmeandmyinvolvementinit?

Q2:Duringtheprocess,whatchangeshappened？（attitude)Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow,heputtheprojecttotallyinhischarge,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowhisstepsandinstructions.

PartnerasIwasintheproject,Ijuststoodbywhilemyteammatekepthimselfoccupiedindevelopingthehypothesis

andrunningthetestsalone.Asmyteammatewasaseriousperson,weinitiallysharednothingaboutourselvesotherthanourproject.

Astheprojectprogressedwiththehypothesisdevelopedandexperimentscarriedout,Iseemedtogetthetrick,whichbuiltupmyconfidenceandmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Aftersometime,Ibegantoseehisdistantattitudesoften,beingwelcoming.Astimeprogressed,Iwasattractedbyhissingle-mindednessandintelligence.14Designtheplot--firstsentencesPara2:OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Q3:Howdidweworkasapair?Andhowwastheprojectgoingon?Q1:Atthehospital,whatdidIdecidetodoaboutourproject?Q1:Atthehospital,whatdidIdecidetodoaboutourAtthispoint,westartedtoreallyteamwork,runningthetestsanddoingthestatisticalanalysis.Withhisintentionofgettingan“A”andmydesiretoliveuptohisambition,weworkedroundtheclock,exhaustedbutexpectant.Thankstothe

fiercelycompetitive

seriousfellow,theprojectwentsmoothly,closetothefinalstage.Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.Itmeantthatwehadnoalternativebuttodiscontinueourproject.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhisface,IassuredhimthatIwouldnotlethimdownandcarryon.WhenIvisitedhiminthehospital,IreassuredhimthatIwoulddomybesttofinishtheproject,andhetoldmehewasconfidentthatIwoulddoagreatjobatthefinalpresentation.Q3:Howdidweworkasapair?Andhowwastheprojectgoingon?15Designtheplot--firstsentencesPara2:OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Q2:TogetanA,whatdidIdo,thoughalone?Andwhatwastheresult?Q3:Howdidhereacttotheresults?AndwhatelsedidIharvest?Withallmyheartputintothechallengingtask,Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsamazingly,whichwonthunderousapplause.Ourprojectdidendwithan“A”.Withhisguidance,Ifinishedthestatisticalanalysisandpresentedthefindings,thoughalone.Myefforteventuallypaidoffas

Dr.Gullickson

awardedusanA,towhichmypartnersmiledin

satisfaction.Learningthis,hesmiled,gratefulformydevotion.Buttome,whatwasmoreimportantwasthatIbefriendedtheseriousfellowwhohadoriginallywantedtoavoid.Now,wehavebeenmostreliablepartnersandfriendseversince!Iearnednotonlyrespectfrommyteammate,butalsothesatisfactionofdeliveringgoodresultswhenhewasforcedtorelyonme.下水作文：

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.AndgraduallyIcametounderstandwhatourprojectwasabout.Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow,heputtheprojecttotallyinhischarge,leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowhisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling,Ididmyparthonestlybutblindly.Astheprojectprogressed,Iseemedtogetthetrick,whichbuiltupmyconfidenceandmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthispoint,westartedtoreallyteamwork,runningthetestsanddoingthestatisticalanalysis.Withhisambitionofgettingan“A”andmydesiretoliveuptohisambition,weworkedroundtheclock,exhaustedbutexpectant.108下水作文：

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Immediately,Ihurriedtothehospital,whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.Itmeantthatwehadnoalternativebuttodiscontinueourproject.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhisface,IassuredhimthatIwould

notlethimdownandcarryon.Withallmyheartputintothechallengingtask,Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsamazingly,whichwonthunderousapplause.Ourprojectdidendwithan“A”.Learningthis,hesmiled,gratefulformydevotion.Buttome,whatwasmoreimportantwasthatIbefriendedtheseriousfellowwhohadoriginallywantedtoavoid.110来自Jane的下水作文：

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

Teammatesaswewere,hekeptengagedindoingresearchesalone.Themorewemet,themoreIwasfloodedwithawkwardness.Atonepoint,lgatheredmycourageandaskedhimwhyheseemedsoseriousandkeptmeatadistance.Withoutanyreply,hewasstillburiedinthestatisticalanalyses.Iwasregrettingw