高中英语读后续写写作探讨

读后续写写作探讨Imightsaythatsuccessiswonbythreethings:first,effort;second,moreeffort;third,stillmoreeffort.ByThomasHardy.Teachingaims:1.discussandexploresomewaystowriteagoodcomposition.2.Comparethetwomethodsandconsideringwhichoneyoulikebettertoadopt.Teachingprocedures:Step1.RevisesomekeypointsinUnit5.Step2.Writingpart.Way1:写作指导三大原则原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。正能量原则故事内容一点要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。读后续写四个步骤读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。细读首句，构思框架仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。增加细节，开始写作依据情节发展和常识，在确定的框架内，可按“所见、所遇，所想，所为，所感”等构思大致框架。修改润色，整洁誊写思考再三，把修改润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。读后续写：例题讲解阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou‘vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.“I’mafraidso.I’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar.”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.I’dbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery(抢劫)!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.“Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase!ShethinksI’mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”-Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur...__________________________________________________________写作思路1.读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态（通常是一般过去时），事件（故事的起因和经过），语言特色（以便在续写语言特色前后一致，保持不变），等等。2.细读首句，构思框架两段首句定一框由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。3.增加细节，开始写作在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为“58细节添加法”。构思根据构思的大致框架，推断故事中人物所见、所思、所说、所做等每段增加五至八个具体细节或叫“58细节法”。Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“stop,stop!”（正当他跑的时候，亚瑟听到后面那个年轻人喊道：“停下，停下！”Paragraph2：ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthepolicestationandArthur(出租车停在警察局前面，接着亚瑟……）4.修改润色，整洁誊写审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。参考范文Onepossibleversion：Anotherpossibleversion:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,Arthursuddenlyrealizedthattheyoungmanmightbethebankrobber.SoArthurdidn’tstop,butcontinuedtorununtilhesawataxi.Hestoppedit,jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandsaidtothedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief!’’Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurtoldthepolicewhathadhappened.Obviously,thepolicehadalreadylearnedabouttherobbery.Theyopenedthesuitcaseandtherewasalargesumofmoneyinside,asArthurhadexpected.ThenthepoliceaskedArthurtodescribetheyoungmanandtheothersuitcase.Later,withtheinformation,thepolicecaughttherobber.ThepoliceandthebankboththankedArthuralot.(Words153)Way2:5R解读、4句框架和3大原则（五四三法）在教学中，读后续写初步摸索出：5R解读故事；4句框架和3大原则（即：五四三法）目前看，这种方法还是比较有效的，当然有个前提，需要积累若干细节描写的语句才能发挥更大的效果。

题目：读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechip

icecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.Hejumpedintothecarwithhis

parents

andheadedofftotheOlympic-sized

pool

forthebigswimmeet.Whenhis

race

cameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjust

won

firstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup."Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe'dwinagain.He’staken

firstplace

againinhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashis

luckycharm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn’tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer'sbuild.Itdidn’ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostits

magic.Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim.“Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snot

healthy

foryourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn’t

perform

well.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.It

was

the

last

meet

of

the

season,

and

Mike

wasn’t

sure

what

to

expect.He

felt

healthyagain,but

he

didn’t

know

if

he

still

had

any

speed

in

the

pool.注意:1.

所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.

至少使用五个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.

续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph

1:As

he

drove

into

the

water,he

kicked

his

legs

and

stretched

his

arms

as

far

as

he

could.Paragraph

2:His

jaw

dropped

as

he

realized

he

had

beaten

his

own

best

time,and

everyone

else

too.

如何快速写：第一步：Analyzethestory：5Rs1.Readforcharacters:Mike,hisparents,Icecream,teammates2.Readforconflict/problems：IcecreamandMike’sperformance:WhetherisitaLuckycharm3.Readforplot:4.Readforemotionalchanges:Whenhisracecameup,Mikewas

confidentMikewas

feelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewas

feelingunbeatable.Mike

unwillingly

agreed.5.ReadforthemeWhatcontributestoMike’ssuccessinswimming?第二步：四句定框架：写读后续写不同于写其它作文，有可能需要先倒着写的Step1:

先把最后一句写好，即：主题句Mikerealizedthatone’sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.Step2:

再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:

紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Mike’sjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelse’stoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.接下来就是把每段的中间补充完整，记住三大原则：1.Action—Response原则：角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种response。2.Conflict—Solution原则：一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution在所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。3.Negative—Positive原则：写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。

最终：Ashedoveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.

1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.

（心情）2.“ThisiswhereIbelong.Ican

win

the

race,”thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.

（内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigures

whizzed

past,whichstartledhim.

（心情变化））4.Fearingtofall