读后续写：动作描写落水救人(动作链+面)课件-高三英语作文复习

读后续写动作描写Step1Readtheoriginalstoryandfillintheblanks.(快速找到故事元素)Time

Place

Characters

Conflicts

Reason

Climax

ElementsofthestoryAfewdayslater,Robertwasbathingwithhisnewfriends.InariverHenry、Robert、Robert’snewfriendsOneday,ontheirwayhome,HenryandRobertnoticedafight.Henryrefusedtowatchit,andRobertthoughthewasacoward.Robertdidn’tinviteHenrytogohometogetheranymore.Instead,hewouldgototheriverorsomewheretoplaygameswithotherboys.Robertstruggledintheriverandcriedforhelp,buttheboyswentoutofthewateranddidnothingtohelphim.Step2Makeaprediction1.WhathappenedtoRobertintheriver?（1）水环境描写：______

/_______/_______/_______/________（2）Robert

心理_________________________

动作_________________________Tips:Circlethekeywordsofthegivensentencesandplotthestorybyaskingquestionsaboutthegivensentences.Atleast3relatedquestionsofeachparagraph视觉听觉触觉味觉嗅觉horrible/frightened/terrified/scared...struggle/cry、yell、scream/wave/beat/stamp…Paragraph1Robertwasfastsinking2.Whohappenedtopassby?Whatdidheorshedo?

3.What’stheresultofhelp?

（过渡句，衔接para2首句）Henry.HejumpedintotherivertosaveRobert.Robertwasbroughttotheshore/Robertwassenttothehospital.Paragraph2:Thus,Robert’slifewassaved.________Step3AppreciationandfillintheblanksParagraph1Robertwasfastsinking.

①【________(swallow)upbywater

greedily,hewasseizedbyhorror,________(cry)forhelp.】②【_______(feel)breathless,Robertstampedthewaterhelplessly,______(try)tokeephimselfafloat.】③【Withtheoxygen__________(disappear),hisconsciousnesswasfading.】Justatthemoment,Henryhappenedtobepassingby.④【Hearingthescreams,Henry______(run)totheriverside,______(throw)offhisclothesand_______(jump)intothewaterwithouthesitation.】⑤【___________(make)thegreateffort,Henry_________(bring)Roberttotheshoresuccessfully.】Swallowed

cryingFeelingtryingdisappearingranthrewjumpedbroughtHavingmade

Step4ObservePara1andsummarize5sentencepatternswecanusetomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid.Sentencepattern1________+主语+谓语动词+___________Sentencepattern2________+主语+谓语动词+___________Sentencepattern3With+n.+非谓语(_____________________),谓语动词Tip1:动作面句式。分别从_______、_______、________________等不同角度构造画面。

学会灵活运用_____________。在没有连词的情况下，一个简单句只能有_______谓语动词，但非谓语动词可以有很多个。doingdoingdoingdonedoing/done/todo肢体面部心理/语言非谓语动词一个Sentencepattern4主语+_____________________________Tip2:动作链句式。三个并列谓语动词，动作依次发生。读后续写中三个连续动词时态要一致，都为_____________）---简称________Sentencepattern5___________,主语+谓语动词Tip3:动作链句式。出现两个动作，前后两个动作逻辑主语一致,动作先后之分明显。谓语1+谓语2and谓语3一般过去时三连动HavingdoneStep5即学即练1.在我的鼓励下，大卫坚定地盯着我，表达自己完成比赛的决心。(encourage,stareat,express)22年新高1卷_______________________________________________________________2.感到很兴奋，我紧紧抱住妈妈，尝试冷静下来。

（feel,hug,try）23年11月金太阳联考________________________________________________________________3.感动的泪水在眼里滚动，我拿过三明治，狼吞虎咽。（rollaround,take,eat）21年1月八省联考_______________________________________________________________

Encouragedbyme,Davidstaredatmewithdetermination,expressinghisdeterminationtofinishrace.Feelingexcited,Ihuggedmymomtightly,tryingtocalmdown.Withmovedtearsrollingaroundmyeyes,Itookthesandwich,eatingitlikewolf.4.他拿出肉，瞄准狼，直接扔向那只凶猛的动物。(pullout,aimat,throw)17年6月浙江卷____________________________________________________________________________

5.在遇到一些障碍后，简慢慢地走到一个开阔的地区，等待救援。

（suffer，walk，wait）16年10月浙江卷____________________________________________________________________________Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.Havingsufferedsomebarriers,Janewalkedtoanopenareaandwaitedforrescue.请运用以上动作链和动作面的技巧，完善下面的语篇。（2021年新高考全国I卷）Inthemorning,asscheduled,

______________________________________________①________________________________________________________（双胞胎早早起床，溜进了厨房，从袋子里拿出面粉).Oncetheysataboutmakingbread,theyfeltconfused.Atthattime，________②_________________

____________________________

他们的爸爸走进厨房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道),“Don’tquit.Youcanovercomethechallenge.”______________③__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（顺利做完面包后，双胞胎端着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈).

_________④________________________________________________________（被这暖心早餐深深打动，妈妈紧紧地抱住了双胞胎，感到很开心。）三个连续动作，三连动谓语动词，doinganddoingHavingdone,三连动Done,谓语动词，doingStep5高考链接Inthemorning,asscheduled,①thetwinsgotupearly,slidintothekitchenandtook

someflouroutofthebag.

Oncetheysataboutmakingbread,theyfeltconfused.Atthattime,②theirfatherwalkedintothekitchen,pattingthetwins’shouldersandcomfortingtheminasoftvoice,“Don’tquit.Youcanovercomethechallenge.”③Havingmadethebreadsmoothly,thetwinscarriedthebreakfast,wentupstairsandwokeuptheirmother.④Deeplymovedbythewarmbreakfast,motherhuggedthetwinstightly,feelingveryhappy.Conclusion动作描写动作链动作面侧重动作之间的时间先后三连动：

三个并列谓语动词，动作依次发生Havingdone，主语+谓语动词

发生_____发生侧重从不同角度描绘同一个画面———————————————————————————————————————————————————主语+谓语1+谓语2and谓语3先后肢体面部语言/心理Done,主语+谓语动词,doingDoing,主语+谓语动词,doingWith+n.+非谓语,主语+谓语动词

Discussion：discusswithyourpartnersandwritedownatleast3relatedquestionsofPara.2tohelpyouplotthestory.Step6HomeworkParagraph2Thus,Robert’slifewassaved.________________________________(2)_________________________________(3)_________________________________(主旨升华)HowdidRobertfeelafterhewassaved?WhatwouldRobertdo?

WhatwouldHenryrespondtoit?WhatwouldRobertlearnfromthisincident?2.CompletethePara.2afterclassParagraph2:Thus,Robert’slifewassaved._________________________