2023届新教材高考英语一轮复习读后续写-应试流程-经典剖析

第二讲抽丝剥茧攻克读后续写第一节应试流程经典剖析典例展示阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021·新高考全国卷Ⅰ)三线·文本剖析时间线：ThetwinshadaplanforMother'sDay.→Thebigdaycameatlast.→Thepairbegantocarryouttheplanat6a．m.→EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.情节线：本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手做早餐。但不幸的是，他们连连失败。情感线：首段交代背景时的兴奋之情(Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitement...)→第二段开头时的迫不及待(Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m.Thepairwentdown...)→初遇状况时的信心满满(Jennathrewtheburntpiece...andputintheothersliceofbread.Sheturneddownthefire...Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegas.)→再遇状况时的惊慌失措(Jennapanicked.Jeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.)两段·续写提示第一段提示句表明在两个孩子失望透顶、无所适从时，人生导师爸爸出现了。再根据第二段提示可知，第一段应该以描写孩子们是如何在父亲的指导下成功地为妈妈准备了爱心早餐。本段第二句最好的描写方向是爸爸出现后，两个孩子的反应(全文是立足于他们进行推进的)以及在父亲的指导下，如何做的。第二段提示句表明接下来要写妈妈与两个孩子间的互动。为回应文章开头(HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.)，要侧重描写妈妈的感受——高兴、骄傲及感动。本段第二句最好的描写方向是妈妈的惊讶(映照文章标题AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE)。一核·价值取向该材料的价值取向是关注“母亲节”这个特别的节日所传达的情怀——感恩母亲的付出以及亲密家庭关系的建立。家庭纽带(familybond)的培养与发展靠的是父母对孩子的付出与指导，孩子对父母对家庭的责任与担当。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：续写词数应为150左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.________________________________________________________________________________Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father'sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother'sDay！”

Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.名师点评：续写内容抓住了文章的主要情节，围绕着主要人物(twins及mother)展开，结构紧凑、语言丰富。续写内容与两个提示句衔接自然，逻辑合理，且文风一致，思路积极向上。符合高分范文的标准与要求。另外，在对细节的处理上体现了较高的知识储备，如Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain就富有极强的画面感。即时训练阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021·浙江卷1月改编)Pumpkin(南瓜)carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85­pounderbacklastyear.

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14­year­oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I'munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Myexcitementwasshort­lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I'mgoingtosetitdown,now，”

Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight，Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican'tgetitout！”

Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

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________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________三线·文本剖析时间线：Wepickedpumpkinsinthefield→Weforgottoweigh→Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen...→FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit→ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealized...→WhenIpulledhard...情节线：本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者家有在万圣节雕刻南瓜的传统，今年也不例外，家里所有人都在厨房的餐桌上辛勤地工作着，而作者的妈妈则在拍摄一年一度的活动。结果作者将头伸进了南瓜里，被卡住了，无论如何也无法挣脱出来。情感线：比赛一开始的兴奋和信心满满(determinedtoprovemypoint...itseemedtomakeperfectsense)→过程中的自以为是(gotjammed...wentonwithmytask...Imanagedtoputmywholeheadinto)→自傲后的小失落(Myexcitementwasshort­lived)→意外出现后的紧张、担心和害怕(Igotintoapanic...movedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle...Ishouted.)两段·续写提示第一段首句内容“虽然时间只过去了五、六分钟，但还是感觉要长得多。”可知，第一段可描写作者是如何在爸爸的帮助下得救的。第二段首句内容“这段视频是在万圣节前的周一发布的。”可知，第二段可描写作者头被卡在南瓜里这段视频在网上的走红情况，以及视频走红对作者家和作者的影响。一核·价值取向该材料的价值取向是面对生活中的意外事件，要有积极的乐观主义精神，要学会接受生活的赐予并积极面对。【参考范文】Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Alleffortstopullmyheadoutofthepumpkinweretried,butinvain.“Dad!Emergency!Helpneeded！”

Jasonyelled,andcalleddadforhelp.Uponhearingit,Dadimmediatelyrushedoutandsnatched